mew: the epic story, chapter 1

[mew darkrai shaymin.]

Chapter 1:Mew awakens


Mewthree was trapped in a fossil buryed in the anicent tomb that had colapsed when Mew had destroed Mewtwo. Then a glowing purple light glowed from the fossil and then the light escaped from the fossil and formed the shape of Mewthree, a bust of light and Mewthree was born. Like Mewtwo, Mewthree could talk telapathicly. "Mew!". Mewthree said. Mew saw Mewthree Destroy her. Mew awakened. "Mew, mew mew mew mew mew." {Oh, it was just a
dream.} Mew had been asleep for years and fought the battle between herself and her brother, Mewtwo. Mew had forgoten that the fact of that Mewtwo had created Mewthree. Then from her bubble she had risen from her eternal sleep. "Mew mew mew mew, mew mew mew mew mew mew mew mew mew mew."{I must seek help, I shall find a human that shall be my trainer.} Flying over the sky, to find a human wothy of her gratitude. So mew flew to China to find her trainer.

chapter 2 comming soon!

 

[Clark]

Okay. First, don't post your chapters as multiple threads. Second, don't mess with the font. It makes it seem like either you're begging for attention or you want to make it look bigger. Third, this had no description, is hard to read, and is full of plot holes and confusion. You need to describe what is going on in detail. If this wasn't in rediculously-oversized-text, this would be less than a page. Not only is that against the rules, but it reeks of low quality and lack of effort. Try to put more into your fic. Type it in a Word processor, not the reply-box.

 

[Percy Thrillington]

Okay, first off, posting a second thread when you've already posted a first one is stupid. You're writing a story. The first thread was the prologue and the second thread was barely a chapter. Why did they have to be made into two different threads?

Also, change the font to the default size at least, because making the font bigger isn't going to hide the fact that you only managed to write four sentences worth. I was going to say on Microsoft Word, but I bet you did it in the reply box. Anyways, there are numerous grammar/spelling errors that I'm not going to go near. Make your chapters longer, use a spellchecker, get someone to beta your work for you, read the stickies and do everything else you can possibly do to make your story better.

 

[Astinus]

Closed because dear gods, that makes my eyes cry many many single tears.