Mike's Pokèmon Journey - Hoenn Chapters

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I read the next two chapters. I tried to post my comment yesterday but something cut it off/out. I'll just give a basic overview. Your chapters seem a little to short - no offense. I like your form of writing, and the idiotic-ness of Elliot. He is character that you hate and at the same time, like. Sorry, i ahd soem better stuff, but again - it wouldn't post.
 
Yes...Elliot was meant to be a hell of a lot more idiotic...
You don't want to know HOW stupid....
But...it was kinda weird so I changed it :)
 
Well, having more of a "balance" is better, so changing it ahead of time was probably ur best idea. I mean, you don't want Elliot "stealing" the stage, when Mike is the real "star." :)
 
Eh...
Well, do you think it's a good idea if I base some stuff on my own life? (I have some real good er...friendship scenes...)
 
Sure, it is your story. I don't think it is at all a bad idea. Sometimes real life situations give you inspiration too.
 
Sorry, I haven't been able to review. Not too much to say, a fic that's not action filled to the point where its boring is a good fic. Well, that's what i reckon anyway. I'm still surprised Treecko used 1 Quick Attack and 1 Absorb to KO.

1: Treecko probably would not have learned Absorb is all he had done was KO one previous Marill. The Marills would probably be about lvl 2 if it was defeated by a Pound and a Quick Attack. Also, a Marill cannot take enough damage for it to scamper away just from getting another knocked into it. Unless they're complete chickens.
2: I doubt Team Aqua has lvl 4-6 Carvanha.

Well, Thats just game based. Its a fiction, do what ever you like.
 
Game-based review...my friend
Darthy, you forgot that there are:
1. Wild Carvanha. They caught it just to test him!
2. The battle against Elliot! He would have leveled up from that! Absorb is learnt at level 6!
 
Righty-ho, can a mod or admin close this?
I'm going to re-write this...
 
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