Monster

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    Still unfinished and confusing, but maybe a nice piece. C+c greatly appreciated. ^^

    Monster
    Overhead the blues the first impressions were uphold,
    Dared to hit our eyes whenever we drew dimly near.
    And our ground stood scored again, beside the waves of cold
    The breath of ages during through the wretched straits of fear.

    Don't hunt the whale, the screech was longing to be heard
    When two beasts fight but one has forced to justify
    the dwelling first or last but frozen only by the word
    And hit towards the sand, piercing heavens with the cry

    Monster was the call, inhuman the hand
    Weeping as a symphony but wrecked above the sand.
     
    hehe I love your rhymes and I like how you describe and I can paint a picture in my mind with your descriptions. Totally awesome, man! ^w^ are you really 79 yrs old btw? O.o
     
    o ok! I thought it's creepy for a 79 yr old to be in a kid's forum
     
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