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Pikachu's Beginning. PG-13/15

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    Pikachu's beginning.

    Summary:
    Before Pikachu met Ash, Pikachu was just a baby and was trained by a very powerful and up rising trainer, Nadia Val. Knowing Professor Oak's grandson, Gary, Nadia was trained by Gary and Professor Oak on how to know Pokemon but when Nadia meets Pikachu with his new owner, Ash, how will they react to one another years later?


    Prologue: Pichu's rescue.

    Even before the sun rose, Nadia was out in the fields and forests that surrounded Pallet Town. Her duty for the moment was helping Professor Oak to catch and train pokemon for the up coming trainers. So far she hasn't captured any pokemon today but, she wasn't giving up since Professor Oak was counting on her.

    Her auburn shoulder blade length hair slide along with the soft breeze that made the leaves of the forest trees make a loud swashing sound. Nadia's senses were on alert. She knew that Pallet town was safe, but with Pokemon, she learned over the months that she couldn't trust them, not even when they were caught she knew how wild they could be.

    Nadia wasn't in a hurry, unlike her best friend Gary Oak, grandson to Professor Oak. Gary wanted to have the strongest and best pokemon out here in Pallet town, but Nadia knew that he would be better off with a Pokemon that needed a leader in some sense. She had finally caught two pokemon last night, one was a Squirtle and then she had caught a Charmander. Both of them were on her, even though Nadia used a different way to catch pokemon.

    She did not use the normal way: stumbling across a Pokemon, battle the wild pokemon and if the level to the wild Pokemon is low enough, catch it with a pokeball. Nadia doesn't use this method on Pokemon; her way is something that is amazing to see when you're with her.

    Nadia's Method: she would wait until a pokemon would pass by her, long as it may be she would wait until she saw one, after that she then would give the Pokemon some food. It would take some time to let the Pokemon know that she would not hurt the Pokemon, and then after the Pokemon would eat, Nadia would then ask it to go inside the pokeball. Long for her but well worth it in her mind.

    This method of hers taught her not only patients but trust, maturity, confidence and learning from her senses. Like her best childhood friend, Gary Oak, she wants to be a Professor of Pokemon, but not just any Pokemon, legendary and rare Pokemon.

    They have always fascinated her since she could remember seeing an old worn and slightly torn picture from Professor Oak's photo albums. The Pokemon that she saw and imprinted into her memory was of Lugia battling a Kyogre (back then no one knew of the two legendary Pokemon). The setting was so worn out that it could have been day or night. Professor Oak would start to tell the story about them; however when he always started the legendary story off something would interrupt them, always. Nadia had to hear the story from Gary and she couldn't help at that age, wanting to see Lugia or Kyogre. To this very day she knew that one day she would, she just didn't know when or where.

    Nadia felt the ray of sun before she saw it, even at the same time as she greeted the new sunrise, she staid perfectly still. Right in front of her was a Pokemon that she had never seen before. It looked like a Pikachu, but smaller like a baby. Inhaling softly Nadia picked up the sense of smell, rusty blood. This sense made her stomach churn with sickness and caution.

    'Why is this Pokemon so badly hurt since it's so young? And where is its mother? Did the mother die protecting her only offspring? If so where could the culprit be?' Nadia's mind raced with these questions and more.

    Nothing seemed to move, nothing breathed. Nadia knew something was going to happen and she did not like it for whatever unknown reason. She quickly picked up the small baby Pokemon in her arms and started to run for it.

    She had no choice as a group of Spearow was sizing her down from a blooming berry tree. Nadia had to rush back to Professor Oak's lab, he was the closet person that she could think of who could help her.

    "Spear!" one of the many Spearow cried, taking flight and going after Nadia.

    "Leave me alone." Nadia whispered, still running and hoping that would happen.

    The sun was gone, thick black rainy clouds were in its place, as big rain drops started to slowly plunge from the sky. Nadia soon summoned Squirtle out of its pokeball.

    "Squirtle, tackle!" Nadia asked of it.

    "Squirtle!" Squirtle replied, and rushed up the hill.

    She didn't look back, she trusted Squirtle as she heard fighting sounds from the Spearow and then she saw Squirtle running right beside her.

    "It's okay, back inside." Nadia told the frighten water Pokemon, as the red ray of light brought Squirtle back into its pokeball.

    Out of no where, Nadia felt sharp hurtful pecks from her neck to her shoulders. The Spearow weren't giving up at all. Glancing down at the baby Pikachu, Nadia saw for the first time, that this little one was awake. Nadia soon enough forgot that she was running down hill and lost her balance, she started to fall to the wet and muddy ground.

    Nadia tried to tuck herself into a ball except she timed herself a little too late. She scrapped her knees and her left hand as she held onto the baby Pokemon. Looking around her, she saw that rocks and boulders surrounded her, Nadia had no where to go.

    The Spearow flock was circling and diving at them, Nadia had no choice but to curl herself around the baby Pokemon, protecting it from the flock of angry Spearow.

    "HEY! Over here, you worthless bunch of chickens!" a young timid voice rang out over the noise of the rain and squawks of the Spearows.

    Nadia and the little Pichu clung to one another as, the person battled the flock, helping her and her baby Pokemon out.
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    So what do you guys think of it? Should I go on or just stop right now? It's my first fan fictional writing of Pokemon so please remember that when reviewing okay.
     
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    Does the Prologue remind you of the First episode of the first season of Pokemon? Well, good! I saw something hidden behind why Pikachu didn't want to get into it's pokeball and starred at Ash with the Spearow barring down on him.

    You shouldn't double post, except*, when you are bumping your story.

    And Pikachu and Ash don't run into the flock of Spearow until they have left Pallet. Pikachu has already voiced its opinion on the pokeball long before the even get to far down the road.


    Now as for your story, It is not extremely original, but it is differently not an OT fic.

    Your writing style is great. I think it is one of the best that I have seen.

    I didn't see any errors with your story. I will definitely be reading future chapters.

    *Read the rules for each section before posting. The FF thread allows you to double post in order to bump your own story, but under no other circumstances.
     
    *Read the rules for each section before posting. The FF thread allows you to double post in order to bump your own story, but under no other circumstances.
    To clarify: You may bump your story only when posting a new chapter/long author notes. So that means that you can't just randomly bump with what you did to bring your story back to the first page.
     
    You shouldn't double post, except*, when you are bumping your story.

    And Pikachu and Ash don't run into the flock of Spearow until they have left Pallet. Pikachu has already voiced its opinion on the pokeball long before the even get to far down the road.


    Now as for your story, It is not extremely original, but it is differently not an OT fic.

    Your writing style is great. I think it is one of the best that I have seen.

    I didn't see any errors with your story. I will definitely be reading future chapters.

    *Read the rules for each section before posting. The FF thread allows you to double post in order to bump your own story, but under no other circumstances.

    To clarify: You may bump your story only when posting a new chapter/long author notes. So that means that you can't just randomly bump with what you did to bring your story back to the first page.

    I forgot when I went to bed, sorry, but I did delete it. Thanks Astinus and Buoysel for reminding me. And thanks Buoysel, I try really hard to have no errors in my stories. and I will try to rememeber not to bump my story, which is weird for me. :D:embarrass
     
    I finally read it!

    I liked the female character and how she seemed more "pure" than Gary.

    Speaking of Gary, you spelled his name "Gray" many, many times.

    Besides that, it seemed to be free of any errors. I don't think I forgot any others.

    So is it a Pichu or a tinier Pikachu?

    EDIT: *smacks forehead*
    I can't believe I forgot... Don't make reference to levels. It isn't a good thing to use. Outside of the game, you can't see the Pokemon's level.
    Just say that if the Pokemon (make sure "Pokemon" is capitalized whenever you say it, it is like a type of people) looks weaker(physically not pain wise) that you try to catch it.
     
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    I know that I spelled Gary wrong, was up way late writing it, sorry.

    It's Pichu. Gary just thinks it's a baby Pikachu, which in some ways he's right and in some ways he's wrong.

    I don't think I did make any reference to levels? I just said that the Pichu looked young, like a baby? :embarrass
     
    She did not use the normal way: stumbling across a Pokemon, battle the wild pokemon and if the level to the wild Pokemon is low enough, catch it with a pokeball. Nadia doesn't use this method on Pokemon; her way is something that is amazing to see when you're with her.
    You mentioned levels in the story. Not about Pichu, which is good. But try to avoid mentioning it at all, because this isn't a game - it is supposed to be a real life experience.
     
    Well, it looks like a baby to me, when you first look at it, right? read what you quoted and sorry.
     
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