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Pokemon: Just Pants

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    Hello I am Codec,
    I am making a sprite comic for my friends enjoyment and for the enjoyment of the pokecommunity members.

    It is a PG-13 Comedy Comic that has no swearing and the rudest words on it are probably Dammit!

    Credits:
    Spriters Recource,
    Google - lol
    Kyledove - sprites
    Serebii - Maps
    I will take any help from a member

    Co Authours:
    Meryvn797

    If you like my comics - please feel free to help me with my sprite comic - and thanks :)

    Season 1
    Ep 1 - Grrrrr....
    Ep 2 - Mystery of the Game
    Ep 3 - Gold and Chrome
    Ep 4 - Relationship Problems
    Ep 5 - Brock Vs Chrome
    Ep 6 - Thats My Pokemon By Mervyn
    Ep 7 - Thats My Pokemon Part 2
    Ep 8 - A Few clues Make a Big Difference
    Ep 9 - Dangerous Grounds
    Ep 10 - Dangerous Grounds Part 2
    Season 1 Special Episodes
    Ep 5/6 - Mervyn the Evil Squirtle

    Please rate
    And Subscribe by Coming and helping as often as possible :)
     
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    OoOo... another comic I see?

    Well then, lets get this train wreck rolling! :D
    I feel very section-y today, so I'll give you ratings and comments on different portions of your comic.

    Key:
    * = Star
    * = Earned Star
    * = No Star

    Apperance: * * * * * * * * * *
    There could definately be improvements, but I've seen much worse.
    When I started, I did MUCH worse.
    You could use some... more interesting panels.

    Speech Bubbles: * * * * * * * * * *
    Not much to look at, And I hope a character doesn't get some unlegiable color like Bright Bright Yellow, so nobody could read it.
    They could be bigger, but,
    I'm almost as blind as a bat, so, maybe it's just me. Maybe a enlargement could do the trick.

    Humor: * * * * * * * * * *
    It's not funny funny.
    It's cheap laugh funny, but not worthwhile.
    I suggest really putting effort into your jokes. Because if this is a comedy, it won't impress anyone. :/

    Layout: * * * * * * * * * *
    What the blast does the top of each one say?
    You mixed Very Dark color with Very dark color!
    DO NOT WANT!
    As so far with the layout of the panels, Um...
    Since each comic is not lengthy in any sort of way, I say do it Horozonal, not vertical.

    There are my two cents.
    If you want more clarifacation on a section or a completely different section I did not hit here, please just ask.
     
    DiaIsDia said:
    Really? I thought it was funny, funny.
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    "Funny Funny" in my book is something that I will remember, something that will make me hold in a smile or laugh, just so I don't make huge uproar.
    Or, just makes me ROFL.

    "Cheap Funny" is the slight chuckle or smirk,
    from something I've seen before, or from something that's noobish.
     
    Hey Crayon (mind if I call you that?), can you rate my comic in the same way you did here, only, keeping up with the progress I've made so far?

    Anyway.

    I've seen better, but I've seen much, MUCH worse.

    If these are your first comics ever, then you're doing pretty good for a beginner. Especially visually. While there were some flaws, mostly with your attempts at resizing some stuff, it's decent.

    The text bubbles are fine to me, but as Crayon said, never use, like, a bright yellow.

    As for the humor... well, I wouldn't necessarily say the jokes themself are bad, but rather... the presentation is... well, below average. And the result is semi-decent jokes only worth a cheap laugh. If the joke's amazing but is presented shoddily, then it won't often be found funny. However, if a joke is mediocre but presented wonderfully, people find a laugh in it.

    Really, I can't offer any advice in this department, as everyone has their own sense of humor. But... just keep trying, you'll get there.

    Peace.
     
    ¿Question Kiyoshi-Crayon? said:
    OoOo... another comic I see?

    Well then, lets get this train wreck rolling! :D
    I feel very section-y today, so I'll give you ratings and comments on different portions of your comic.

    Key:
    * = Star
    * = Earned Star
    * = No Star

    Apperance: * * * * * * * * * *
    There could definately be improvements, but I've seen much worse.
    When I started, I did MUCH worse.
    You could use some... more interesting panels.

    Speech Bubbles: * * * * * * * * * *
    Not much to look at, And I hope a character doesn't get some unlegiable color like Bright Bright Yellow, so nobody could read it.
    They could be bigger, but,
    I'm almost as blind as a bat, so, maybe it's just me. Maybe a enlargement could do the trick.

    Humor: * * * * * * * * * *
    It's not funny funny.
    It's cheap laugh funny, but not worthwhile.
    I suggest really putting effort into your jokes. Because if this is a comedy, it won't impress anyone. :/

    Layout: * * * * * * * * * *
    What the blast does the top of each one say?
    You mixed Very Dark color with Very dark color!
    DO NOT WANT!
    As so far with the layout of the panels, Um...
    Since each comic is not lengthy in any sort of way, I say do it Horozonal, not vertical.

    There are my two cents.
    If you want more clarifacation on a section or a completely different section I did not hit here, please just ask.
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    I will try better in my next episode - which might take a while tho

    DiaIsDia said:
    Really? I thought it was funny, funny.
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    Thanks :)

    ¿Question Kiyoshi-Crayon? said:
    "Funny Funny" in my book is something that I will remember, something that will make me hold in a smile or laugh, just so I don't make huge uproar.
    Or, just makes me ROFL.

    "Cheap Funny" is the slight chuckle or smirk,
    from something I've seen before, or from something that's noobish.
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    If that is what Funny Funny means then nothing is funny funny!

    Kabutopzilla said:
    Hey Crayon (mind if I call you that?), can you rate my comic in the same way you did here, only, keeping up with the progress I've made so far?

    Anyway.

    I've seen better, but I've seen much, MUCH worse.

    If these are your first comics ever, then you're doing pretty good for a beginner. Especially visually. While there were some flaws, mostly with your attempts at resizing some stuff, it's decent.

    The text bubbles are fine to me, but as Crayon said, never use, like, a bright yellow.

    As for the humor... well, I wouldn't necessarily say the jokes themself are bad, but rather... the presentation is... well, below average. And the result is semi-decent jokes only worth a cheap laugh. If the joke's amazing but is presented shoddily, then it won't often be found funny. However, if a joke is mediocre but presented wonderfully, people find a laugh in it.

    Really, I can't offer any advice in this department, as everyone has their own sense of humor. But... just keep trying, you'll get there.

    Peace.
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    Thanks - I will try harder - infact you are the one who inspired me to make a comic - if you want.... I could use some help on presentation *lioke you said*
    Wanna help?
     
    Codec said:
    I will try better in my next episode - which might take a while tho
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    One other thing: practicing makes your ability to produce comics on a whim easier.

    If that is what Funny Funny means then nothing is funny funny!
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    Not necessarily true. Many things on the 'net made me lol extremely hard, mostly YouTube Poop, and some of that stuff even helped inspire the humor I implement into Pogeymanz. Funny funny is what birthed every meme you see.

    Thanks - I will try harder - infact you are the one who inspired me to make a comic - if you want.... I could use some help on presentation *lioke you said*
    Wanna help?
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    Sure I could help you, the only problem is, presentation of jokes is nearly impossible to teach someone aside from the bare basics. It's something learned well over time, however, and the skill usually becomes easy to overcome after a bit of practice.

    If anyone read my very first sprite comic (ARK, which nobody here has read unless you went to my author page on Smack Jeeves and went from there) and compared the humor to Pogeymanz, you'd see that in ARK, the comic is lined with potentially good humor, but in its early days, the presentation was not very good, so only the funniest jokes in that comic were able to stick out, even if they only elicited a very cheap laugh at best.

    So yeah. I can PM some basics if you want.

    Mystery said:
    is it my Pc ae is it verry bad quality
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    wat
     
    hahahaha! those are really good. maybe u should make some more.
     
    Ti's a pretty good begining, though it could get a whole lot better, you're on your way
     
    another good one, well have you made that sprite(dawn, misty)?
     
    Well I'll say this isn't very bad or good for that matter but I remember my first sprite comic and boy was it bad.Anyway I'll give a quick review.

    1.You may be a beginner but you want your comic to be above the sea of sucky webcomics,don't you?If you do then read on,if you don't skip to part 3

    2.Layout:
    They layout is improving as you go along, though the sign saying Pokepants isn't very appealing, black text surrounded by red isn't very nice in my opinion.Use nicer colors when making the layout or even try to jazz it up,MS paint is a limited program but very easy to use and you can make many things in it.

    3.Plot:
    I can't really comment on this much due to the comic just starting up but by the looks of it it is one of those screwed up time traveling plots that is very overused and needs a lot of originality.

    4.Appearance
    The appearance is decent though never use sprites of two different generations in the same comic.Either redo the whole Kanto in D/P/P sprites or change the character's sprites into the GBA generation.

    5.Speech Bubbles
    The speech bubbles are decent but the colors are not very good.I recommend you keep the inside of the bubble white and making the outline and text the color of the character you want to talk.

    6.Characters
    Seems to me like you have just picked out your favorite characters and rushed the comic to put them into a group without giving them much originality which makes them just feel like robots you have also made some characters appear and disappear without getting a proper introduction.

    7.Humour
    This is where your comic really falls and this category also being one of the main reasons people read joke comics.
    The humour and delivery are quite bad by themselves but put together they make a terrible combo.The jokes are rushed and very bad by themselves and only gave me a groan but something that makes me laugh is very hard to find anyway.The delivery is quite bad as well as I said it is rushed and the jokes just come out as random in most scenes.

    An example of a joke with good delivery would be if a character was by the beach with friends and decides to go beachcombing with a metal detector he finds in another giggle-funny way then he searches and searches and finds a bottlecap then he searches again and after a while he finds a quarter then in he decides to go searching again and finds something big, he digs around and finds another metal detector!

    That is a well delivered joke, first they start it normally as a day on the beach and then he supposedly gets bored and goes beachcombing with a metal detedctor he finds in a mini-joke.He soon finds two little objects which build up suspense for the oncoming joke and then he finds something big and BAM!It's a metal detector!The joke in itself is moderately funny but the good delivery bumps it up a few notches.

    8.Overall
    It is not bad as I said but it has lots of small flaws and a few major ones.All in all it can be a better comic if you put more work into it aswell as a bunch of originality.

    9.You said no
    Then just delete your comic as no one will enjoy it and it will be lost in the sea of webcomics forever.

    That about wraps it up though it wasn't very short but I hope you know what to do now.
     
    no, codec, this one isnt good at all. honestly. it lacks humour. after nosepass uses hug, you have simply ended it, there should have been a continuation like crocknaw falls in love with nosepass and something like that XDXD
     
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