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Vyro
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Name: Darkly
Gender:male
Pokemon Species:Flygon
age:???
Side: Primal Dialga
Appearance: He is a black and grey flygon with red eyes that can hypnotize other pokemon. he wears a black cape and he uses it to hide in the shadows, unfortunately, it does not work.his wings look more like the wings of a salmence, and he can use them to whip up powerful windstorms. he can extend his claws, and breathe black fire. his red eyes burn with the fire of a pokemon who has been betrayed too many times.
Personality: He is an evil pokemon who is not as twisted as he looks. He would rather get is minions to destroy something, as he is sort of lazy but that does not mean he is not strong. he is very powerful, but not nearly as strong as dialga. He is allies with the insane raichu, Rei, in fact, they are almost friends(but Rei is too insane) He hates everyone but Rei and Primal Dialga
History: He came from a distant island named Darkdix island, but he got banished for murdering a young magikarp.He then trained for years, learning attacks that no flygon should ever know. He struck back at the people of the island, killing them all. He then decided to work for dialga, who made him his advisor. Several years later, he met a sceptile named trika, who tried to stop his plans to destroy the world. The two have been rivals ever since.
Other: Darkly is dark type instead of ground.
I have mostly fixed all the errors and said why he was kicked out.
also, toxic and I are friends, after all, he used me in his sign up.
Gender:male
Pokemon Species:Flygon
age:???
Side: Primal Dialga
Appearance: He is a black and grey flygon with red eyes that can hypnotize other pokemon. he wears a black cape and he uses it to hide in the shadows, unfortunately, it does not work.his wings look more like the wings of a salmence, and he can use them to whip up powerful windstorms. he can extend his claws, and breathe black fire. his red eyes burn with the fire of a pokemon who has been betrayed too many times.
Personality: He is an evil pokemon who is not as twisted as he looks. He would rather get is minions to destroy something, as he is sort of lazy but that does not mean he is not strong. he is very powerful, but not nearly as strong as dialga. He is allies with the insane raichu, Rei, in fact, they are almost friends(but Rei is too insane) He hates everyone but Rei and Primal Dialga
History: He came from a distant island named Darkdix island, but he got banished for murdering a young magikarp.He then trained for years, learning attacks that no flygon should ever know. He struck back at the people of the island, killing them all. He then decided to work for dialga, who made him his advisor. Several years later, he met a sceptile named trika, who tried to stop his plans to destroy the world. The two have been rivals ever since.
Other: Darkly is dark type instead of ground.
I have mostly fixed all the errors and said why he was kicked out.
also, toxic and I are friends, after all, he used me in his sign up.
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Ehmm... Lordscar? You just said that. Not to mini-mod, but please don't "spam" by posting the same basic thing twice. If you were trying to get my attention, you already had it; I just didn't feel the need to reply until your post was edited.
Darkly-
*sigh* Okay. The History, I feel, still needs more. I see that the mentions of other people's characters will work out fine (I just wanted to be exactly sure with them...), but you still did not edit in his age, and there are still capitalization errors (as in 'Flygon', 'Pokemon', and names of characters). All you included, actually, was that he killed a Magikarp. If he's such an evil, twisted Pokemon, he must have a darker past... right?
I'm going to send you a PM, Darkly, just to clarify a few things in case it seems like I'm being... well, unfair or rude (which it probably does...).
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*sigh* Okay. The History, I feel, still needs more. I see that the mentions of other people's characters will work out fine (I just wanted to be exactly sure with them...), but you still did not edit in his age, and there are still capitalization errors (as in 'Flygon', 'Pokemon', and names of characters). All you included, actually, was that he killed a Magikarp. If he's such an evil, twisted Pokemon, he must have a darker past... right?
I'm going to send you a PM, Darkly, just to clarify a few things in case it seems like I'm being... well, unfair or rude (which it probably does...).
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Name: Cyrus
Gender: Male
Species: Charmeleon
Age: 32
Side: Destined -Quester
Appearance: If you were to drop Cyrus in a crowd of normal Charmeleon, you could spot him immediately. First off, his skin is much lighter shade of red, even bordering on violet. His eyes, on the other hand, are a magnificent blue, causing them to stand out in contrast against his bright red skin. Around his neck is a necklace of glistening pearls that he wears at all times. The flame on his tails tends to burn blue in the heat of battle, and is a sign of a power increase. However, if the battle lasts too long in this state, his tail flame will shirk considerably, and he will be nearly useless.
Personality: Judging by the many stories he tells, Cyrus could be called a natural born leader. He is skilled at thinking on his feet and is not easily distracted. He is a team player for the most part, but if he feels like one of his teammates is slacking, he will gladly criticize said teammate. Because of this most others view him as cocky or arrogant, and to tell you the truth, there's sort of correct. He loves to talk about previous victories, sometimes exaggerating the story a bit. It's sad really. He's a great leader, but his personality prevents him from finding a good team.
History: In Cyrus' many years of life, not much has happened in the desolate world he lives in. His earliest memory is one of him and his brothers when they were all in their Charmander state. It was hard for a Pokemon that required constant energy to live in a paralyzed world, so the Charmander always traveled in packs. Then one day, while traveling up a mountain-side, the group was attacked by a couple of hungry Lairon. It was at this moment that Cyrus developed his leadership skills as he instructed the pack of Charmander during the battle. Casualties were at a minimum and the ambushers were defeated. As a self-proclaimed prize, Cyrus stole a pearl necklace wrapped around the tail of one of the Lairon to commemorate his first victory.
Other: As stated in the Appearance section, while in the heat of battle, the flame on Cyrus' tail turns blue, signaling an increase in power. However, only minutes after this power increase, he suffers from a drastic decrease as his tail flame shrinks to a very small flicker.
Gender: Male
Species: Charmeleon
Age: 32
Side: Destined -Quester
Appearance: If you were to drop Cyrus in a crowd of normal Charmeleon, you could spot him immediately. First off, his skin is much lighter shade of red, even bordering on violet. His eyes, on the other hand, are a magnificent blue, causing them to stand out in contrast against his bright red skin. Around his neck is a necklace of glistening pearls that he wears at all times. The flame on his tails tends to burn blue in the heat of battle, and is a sign of a power increase. However, if the battle lasts too long in this state, his tail flame will shirk considerably, and he will be nearly useless.
Personality: Judging by the many stories he tells, Cyrus could be called a natural born leader. He is skilled at thinking on his feet and is not easily distracted. He is a team player for the most part, but if he feels like one of his teammates is slacking, he will gladly criticize said teammate. Because of this most others view him as cocky or arrogant, and to tell you the truth, there's sort of correct. He loves to talk about previous victories, sometimes exaggerating the story a bit. It's sad really. He's a great leader, but his personality prevents him from finding a good team.
History: In Cyrus' many years of life, not much has happened in the desolate world he lives in. His earliest memory is one of him and his brothers when they were all in their Charmander state. It was hard for a Pokemon that required constant energy to live in a paralyzed world, so the Charmander always traveled in packs. Then one day, while traveling up a mountain-side, the group was attacked by a couple of hungry Lairon. It was at this moment that Cyrus developed his leadership skills as he instructed the pack of Charmander during the battle. Casualties were at a minimum and the ambushers were defeated. As a self-proclaimed prize, Cyrus stole a pearl necklace wrapped around the tail of one of the Lairon to commemorate his first victory.
Other: As stated in the Appearance section, while in the heat of battle, the flame on Cyrus' tail turns blue, signaling an increase in power. However, only minutes after this power increase, he suffers from a drastic decrease as his tail flame shrinks to a very small flicker.
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Gummy, you're ACCEPTED!
Lordscar... I wasn't looking for "a little new stuff"... All you did was add to the History. His Personality is still a few words (when I specifically asked for a paragraph), and his Description remains very lacking. Also, I must ask about the Eevee. Were you intending to RP this Eevee as well? If so, that would mean you're RPing two characters, which isn't fair to the other RPers. The grammar is still bad, and the whole thing is barely readable; when typing, you need to put a space after every punctuation mark. Not trying to be rude or insulting, but that isn't going to cut it.
Lordscar... I wasn't looking for "a little new stuff"... All you did was add to the History. His Personality is still a few words (when I specifically asked for a paragraph), and his Description remains very lacking. Also, I must ask about the Eevee. Were you intending to RP this Eevee as well? If so, that would mean you're RPing two characters, which isn't fair to the other RPers. The grammar is still bad, and the whole thing is barely readable; when typing, you need to put a space after every punctuation mark. Not trying to be rude or insulting, but that isn't going to cut it.
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lvl99rayquaza said:
[rant]Is this supposed to be my Rei? I mean if your character is supposed to be thirty-six then it is a chronological impossibility seeing as my character is a little over 1,800 years old, that's over 800 years before the Temporal Tower collapsed. And why would Rei want to be a Shadow Charizard general? That is another species, and if you were the ones to attack the village then why would you side with Dialga, Palkia's enemy? it doesn't make sense. Also, Rei is physically seventeen and although he was the chief of the Dialga worshippers, he was the opposite of what he is now. Ask me before doing something like that, because you butchered my character's history. [/rant]
Please disreguard this rant if this is not my Rei, but I'm pretty sure that it is.
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1. Darkly is my best enemy. We have battled in many RPs and pretty much know all of each others history.
2. Trika can't travel back and change it from happening because the dimension traveler burns up ALOT of energy and it takes approximatley 2 months to gain energy and...
3. If he did try and stop this from hapening he would be messing with time lines and he could rip a hole in the universe that would destroy two thirds of it and...
4. Dialga has enough power to stop him messing with Dialgas timeline.
5. The weapons have expired because the dimension jumper messed with them and for some reason Dialga has cannceled them out.
6. That means that the Dimension Jumper is broke so the only way it will work again is if the world is returned to normal...
I hope I have fixed the problems... If there are any more just tell me... :D
2. Trika can't travel back and change it from happening because the dimension traveler burns up ALOT of energy and it takes approximatley 2 months to gain energy and...
3. If he did try and stop this from hapening he would be messing with time lines and he could rip a hole in the universe that would destroy two thirds of it and...
4. Dialga has enough power to stop him messing with Dialgas timeline.
5. The weapons have expired because the dimension jumper messed with them and for some reason Dialga has cannceled them out.
6. That means that the Dimension Jumper is broke so the only way it will work again is if the world is returned to normal...
I hope I have fixed the problems... If there are any more just tell me... :D
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good point trika we are on the same side in one rp and different sides in another, I would like to see how it would be to be an evil character every once in a while.
ok ill post a redo. ok now i am editing.
Name: Blaze
Gender: male
Species: sdarkness charizard
Age: 36 again
Side: Primal Dialga
Appearance: Blaze is A black charizard with crimson red eyes. He has shining gold armor. Due to being a foot taller than other charizard he is feared and loathed by many. He has been in so many battles that he has earned the nickname the sky shadow of death. hisappearence is similar to shiny charizard but the underside of his wings, his underside, his flame, and his tongue are black.
Personality: Blaze is very rash and he loves to fight other pokemon. He hates to lose because he is very evil and if Blaze gets too angry he will destroy a village. Blaze has had a rough time due to the fact that he can destroy a village when enraged and he gets angry very easily. One exampleof his rage is burning down his home village. Despit being so evil Blaze has a soft spot for newborn pokemon. Blaze even went to the location of a time gear and destroyed it.
History: Blaze was a born fighter and he was born as a normal charmander. When he was still just a charmander he fought so much that he was even kicked out of his home village after this he went through special training to become a charmeleon and when he became a charmeleon primal Dialga asked him to join his army as a darkness charizard general. Blaze happily accepted the job and Primal Dialga turned him into a shadow charizard after intense training. When Blaze became a darkness Charizard he was able to work his way to shadow charizard general. Blaze oversees the battles that his troops are in and he is a mastermind when it comes to strategies. Blaze is called the sky shadow of death due to the fact that his strategies involve sneak attacks and he is always involved. Blaze has a thirst for battles that was caused by his victories and for him a loss is worth the death penalty so he also hates to lose. he first put his nickname the sky shadow of death to the test after he earned the nickname by attacking villages from the sky and also by killing thousands of pokemon.
Other: Blaze's armor represents his military rank. Blaze even has a soft spot for newborn pokemon.
fine i guess ill delete my rp sample. I always try to join a rp to get my rp skills better.
ok ill post a redo. ok now i am editing.
Name: Blaze
Gender: male
Species: sdarkness charizard
Age: 36 again
Side: Primal Dialga
Appearance: Blaze is A black charizard with crimson red eyes. He has shining gold armor. Due to being a foot taller than other charizard he is feared and loathed by many. He has been in so many battles that he has earned the nickname the sky shadow of death. hisappearence is similar to shiny charizard but the underside of his wings, his underside, his flame, and his tongue are black.
Personality: Blaze is very rash and he loves to fight other pokemon. He hates to lose because he is very evil and if Blaze gets too angry he will destroy a village. Blaze has had a rough time due to the fact that he can destroy a village when enraged and he gets angry very easily. One exampleof his rage is burning down his home village. Despit being so evil Blaze has a soft spot for newborn pokemon. Blaze even went to the location of a time gear and destroyed it.
History: Blaze was a born fighter and he was born as a normal charmander. When he was still just a charmander he fought so much that he was even kicked out of his home village after this he went through special training to become a charmeleon and when he became a charmeleon primal Dialga asked him to join his army as a darkness charizard general. Blaze happily accepted the job and Primal Dialga turned him into a shadow charizard after intense training. When Blaze became a darkness Charizard he was able to work his way to shadow charizard general. Blaze oversees the battles that his troops are in and he is a mastermind when it comes to strategies. Blaze is called the sky shadow of death due to the fact that his strategies involve sneak attacks and he is always involved. Blaze has a thirst for battles that was caused by his victories and for him a loss is worth the death penalty so he also hates to lose. he first put his nickname the sky shadow of death to the test after he earned the nickname by attacking villages from the sky and also by killing thousands of pokemon.
Other: Blaze's armor represents his military rank. Blaze even has a soft spot for newborn pokemon.
fine i guess ill delete my rp sample. I always try to join a rp to get my rp skills better.
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Thanx but If I were you I'd change your RP Sample; It seems a bit unproffesional and not very descriptive...
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It's bad to control someone else's characters. To incorporate them into your own character's History is perfectly fine if both RPers are fine with it. And about playing as two characters, nobody is allowed to do that, as the rules of this RP state.
Lordscar, the sign-up still is not nearly good enough. Did you read the rest of the critique I made on it? How you need to put a space after every period or other punctuation mark to at least make it easy to read in the first place? You can't expect to get accepted if you don't read and follow the guidelines the roleplay-master sets...
Toxic0345, you're ACCEPTED now!
Blaze, your sign-up seems kind of... All over the place, with little order. I suppose it's just the way it's written, as I believe I noticed a few grammar-related errors. And all the talk about destroying villages... it just seems like that's all he does that makes him "evil". In a world like this, sure it would be bad to do that, but you can't get a high position in Primal Dialga's army just by lighting a few huts on fire. And the age... Well, you can use that if you really want to, but when I used it as an example it was a bit of an exxagurration to stretch it for you... He could be a Charizard in under a year, but it seems unlikely for him to have "destroyed so many villages" and earned a high millitary rank all in under a year of maturity. One more nitpick: Shadow Pokemon, as they are created by humans, do not exist in this world. Sure, he can be as evil as you want him to be, though "Shadow" Pokemon are nonexistent and unknown to this world, and always have been.
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I have a question. If someone wanted to be a Porygon what would happen? Porygon can be found in the pokemon mystery dungeon games but there are no humans except for the character you play as in the game.
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Because Porygon exists in PMD and PMD2, that would be acceptable. Shadow Pokemon are not related to PMD in any way. They were in two spin-off games of their own, in limited numbers, and stopped quickly storyline-wise. Porygon (and eventually its evolutions) are reccuring Pokemon who have been around since R/B/Y, and in every game including both Mystery Dungeons.
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Thank you, Gummy. That link might really help out.
lvl99rayquaza, I would accept you, but your RP Sample... If I can expect your posts to have that kind of quality, I'm not going to accept you. It lacks decent description, uses all caps (which is a bit annoying), and shifts between past and present tense. It's also exactly what I meant in the Rules of this RP by "not doing the bare minumum". A few lines and choppy sentences isn't good enough for a literate RPG. Read a few paragraphs of an archived fanfic if you want an idea of how much effort needs to go into a post. The paragraph rule from the sign-ups should apply in yours posts as well.
lvl99rayquaza, I would accept you, but your RP Sample... If I can expect your posts to have that kind of quality, I'm not going to accept you. It lacks decent description, uses all caps (which is a bit annoying), and shifts between past and present tense. It's also exactly what I meant in the Rules of this RP by "not doing the bare minumum". A few lines and choppy sentences isn't good enough for a literate RPG. Read a few paragraphs of an archived fanfic if you want an idea of how much effort needs to go into a post. The paragraph rule from the sign-ups should apply in yours posts as well.
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Name: Darkly
Gender:male
Pokemon Species:Flygon
age:???
Side: Primal Dialga
Appearance: He is a black and grey flygon with red eyes that can hypnotize other pokemon. he wears a black cape and he uses it to hide in the shadows, unfortunately, it does not work.his wings look more like the wings of a salmence, and he can use them to whip up powerful windstorms. he can extend his claws, and breathe black fire and his red eyes burn with the fire of a pokemon who has been betrayed too many times.( I can't really change this too much)
Personality: Darkly is evil and very insane. He is also quite inteligent and extremly powerful. he says that he has the power of giratina, but that's a bit of an exaggeration. he can use the shadow force attack though....he hates everyone who is not his ally, especially the sceptile named trika.he is also very unpridictable and random, always using his signature Gwahahahahaha! laugh. he gets annoyed easily and oddly, he loves cake.
History: He was once the mayor of a large city on a distant island, but he was framed for 10 murders he didn't commit. He was banished to some ancient ruins, and sealed inside, but they didn't know that it was really temporal tower. He eventually got to the top, where he met primal dialga. primal dialga made a deal with Darkly: he would kill all of the inhabitants of the city, in exchange for Darkly's service. Darkly agreed, and he has been primal dialga's assistant ever since.
Other: Darkly is dark type insted of ground.
I have completly rewritten his personality and history. I can't really change the appearance
Gender:male
Pokemon Species:Flygon
age:???
Side: Primal Dialga
Appearance: He is a black and grey flygon with red eyes that can hypnotize other pokemon. he wears a black cape and he uses it to hide in the shadows, unfortunately, it does not work.his wings look more like the wings of a salmence, and he can use them to whip up powerful windstorms. he can extend his claws, and breathe black fire and his red eyes burn with the fire of a pokemon who has been betrayed too many times.( I can't really change this too much)
Personality: Darkly is evil and very insane. He is also quite inteligent and extremly powerful. he says that he has the power of giratina, but that's a bit of an exaggeration. he can use the shadow force attack though....he hates everyone who is not his ally, especially the sceptile named trika.he is also very unpridictable and random, always using his signature Gwahahahahaha! laugh. he gets annoyed easily and oddly, he loves cake.
History: He was once the mayor of a large city on a distant island, but he was framed for 10 murders he didn't commit. He was banished to some ancient ruins, and sealed inside, but they didn't know that it was really temporal tower. He eventually got to the top, where he met primal dialga. primal dialga made a deal with Darkly: he would kill all of the inhabitants of the city, in exchange for Darkly's service. Darkly agreed, and he has been primal dialga's assistant ever since.
Other: Darkly is dark type insted of ground.
I have completly rewritten his personality and history. I can't really change the appearance
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Hm... What about his Age? And grammar. Grammar is still lacking. Here's how many mistakes I noticed in just his Personality...
Mainly, it's capitalization. You need to capitalize the first word of every sentence, every name, every attack name, and every Pokemon species. No, it does not seem very important, but it is. Bad grammar makes posts look "n00bish" or of poor quality. A mistake every here and there is fine (nobody expects anyone to be perfect), but continued mistakes have a bad effect on posts. Try to work on that.
And then there was a problem I noticed in the History... Just one though; you pretty much fixed everything you needed to fix. Apparently Darkly reached the "top" of Temporal Tower, but it was stated in the plot that Temporal Tower had fallen to rubble.There would be nothing left of it, unless this happened over a thousand years ago, right when the tower was falling for it to be Primal Dialga. His age was not specified (though it should be), so it seems illogical.
This "critique" is longer than the others, I know, but I'm trying to be more specific because really there's only a few small problems now. Give him an age, edit some grammar, and work around that one part in the History. Then, you're accepted. <yay?>
Mainly, it's capitalization. You need to capitalize the first word of every sentence, every name, every attack name, and every Pokemon species. No, it does not seem very important, but it is. Bad grammar makes posts look "n00bish" or of poor quality. A mistake every here and there is fine (nobody expects anyone to be perfect), but continued mistakes have a bad effect on posts. Try to work on that.
And then there was a problem I noticed in the History... Just one though; you pretty much fixed everything you needed to fix. Apparently Darkly reached the "top" of Temporal Tower, but it was stated in the plot that Temporal Tower had fallen to rubble.There would be nothing left of it, unless this happened over a thousand years ago, right when the tower was falling for it to be Primal Dialga. His age was not specified (though it should be), so it seems illogical.
This "critique" is longer than the others, I know, but I'm trying to be more specific because really there's only a few small problems now. Give him an age, edit some grammar, and work around that one part in the History. Then, you're accepted. <yay?>
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