FireRed hack: Pokemon Sky Twilight Version [Updates - 25/08/16]

[Mab]

Hey there! I enjoyed the demo of this a lot!
Like RB11 said, this game's pretty chalk-filled of grammar errors. To help you fix these in Beta 2, I took screenshots of all the ones I could find, along with a couple of other problems and opinions.

Spoiler:

Personally I'm not a huge fan of the titlescreen font. Of course, it's 100% your decision, but if you were looking for a second opinion... I don't like it much.

Should be which of all these Pokémon do you like best?

Poke ball should be Poké Ball. This mistake shows up in a bunch of other places too.

your way

Spelled actually wrong.

Studying books? As in, the action of studying books, or books for studying? I'd just get rid of the word studying, it makes the whole sentence weird.

Should be I should be off now and go to

Why the weird line break? This mistake is in a ton of places.

Redundant word. Make it either should contain a random item. or should have a random item inside. You don't need both.

Should be why do you have to....
Also it's a little weird to say why do you have to... because.... It's like he's answering his own question.

My babe loves those pretty flowers.

As my English teacher always said, avoid run-on sentences!

accepted.

Use proper tree shading, please.

I'd put a comma or an exclamation mark after unfair.

Get rid of who are those.

Um. Replace guys with team.

Replace ruined with rid.

I think if I were telling someone about an evil team, I'd bring up the take over the whole region part before the get rid of Mega Evos part. It's just funny speech.

Who's they?

Should be growing, not grown.

Replace He with He'd or He'll.
Also, with most roadblock events the NPC actually walks up to you rather than yelling from several tiles away.

Rewrite that entire sentence. I'm not even sure what you mean.

But it's going to cost money.

Replace the first is with the.

Should be well it's none of your business.

Should be two sentences.

Replace got with been a.

Misspelled truth. Also, behind the cave? You mean inside it.

Please redo this. Every sentence has at least 1 error.

Need a comma after by the way.

Replace I with I'm.
Also, if you want it why didn't you go get it? You've been standing there for a millennium!

You mean a few?

Get rid of either on or during.

ANYWAYS not ANYWHERES

Should be So be careful where you step.

???

Replace has with is.

Should be ...looks exactly like that Nurse....

Replace can with were.

Needs a what after it's.

Huh?

Replace remove with moved.

Weird sentence structure. Should be something like Son, you've always made me and your mother very proud.

A little more than annoying, right? They attacked your lab!

How are

What self-respecting trainer doesn't know the proper plural of Pokémon?

Remove guys. Why is that part of the sentence?

I think you mean I'm still going to train as hard as possible to beat you.

After all? We just met!

No one has ever.
Also, no one's ever challenged you before?

He's the Gym? You mean he's the Gym Leader.

Should be either you better beware or you better be aware.

Inquiry sentences end with a question mark.

Should be has ever.

What are you talking about?

Should be either leave me alone or leave me in peace.

Seriously?

A couple more things. I think you getting your first Pokémon could use a little more fanfare. Usually the professor gives it to the player as a major event, but here they're just sitting there right away. It's a little unimaginative.
Lastly, I'm not a fan of the New Cave music.

Despite all those, I found this game pretty enjoyable :) I think it has potential and I wish you luck.
I took a couple screenshots of my favorite bits.

Spoiler:

That's cool, and I like how you can talk to them and they'll list the moves they're using. You could have their Pokémon jump or move slightly after they say this too.

lol. None of us do.

HAHAHAHAHAH. I pretty much burst out laughing.

Also really funny.

 

[RB11]

Thanks for replying! Fix the grammar, insert hgss tiles and battle backgrounds and this could be a definite contender for hotm and even hoty :)

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Hey there! I enjoyed the demo of this a lot!
Like RB11 said, this game's pretty chalk-filled of grammar errors. To help you fix these in Beta 2, I took screenshots of all the ones I could find, along with a couple of other problems and opinions.

Spoiler:

Personally I'm not a huge fan of the titlescreen font. Of course, it's 100% your decision, but if you were looking for a second opinion... I don't like it much.

Should be which of all these Pokémon do you like best?

Poke ball should be Poké Ball. This mistake shows up in a bunch of other places too.

your way

Spelled actually wrong.

Studying books? As in, the action of studying books, or books for studying? I'd just get rid of the word studying, it makes the whole sentence weird.

Should be I should be off now and go to

Why the weird line break? This mistake is in a ton of places.

Redundant word. Make it either should contain a random item. or should have a random item inside. You don't need both.

Should be why do you have to....
Also it's a little weird to say why do you have to... because.... It's like he's answering his own question.

My babe loves those pretty flowers.

As my English teacher always said, avoid run-on sentences!

accepted.

Use proper tree shading, please.

I'd put a comma or an exclamation mark after unfair.

Get rid of who are those.

Um. Replace guys with team.

Replace ruined with rid.

I think if I were telling someone about an evil team, I'd bring up the take over the whole region part before the get rid of Mega Evos part. It's just funny speech.

Who's they?

Should be growing, not grown.

Replace He with He'd or He'll.
Also, with most roadblock events the NPC actually walks up to you rather than yelling from several tiles away.

Rewrite that entire sentence. I'm not even sure what you mean.

But it's going to cost money.

Replace the first is with the.

Should be well it's none of your business.

Should be two sentences.

Replace got with been a.

Misspelled truth. Also, behind the cave? You mean inside it.

Please redo this. Every sentence has at least 1 error.

Need a comma after by the way.

Replace I with I'm.
Also, if you want it why didn't you go get it? You've been standing there for a millennium!

You mean a few?

Get rid of either on or during.

ANYWAYS not ANYWHERES

Should be So be careful where you step.

???

Replace has with is.

Should be ...looks exactly like that Nurse....

Replace can with were.

Needs a what after it's.

Huh?

Replace remove with moved.

Weird sentence structure. Should be something like Son, you've always made me and your mother very proud.

A little more than annoying, right? They attacked your lab!

How are

What self-respecting trainer doesn't know the proper plural of Pokémon?

Remove guys. Why is that part of the sentence?

I think you mean I'm still going to train as hard as possible to beat you.

After all? We just met!

No one has ever.
Also, no one's ever challenged you before?

He's the Gym? You mean he's the Gym Leader.

Should be either you better beware or you better be aware.

Inquiry sentences end with a question mark.

Should be has ever.

What are you talking about?

Should be either leave me alone or leave me in peace.

Seriously?

A couple more things. I think you getting your first Pokémon could use a little more fanfare. Usually the professor gives it to the player as a major event, but here they're just sitting there right away. It's a little unimaginative.
Lastly, I'm not a fan of the New Cave music.

Despite all those, I found this game pretty enjoyable :) I think it has potential and I wish you luck.
I took a couple screenshots of my favorite bits.

Spoiler:

That's cool, and I like how you can talk to them and they'll list the moves they're using. You could have their Pokémon jump or move slightly after they say this too.

lol. None of us do.

HAHAHAHAHAH. I pretty much burst out laughing.

Also really funny.

Thank you! Man there are a lot of grammar error. To be should, I'm not really the best at English. I'll use your best suggestion.
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By the way guys, I have a question for you guys, do we really need full 721 Pokemon. I mean like, what Pokemon that you do not want to see?

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Updates
Hey guys, how you guys been doing? Anyway, I've decided that I'm rebooting this hack due to a lot of grammar problem and I just thought an another story other than a 10 year old or a 16 year old on a journey. Also, the current storyline is not relevant at all to Noivern. This will take me a along time to make the progress again and sadly, this will no longer have 721 Pokemon. I'm very sorry but it just felt it just a bit too much. However, Gen 4, 5, and 6 are still in this hack.

Also, I'm working another hack therefore now, I'm working on two hacks. The information for it is still unknown by it will come eventually. Stay tune for more updates.
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EDIT:
I've thought about this rom hack again. I know you guys love expansion dex. That's why I'm still expanding pokedex but not full 721 Pokemon. Just the Pokemon that we need that I'm going to include.

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Updates
Do you guys know yesterday that I'm make two hack now! Whaaaaaaat? The second project might be based on Emerald Version. I just want to make at least one hack from fire red and emerald if I can. Plus I want to make my projects with both fire red and emerald balanced as possible. Screenshots for each are coming soon. :)

 

[morteel]

Looks promising, will definitely try out next demo

p.s. does your other project already have a thread? I cant find it

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Looks promising, will definitely try out next demo

p.s. does your other project already have a thread? I cant find it

No. Not yet.

 

[PokemonMaster_j]

The sprites are nice but you might wana consider replacing that black outline you gave to your spritees with a darker shade of the same color. Try watching one of the silver legues pixelart in review videos. I am positive it will help you out.

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

BIG PRONOUNMENT!!!
Please watch this video below. I hope you enjoy it. :)

 

[MaddShuriken]

Oh, what you know. Thanks buddy. :)
I'll fix them later.

You Should Look at This Picture file:///D:/ROM/ROM/Pokemon%20Sky%20Twilight/1636%20-%20Pokemon%20Fire%20Red%20(U)(Squirrels)_01.png,Can you Fix It?

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

You Should Look at This Picture file:///D:/ROM/ROM/Pokemon%20Sky%20Twilight/1636%20-%20Pokemon%20Fire%20Red%20(U)(Squirrels)_01.png,Can you Fix It?

Sorry but the link doesn't work for me dude.

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Update - 29/03/16
I want to show you guys a video of my progress so far (not the gameplay yet, sorry). Enjoy the video and just letting you know that I will shows you guys some updated screenshots soon. Stay tune for that.

 

[Gengarking2255]

This looks pretty cool. I'm going to give it a try :P

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Small Updates
I am quickly post this that I have updated the titlescreen. Here is the updated version I hope you like it guys:

More updates are coming soon including the screenshots.

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Updates 02/04/16
Hello guys and yes guys, I have finally you showing you guys the screenshots that I have promised. Also, I am getting rid off one of the features in the game and it is the HG/SS music! It not that I hate it. It's this because as you play the demo, HG/SS music is started to get kind of... glitchy you know what I mean.

Anyways, here's some screenshots below

More updates are coming soon.

 

[Nuisance]

This hack looks very promising. What I've been looking for in a ROM hack are all included in the features. But is the wireless linking capabilities still there? (dueling/trading)

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

This hack looks very promising. What I've been looking for in a ROM hack are all included in the features. But is the wireless linking capabilities still there? (dueling/trading)

I'm not sure about the wireless linking capabilities still there at this point. Sorry.

 

[Nuisance]

I'm not sure about the wireless linking capabilities still there at this point. Sorry.

Okay thank you :) I hope it'll be available soon even just the dueling capability.

 

[*Luxio//Hacks*]

Updates 03/04/16
Hello guys again. For this game, I am going to add another feature to this game. This is called... Custom Mega Evolution. Yeah guys, Custom Mega Evolution is a Mega Evolution that never been officially reveal such as Mega Raichu. Here is the video about Custom Mega Evolution below. I hope you enjoy it and you guys should subscribe to my channel on youtube.

More updates are coming soon.

 

[Wayne18]

Cant wait to see more Custom Mega Evolution, Keep Up the great work