Pokemon UA {Ultimate Adventure}

[Flaming Quilava]

Woot! My new comic! I quit my other one becouse it sucked like hell.:paranoid: So i made a new one. I improved some of the thing i did wrong in the last one.Well i hope you have a fun time reading it! Dont forget to reply and post crit and suggetions!
:shocked: This comic is not for all ages! I repeat! Not for all ages!!!!:shocked:
Well heres my comic!

Intro
https://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_UA-INTRO.png

Season:1
The biggining
Comic1https://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_UA1.png
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Bios

Name: Jesse Keplon
Age: 14
Born: Littleroot town
Nature: Doctile
Bio: Jesse is a badboy who gets in trouble almost every day. Hes a kid who like the outside and like to pick on his little brother.
Trrainer Card:

Name: Jason Keplon
Age: 10
Born: Littleroot town
Nature: Timed
Bio: The smart kid. He think hes smarter so hes stronger. He's a little kid whos so fast and smart he alwasys has time to annoy his brother.
Trainer Card:
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Credits: Avatar,matthegreat,Shadowburn,

 

[Shadowburn]

Well, I think the cursing part was a little, i don't know.. It sounded weird. Um the white on the sweatband, needs to be recolored white. And I'm trying to fix the hair turned side ways on jesse. 7.5/10 I want to see more! :) tacos..
(even tho its not for all ages, your a minor yourself... O_O)

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Thats only the biggining. You will get it later on. And i wont cursed that much its just for the biggining when there still home.:paranoid:

 

[Shadowburn]

Its late, i'm going ta bed. Uh, are people allowed to join t3h comic? If so, I'll join tomorrow. I'll stay up all nigh..ZZZZ

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Well cya. O and there are some spots open in my comic and if you got ideas pm them to me.:D

 

[Matt Silver]

This comic has already started oddly but I'll keep reading...
No spelling mistkaes I could see, sprites are okay and I couldn't help but noticing in the bios t u recoulered my Jay square and took my NO PICTURE square...
Keep at it...if u wish,....

 

[Fateful]

It's good ~Dragon~Master~.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Whoops sorry about that...But i got the one that you used for jay i got from *link removed* .:paranoid: Im sorry i didnt ask for the NO PIcture Squire.

 

[Matt Silver]

Oh well about the Jay one... it looked a lot the same and i guss it basically is...
about the No Piccy thing...I'll live.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Well il update when i get back from school.:D Woot!!! Its my last day and then im freeeee!!!!!!:D :D :D

 

[Signomi]

That's nice, DM, but try to stay ontopic as much as possible, the thread is about your comic, not anything else :)

 

[Flaming Quilava]

That's nice, DM, but try to stay ontopic as much as possible, the thread is about your comic, not anything else :)

Ill try not to go offtopic!:D Gahhh stupid school.....

 

[Goatman56]

Not to impressed. Your grammar is kind of bad, a balls joke is stupid, text under the panel (unoriginal), if its supposed to be funny, its not, and Jason's overworld is badly edited. A 4/10 is the highest i'll give you.

 

[Shadowburn]

The overworld is by me.:paranoid: >.<"

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Not to impressed. Your grammar is kind of bad, a balls joke is stupid, text under the panel (unoriginal), if its supposed to be funny, its not, and Jason's overworld is badly edited. A 4/10 is the highest i'll give you.

Wait that wasnt soppose to be funny "the balls". It just came to my idea. So they could get grounded for fighting.. You'll see why. :paranoid: