Pokemon (working title)

Serebii and Celibi: I'll merge your two posts together. Please do not double post. There is an edit button there for a reason.

Also, remember to keep all posts in this thread related to the comic. Don't go offtopic.
 
Give credit to who made the trainer & Lucario sprites, unless you made them yourself.
 
Serebii and Celibi said:
Oh and the name could be deon,s amazing adventure with lucario.

Hey Houndoom1.are you new here?
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What kind of question is that? Why would you ask me that in this thread ask me that in a PM. No I'm not new here I've been here for months. (read the information in the top right corner where it says Join fdate, Nature, Location etc.
 
Ok there are alot of things wrong with this comic. First off its nice that you have used speach bubbles as they are underated these days, However.
Your Text is going over the speach bubbles. Please try not to do that as it makes the comic more scruffy. Try to use a non-bold font style and a Pokémon font would look nicer. Those trees are from Viridian forest and therefor are dark and dont fit in with the light enviroment. Your sprite is disgustingly recolored and edited. You really need to try harder. Also give credit to who you nicked that Rukario sprite from, sprite theft is not taken lightly.

2/10
 
1. I can't even see the link for the first episode.
2. As Esupio said, never give a new trainer a legendary pokemon.

I will comment on your comic, once I actually see that episode.
 
How he gets the Lucario doesn't even make sense. "Here's your dad's old Pokemon, which just happens to be a legendary Pokemon for no apparent reason."
 
i know it's gray i made the sprite it's a trainer mix and as for lucario he is a very inportant part of the comic and he's no that strong at first like around comic 50 he will be strong
 
I'm sorry, but this comic, has no plot, poorly edited sprites, and the starting comic is just weird, nobody would get a legendary, and defiently not lucario.
 
Painful recolors. If I'm correct, those are paint greys, and the other colors are default, when I get back on my Mac I'll check, I can't see it on my Windows.
 
i'm telling you people that it has a plot to it that is why Deon got Lucario and umm the last time i check this is my comic and i can do what i want
 
I think everyone has said everything bad about this Comic...and We are only trying to help you improve. My First Comic (and most likely everyone else's) was complete rubbish. I was told what was good, bad and ugly. In this Case its...

1. Poor Recoloured Trainer OW's...(with Paint Defaults)...
2. Over-Lapping Text...(It doesn't look Good)...
3.That Rucario is not the OW...It is a Party Icon. If you want an OW...PM Me...
4. Complete Randomness...(Rucario...His First Pokemon? His Mum Just saying 'Ladida have Rucario...Its your Dads...' Isn't Good...First of All Ledgendary...Second...Randomnes...
5. Its a Generic (Im a sucker for these)...Journey Comics are good as long as you keep them Interesting and Fun. Take Pokemon X, by Recon Dye for Example.
6. Everyone Starts Somewhere. This is your First Comic. Appreciate Constructive Critisism and Turn it into Better Comics.

Maneachicken
 
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