Well, you're new at this, so no need to be using criticism so early. :cer_smile: Well, if you want hints, you could use a bit more detail. You are a good writer though, and I suck at controlling the tense. I suddenly switch from past tense, to present tense, to future tense, and so on and I am no good at it..... :cer_frown:
haha criticism is only as bad as you take it haha, and thanks for the hint, i'll be sure to add a plethora of detail when my turn comes around again :D