The Recieving of Memories

[Cloud Lines]

If you haven't guessed I wrote this poem about the book The Giver. It's a really good book if you haven't read it. This was written for a project in my Language Arts class at school.
Read and review, please!

The Recieving of Memories

His hands on my back,
My busy mind going slack.

A terrifing memory,
Started to fill me.

War and blood,
I would scream if I could.

His hands leave me,
I gasp, with labored breathing.

He looks at me with sad eyes,
This is leading to his demise.

With a tearful look,
He motions, I'm off the hook.

As I ride home,
I decide I want to be alone.

These memories I do hate,
But I recieve them,
Because the Giver's thirst I must sate.

 

[TJgamer]

Hmmm...The Giver doesn't seem to ring a bell.
The poem, however, is great. I really liked it!
Keep up the good work.

 

[Cloud Lines]

Hmmm...The Giver doesn't seem to ring a bell.
The poem, however, is great. I really liked it!
Keep up the good work.

thank you ever so much!
that means a lot to me!

 

[mervyn797]

Hmmm...The Giver doesn't seem to ring a bell.

Neither to me. XD;

I don't think the poem is bad at all. It has a nice rhyme as well.
So.. have you described about the story of the book in this poem?

 

[Cloud Lines]

Neither to me. XD;

I don't think the poem is bad at all. It has a nice rhyme as well.
So.. have you described about the story of the book in this poem?

no. but i was describing a certain memory that the main charcater had.
it was a memory of the Civil War.

 

[Missingno.7-4468]

Wow, I'm surprised more people haven't heard of/read the book. It even won a Newberry. 0.o

Anyway, I love the poem, and I remember this part in the book. I don't have anything bad to say about it, nice work on this one!

 

[Lilly2]

Awesome!

I do remember reading this in the seventh grade :D which was only recently...anyway, this brought back happy memories :) Nice work!

 

[Cloud Lines]

@missingno: thanks so much. well i hadn't heard of the book until i read it.

@lilly: thanks too. lol. i'm an 8th grader and we just read the book in class.

 

[Midnight Moon~]

I remember The Giver, it was a very good story. I absolutely love this poem, it's so...emotional. Powerful in a subtle way. It's hard for me to explain, but I don't have any criticism of it.

 

[Cloud Lines]

I remember The Giver, it was a very good story. I absolutely love this poem, it's so...emotional. Powerful in a subtle way. It's hard for me to explain, but I don't have any criticism of it.

thanks! i tried to make it as emotional as i could.