The Ruby Files

I'm still mulling over how linking moves will work...

Also, since Sammi is an outsider to the MD world, it makes sense that she would spend a while in the town, so she soaks everything in. The action is coming, don't worry!
 
I'm still mulling over how linking moves will work...

Also, since Sammi is an outsider to the MD world, it makes sense that she would spend a while in the town, so she soaks everything in. The action is coming, don't worry!
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1. Linking moves isn't really something that should be included without an in-depth explanation of how "moves" work in a story. When I read a book dealing with magic, one of the things I love is when the author explains how it works. (My personal favorite explanation of magic is the one Patricia C. Wrede gives in her Enchanted Forest series.) By the same token, "moves" need an explanation as well in an MD story, what with linking and all. My advice is that if you really must devote an entire chapter (or half-chapter) to writing about linking moves, come up with what "moves" are and how you use them, then incorporate that into your linking explanation.

2. Did you have to split up Sammi's day in town into five chapters or so? Besides, as a worker on a rescue team, she'd probably have to save somebody before the day ended!
 
I'm not planning on a whole chapter to linking moves, that will get a quick scene in a future chapter
 
Art_Critic_Cubone said:
--the serial and the movie
--How to link moves (Gulpin will be swapped for a new Pokemon...)

Dude... is the action ever going to start? I'm getting tired... no Pokemon in his/her right mind spends this long walking around the square.
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Well, she did go to the dojo. And besides, if you rush into a plotline to quick you'll have to keep going back and fixing things. I think it's a good idea to get a strong foundation for the base storyline before it gets to complex.
 
Hence why I'm taking it slow and having a filler with the movie trip.

BTW, if I were to have a new Pokemon replace Gulpin, who would it be? Or, should I just leave Gulpin in?
 
EmeraldSky said:
Hence why I'm taking it slow and having a filler with the movie trip.

BTW, if I were to have a new Pokemon replace Gulpin, who would it be? Or, should I just leave Gulpin in?
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Yup

Well... I think you should leave Gulpin in, but it should be an assistant to a Swalot. Partially because Swalot is evolved, so would know more. And then you wouldn't be sticking exactly to the original MD storyline
 
Well, she did go to the dojo. And besides, if you rush into a plotline to quick you'll have to keep going back and fixing things. I think it's a good idea to get a strong foundation for the base storyline before it gets to complex.
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Well, I was thinking of the way the chapters about town were broken up. The Dojo chapters should all be merged at the very least, and all previous chapters involving town interactions. If you know what you're going to do for action, you should start with it, and not waste too much time with fillers. Bleh.
 
File #9: Old Friends in a New World


When the Global Pokemon News segement ended, the screen faded to black for a moment, prompting me to nudge Lita. "What happens now?"

"I thig the sewia's commin up nux..." Lita replied through a mouthful of popcorn. She swallowed her bite, then repeated her answer again a little more clearly. "I think the serial's coming up next..."

"Sometimes they'll have a comic or musical short instead of a serial." Mizu added. I nodded and turned my attention back to the screen.

Just then, an adventurous fanfare began to play, prompting some applause as a male voice, one that sounded amazingly like Pewter's Gym Leader, Brock, announced "It's the Adventures of Misty and Friends!" Cheers went up as the title appeared on the screen, but I was even more surprised to learn that Misty also was mentioned in this world--only rather than being the Gym Leaders as they were back home, Brock and Misty were treated like movie stars!

I made a mental note that once I did make it back home, I would go on a Pokemon journey just to find out if Brock and Misty, or any of the Gym Leaders; had been to this world. If they did, then what kind of Pokemon were they turned into?

Mizu noted the shocked look on my face. "Sammi? Did the announcer surprise you?"

"Yeah...he sounds like someone back home." I explained. I decided to leave it at that--the concept of a "Gym Leader" would be foreign to my new friends, and I didn't really want to explain it to them at the moment--I was mesmerized by the scenes of Misty and her Pokemon flashing on the screen.

"Misty is an aspiring filmmaker that dreams of international fame and fortune." the announcer explained as a shot of Misty dreaming of receiving a trophy that looked like a projector appeared onscreen. "She travels the world, filming the wonderful, the exotic, and the strange!" The audience oohed and ahhed over the various locales before the announcer continued, "Accompanying her on these expeditions are her Pokemon companions...Togetic..." A Togetic appeared onscreen and waved to the audience. "Marill..." Mizu laughed a little at the Marill's goofy smile. "Seel..." A Seel appeared, excitedly clapping its fins. "and that ol' Psyduck!" The audience roared with laughter at Psyducks quizzical look.

"I understand Psyduck's the comic relief..." I whispered to Lita.

"Yes...he's my favorite character in the Misty serials." Lita replied before chomping on more popcorn.

"But these adventures are not without trials!" the announcer continued, causing the ground under Misty to give way. She hung on to the edge for a moment until a black haired boy in a black outfit and flowing cloak helped her out of the hole. "Thankfully, the handsome ninja known only as Fushigi is always there to rescue her!" Fushigi winked to the audience, looked Misty over to see if she was all right, then disappeared into the jungle as quickly as he had appeared. What interested me was how much Fushigi resembled Master Ash--all in build, hair color, and height. Did that mean His Masterness had been to this world too? Despite the sea of questions in my mind, I decided to chalk the similarites between Fushigi and Master Ash up to sheer coincidence for the time being. If Lita and Mizu asked me later, I would try to explain it to them as best as I could without confusing them.

"I wonder where Misty's going today?" Mizu whispered as the scene opened on an office, where Misty was typing something on a PC.

"Sammi...why were you looking at Fushigi all funny when he appeared?" Lita asked.

"He reminded me of someone speacial back home." I replied as I watched Misty chatter on the phone to her latest client--she was going to be filming a documentary about some old jungle ruins, it seemed. Lita nodded to show she understood and turned her attention back to the screen.

I nibbled on some popcorn as the screen showed a map of the world with a blue line snaking around it, presumably the route Misty was taking. Once she arrived at the town closest to her destination, she began to ask about the old ruins that she was to film. The first few people she asked weren't very much help, but one native's answer had something interesting: the ruins supposedly had treasure inside them! I assumed that they would probably had traps in them, and Fushigi would have to bail Misty out of a lot of them before the adventure was over.

After a while, the scene switch to the house of the client, a professor that looked a lot like Professor Birch back home. I once again chalked up any similarities to coincidence to avoid more questions from Lita and Mizu. Nonetheless--all these appearances of famous people that I knew from home led me to wonder if they had all been to this world at one time or another.

But I had no time to think about this, for my attention was snapped back to the screen by some cracking--Misty had arrived at the ruins and was about to start filming when she had walked a little too far out--making for a literal cliffhanger as the announcer asked all the mandatory end of part questions typical of a serial--Will Fushigi get there in time? (Yes) Will Misty be sent falling to her demise? (Probably not, since Fushigi will save her) Some applause filled the theater as "To Be Continued..." appeared on the screen. At the same time, I was a bit worried for Misty.

"You think Misty will be okay?" I asked Lita as the scene faded out.

"Of course! Fushigi will save her in the nick of time!" Lita replied. I smilled hopefully in anticipation of the main event: the movie.

END OF FILE
 
Okay... bizarre chapter. And Gulpin seems to be noticeably absent, Swalot-accompanied or otherwise. Ah well, I guess it was a bit much to expect for the chapter length you normally have? 0_o

Anyway, I'm a little weirded out- is this part of the plot? I did enjoy this little bit, however:

But I had no time to think about this, for my attention was snapped back to the screen by some cracking--Misty had arrived at the ruins and was about to start filming when she had walked a little too far out--making for a literal cliffhanger as the announcer asked all the mandatory end of part questions typical of a serial--Will Fushigi get there in time? (Yes) Will Misty be sent falling to her demise? (Probably not, since Fushigi will save her) Some applause filled the theater as "To Be Continued..." appeared on the screen. At the same time, I was a bit worried for Misty.
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You'll have to tell me where you got the name Fushigi from. Anyway, no better or worse then the rest of the fic. I'm still a little annoyed that from a narrative point of view nothing has happened. Your descriptions of the Pokemon World are good, but you're sacrificing plot in order to present it, to a large degree. When you add something good from a narrative standpoint, I'll be here. Waiting.
 
Part of the reason I'm semi-stalling with filler atm is thinking about the plot.

The reason why I included this was part of the odd dreams Sammi has from Gardevoir involve famous Pokemon personalities from her world (the Pokeworld as we know it), and I was trying to foreshadow that here.

But once I get the wrinkles in my plot plan ironed out, you'll be getting a lot of story.

and by the way, Fushigi is Japanese for mystery or mysterious
 
*slaps forehead* Of course! Fushigidane! How could I have missed that? *apologizes to Bulbasaur worldwide for forgetting their Japanese name*. I'm sorry. Well, talking about the plot is all well and good, but actions speak louder then words. As I've said, I'm enjoying this story more then I thought I would recently, what with all of the Disney references *hates Disney's corporate schemes and many movies of theirs like the bubonic plague*, but I can't stand the filler. For me, this is almost worse then Naruto filler- at least I know when that will end. >.<
 
I know you're annoyed by filler, but I should have some plot ready for the next installment. That's a promise.
 
I intend to make good on that promise...because I'll be introducing Thunderwave Cave.
 
Ah... now we're talkin'! Save them Magnemite! Thunderwave Cave was always my favorite dungeon... anyway, I'll be waiting. For a year. Or two. (Just kidding, don't you dare throw that *insertrandomthinghere* at me!)
 
File #10: Team Ruby, Away!



After a wonderful afternoon at the theater, we returned to our base for the night. Despite all my questions of how Master Ash and his friends could appear in this world, I just figured I would learn if they had indeed come here soon enough.

But the next morning, a blaring siren rang through the base; jarring Lita and me from sleep! My still groggy eyes struggled to focus despite the intermittent flashes of red and the noise. Lita, on the other hand, took the noise to mean some sort of an emergency. She had quickly jumped from her bed and was trying to drag me downstairs and outside, away from the supposed fire or chemical leak or whatever had caused the siren to go off.

No sooner had we gotten outside, did we see Mizu laughing hysterically as she pressed a large button with a speaker on it, disabling the siren and the lights. Lita sighed--she was not amused by Mizu's prank of waking us up in the wee hours of the morning--or so she thought.

I finally worked up the courage to ask her "What was THAT for?"

Mizu composed herself for a minute, then replied. "I only wanted to test a new alert system I made last night...and judging from you guys' reactions, it definitely works!"

"So that's what you were doing all last night..." Lita sighed. "You didn't have to make all that racket and wake us up, you know!"

"More importantly, why do we need an alert system?" I asked.

"Easy...if Nigel brings us a rescue notice, and one of us needs to alert the rest of the team, all we have to do is press the button, either this one here or the one at the end of the second floor hallway." Mizu explained.

"Oh, okay..." Lita was impressed.

"Although next time, can we give everyone a heads up before setting it off?" I asked with a yawn. "The noise surprised both Lita and me..." I was about to say more when I heard some fluttering off in the distance--Nigel was coming!

"Good morning!" Mizu smiled as Nigel landed atop our mailbox.

"Mornin' , Miss Mizu..." Nigel replied as he thumbed through the various letters in his sack, ultimately selecting one and offering it to Lita. "What was all that racket from your base earlier?"

"I made an alert system, and wanted to test it." Mizu explained as she waited to see if Nigel had anything else for us. "However, I woke Lita and Sammi by accident!"

"It needs a volume control..." I sighed as I rubbed the sleep from my eyes

"That's a good way to notify teammates...most teams around here have such an alarm." Nigel said as he prepared to fly off. "You three have a nice day!" With that, he took off, heading towards the next house or base on his route.

I waved goodbye as Nigel soared among the clouds, then noted the envelope in Lita's paws. "I wonder if that's a job offer?"

"Only one way to find out!" With that, Lita tore open the envelope and unfolded the paper inside. "Okay...it says:

Dear Team Ruby:

We have heard of your exploits thanks to Mrs. Ave and her sons Wings and Breeze. Wings was particularly thankful that you rescued him out in Tiny Woods several days ago.

We ask for your help in finding our brother Shock. A strange surge came through Thunderwave Cave last night, blew him off somewhere, and stuck us together. As you well know, two Magnemites don't make a Magneton; as that doesn't make sense! Please find Shock for us!

Sincerely,

The Magnemite Bros.

"Wow..." Mizu gasped. "This sounds serious..." I, meanwhile, was busy placing names and faces the letter had mentioned. Mrs. Ave was the Butterfree Lita and I had helped when I first arrived, and Wings was the Caterpie I had rescued...so they in turn had told these Magnemites that needed help. I figured that the more Pokemon we helped, the more likely they would tell others, and the more jobs we would get! Besides, wasn't the best way for a team to get fame word of mouth?

"Well, Sammi?" Lita's voice snapped me from my thoughts. "Should we go or not?"

"Yes!" I replied, before pausing. "Although...where IS Thunderwave Cave?"

"It's north of here, in the highlands." Mizu explained, pointing out a cave on a world map that she had marked with a star. "It's the cave I've starred."

"Come on!" Lita romped out to the end of the front walk, motioning for us to follow. "Team Ruby, away!" I fumbled for the X ray glasses Mizu had made for me and put them on before following Lita down the northern path. Mizu was behind me, with our toolbox tucked under one arm.

Together, we headed down the dusty path north until we came to a signpost that read "ELEMENTAL HIGHLANDS ->" Once sure we were heading the right way, Lita lead us through the winding, rocky trail until we came to one particular cave, where two Magnemites hovered by the entrance. Every now and then, one of them would nervously spark, as if waiting for someone or something to come out of the blackness.

I calmly approached the two Magnemites and flashed our Rescue Badge, which I had decorated with a ruby at the top. "Team Ruby, at your service!"

The Magnemite I had addressed turned to see us and smiled--or whatever it is that Magnemites do to smile. "Thank goodness you're here!" he cried, setting off some joyful sparks in the process. "I'm Coil, and this is Flicker." he explained, motioning for the other Magnemite to come closer.

"Pleased to meet you, Coil." I replied as I nudged my X-ray glasses to rest on top of my head. "I'm Sammi, and these are my comrades Lita.." Lita waved hello. "and Mizu." Mizu waved, then retrieved our toolbox, which she had set down on the ground when we arrived.

"Shock is lost somewhere in the cave." Flicker explained. "The last time I saw him, he was on the sixth basement..."

"The sixth basement..." I made a mental note of Shock's possible location, then put my X-ray glasses back on. "All right...we'll check there first!"

"Good luck!" Coil called after us as we disappeared into the cave...

TO BE CONTINUED....

::hopes it's enough to introduce some sort of plot...::
 
File #11: The Maze of Darkness (part 1)

Thunderwave Cave, B1


As we stepped inside Thunderwave Cave, we all noticed that it was dark...VERY dark. I was the only one with any means to see what was in the dark; but the X-ray glasses made everything look like tiny dots. There were some blue dots in various locations, but there were even more red dots moving everywhere around the floor. Our current position, I assumed, was notated by yellow dots, with the dot representing me flashing. There we some smaller blue blips in some rooms, but I didn't really know what those were.

"Goodness, it's dark in here!" Lita complained as she groped in the blackness. "I can't see anything!"

"And I can't make sense of my glasses." I added. We both glanced at Mizu for help.

Mizu strolled over to where I was standing and lightly touched a stick to my tail, making it ignite. After giving the torch to Lita, she stepped in front of me. Despite being a little unnerved at being able to also look inside Mizu's body, I listened as she explained. "The red dots are all wild Pokemon on this floor, and the blue dots are stuff we can pick up."

"Okay..." I stammered, motioning for Mizu to go on.

"The Pokemon we need to rescue will be notated like Lita and me--yellow dots." Mizu continued. "and the stairs to the next floor will look like a blue target"

"Got it!" I replied as I led my friends into the main chamber. The first thing I saw was an apple on the ground and various passages leading in all directions After looking the apple over and presuming it was fresh, I plopped it in the toolbox and started down a passage to the right. But before we could enter the next room, I felt a stinging sensation on my back. I whirled around and yelped with surprise when I saw a Rattata in our path--and it was not too happy to see us.

"Look out!" Lita called as the Rattata whipped its tail on my body, making me stumble backwards into Mizu. Lita, meanwhile, just hurled herself into the Rattata as a counterattack, knocking it unconscious.

"Nice tackle..." I groaned as I attempted to untangle myself from Mizu and brush myself off.

"Thanks...everyone does know how to Tackle as their basic move, but as we grow stronger, we'll gain new powers." Lita explained as we lined ourselves back up again to continue into the cave. Once we were all in line again, we were about to start on our way when I saw a flash of purple out of the corner of my eye. Without any warning, I suddenly found myself being thrown clear across the room as another Rattata began to claw at Lita and Mizu. While they were holding their own against the Rattata's small sharp teeth and pointy claws, the force of the sudden blow made me see double for a moment as I eased myself up again.

Lita saw me stumbling back and grabbed an Oran Berry from the toolbox. "Sammi, catch!" With that, she heaved the tiny blue berry in my direction.

I tried to run and catch the berry, but it bounced off my leg and cracked open at my feet, making its juice seep inside my body. Strangely enough, I felt stronger than before after absorbing it! It gave me enough strength to charge at an unsuspecting Poochyena that was coming to join the fight.

Once we had knocked out both Pokemon, I immediately grabbed the spoils: some coins.

"For a minute there, I thought you were a goner!" Mizu said as she ran to help Lita collect the coins.

"I thought I'd lost the Berry untill I somehow absorbed its juice!" I replied as we all lined up and started down the passage again. We arrived in another large and open room, but what got my attention was a set of tiny rocky steps in the very top left corner of the room leading downwards. I motioned for my friends to follow as I started to climb downwards...

Thunderwave Cave, B2

We arrived in another open room with three exits; but what interested me was a small seed with a flame pattern lying on the ground by one of the south exits. "What's that?"

Mizu brought the seed over and studied the flame pattern on its husk. "This is a Blast Seed...eat it to shoot a small fireball."

"Cool." I replied as Mizu tucked the Blast Seed in the toolbox. "I want to try that!' With that, I almost dragged Lita and Mizu to one of the south exits, then took a right in the next room, until I noted a Poochyena snoozing not far from where we had finally entered.

"Here's your chance, Sammi." Mizu whispered as she handed the Blast Seed to me.

I carefully cracked open the seed and popped it into my mouth. It tasted a little like a peanut at first, but I was not prepared for the sudden rush of heat that welled up inside my mouth! In desperation, I unleashed the blast at the Poochyena, knocking him out.

"You okay?" Lita asked as I coughed and sputtered a bit from the hot surprise.

"I had no idea it was going to do that!" I protested as I drew some water from a nearby puddle and drank it. The drink instantly soothed my still burning mouth.

"You get used to it the more times you eat Blast Seeds." Mizu assured me as we continued on our way into a room with a single north exit. After grabbing an Apple that lay nearby, I saw a familiar form approaching: a Rattata!

"CHU!!!" Lita growled, surprising the Rattata as it entered, buying me time to scratch it in the belly. As it fell unconscious, I grabbed the Blast Seed it had dropped and deposited it in the toolbox. I also saw Lita glowing yellow for a few seconds--what was happening to her?

Finally, she ran back to join us. "Yeah! I learned a new power!"

"Really?" I was impressed.

"Yes...I felt the power named Paralysis Wave awaken within me...that explains why I was glowing." Lita explained. "When you'll learn a new power, you'll glow too!

I thought back to when I had encountered Team Kage a few days before...was the Glowing Ember I had used one of my innate powers or a new power about to awaken? I pondered this as we headed down the stairs in the next room...

To Be Continued...
 
Remember how I jazzed "Ember to "Glowing Ember" earlier? Same idea with Thunder Wave -> Paralysis Wave

I was writing this based on what I had recorded in my own game.

As for the dungeons, I'm going to write in 2-3 floors at a time usually.
 
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