the story of pokemon mystery dungeon

[q2r5o900]

introduction the start of a human turned into a pokemon.
One day there was a boy sleeping in his bed and he was transported into pokemon world and was sleeping on the nice,green grass.But something had changed about him he was a pokemon the pokemon starly!He woke up and found someone standing next to him it was the pokemon turtwig.
turtwig:wake up come on wake up.
starly began to awake and he saw is wings and saw a talking turtwig.
starly:hey pokemon can't talk.
turtwig:yes we can and you look just like a starly.
starly:wha argh......what's happneed.

To Be Continued

 

[The Classic Pokemon Trainer]

Wow, this is quiet short. I think the only thing that is wrong to this story is that you have to put a space in between the paragraph and the dialogue, and make it longer next time.

 

[q2r5o900]

okay i will sorry any more comments

 

[Astinus]

Holy simoly. This is...not good. It's way too short, has a lot of basic grammar problems. Seriously, look at other stories around here, especially those written for the Fanfiction Challenge. Read the stickied guides in the Lounge. Learn the rules of grammar. And don't write a script fic, which is against the rules, which tells me that you really didn't read the rules. Do so.