Alright here's all the problems I found with your hack:
There's a little issue here:
There should be a comma after "Oh" if my grammar's right:
These are all the times that you didn't capitalize "I":
A minor error here (just change the text to something like "The TV is off.":
Another minor one:
I don't know if you want to fix this but you've made Elm a Psychic :P:
No script:
The next one may be confusing depending on how I explain it so sorry if you don't get it. So basically when you come into this room:
(You should have made him say "Who are you?" not "How are you?" btw)
You can avoid getting a Pokeball by walking around him and going out and because of that, in the next room I was able to do this:
When you trigger the script from either the left or right side of him, he doesn't face the trainer:
"Th
ey are right behind me!"
"I'm good friends
with Harold."
"Pokemon" needs to be in caps:
I got a Pokemon, but the ball didn't disappear:
Also I wanted to see what'd happen if you died and well here:
"Why
were you on that island..."