Shouldn't it be Prof. Marsh?
Two things here. 1) What's Kevin doing down there? 2) the guy by the cut tree isn't there
This is where he should be...
There he is!
Should be "eh?"
Yeah, the number three always bugged me too.
Fragment
Unnecessary comma (I saw a lot of these)
Should be "phenomenal"
Should be "...up to you
to nuture..."
'S' needs to be de-capitalized
I noticed that you switch between "PokéBalls" and "Pokéballs". Consistency!
When did Oak get here? (to spare you, I didn't take a screenshot of every menu in which he speaks)
Do you really expect me to read that?
There he is again!
She talks pretty informally for an elderly person
Wait, now he's not there?
How can he see that if he's facing the wall?
I forgot why I took this one but I think it had something to with the jingle that plays. If my memory serves me, I believe that the jingle plays after the text box has already disappeared.
Catch me up on what?
The mom's healing script doesn't play the jingle. :(
Again, the text doesn't match the person
I think the words "research" and "laboratory" should be capitalized.
Okay, this is okay if I activate the script from this tile but...
...here, not so much
Hm, this sounds familiar...
That's an awfully dark name for a first route, don't you think?
What is it with this guy and not facing the people he's talking to?
And he
still won't tell me what he's going to catch me up on!
Fragment
I think you were trying to make the person's speech seem natural but it doesn't work in the video game medium very well
Unnecessary comma
"There
have been..."
When was the last time you heard someone say, "I live in the bottom right hand corner of New York"? Try to stick with NSEW
From my experiences, flowers don't reflect images
..... go on...
Should be "iTouch" :D
Well while you're busy talking to the Bug Catcher, I'll just go down this route here...
Should have two 't's .... but yeah, he's right
Try ["] in XSE for the opening quotation mark
Should be "isn't"
Typo
Unnecessary comma. There were so many of these that you might consider going through all your script again and searching for them
I forget what happened here but I'd be willing to bet it was that troublesome jingle again
Two tile errors with the mountain, one where the coast meets the mountain and the other where the path edge meets the mountain. But I like the way you put the coast on the bottom layer of the mountain-over-sea blocks. Nice touch
More unnecessary commas...