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Old May 7th, 2009 (2:19 PM). Edited May 7th, 2009 by Feathing.
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    Well, here it goes the third one of my english poems. Actually, this was the first I wrote in english, and you don't have to be the smartest to see its written to a girl... Please comment and give me your opinions!





    Blue… Green…
    Seas… Oceans…
    Forests… An evergreen land…

    A labyrinth of joyful and youth.
    A starried nigth´s dream…
    A long journey, a big journey
    through the shiniest sun and
    through the rainy darkness
    of night.

    With the radiant song of the birds,
    with the magical colours of spring.
    It´s an eternal peace,
    it´s an endlessness love…

    Blue… Green…

    Drifting through your eyes...
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      Well, here it goes the third one of my english poems. Actually, this was the first I wrote in english, and you don't have to be the smartest to see its written to a girl... Please comment and give me your opinions!





      Blue… Green…
      Seas… Oceans…
      Forests… An evergreen land…

      A labyrinth of joyful and youth.
      A starried nigth´s dream…
      A long journey, a big journey
      through the shiniest sun and
      through the rainy darkness
      of nigth.

      With the radiant song of the birds,
      with the magical colours of spring.
      It´s an eternal peace,
      it´s an endlessness love…

      Blue… Green…

      Drifting through your eyes...
      mmk id like to start off by saying that i LOVE this poem...it is very beautiful and i dont care what anyone else says i give it an A+!

      second it has many spelling a maybe a few grammar errors. such as you wrote nigth when it is actually spelled "night"....a few other errors but ill let someone who enjoys finding errors and pointing them out more than i do...

      I know its a little harder for you because you are writing these poems in a language different than your native one so I completely understand these few mistakes...
      But like I said I love this poem...keep writing my friend!!!:D
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      Old May 7th, 2009 (2:47 PM).
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        mmk id like to start off by saying that i LOVE this poem...it is very beautiful and i dont care what anyone else says i give it an A+!

        second it has many spelling a maybe a few grammar errors. such as you wrote nigth when it is actually spelled "night"....a few other errors but ill let someone who enjoys finding errors and pointing them out more than i do...

        I know its a little harder for you because you are writing these poems in a language different than your native one so I completely understand these few mistakes...
        But like I said I love this poem...keep writing my friend!!!:D
        Thanks a lot!! I'm glad u liked it. I know it has so minor spelling errors... Night/Nigth just drives me crazy all the time XD But as you said, I'll expect someone who enjoys finding mistakes to point them all out XD

        Thanks a lot!!!
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        Old May 7th, 2009 (5:28 PM).
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          Thanks a lot!! I'm glad u liked it. I know it has so minor spelling errors... Night/Nigth just drives me crazy all the time XD But as you said, I'll expect someone who enjoys finding mistakes to point them all out XD

          Thanks a lot!!!
          of course.....you know that person will be around eventually....they always come..>.<

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          I think its really good. I like poems which are not just about someone somebody is in love with.
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