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[Retro Bug]

First person is weird after doing second person for so long. Gaah I think I did a bit better with the tenses.

 

[moon]

First person can be easier to do if you write in past tense :3 Like Vinnie's and Candice's last posts. At least I think so. But present first person makes for the most alive feeling to the text, I imagine. *goes to read*

 

[Retro Bug]

Yeah I kept slipping into past tense but I thought it might sound better in present. Maybe I'll change it to past.

EDIT: Fff. I'm pretty sure I slipped into future tense. I wasn't even thinking about future tense. Great.

 

[Otherworld9)]

And so did Evan! I like it :3 just know that you are still allowed to write in another format if you want to.

Hahaha Vinnie destroying Candice's bathroom... I get an urge to play Tulio Greyson (her father) for a little reaction now.

Otherworld, did you have a plan for where he went? Now when he's not in his room.

Awesome~ Can't wait to see the reaction then.
Well, knowing her dad, I imagined him going to the bathroom, tbh... xD Then when she disappeared into her room, he wondered where his steel bat was...

I'm not even sure if I'm writing in past or present tense...I managed to avoid future tense though.

 

[Lt. Col. Fantastic]

I tried to keep things in past tense, but this is honestly my first writing in first person (a first for firsts)

Man, do you guys ever have that weird feeling that a word is weirder than other words when you say that word over and over? Like right now I'm contemplating on whether first or weird is the weirdest word, ya know? Gaaah! I'm so freaking weird. Weird...weird...yup. Thats definately weirder than the word first...but the word word is pretty weird too...like....world..but word. Ya know?

RAGE.

(Fujin and Rajin nod)

I'm sorry, I'm off the meds right now. Word...word...weird....first.....word...

 

[moon]

Future tense? Haha, wow :D

@ Otherworld - Oops... haha, well, he could have returned to his room just before Vinnie massacred the bathroom.

@ Lt. Col. - XD I know exactly what you mean, I hate when that happens! You can't use a certain word for a while because it feels sooo weird. We have a term for that here in Sweden: "non-word". When you say a word too much so that it becomes a non-word.


EDIT: While I think it's a good and fun thing that we explore different tenses and views of writing from in this RP, things are getting a bit too confusing now ^^' It's nice if the posts are smooth enough to read. Re-read your post when you've finished writing it, before you post it, to spot any weird changes in tenses and correct them. Thank you :3

 

[Otherworld9)]

I tried to keep things in past tense, but this is honestly my first writing in first person (a first for firsts)

Man, do you guys ever have that weird feeling that a word is weirder than other words when you say that word over and over? Like right now I'm contemplating on whether first or weird is the weirdest word, ya know? Gaaah! I'm so freaking weird. Weird...weird...yup. Thats definately weirder than the word first...but the word word is pretty weird too...like....world..but word. Ya know?

RAGE.

(Fujin and Rajin nod)

I'm sorry, I'm off the meds right now. Word...word...weird....first.....word...

I always have that happen to me. When ever I type out a word so much, or even say it often, it sounds...weird. It happens a lot with "However" and "because." xD Even the word "word" sounds weird...

Future tense? Haha, wow :D

@ Otherworld - Oops... haha, well, he could have returned to his room just before Vinnie massacred the bathroom.

@ Lt. Col. - XD I know exactly what you mean, I hate when that happens! You can't use a certain word for a while because it feels sooo weird. We have a term for that here in Sweden: "non-word". When you say a word too much so that it becomes a non-word.


EDIT: While I think it's a good and fun thing that we explore different tenses and views of writing from in this RP, things are getting a bit too confusing now ^^' It's nice if the posts are smooth enough to read. Re-read your post when you've finished writing it, before you post it, to spot any weird changes in tenses and correct them. Thank you :3

Yeah, I figured as much. xD

As for the tenses...I hope I did okay. I reread it and corrected a few errors here and there. I type out the first-type narratives the way the character would think them as. Maybe I should tone it down and leave out a few details.

First person is quite fun to write, but sometimes I go too far and include useless details, especially with mental conflicts.

 

[Lt. Col. Fantastic]

HUZZAH!

I've finally made it to act two of Homestuck. Its so addicting.

 

[drunk ¬_¬]

HUZZAH!

I've finally made it to act two of Homestuck. Its so addicting.

…

On other news, I've officially joined the first person revolution. I guess it wasn't as bad as I somehow expected it to be, but I did sort of enjoy second person more… I think?

I don't know, let me know what you think. If you really prefer first person I guess I could just stick with it. /shrugs

 

[moon]

Yeah, I figured as much. xD

As for the tenses...I hope I did okay. I reread it and corrected a few errors here and there. I type out the first-type narratives the way the character would think them as. Maybe I should tone it down and leave out a few details.

First person is quite fun to write, but sometimes I go too far and include useless details, especially with mental conflicts.

Nah, I like your details! And I'm starting to get used to the tense flips so don't worry about it anymore ^^ We really get to feel what Candice is feeling.

HUZZAH!

I've finally made it to act two of Homestuck. Its so addicting.

GOOD BOY.

^

…

On other news, I've officially joined the first person revolution. I guess it wasn't as bad as I somehow expected it to be, but I [i]did[/i] sort of enjoy second person more… I think?

I don't know, let me know what you think. If you really prefer first person I guess I could just stick with it. /shrugs[/QUOTE]
This is the only part that happened to be in past tense:

[I]I went ahead and searched for her around the house but somehow I couldn't find her until I saw her coming out from a shed…[/I]

Other than that, awesome :3[/FONT][/FONT]

 

[Otherworld9)]

HUZZAH!

I've finally made it to act two of Homestuck. Its so addicting.

Act 1 was good around the end. Act 2 is very good, not gonna lie. =P

I would use a gif, but drunk beat me to it. xD

…

On other news, I've officially joined the first person revolution. I guess it wasn't as bad as I somehow expected it to be, but I did sort of enjoy second person more… I think?

I don't know, let me know what you think. If you really prefer first person I guess I could just stick with it. /shrugs

Yeah, took a while to get used to it myself.

I liked it :3 You are way better at it than I am, I can tell you that much. xD

Nah, I like your details! And I'm starting to get used to the tense flips so don't worry about it anymore ^^ We really get to feel what Candice is feeling.

Oh thanks. Hopefully I get better and improve through out the RP. :)

 

[moon]

@ drunk - you're allowed to write in second person if you want! I kind of liked your style of doing that. So it's up to you :3


UNIPORTANT EDIIITT: Okay xD I'll decide for you. You'll notice at some point in the story what role you have.



AND NOW. Here comes a MASSIVE explanation of the Roles I have in mind for Checkmate. Differences between this and Homestuck are abundant. Don't bother complaining xD So sit down with a cup of coffee or soda and a piece of snacks and read through this.

NOTE: An aspect does not have to be your main weapon - actually it most often isn't. You still battle with your Strife Specibus weapon!


ROLE = "CLASS" of "ASPECT".
The class points at how you should use your powers and the aspect is the nature of your powers. Note that it will take some time before you learn to use this stuff :p


ASPECTS:

Spoiler:

BREATH. A very purely elemental aspect as it allows the Hero to control air and wind - breath. Fraymotifs might allow for many different things to be done with this power.

LUCK. What it says. Depending on your class, you will be able to do things related to luck.

TIME. Slow, speed up or stop time, either for yourself or for others. Time travels (back in time, not into the future) might be possible under very certain circumstances. Depending on your class, you will likely use this aspect differently in different situations.

SPACE. Alter the size of objects and yourself, use telekinesis and even teleportation under special circumstances. Depending on your class, you will likely use this aspect differently in different situations.

MIND. Read or affect minds to some extent and alter or erase memories under special circumstances. There can probably be many creative ways to use this aspect.

LIFE. Heal yourself or others, either physically or mentally or even in other ways... depending on your class, this aspect can utter itself in varying ways but is has to do with light and the sheer force of life.

VOID. Become invisible or become visible when no one else is... This aspect is complicated but has to do with the concept of "nothingness". Depending on your class, it can be used very differently.

HOPE. Maybe easy to understand and a bit alike Luck, but more on the emotional and subjective side rather than Luck's objective and literal side. Depends heavily on your class.

BLOOD. Has to do with the powers of friendship, loneliness and conflicting feelings in general. Heroes with this aspect have a strong affinity for and power over forming or breaking bonds between themselves-others and even others-others, depending on their class.

RAGE. A very useful aspect for offensive classes but a bit trickier for defensive ones. Depending on the class, this aspect can either kick in to help the Hero, or the Hero can be protected from other's rage or even other ways.

DOOM. Has to do with impending death or misery and can either be used to power up a fighter to bring Doom upon their enemies, or to even protect others from impending Doom.

CLASSES:

Spoiler:

"It's hard. Being a kid and growing up. It's hard and nobody understands..."
What do you need to grow up to be? Pick a class whose description you think fits Genevieve / Vinnie / Ricardo / Candice.


HEIR. These are often naive but independent people who need to learn how to communicate and work together with others more. Their aspect seems to protect them, sometimes unconsciously. Depending on the aspect, this "protection" is often turned back against the enemies sometimes.

MAID(f) / MONK(m). These are often nervous and worrying people who need to learn that with a strong heart it is possible to protect and care for others without worrying. Their aspect seems to be used intuitively and unpredictably, almost as if the Maid or Serf was literally made of the aspect.

PRINCE(m) / BRIDE(f). These people are often narcissistic and self-loving and need to learn how to share their talents with others and love others instead of being so full of themselves. Their aspect is used in a very destructive way as these are the most offensive classes.

THIEF. These are often people who try to please others too much and need to learn how to do depend on themselves and dare to do things for themselves to get stronger. They use their aspect in a stealthily offensive way and depending on the aspect they can "steal" that kind of power from enemies to power up themselves.

ROGUE. These are often private and selfish people who need to learn how to use their strengths to benefit and help others rather than themselves. They use their aspect in a stealthily defensive way and depending on their aspect they can "steal" that kind of power from enemies to power up their allies.

MAGE(m) / WITCH(f). These are often people who doubt their own worth and might be depressed. They need to learn to use their own skills to shine and stay optimistic no matter what happens. Their aspect is most often used in a stylish and brilliant way, as to show off as much as possible to strengthen the Mage's/Witch's own confidence.

KNIGHT(m) / SYLPH(f). These people can be very different but have in common that in order to grow as a person, they need to learn how to take off the mask they put on in front of others and learn to trust their friends. Their aspect is used to protect themselves and their dear ones and they are likely to make unselfish sacrifices for the greater good.

BARD(m) / MUSE(f). These are often people who enjoy life as it is but need to learn how to motivate and inspire others and make them find joy in the life they presently have as well. They use their aspect to power up and assist others but when they fight alone, their aspect is the thing that motivates and cheers them on, almost as if the aspect itself was a companion.

Before we go any further, I should explain that a FRAYMOTIF = battle technique. It can be found or bought around the... the SBURB world. Think of them as MOVES in Pokémon :D

And GOD-TIER is when you have reached the highest level possible for mortals and are able to ascend and become a god-like being with much greater control over your aspect. Also, gods can fly :3

 

[drunk ¬_¬]

@ Red: No Seer of Space?… :(

Honestly, I'd rather just have you surprise me! :D
I feel like it'll be more fun for me like that anyways!

Also, I've been coming up with some planets of my own (I've considered writing a fan-fic xD), let me know what you think, and if you're down you should totally use any of these too!:

Spoiler:

• LORAS - Land of Rocks and Sulfur (decaying planet with sulfur-spewing geysers and no vegetation… this one's probably my favorite so far :pirate:)
• LOSAI - Land of Storms and Islands (pretty self explanatory, inhabitants could be crocodile pirates or something :D)
• LOAAC - Land of Amethysts and Caves (plain planet with a vast network of underground tunnels and light-emitting purple amethysts)
• LOSAF - Land of Snakes and Frogs (saved for Hero of Space (you know why), this is basically a swamp full of frogs and snakes that eat the frogs… making the hero's mission slightly more… difficult)
• LOBAL - Land of Blood and Locusts (inspired by the Bible's famous passage about the great famines, the sea is blood, the land is covered by locust carcasses, and travelling clouds of locusts attack anything in their path)
  
  …I have other ideas, but I don't like those as much I guess…

Also,
@Retro: I feel like you should go ahead and post before me… I don't know if there's much for Ricardo to do at this point anyways…

 

[Otherworld9)]

I actually like how you explained each one and managed to come up with all of this! =P Although I'll have to go with drunk and say that you should probably give us the titles. Surprise us~
That would make it very fun and exciting!

@drunk - I actually like your planet ideas <3 I could say I like the sound of the Land of Amethysts and Caves. Also like the Land of Rocks and Sulfur. I wish I could make a fan fic, but I'm more of a comic drawer. I lose motivation too easily with writing. ^^;

 

[drunk ¬_¬]

@drunk - I actually like your planet ideas <3 I could say I like the sound of the Land of Amethysts and Caves. Also like the Land of Rocks and Sulfur. I wish I could make a fan fic, but I'm more of a comic drawer. I lose motivation too easily with writing. ^^;

Ha ha! Me too! xP

When I said I've considered it, I meant I've literally only gave the idea a minuscule amount of thought as I shower/watch the olympics… :P

 

[Retro Bug]

Alright, well I'll start writing my post then. Should be up sometime soon-ish.

 

[moon]

I was never going to have a seer because that class involves knowing stuff that only I could know, I think.

I'll delete the details and choose for you then :3
But yeah, planets and roles are really fun to play around with.

I might be busy these next days but I'll read the IC as soon as I can.

Also, Otherworld can draw? Do you think you can draw all four characters from Checkmate? :D

 

[Otherworld9)]

I was never going to have a seer because that class involves knowing stuff that only I could know, I think.

I'll delete the details and choose for you then :3
But yeah, planets and roles are really fun to play around with.

I might be busy these next days but I'll read the IC as soon as I can.

Also, Otherworld can draw? Do you think you can draw all four characters from Checkmate? :D

Seer does involve knowing the outcome, so I guess it does. D: Not sure if it's that exactly or more...

Well, sure. I can try to draw all four, but all I can do is draw cartoons. I'll see if I can draw them by the end of the day. :3 Got no scanner of any sort, so it's going to be taken from an awful photo pic xD

 

[moon]

Cool! I'm trying again to give you roles now xD It's so damn difficult but I'm trying to look at how you've played the characters as well as on your SUs... since a character often evolves after the RP has started and won't necessarily act completely as their SU says.


EDIT: Theeere. I think I've given you classes and aspects now ;D I hope you'll like them. It was tough between some choices but I tried to balance the selfish/unselfish classes and choose interesting yet not too weird aspects. In total, I'm happy with how it turned out. Eventually you'll find out ;)


unimportant edit: omfg Hussie updated with End of Act 6 Act 3. mind. blown. or rather = what did I just watch?


And sorry that I haven't posted in the IC yet :( I'm writing the post, it's just that I don't have much time so I have to split it up. Soon the famous kernelsprite and IMPENDING DOOM will appear!

 

[drunk ¬_¬]

unimportant edit: omfg Hussie updated with End of Act 6 Act 3. mind. blown. or rather = what did I just watch?

I loved it! :3
It was simply beautiful… in a gory, Saw parody kind of way…

And sorry that I haven't posted in the IC yet :( I'm writing the post, it's just that I don't have much time so I have to split it up. Soon the famous kernelsprite and IMPENDING DOOM will appear![/FONT]

Oh god I can't wait! :knockedou