[Other Original] Bard's Short Story Selection

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    The fuck did I just read? Lol no, I understood most of those sentences. "If you throw glass stones in glass houses, what breaks?" & "I don't give up, I gave up on giving up." I liked, "I spout psychological nonsense because no one I know knows." & "I'm not digging my own grave, I'm digging towards China." I found kind of funny. "I spout psychological nonsense because no one I know knows." yeah I got lost, im kinda slow
     
    Holy cow, I just stumbled upon this, and I think I'm in love.
    Seriously though, I think I might try something like this on my own! These are really funny!
     
    I am so slow oh my god I didn't realize the ten-word sentences formed a story xD Though the first three lines did throw me off since they weren't about the bread story. I chuckled at the first one; love a good self-roast.

    Burnt Out Brains edition was very cyberpunk. And it's scary because I know that mocks our current reality. To be able to weave in humour while suggesting grim undertones... I like it. More than the next story, I feel. :3
     
    While I like what you're doing overall, doesn't serializing them defeat the whole exercise? The form changes from really short stories to a longer story in which all sentences are ten words. I like the overall picture that it paints, but I can't say I enjoy the sentences too much as stand-alone pieces.
     
    Hmm... I'm a bit iffy to comment on the haikus because it seems you focused more on the technical form (5-7-5 syllables, and using 10 words on top of that), rather than juxtaposition of images or what is called "cutting" -- the essence of a haiku.

    I like
    "I'm understanding
    That everything I have learned
    Is only nothing."

    Though like I said, I can't really consider them to be haikus, more of ten word sentences with line breaks.
     
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