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COMMENTS
Rolling Pichu
Finito! We are sorry for the delay, but we humble judges are finally done with all the jazz concerning the revision of your poems, and have of course determined the winners, too! I want to thank all of you for joining and participating, for it contributed to have a contest that turned to be more successful than we expected. I will once assure you there was no bias and you can feel safe about your score. If you're not comfortable with it, you may express any inquiries here. Poems were judged following Niko's verse analysis & judging format. Thanks, Niko!
oni_flygon
Poems are judged on four categories, Content, Structure/Syntax, Diction, and Rhythm, in a scale of 1-10. Added bonus for any other extravagant stuff.
Each judge has his/her own bias or an interpretation of poetry. That's why we have three judges. Now aren't you happy?
Winners for me:
Shaun0505 – 88.5%
KnewsBought – 86%
blackhaert – 83.2%
Honorable mentions:
Yesterday
Green ribbon of participation:
EmeraldSky, Art Critic Cubone, CodyJ, KraftyQuill
RESULTS
oni_flygon
Content: Very original and I like the change of subject; pretty funny, too. 9
Structure/Syntax: Very simplistic structure, with two four line stanzas followed by a little refrain. It's very easy to read, very safe, although not dynamic enough, nor is the structure really surprising afterwards. 8
Diction: Great descriptions and well played word choice. Speaker is greatly conveyed through your word choice. 10
Rhythm: Rhythm is balanced, and safe. There's nothing too amazing here. 7
Bonus: Alliteration, metaphors, etc, etc. +1%
Score: 86%
Rolling Pichu
Content: A bit explicit, but I loved the humor applied to this piece, and especially the conceptual form. 9
Structure/Syntax: Fairly good, and ordinary. The relation of subjects is passable. 8
Diction: It doesn't seem consistent. Maybe a bit too processed? Some words seem to be slightly out of context, could be replaced, etc. 8
Rhythm: It's pretty good, flows quite nicely. However, it's not perfect. Good job, though. 9
Bonus: Rhythmic and conceptualistic: +0.5%
Score: 90%
lily
Content: I liked this one! Refreshing, unique, original—plus, an interesting insight on something I normally wouldn't expect a poem to be on. Really. It's my first time reading a poem about …subs. =] 10
Structure/Syntax: Nothing really to comment on. Easy to read, and reminds me of a lyric's structure. 9
Diction: Sometimes the words seemed a bit too expressive and conveyed excessive articulation. Made it look very polished, but I stumbled through a line or two. Otherwise, very eloquent and shows a good taste (no…pun...intended? huh? Whut? lol. =0) for words. 8
Rhythm: It's okay, pretty steady and even. 8
Bonus: Originality~ +0.7
Score: 89.25%
oni_flygon
EmeraldSky – "Maybe We Really Do"
Content: Eh… it's an okay content, although it doesn't woo me too much. 5
Structure/Syntax: Structure meanders, from wide ended sentences to short ones. Really confusing if you read it out loud, and very awkward, too. 4
Diction: Some descriptions, although the overall simplicity overshadows what little you have. 4
Rhythm: There almost is none. 3
Bonus: Rhymes, although the rhyme scheme is unstructured. +0.2%
Score: 40.2%
Rolling Pichu
Content: I liked the consistence; it certainly is more natural than others. Not too surprising, nor dynamic. It's a bit pale. 8
Structure/Syntax: Not quite there, it's confusing at times, and there's no metric. 6
Diction: Fairly good, but then again, nothing surprising. It's certainly looks more simple and natural, but it's still rather boring. 7
Rhythm: It's sloppy, watch the metric. It makes the dull content flow even more roughly. 5
Bonus: Natural and original: +0.3%
Score: 68%
lily
Content: I like the enthusiasm. :D The content, though, doesn't seem to stray from the norm, making it tedious. It's okay, but it's not an overly fascinating one. 7
Structure/Syntax: I…didn't see a concrete structure. A bit, but not much. Confusing and hard to read, but I see attempts. 7
Diction: Fairly bland, could've been improved, but they seem to say what they want to say. 7
Rhythm: Lack of consistence. There are some out of place lines and although the rhyme scheme tried to string them together, it was still difficult to make sense of. 4
Bonus: Enthusiasm~ +0.5
Score: 63.75%
oni_flygon
Content: Unique content, albeit confusing, but that's what you're trying to convey, isn't it? I'm just wondering if the madness concept isn't overdone yet. 8
Structure/Syntax: Haiku structure, although multiplied by many times. Stick to what a haiku really is. 6
Diction: Simplistic, befitting for each "character." 7
Rhythm: Haiku Rhythm. 7
Bonus: Unique concept in contrast to other contestants, although it was too lengthy. Haikus were meant to be short and brief, and not making a lot to form one narrative poem. But that's just me. +0.5%
Score: 75%
Rolling Pichu
Content: Originality! I liked the theme and imagery. The length didn't contribute, however. 8
Structure/Syntax: The length didn't help building a single concept. 7
Diction: Pretty good, the balance and choice of words is adroit. 8
Rhythm: In the poem as a whole, it's acceptable. As a side note, though it didn't affect your score, individually the haikus didn't seem consistent nor contributed with rhythm. 8
Bonus: Diction, originality; it's a fun read. +0.5%
Score: 82.5%
lily
Content: In-ter-es-ting. I like the concept and originality, but the excessive amount of haikus fluctuated from irrelevance to relevance. Something an insane man wrote? Perhaps, but it was still confusing. =P Still, it was enjoyable to read. 8
Structure/Syntax: Haikus, haikus, haikus. 575, 575, 575, 575, 575… 8
Diction: First one was splendid. Then it started mixing in informal language. Still, pretty good. 8
Rhythm: Erm, well it was basically a bunch of haikus. 8
Bonus: Originality, amusement~ +0.8
Score: 82%
oni_flygon
Content: The usual reminiscent ones. 8
Structure/Syntax: Structure is unique, but it works, especially for rhythm. Reminds me a lot of e.e. cummings 8
Diction: Pretty decent, but done to an effect. 9
Rhythm: It shines. I'm a sucker for these kinds of poems. The breaks, the hesitations, the little quirks in it… it just makes me giddy. 10
Bonus: I like the rhythm and structure too much. +1%
Score: 88.5%
Rolling Pichu
Content: Enigmatic, metaphoric & sharp. I really liked it! 9
Structure/Syntax: It puzzled me, but I guess it's not a biting fault. 8
Diction: Adequate, but infrequent. 8
Rhythm: It's there, but didn't make a consistent work. Sometimes it's admirable, sometimes it loses me. 8
Bonus: Metaphors. +1%
Score: 92.5%
lily
Content: My first impression was blandness, then it got really interesting later…9
Structure/Syntax: Loose, free, sort of reminded me of time slipping by. In that way can I mark this a 9
Diction: Normal. Sufficient as to fulfill the meaning. 8
Rhythm: So whooshy~ Like, stop and go, stop and go, and you never know what's next. I like the free nature of it. n.n 9
Bonus: Ambiguity~ +0.5
Score: 88.75%
oni_flygon
Content: I find it meaningful, especially for a guy like me, who really misses childhood. 8
Structure/Syntax: Very conservative structure, with little repetitions and such. It moves along. 8
Diction: Great diction, greatly portrayed in every paragraph. 8
Rhythm: It's okay and decent at best. Nothing to be surprised about here. 8
Bonus: Really great, solid, and decent poem, although that's all I can say about it. I'll throw in a point for vivid imagery. +0.3%
Score: 80.3%
Rolling Pichu
Content: I like it, it's eloquent and worthwhile. I can relate to it. 9
Structure/Syntax: Unusual due to the length of stanzas, and ideas are ambiguous. 7
Diction: Nothing breathtaking here, but I guess it's all right. 8
Rhythm: The first stanza was excellent, but then it started to sound clumsy. Overall it's properly measured, though. 8
Bonus: Meaning, purpose, consistence: +0.4%
Score: 84%
lily
Content: Aw…that was sentimental and sweet. I liked it, and the repetition really reinforced the loneliness. Like, every time I read the beginning of the stanzas, it just….yeah. Sniff. ;; 9
Structure/Syntax: Consistent with little quirks and repetition. I liked the repetition. 8
Diction: It's okay. Got a bit old after a bit, but managed to revive near the end. 8
Rhythm: Very solid, thorough…has its messy moments, but overall, pretty good. 8
Bonus: Sentimentalism, repetition~ 0.8 Bwa!
Score: 84.5%
oni_flygon
Content: I don't like these because if I say it's morbid, I get bashed on, but you shouldn't have put what it's about in the end. You could've made me look like a total jerk and keep the air of mystery in your poem, but now it's all revealed. 7
Structure/Syntax: Structure is fine and it's safe because of the rhythm.8
Diction: Neat little descriptions. Words help along with rhythm. 8
Rhythm: The poem shines here. Great rhythm, and don't know if you did this on purpose or not, but you pretty much made your words sound like what they were describing. Go ahead, read it out loud. 10
Bonus: Lots of little descriptions, making a picture and creating a very unique atmosphere. Morbid, true, but the atmosphere makes it a "good" morbid poem. +0.7%
Score: 83.2%
Rolling Pichu
Content: I relate to your inspiration, and the purpose. However, there's no thunderbolt here, it's rather colorless. It could have been more mysterious. 7
Structure/Syntax: Works good, it's certain and it helps the poem flow well. 9
Diction: Great. It's considerate, and it works with the rhythm. 9
Rhythm: Excellent. It's maybe the best aspect of the poem. It works amazingly well with the structure, and it makes it easy to read. 10
Bonus: Great rhythm & diction: +0.5%
Score: 92.5%
lily
Content: Alright. I can see how such words would flow after reading your little comment in the end. Truthful in that sense. Disregarding that, the poem sounded fairly standard. 8
Structure/Syntax: I like it. Easy to see and thus, easy to read. 9
Diction: Again, I liked it. It fit with your content and structure. Nothing too shiny, but the words worked. Heavy and simply meaningful. 9
Rhythm: I see no real qualms with it…the rhythm was neat and organized. That too was also easy to see. 9
Bonus: The two repetitions really got to me (in a good way). >>; +0.5
Score: 88.75%
oni_flygon
Content: I think I've overused morbid already. Since you're fully aware that there was another Pokemon poem, and another spider related poem, you should know better to try a new subject. 7
Structure/Syntax: The structure implies the mortal coils of the Pidgey, as death draws near in erratic and almost jagged sentences and form verses, which represents the web of the almighty Ariados. Yeah right. Nice try, but it just doesn't help. A narrative poem is best in structured verses. 7
Diction: Great vocabulary. It would've helped a bit if that vocabulary helped the structure; or maybe the rhythm. 9
Rhythm: (See Structure/Syntax) 7
Bonus: Eh… would've been great if you chose another subject, but it's nice to see a narrative once in a while. Bonus: +0.5%
Score: 75.5%
Rolling Pichu
Content: Lacks originality, but I found it interesting. The narration is admirable and it has some lively metaphors. 8
Structure/Syntax: Natural, but it works well with the rhythm, and it isn't tedious. Patterns are properly arranged, and it's simple. 9
Diction: There's a great choice of words that fit well with the structure and help creating clear imagery. 9
Rhythm: Very well, although there are some sloppy parts, it's there. 7
Bonus: Narrative nature and metaphors: +0.7%
Score: 89.5%
lily
Content: Was okay. A bit overdone (prolly due to the diction), but it was okay. n.n 8
Structure/Syntax: Hm…the words really flow to create an almost versatile structure. It wasn't too appealing, but I can understand the way the content relies on such method. Still, you might want to make it more organized next time. 8
Diction: Very descriptive. A bit too descriptive—that jarred a bit of my ability to zip through it. Still, the vocabulary was impressive. 9
Rhythm: The poem as a whole, like I mentioned, had a flexible feel to it, but that made the rhythm a bit blurred. 7
Bonus: Descriptions~ +0.4
Score: 81%
Yesterday – "Autumn"
oni_flygon
Content: I was going to mark you down big time because it's a love poem, but then I realized that it's the only love poem in this contest. Your original score was a 6. Be happy it's higher. 9
Structure/Syntax: The last two stanzas bug me. They're short… and fat. You should've stuck to couplets, but I'll buy it. 7
Diction: Diction isn't half bad. In fact, I think it helped a lot for a while. Words set up an atmosphere that truly feels like autumn to me. 9
Rhythm: The stanzas feel independent since most of them have varying rhythm. You should stick to one rhythm throughout, but ignoring the poem as a whole, the stanzas stand out pretty well. 8
Bonus: That alliteration really hooked on me. And the fact that you only put up two colors and not a hodgepodge of colors really portray an autumn. +0.5%
Score: 83%
Rolling Pichu
Content: It's entertaining, maybe a bit ordinary due to the fact that it is a love poem, but it's still well written and shows you truly have talent. 8
Structure/Syntax: A constant structure, assisted by the solid rhyme scheme and coincident with the rhythm. 9
Diction: Ordinary, though colored by some descriptions, it works. 8
Rhythm: Very good. Works in harmony with the structure and makes everything flow smoothly. 9
Bonus: Rhythm, skill: +0.4%
Score: 89%
lily
Content: I really like this one. ^w^ Had that cutesy, lovey feel without overdoing it. Light, sweet, simple, without addressing deeper topics for once. 9
Structure/Syntax: Consistent. Doesn't really stray off save for the last stanzas, but the rhyme works either way. 8
Diction: Reminds me of pink. And um, autumn. Yeah. With leaves. Just gentle and relaxing, and, again, simple. 9
Rhythm: The stanzas alone had good rhythm, but when reading it with the rest…eh. Kind of clashes. 8
Bonus: Simplicity~ +0.6
Score: 86.5%
WINNERS
3rd place, blackheart – Congratulations! With a score of 88.15% (managed to place once more!)
2nd place, Knewsbought – Congratulations! With a score of 88.41% (it's time to stop trolling and start exploiting the talent, kiddo. XD)
1st place, shaun0505 – Congratulations, with a score of 89.91% (You may now brag for days to come, laugh at lower mortals like us and cherish such a score forever! Congrats again!)
Rolling Pichu
Finito! We are sorry for the delay, but we humble judges are finally done with all the jazz concerning the revision of your poems, and have of course determined the winners, too! I want to thank all of you for joining and participating, for it contributed to have a contest that turned to be more successful than we expected. I will once assure you there was no bias and you can feel safe about your score. If you're not comfortable with it, you may express any inquiries here. Poems were judged following Niko's verse analysis & judging format. Thanks, Niko!
oni_flygon
Poems are judged on four categories, Content, Structure/Syntax, Diction, and Rhythm, in a scale of 1-10. Added bonus for any other extravagant stuff.
Each judge has his/her own bias or an interpretation of poetry. That's why we have three judges. Now aren't you happy?
Winners for me:
Shaun0505 – 88.5%
KnewsBought – 86%
blackhaert – 83.2%
Honorable mentions:
Yesterday
Green ribbon of participation:
EmeraldSky, Art Critic Cubone, CodyJ, KraftyQuill
RESULTS
Knewsbought – "Way of the Sub"
88.41%
Content: Very original and I like the change of subject; pretty funny, too. 9
Structure/Syntax: Very simplistic structure, with two four line stanzas followed by a little refrain. It's very easy to read, very safe, although not dynamic enough, nor is the structure really surprising afterwards. 8
Diction: Great descriptions and well played word choice. Speaker is greatly conveyed through your word choice. 10
Rhythm: Rhythm is balanced, and safe. There's nothing too amazing here. 7
Bonus: Alliteration, metaphors, etc, etc. +1%
Score: 86%
Rolling Pichu
Content: A bit explicit, but I loved the humor applied to this piece, and especially the conceptual form. 9
Structure/Syntax: Fairly good, and ordinary. The relation of subjects is passable. 8
Diction: It doesn't seem consistent. Maybe a bit too processed? Some words seem to be slightly out of context, could be replaced, etc. 8
Rhythm: It's pretty good, flows quite nicely. However, it's not perfect. Good job, though. 9
Bonus: Rhythmic and conceptualistic: +0.5%
Score: 90%
lily
Content: I liked this one! Refreshing, unique, original—plus, an interesting insight on something I normally wouldn't expect a poem to be on. Really. It's my first time reading a poem about …subs. =] 10
Structure/Syntax: Nothing really to comment on. Easy to read, and reminds me of a lyric's structure. 9
Diction: Sometimes the words seemed a bit too expressive and conveyed excessive articulation. Made it look very polished, but I stumbled through a line or two. Otherwise, very eloquent and shows a good taste (no…pun...intended? huh? Whut? lol. =0) for words. 8
Rhythm: It's okay, pretty steady and even. 8
Bonus: Originality~ +0.7
Score: 89.25%
EmeraldSky – "Maybe We Really Do"
57.31%
EmeraldSky – "Maybe We Really Do"
Content: Eh… it's an okay content, although it doesn't woo me too much. 5
Structure/Syntax: Structure meanders, from wide ended sentences to short ones. Really confusing if you read it out loud, and very awkward, too. 4
Diction: Some descriptions, although the overall simplicity overshadows what little you have. 4
Rhythm: There almost is none. 3
Bonus: Rhymes, although the rhyme scheme is unstructured. +0.2%
Score: 40.2%
Rolling Pichu
Content: I liked the consistence; it certainly is more natural than others. Not too surprising, nor dynamic. It's a bit pale. 8
Structure/Syntax: Not quite there, it's confusing at times, and there's no metric. 6
Diction: Fairly good, but then again, nothing surprising. It's certainly looks more simple and natural, but it's still rather boring. 7
Rhythm: It's sloppy, watch the metric. It makes the dull content flow even more roughly. 5
Bonus: Natural and original: +0.3%
Score: 68%
lily
Content: I like the enthusiasm. :D The content, though, doesn't seem to stray from the norm, making it tedious. It's okay, but it's not an overly fascinating one. 7
Structure/Syntax: I…didn't see a concrete structure. A bit, but not much. Confusing and hard to read, but I see attempts. 7
Diction: Fairly bland, could've been improved, but they seem to say what they want to say. 7
Rhythm: Lack of consistence. There are some out of place lines and although the rhyme scheme tried to string them together, it was still difficult to make sense of. 4
Bonus: Enthusiasm~ +0.5
Score: 63.75%
Art_Critic_Cubone – "Why You Shouldn't Let an Insane Man Write Haiku"
79.83%
Content: Unique content, albeit confusing, but that's what you're trying to convey, isn't it? I'm just wondering if the madness concept isn't overdone yet. 8
Structure/Syntax: Haiku structure, although multiplied by many times. Stick to what a haiku really is. 6
Diction: Simplistic, befitting for each "character." 7
Rhythm: Haiku Rhythm. 7
Bonus: Unique concept in contrast to other contestants, although it was too lengthy. Haikus were meant to be short and brief, and not making a lot to form one narrative poem. But that's just me. +0.5%
Score: 75%
Rolling Pichu
Content: Originality! I liked the theme and imagery. The length didn't contribute, however. 8
Structure/Syntax: The length didn't help building a single concept. 7
Diction: Pretty good, the balance and choice of words is adroit. 8
Rhythm: In the poem as a whole, it's acceptable. As a side note, though it didn't affect your score, individually the haikus didn't seem consistent nor contributed with rhythm. 8
Bonus: Diction, originality; it's a fun read. +0.5%
Score: 82.5%
lily
Content: In-ter-es-ting. I like the concept and originality, but the excessive amount of haikus fluctuated from irrelevance to relevance. Something an insane man wrote? Perhaps, but it was still confusing. =P Still, it was enjoyable to read. 8
Structure/Syntax: Haikus, haikus, haikus. 575, 575, 575, 575, 575… 8
Diction: First one was splendid. Then it started mixing in informal language. Still, pretty good. 8
Rhythm: Erm, well it was basically a bunch of haikus. 8
Bonus: Originality, amusement~ +0.8
Score: 82%
shaun0505 – "The Ballad of a Lost Soul"
89.91%
oni_flygon
Content: The usual reminiscent ones. 8
Structure/Syntax: Structure is unique, but it works, especially for rhythm. Reminds me a lot of e.e. cummings 8
Diction: Pretty decent, but done to an effect. 9
Rhythm: It shines. I'm a sucker for these kinds of poems. The breaks, the hesitations, the little quirks in it… it just makes me giddy. 10
Bonus: I like the rhythm and structure too much. +1%
Score: 88.5%
Rolling Pichu
Content: Enigmatic, metaphoric & sharp. I really liked it! 9
Structure/Syntax: It puzzled me, but I guess it's not a biting fault. 8
Diction: Adequate, but infrequent. 8
Rhythm: It's there, but didn't make a consistent work. Sometimes it's admirable, sometimes it loses me. 8
Bonus: Metaphors. +1%
Score: 92.5%
lily
Content: My first impression was blandness, then it got really interesting later…9
Structure/Syntax: Loose, free, sort of reminded me of time slipping by. In that way can I mark this a 9
Diction: Normal. Sufficient as to fulfill the meaning. 8
Rhythm: So whooshy~ Like, stop and go, stop and go, and you never know what's next. I like the free nature of it. n.n 9
Bonus: Ambiguity~ +0.5
Score: 88.75%
CodyJ – "Missing: Inner Child"
82.93%
Content: I find it meaningful, especially for a guy like me, who really misses childhood. 8
Structure/Syntax: Very conservative structure, with little repetitions and such. It moves along. 8
Diction: Great diction, greatly portrayed in every paragraph. 8
Rhythm: It's okay and decent at best. Nothing to be surprised about here. 8
Bonus: Really great, solid, and decent poem, although that's all I can say about it. I'll throw in a point for vivid imagery. +0.3%
Score: 80.3%
Rolling Pichu
Content: I like it, it's eloquent and worthwhile. I can relate to it. 9
Structure/Syntax: Unusual due to the length of stanzas, and ideas are ambiguous. 7
Diction: Nothing breathtaking here, but I guess it's all right. 8
Rhythm: The first stanza was excellent, but then it started to sound clumsy. Overall it's properly measured, though. 8
Bonus: Meaning, purpose, consistence: +0.4%
Score: 84%
lily
Content: Aw…that was sentimental and sweet. I liked it, and the repetition really reinforced the loneliness. Like, every time I read the beginning of the stanzas, it just….yeah. Sniff. ;; 9
Structure/Syntax: Consistent with little quirks and repetition. I liked the repetition. 8
Diction: It's okay. Got a bit old after a bit, but managed to revive near the end. 8
Rhythm: Very solid, thorough…has its messy moments, but overall, pretty good. 8
Bonus: Sentimentalism, repetition~ 0.8 Bwa!
Score: 84.5%
Blackheart – "The Victim"
88.15%
oni_flygon
Content: I don't like these because if I say it's morbid, I get bashed on, but you shouldn't have put what it's about in the end. You could've made me look like a total jerk and keep the air of mystery in your poem, but now it's all revealed. 7
Structure/Syntax: Structure is fine and it's safe because of the rhythm.8
Diction: Neat little descriptions. Words help along with rhythm. 8
Rhythm: The poem shines here. Great rhythm, and don't know if you did this on purpose or not, but you pretty much made your words sound like what they were describing. Go ahead, read it out loud. 10
Bonus: Lots of little descriptions, making a picture and creating a very unique atmosphere. Morbid, true, but the atmosphere makes it a "good" morbid poem. +0.7%
Score: 83.2%
Rolling Pichu
Content: I relate to your inspiration, and the purpose. However, there's no thunderbolt here, it's rather colorless. It could have been more mysterious. 7
Structure/Syntax: Works good, it's certain and it helps the poem flow well. 9
Diction: Great. It's considerate, and it works with the rhythm. 9
Rhythm: Excellent. It's maybe the best aspect of the poem. It works amazingly well with the structure, and it makes it easy to read. 10
Bonus: Great rhythm & diction: +0.5%
Score: 92.5%
lily
Content: Alright. I can see how such words would flow after reading your little comment in the end. Truthful in that sense. Disregarding that, the poem sounded fairly standard. 8
Structure/Syntax: I like it. Easy to see and thus, easy to read. 9
Diction: Again, I liked it. It fit with your content and structure. Nothing too shiny, but the words worked. Heavy and simply meaningful. 9
Rhythm: I see no real qualms with it…the rhythm was neat and organized. That too was also easy to see. 9
Bonus: The two repetitions really got to me (in a good way). >>; +0.5
Score: 88.75%
Krafty Quill – "The Saviour"
82%
oni_flygon
Content: I think I've overused morbid already. Since you're fully aware that there was another Pokemon poem, and another spider related poem, you should know better to try a new subject. 7
Structure/Syntax: The structure implies the mortal coils of the Pidgey, as death draws near in erratic and almost jagged sentences and form verses, which represents the web of the almighty Ariados. Yeah right. Nice try, but it just doesn't help. A narrative poem is best in structured verses. 7
Diction: Great vocabulary. It would've helped a bit if that vocabulary helped the structure; or maybe the rhythm. 9
Rhythm: (See Structure/Syntax) 7
Bonus: Eh… would've been great if you chose another subject, but it's nice to see a narrative once in a while. Bonus: +0.5%
Score: 75.5%
Rolling Pichu
Content: Lacks originality, but I found it interesting. The narration is admirable and it has some lively metaphors. 8
Structure/Syntax: Natural, but it works well with the rhythm, and it isn't tedious. Patterns are properly arranged, and it's simple. 9
Diction: There's a great choice of words that fit well with the structure and help creating clear imagery. 9
Rhythm: Very well, although there are some sloppy parts, it's there. 7
Bonus: Narrative nature and metaphors: +0.7%
Score: 89.5%
lily
Content: Was okay. A bit overdone (prolly due to the diction), but it was okay. n.n 8
Structure/Syntax: Hm…the words really flow to create an almost versatile structure. It wasn't too appealing, but I can understand the way the content relies on such method. Still, you might want to make it more organized next time. 8
Diction: Very descriptive. A bit too descriptive—that jarred a bit of my ability to zip through it. Still, the vocabulary was impressive. 9
Rhythm: The poem as a whole, like I mentioned, had a flexible feel to it, but that made the rhythm a bit blurred. 7
Bonus: Descriptions~ +0.4
Score: 81%
Yesterday – "Autumn"
86.16%
oni_flygon
Content: I was going to mark you down big time because it's a love poem, but then I realized that it's the only love poem in this contest. Your original score was a 6. Be happy it's higher. 9
Structure/Syntax: The last two stanzas bug me. They're short… and fat. You should've stuck to couplets, but I'll buy it. 7
Diction: Diction isn't half bad. In fact, I think it helped a lot for a while. Words set up an atmosphere that truly feels like autumn to me. 9
Rhythm: The stanzas feel independent since most of them have varying rhythm. You should stick to one rhythm throughout, but ignoring the poem as a whole, the stanzas stand out pretty well. 8
Bonus: That alliteration really hooked on me. And the fact that you only put up two colors and not a hodgepodge of colors really portray an autumn. +0.5%
Score: 83%
Rolling Pichu
Content: It's entertaining, maybe a bit ordinary due to the fact that it is a love poem, but it's still well written and shows you truly have talent. 8
Structure/Syntax: A constant structure, assisted by the solid rhyme scheme and coincident with the rhythm. 9
Diction: Ordinary, though colored by some descriptions, it works. 8
Rhythm: Very good. Works in harmony with the structure and makes everything flow smoothly. 9
Bonus: Rhythm, skill: +0.4%
Score: 89%
lily
Content: I really like this one. ^w^ Had that cutesy, lovey feel without overdoing it. Light, sweet, simple, without addressing deeper topics for once. 9
Structure/Syntax: Consistent. Doesn't really stray off save for the last stanzas, but the rhyme works either way. 8
Diction: Reminds me of pink. And um, autumn. Yeah. With leaves. Just gentle and relaxing, and, again, simple. 9
Rhythm: The stanzas alone had good rhythm, but when reading it with the rest…eh. Kind of clashes. 8
Bonus: Simplicity~ +0.6
Score: 86.5%
WINNERS
3rd place, blackheart – Congratulations! With a score of 88.15% (managed to place once more!)
2nd place, Knewsbought – Congratulations! With a score of 88.41% (it's time to stop trolling and start exploiting the talent, kiddo. XD)
1st place, shaun0505 – Congratulations, with a score of 89.91% (You may now brag for days to come, laugh at lower mortals like us and cherish such a score forever! Congrats again!)
Thanks to everyone again for participating again, I hope you enjoyed having a part on the contest and wait for new ones to come.
Fin~
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