@Blasto ok, im not liking your 'inhanced hearing and seeing', i kind of want the thread to be a little lengthy.
The skeleton key chain, im not liking either.
your history is a little short and rushed, so is your personality and appearance.
Try writing down what you have already typed up then try and expand on it, making it like an interview or a biography than a list.
I feel im being mean here but i just want to let you know that im not picking on you, im just trying to raise your writing to the standars of the rp, so people can enjoy it.
but it is getting there, don't worry, youve completed most of it so no one can overtake your reservation.