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[Obsidian Blade]

O.O

Wow! 84 and 80?!

*is on the edge of fainting*

I'm going to have to go back and work on chapter two now, what with that high score AND being Fanfiction of the week. I'm amazed...

Also, your mention of diction and the italic text at the beginning of chapter one has given me some ideas for the end. It was originally meant to be reserved for her father's battle comments, but I think that can be changed.

In Frosty's humble opinion, this scene was an excellent opportunity to reinforce what chapter 1 has started: Raven and her father. You could have reinforced the part about how Raven was reminded of her father when she was drowning in the bog. When she felt defeated (or weak, whatever), you can add in direct quotes from chapter 1 about how Raven's incompetent to her father's eyes (feel free to add in more lines for Raven's father in chapter 1 if necessary.) Let those stuff remind her how she cannot be looked down upon like that forever (similar to what you've done later in the chapter, when she just woke up after going out cold), giving her strength to get out of the bog and so on... The upside to this is that it adds motifs and symbolism at the same time (mud/bog = father, and father's quotes now being motifs). The downside is that this is adding more angst...

I actually hadn't thought of that at all, when I wrote all of the chapters up to six (or was it five...? Gah ><) it was just soemthing random that was just demanding that I write it down so none of it was planned. While I'm editting chapter two I'll concentrate on that, because I'd quite like to get in some more angst before it goes itno the "bubbly/cheery" stage I need to set up even later chapter.

Ah, I'll shut up before I confuse myself. Thanks for the review, frostweaver!

 

[Yamato-san]

thanks a lot for the review, Frostweaver, but let me explain a few things.

-an overused title... is never the best thing. However, seems like the title is not something that can be changed due to its sentimental value... ok let's move on then. This is THE reason why this fanfic failed at fanfiction.net. Fanfiction.net requires an extremely creative title, along with an excellent 3 line summary. (that's why forums beat fanfiction.net in this category, but fanfiction.net got the best readability due to the way it's setup in comparison to a forum.)

Yeah, I kinda realize that. However, you should give some credit for the fact that "Pocket Monsters" is used in the title instead of "Pokemon", and admittedly, I don't see the word 'chronicles' too much, or at least not much compared to 'legends' or whatever. But anyway, you're right, it's kinda sentimental. As I mentioned, this was originally conceived by my little brother, and of course, he thought up the title (although, he did have "Pokemon Chronicles" back then, it was I who decided to use Japanese names in the story). I don't know why he used the title, I guess he just noticed the recent trend with Final Fantasy Crystal Chronicles and Digimon Chronicles.

-not a criticism, but a comment: I never believe in promises about "this is no ordinary OT fanfic people, so please keep reading." A fanfic can start OT yet remain interesting, because the writing style will show by itself. If you're really good at your writing, you don't need crummy sayings like that, and your readers will automatically be hooked.

I'm just taking extra precautions. As you should know, trainer fics do have a pretty bad reputation, mainly for having overused plots and such. (Slight spoilers here) I'll admit that PMC does use a typical gym badge quest, but that's mainly something of a small side plot that's dropped completely later on (there's no way I'm having Hiro pull a Satoshi and go through Kanto and Houen after he finishes the Jouto league). PMC is written with anime or manga styling in mind, and as with most anime and manga, there're humble beginnings, but then huge dramatic climaxes and a very dark plot later on as the story progresses. I just don't want people to leave while the story is still at these humble beginnings.

-lol... I'm not afraid to review. I'm just afraid that you may die because of my reviews XD

By all means, be as friggin harsh as you could be. In the past, I didn't get much in reviews and criticism, and I constantly request people to do so, no matter how harsh they may be, because I'd appreciate hearing whatever criticism there is to help improve my own writing style.

-now I prefer those cultural notes placed at the end of an act. Even though that may not sound logical at first, it does prevent the spoilers that's given due to the cultural notes. Before I even read, I already know part of what's to come, and can probably guess the setting accurately. Personally, I prefer the cultural notes to come after, at the end of an act.

Well, in the past, I did have all the notes placed at the bottom, however, I changed it when I got to a particular chapter because I wanted to make the ending as much of a surprise as possible, and if people constantly scrolled down to learn which Pokemon is called what in Japan, they'd likely see the ending and be spoiled. However, I guess I could leave the Pokemon name comparisons at the top and all the cultural notes at the bottom.

-just a quick note: "chapters" do not exist for a scripts. It's an "act." (a "FYI") haha... someone who challenges the extreme difficulty of a scriptfic... this I must see.

Again, I must bring up PMC's origins. It was intended for doujinshi, and even in writing, I'm trying to substitute that as well as I can through scripting and detail. Manga does have 'chapters'.

-scripts do not require " " punctuation, for everything is expected to be dialogues anyway.

Yes, but I felt the punctuations necessary because I also listed actions for characters along with the quotes.

-the narrator speaks, and a narration cannot.

Actually, in manga, they do. Look at Cardcaptor Sakura for example.

-the "character info spam" wasn't that nice... I didn't really like it. The tone didn't fit too well with the opening lines of "o pass the time, I've decided to chronicle my recent events, all the interesting things that have occured with me lately." Those lines build up angst, and readers suddenly expect something serious coming, and then we suddenly get blood types and year of the setting?

I would've left out the chronicling thing completely, but I wanted to give some purpose to my brother's choice of titling. (Slight spoilers again) Besides, Hiro's only narrating up to a certain point. Afterwards, the story gets to the present time, and Hiro's adventure is still continuing. And about the year of setting, I figured now that I'm making use of the "Chronicles" title, I figured I could also give dates. As for blood types and astrological signs, they're just to make the character bios look more in-depth (and yeah, I've researched the blood types and signs to see if they appropriately fit the characters).

-YES! Finally someone who knows the proper way on how to write settings in a scriptfic! *pat*

Thank you very much. I try my best to counter all the bias that's given towards scripts.

-in a script format fanfic, the name of the speakers have to remain consistent. You started off with "narration," and you can't change "narration" to "Hiro (narration)" suddenly like that...

I didn't know that. When I did that, I just noticed the way RPGs have character names before quotes, and before a character's name is revealed, it's usually seen as "???:" or something. I think I'll stick to this, though, because I don't think it'd be a good idea to prematurely show names before they're officially stated in the story.

-Hiro is talking about his past, so it should read "but that class WAS..." There are other similiar mistakes too.

(Slight spoilers again) Well, Hiro's still in that class in the present time, but yeah, his opinion on Pokemon raising does change over time, so I should go back and correct that. As for these similar mistakes you speak of, forgive me, I forget characters a referring to the past sometimes.

-hehe... the only time and place where character description can be spammed like that... well done on Chris and Hiro's sisters. However, I wasn't exactly too happy to see that only Chris and Sakura really made an appearance in this act. Perhaps you can save the descriptions about the other sisters when they make an appearance in future acts.

Hiro was introducing his sisters before he made mention to the fact that they're very well-known people whom he's related to, thus resulting to his problems with his teacher, as well as other people. And yeah, I decided I'd describe their character because in past writings, these were extremely 2D characters (with the exception of Tamao, whom I always seemed to portray as sly), so I'd make up for that. Also, like Hiro says, they don't play a very huge role (at least up to where I last left off the story), so I figured I'd just make humor out of it with all the sisters collapsing like they do.

-*reads the poll* well I'm not a SPP member so can't vote there... but I personally don't mind the manga/anime qualities in this fanfic. It adds to the originality, and it contributes to your own person writing style as well.

I'll try asking a mod there to see if there's any possible way to make guests vote, but if it's not possible, then I guess I'll seperate the poll for each forum, and the fic will be posted differently in each forum depending how the poll resulted there.

-Great amount of effort is shown through the realistic descriptions of life in Japan, along with accurate and detailed background information provided. Format is interesting, and writing style is rather original. Though slightly lacking in terms of plot while the speed of the act was rather slow, this is a good act nevertheless, and is a good start for what seems to be a promising scriptfic.

Yeah, it seemed to progress very slowly, but I find it to be a major improvement over the last writing of the story. I managed to get in descriptions of many of the characters, not make Hiro's sisters and Chris appear as 2D as they had in the past, made Hiro himself not appear as 2D, etc. However, since this is a beginning chapter, introduction to characters would be a given, so later chapters wouldn't have that and would therefor progress at a much quicker rate.

Anyway, thanks a lot for giving such a well-done review, definitely the best review I've gotten ever since I began writing PMC. I'll admit, other reviewers have been much nicer, but I'm not looking for nice, I'm looking for details, I'm looking for criticism, and you failed to disappoint with that. And through it all, I got an 84/100 (though, actually a little more considering you add one ninth of 76, adding 8 would be a ninth of 72, but I can't blame you for rounding off). [Holds up fingers in "V for Victory"] Heh, not bad despite the bias towards both scripts and trainer fics.

 

[Frostweaver]

-there's actually a LOT of "___ chronicles" out there, especially "<name of trainer>'s chronicles" or "<name of a legendary, mainly Lugia>'s chronicles" out there. As for the Pocket Monster thing... lol I'll keep an eye out for Monster ball then. I personally don't mind it, but it's certainly worth pointing out. When you're posting on a forum, the first impression of a reader about your fanfic is the title, and if you want more readers, you will want an eye-catching title.

-don't confuse OT with "bad OT." I've read 2 very brilliant (sadly unfinished) work in OT. Both of them involves the ordinary new trainer getting a new Pokemon going through gyms, however, they still manage to be excellent OTs. One of them got a new idea about females (the setting was in the past) are forbidden to be trainers and the main character is forced to take the place of a trainer as a female despite how she didn't dare to go against the laws (due to certain reasons and events, she had to be a trainer and so on, which I won't talk about here) which was very interesting. The other one involves a guy who cannot get a starter from the professor due to certain reasons, and in the end took a Pokeball from a dead body as his "starter" Pokemon. They're all highly original, and both of them can immediately hook a reader into reading this "OT." So as you see, promises are really not necessary... I suppose that some are biased, but for my case, I've definitely seen some very well done OTs (or OT-satires XD)

-now a lot of your points are related to how this is originally a doujinshi, converted to a narrative fanfic, and then finally to the scriptfic it is now on PC. Yes I do understand that, however, that doesn't mean everything can be transferred over directly, even if all of them are similar. Those 3 objects got their own way of things which are unique to themselves. You're in colledge and will certainly experience this already... Write a history paper in the format of an English essay, and see if that works out. It really doesn't... somethings are just unique to that certain format, like how narratives emphasizes descriptions, while doujinshis and scriptfics do not, and etc.

-narrator is the speaker who talks directly to the readers. Narration are the things that a narrator says. This is again, something different between different styles. It's like how in math a "ray" is different from the normal english definition of a "ray," and a "ray" in science is certainly different from both math and english.

-regarding the punctuation, you can just keep using the brackets like the way you are now for stage directions. That is actually the proper format for it. All brackets inside a script is meant to be a stage direction.

-actually I can kind of get where you got the thing about Hiro's sisters. I can easily imagine this as another carry-over from the doujinshi version. Now when you're reading/viewing pictures (anime or doujinshi), things fly through a lot faster, so that's why character profiles like this are ok. It really doesn't take that much time for your viewers/readers to absorb the info. However, when it gets to words, your reader will probably take at least 4 times the time required to absorb the same amount of info, because words can't work its way as quickly as pictures can. This time delay is what makes this acceptable on a doujinshi, but not that good on paper and in words. This is also the reasoning for why this act seems to be progressively slow too. This pace will be completely alright for a doujinshi, but when it comes to words, it is 4x slower, making it lag a little bit. Personally I don't mind it as it's still acceptable to me, but *many* other reviewers emphasizes the speed of the plot as an important element in a story.

-hmm I don't find any problems with Hiro being 2D really... I thought that he was just fine.

-Oh I was never a nice person to begin with. I'm THE member with the lowest reputation in comparison to everyone else who joined at the same time as me. ^_^ Too many red blocks XD In team rates for the game section or fanfic reviews, I'm just as brutal and cruel. So sick and tired of "review spam" that says nothing but "oh great job keep writing" or things like that... I'll let all the other people say those nice stuff, while I myself says the ugly.

-lol... 80+ mark in my book is already a very good fanfic that's worth reading, while a 90+ is just heavenly. XD I mark *hard* and you better believe it. =)

*points at all of his older reviews that score 60s, and some even 50s, and they only got 50 because the effort/originality section saved their butt... ha!*


Anyway... a review now.


@ Life of a Trainer (ch.1)

-once again, not the most original title... that can be problematic in terms of attracting readers' attention.

-again, just like for PMC, I never believe in promises... if your writing skill is good, it will show, OT or not. Also, don't expect an equally good review just because other reviewers have given you a good mark. I *AM* cruel, and you better keep that in mind.

-excellent promising dictions are shown in the first sentence of the prologue... certainly well chosen and well done.

-some punctuation problems that should have been caught by MSWord (it was a misuse of commas and periods...) hmm don't know what happened there.

-now the red robe clashes with the chair and the pyjama/slipper setting... a bit of a contradiction in terms of diction here.

-"was quite huge" got some awkward wording... and the "mind you" afterward isn't really that good to me. I never liked the narrator talking to the reviewers like that unless it's crucial, or is important for the development of the plot.

-now I tried to reread the paragraph over and over again to figure out what you're trying to say, but I just fail to pick up anything special about this line:

" It had golden statues of rare Pok?mon and some golden Rhydon statues."

It is definitely important somehow, due to the careful sentence structure... Mind if you explain this one for me? Sorry but I am a bit too stupid to get this one... ._.;

-now when professor Oak starts talking to "someone"... that part... eww. I really didn't like how he is talking to "someone" when there is "no one" there in this particular tone... It really clashes with the atmospheres that you've established earlier in the prologue.

-"I made a darn good story here" again clashes with the character traits that you've contributed to the professor earlier. This isn't a blue-trait...

-Not really a problem, but it is just a bit strange to me how the story is described to be so old, yet we have our heroes from the anime still being so youthful. I'll have to see the future chapters to decide rather or not this is ok or not.

-Not much to say... it's not a very revealing prologue, and it gives the story a slow paced start. Though dictions are generally ok, the occassional diction contradictions really take away a lot from the story, especially since there is nothing much about the prologue except for these dictions to look for. Sentence structure for some sentences is so awkward, and it doesn't seem to be on purpose too unlike the first beginnig sentence. I'll admit that this mark is rather inaccurate. There's just not enough things to give marks for.

Grammar Basics: 7/10
Plot/Character Basics: OMIT/20
Tone/Diction: 13/20
Writing Skills: 13/20
Effort/Originality: 23/30
Lit. Device bonus: +0

Total: 56/80, => 70/100

 

[Yamato-san]

I may be in college, but I'm not in history nor English at the moment. This semester all I'm taking is Japanese 1 and... [shudders]... human anatomy...

Anyway, I can see a lot of the problems stem from the descriptions trying to make this seem like a doujinshi, however, I intend to keep those no matter what. For one thing, I'm too used to the notion that this was originally a manga to describe it in any other way. Secondly, I didn't really approve of most of what I wrote when I did the narrative. Quite often, I'd find I was just writing characters passing lines back and forth between eachother, and I ran out of any synonyms to 'he/she said' during most of those. Besides, I'd still describe things as if the reader was looking at a manga. The only reason I was doing a narrative in the first place was because Serebii wouldn't allow them, and it's not until later that I find out that they are indeed allowed so long as they're good. If I had my facts straight from the start, I would have always wrote in a script format because, well, script just seem like the best way to describe manga in writing, and about the only way I can get it even more manga-like in detail would be if I actually list out pages and panels, sound FX, etc., but doing that would take forever.

I realize the harsh truth that what I'm doing isn't a manga, and the only way it actually would be is if me or my brother drew it and were able to scan it, which we're not (as I said, we couldn't get a scanner to work, and I don't have great artistic abilities anyway and I think my brother's just plain lazy by now). However, I'm still trying to make it as manga-like as possible, even though it's written, because that's simply what I see PMC was always intended for. I didn't like most of my own writing when PMC was a narrative, and if the author itself wouldn't approve, then obviously it wouldn't be fit for such a format. Now that it's in a script format, though, I like my own writing much better because it's several times closer to the originally-intended format. Plus, writing the way I do also gives me the added bonus of seeming more, well, unique from other writers.

Anyway, I'm curious, what fics (or single chapters) have you reviewed thus far that would be in this 90s range you speak of?

Oh, one last thing, I went and editted my chapter so the name notes are before the chapter, but the cultural notes are at the bottom of the post.

 

[Dragonfree]

Heh, Eevee. The two things kept absolutely intact from the very first version are the title and the Pok?mon caught, and both are distinctively clich?d compared to most of the rest. But unlike the title, they won't ever be changed, because I love my characters. *hugs... ahem, certain character from chapter ten*

 

[Frostweaver]

Well... I only did the rating thing rather recently... only Reflections really got a 90+ However, there are some other Pokemon fanfics worth reading...

-Reflections
-Forgiving Tears

Both of them are on PC, by our dearest mod LilyPichu ^^ Both of them are extremely deep, with well usage of various literatary devices to help the story. Rather simple at first glance, but re-read it over a *several* times and you'll see that the *actual *meaning of the story is very deep and well thought out.

-Anything by Brian on ffnet is good... but then too bad his account magically disappeared and I can't find any of his work ;_; All of those Pokemon romance stories are lovely... all of them! All 40 of them!

-Farla's "Ice" on ffnet is also good... it is probably even better if I'm a more hardcore Pokemon fanfic reviewer, long enough to know what that story is alluding to O.o; It's suppose to be related to another fanfic according to some others' reviews of that story, but I don't know what or where it is... >>;

-"Against the Rules, Against the Odds" and "Tangled Webs" (both on ffnet) are 2 OTs which the most unique start ever... worth reading just to see how some OT fanfic can be so creative.

-"Pokemon MASTER" by good old Acey... plot = heavenly... also the first dark Pokemon fanfic in existence. He was the one who started the entire trend 6 years ago.

 

[Iveechan]

Oh god, FARLA got mentioned here. Even though I never read it, someone told me that her Pokemon Revolution story put fighting types in a bad light (they were kileld just because they obeyed humans). Oh yes, she's SUCH a Pokemon lover to have a bias against a single type. Plus she has, like, 90 + short stories of what appears to be angst. Sorry, I just get tired of seeing people on ff.net go "Farla is the queen of Pokemon fics!" and "This poem about the legendary birds being abused is dedicated to Farla!" Anyone who loves canine pokes and hates fighters is my enemy, no questions asked.

Hrm... should I re-post my main fic, "Guilty by Design"? It was fanfic of the week before.

 

[Frostweaver]

Oh god, FARLA got mentioned here. Even though I never read it, someone told me that her Pokemon Revolution story put fighting types in a bad light (they were kileld just because they obeyed humans). Oh yes, she's SUCH a Pokemon lover to have a bias against a single type. Plus she has, like, 90 + short stories of what appears to be angst. Sorry, I just get tired of seeing people on ff.net go "Farla is the queen of Pokemon fics!" and "This poem about the legendary birds being abused is dedicated to Farla!" Anyone who loves canine pokes and hates fighters is my enemy, no questions asked.

Hrm... should I re-post my main fic, "Guilty by Design"? It was fanfic of the week before.

lol... I didn't like all of her stories/shorts. I just liked Ice the most. It's not just fighting types that are killed, but a WHOLE LOT of stuff that's killed in her stories, ranging from human beings, raichus, Lugia (pretty much "dead" the way she put it), and many, many things. Ice is actually away from her usual "Pokemon obey human" and various issues related to that theme, and i like it myself...

Guilty by Design...? I've never read it yet... >>;

(And certainly glad to see you again Iveechan ^^; )

 

[Iveechan]

Yeah, glad to see you too :D. Even though I acted indifferent in your farewell thread, I was peeved because, even if we don't agree on a lot of stuff, I still respect you. I'll probably think on it for awhile, read over it 5 million times for errors, then re-post it.

 

[Frostweaver]

Yeah, glad to see you too :D. Even though I acted indifferent in your farewell thread, I was peeved because, even if we don't agree on a lot of stuff, I still respect you. I'll probably think on it for awhile, read over it 5 million times for errors, then re-post it.

lol... thanks? Though I'm still back here in PC, the old old Frosty. I've lost all but my memories in this place, yet it is through this place that lead me to what maybe the most important realization for me... but then enough about the whole Kairi/Me issue.

Then again, yes I am back, but it probably won't be too long before someone gives me a ban due to the things inside the gameboy strategy forum XD But then, no regrets at all if I did get ban from that. ^^

Yes indeed we've argued against each other more than agreeing on something (if we've ever agreed on something XD). But still, at least you aren't mindlessly argueing? ^^; And I'll certainly look forward to your story to review too *evil grin*

 

[Iveechan]

And I'll certainly look forward to your story to review too *evil grin*

Hence the reason for my extreme proof-reading O_O

 

[Yami86]

Hey everyone, I've just uploaded the 8th chapter, part 1 of my story, A Hero Emerges. It's quite long so I've had to break it into three posts. I apologise for the delay, but university work is really starting to catch up to me. Anyways, all reviews are welcome and appreciated.

 

[Dragonfree]

Well, I can't help having a bit of disrespect for Farla, not because of the fics she writes, but because she spends her time making fun of fanfics in her LiveJournal (without actually reviewing them). She has a point in many of the things she says there, but I just can't possibly find it fair to pick apart a fanfic for not following the games well enough. She picks apart fanfics for implying that Numel is slow without having looked at its Speed stat, not making shiny Pok?mon sparkle and making Smog work like Smokescreen, all with this kind of "obviously-everybody-will-agree-with-me" attitude. And a lot of it happens only in her LiveJournal to make fun of the authors (and the reviewers who liked the fic, because she tends to mention them too).

But meh... she's a good writer. Just very disrespectful...



As a side note, I've put up chapter twelve of The Quest for the Legends.

 

[Frostweaver]

@ Quest for the Legends (ch. 4)

-grammatical mistakes again... but then I can pretty much say that for any fanfic but Road to Palantria

-can always rework some sentence structure just a little, so that you don't have those boring "nothing but physical description" sentences... I don't like them myself.

-err... the whole big convo about Rick is rather... annoying. There's so much conversations, and not really are they that necessary.

-eeks... nothing much to say. It's rather short and stuff... but then Rick having legendaries... personally I don't like that idea, but nothing is wrong with it for a fanfic though. Just that personally I don't... like it.

-weird diction... Charmander being alluded to a ghost?

Grammar Basics: 8/10
Plot/Character Basics: OMIT/20
Tone/Diction: 13/20
Writing Skills: 13/20
Effort/Originality: 23/30
Lit. Device bonus: +0

Total: 57/80, => 71/100

 

[Dragonfree]

Meh, told you chapter two and four were my worst... the ghost thing came from the fact that Charmander had been following him around without actually doing anything, like he had no will of his own and was just like a spirit trailing after him... meh, it was just some weird thought when I was writing that end. Chapter five is WAY better.

 

[Frostweaver]

@ Raven- Mechyena Saga (ch. 2b)

-awkward diction: "blanket of clouds... cold too..." Obviously, cold + blanket = contradiction. Have to watch out.

-grammar mistakes occassionally... again. But little stuff like that... meh

-err... talking Pokemon... are never really that original. And the reasons for a talking Pokemon in this fanfic isn't that outstanding either. If it's a psychic type, perhaps you could've jsut make it speak by telepathy.

-Raven's flashback could have used some sort of indication to seperate it from the rest of the story... like a line across the page or something, or readability's purposes.

-"who are you" contradicts with the psychic ability that Polienix used at the end... a plot flaw, but not a big one.

-Some parts of the chapter, near the middle, got a few lines that suggests how Polienix doesn't exactly trust Raven because they have just met. However, this does act a little against the fact that Polienix is a baby, and those innocent talk from Polienix later on.

-change in the general fanfic marking system, due to various people commenting how effort/originality seems to worth an awful lot, yet it is the least objective category out of all. So, a new category is introduced, the "coherence/readability." It rates if the story is easy enough to read, and if the story really flows.


Grammar Basics: 8/10
Plot/Character Basics: 15/20
Coherence/Readability: 8/10
Tone/Diction: 14/20
Writing Skills: 15/20
Effort/Originality: 16/20
Lit. Device bonus: +1 (flashback, antecedent action)

Total: 76

 

[Frostweaver]

@ The Queen's Sacrifice

-endorsed...? Wrong word usage here... endorse does mean support, but only support from a public statement (related to people)

-hehe... a mini-irony... cute

-hmm... wrong section of the forum, Lily =p

Non Pokemon fanfic really don't belong here... (or at least, i can't find anything "Pokemon" in this fanfic... though you attempted to draw some connection between chess and Pokemon, it's really dragging the quality of the story down... no matter how many times I read this over, I still can't draw this to be related to Pokemon at all.)

-there's still a few things that I couldn't answer, and with 2 tests tomorrow I can't afford to read it again. Still have to find out "purity," "forest," and the "player" who was never directly mentioned but was insulted by the knight implicitly... so...

Review mark: delayed and postponed until tomorrow >>;

 

[Lily]

Ah...alright. I just had to see how the basic outline had to be. XD Mmm, the idea I used was correct, and I really wanted it to interact with Pokemon, but guess not. ;_;

Oh well. Thanks anyway E- Frost. >_> <_<;

*coughs*

 

[Yamato-san]

well, I ended my poll, and Pocket Monsters Chronicles will have its old chapters replaced. Chapter 2's going up soon, so if you haven't read chapter 1 yet, I suggest you get to it.

EDIT: Well, chapter 2's up now. I have a question, is it at all possible to insert a post between existing posts with a mod's help or anything? I ask because my post exceeded the character limit, and I had to move the notes to a later post. Since I am replacing older chapters, that means I'm editting the same post on which the previous chapters have been on. I predict that I will write a chapter that, with or without notes, will exceed the limits, and when that happens, I don't want to post the rest of the chapter at the very end of the thread.

 

[Yami86]

Well, I've just uploaded Chapter 8, Part II of my fanfic, A Hero Emerges. Hmm, I think my fanfic chapters are getting longer each chapter. Anways, enjoy! As always, reviews are welcome :)