Gravity [Lyrics]

[Crux]

Well, I was bored, so I typed up some lyrics that I'm fine with posting here. They aren't that good, I know, but hey. I'm trying to learn how to write various different genres of music, and to write lyrics as a whole, a bit faster. (Right now I'm slow as a *****, haha. . .) So, yeah, I'd appreciate some of you guys to look it over and tell me where I went wrong.

Spoiler:

"The sky cries
As I fall into the earth
But before my eyes
are blinded by the dirt
Do you know what I see?
Do you know what I see?
Do you know
What
I
See?

Hush,
don't you say a word
This palling silence has no place for discrepancies
Oh, Crush,
You'll fall apart anyway
I want to see what's inside you
Can I tear you down?
Can I rip you up?
Can I tear you

Oh, dear. . .
I'm breaking everyday
But at the end of the tunnel there's a ball and chain
Can you save me?
Or can you die as well?
And recognise the burning in my frozen shell
I am made of glass, dear
But am too obscure to tell

The sky cries
As I fall into the earth
But before my blinded eyes
Are covered by the dirt
Do you know what I see?
Can you see what I see?
Be afraid of what you see

[Long Instrumental Peice]

Within this solid man of iron there's a heart that's made of stone
Beating on the inside
Magma is the only warmth that I've even known
My passion will burn you alive
So tell me
Can you see?
Can you speak?
Can you...
destroy me?"​

I'm very sorry about the title, I literally used the first thing I thought of.

 

[pompayyy]

I thought the lyrics were well constructed and original. Now I'm stuck wondering what genre it belongs to, so I'll have a general idea of how to sing it :P

 

[Khawill]

It am singing it out loud as a rock song tbh.