My poems- Once again XD

Wow, you are a really talented poet Eli!
I was particularly drawn into The Curse of Hate.
Great job!
Keep it up!
*gives Silver Taco of Poetic Excellence*
 
XD! I am so touched...XD
Thanks guys ^^ I got another done:

Footprints

I saw some footprints, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
Thoughts arose in my head,
Who is this person? what life has he led?
I began to follow them, at steady pace,
Past winding roads, a seeming maze.
But there they lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
I couldn't give up, for I've reached this far,
The sun is setting, 'tis turning dark.
I walked ahead, in full speed,
Wondering where these marks could lead.
For if they end, I shall meet,
The one who left them, in the street.
But there they lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
Full of hope, I turned right,
And saw a road, dark as night.
I knew that moment, I had to leave,
For I would never know where these prints would lead.
But the prints still lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
 
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oooh that was so cool! how you can tell these stories and make the words ryme in the most peotic ways! ^^ it's an awsome tallent! you're amazing!
so-who did the foot prints belong to? XD
 
Actually, this happened in real life. XD I was walking back to my grandmothers house, and I saw these footprints which "Appeared to be trodden not long ago". So I followed them...and then they turned right, and I couldnt follow them, because I had to keep walking forward...I found another poem (similar to the rainbow one)

The Storm

Lightning lights the clouded sky,
Followed by rain, hail, and the thunders cry.
This is nature?s power, a wondrous wrath,
Yet we know not, the strength it hath,
The rain beats down, hard and fast,
The wind shrieks, like falling shards of broken glass,
Then the hail, pounds endlessly,
And on top, fighting in the night,
Light and Sound clash, with all their might.
And then, as if it never came,
All is quiet, Just the noise, of pounding of rain.
 
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Yeah that is a great poem ^^> Plus Lizzie, at the end she said dhe had to leave so. So she never knew who the footprints belong to, atleast I think I am right XD. Anway great job ^^.

Pokemon_Veteran
 
Yeah XD I actually wanted to meet the person IRL XD
 
right...>_<;; lol okay sry 'bout that XD they're really cool! you make poems seem so easy to write! it's a real tallent! you should collect them and send them to a contest somehwere...
 
I tried, but they were all scams...XD I need an idea, anyone wanna inspire me? =3
 
thats a good poem, eli ^^
no spelling errors, which is awesome
 
^o^ Thanks! I make sure not to make any spelling errors...
 
Eliana said:
XD! I am so touched...XD
Thanks guys ^^ I got another done:

Footprints

I saw some footprints, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
Thoughts arose in my head,
Who is this person? what life has he led?
I began to follow them, at steady pace,
Past winding roads, a seeming maze.
But there they lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
I couldn't give up, for I've reached this far,
The sun is setting, 'tis turning dark.
I walked ahead, in full speed,
Wondering where these marks could lead.
For if they end, I shall meet,
The one who left them, in the street.
But there they lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
Full of hope, I turned right,
And saw a road, dark as night.
I knew that moment, I had to leave,
For I would never know where these prints would lead.
But the prints still lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
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Weeeee, I just read this one, and I wuved it! <3

This poem seems to symbolize how you can see a trace left by someone, and you wonder about it, and the person who left the trace. It's like when you're in a crowded shopping mall and you see a certain person and you begin to wonder what their life's like.

Do they have a family? Are they happy or sad? Do they live in a house or in an apartment? A lot of these different questions arise and you hope to find out some more information about the person.

In your poem's case, you are curious as to who left the footprints, so you begin to follow them to find out who had left them. Soon you begin to wonder more about the person, making you ever more eager to find the person.

I absolutely loved this poem Eli, it was very nicely written. *glomps* Keep it up! =3

~Kelsey
 
Aww thanks! ^_^
I need an idea, I just cant think of one....
 
Eliana said:
XD! I am so touched...XD
Thanks guys ^^ I got another done:

Footprints

I saw some footprints, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
Thoughts arose in my head,
Who is this person? what life has he led?
I began to follow them, at steady pace,
Past winding roads, a seeming maze.
But there they lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
I couldn't give up, for I've reached this far,
The sun is setting, 'tis turning dark.
I walked ahead, in full speed,
Wondering where these marks could lead.
For if they end, I shall meet,
The one who left them, in the street.
But there they lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
Full of hope, I turned right,
And saw a road, dark as night.
I knew that moment, I had to leave,
For I would never know where these prints would lead.
But the prints still lay, in the snow,
Appearing to be trodden, not long ago.
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This is so nice eli!!! I have never read a poem by you!!! I guess its time I start reading them xD

Good job with all of them though! ^_^
 
Thanks!

I'm planning on trying to do another Lugia poem again ^^
 
!!! I would love to read another poem from you, Eli. You have a true gift in poetry, I adore reading all your poems. *glomps* I can't wait for the next one. ^^

~Kelsey
 
Hopefully I'l finish it soon XD I tend to work rather slowly sometimes
 
That's all right Eli. ^_______________^ You should always take your time when writing a poem, because then you really put a lot of effort into it. ^^ There's no rush, we can hold out until you've got a new masterpiece set for us. *glomps*

~Kelsey
 
^_^ I just got one done...its short but whatever XD

Falling

Falling, falling, from the trees,
Leaves of red, leaves of green.
Falling, falling, to the ground,
They fall in silence, with no sound.
Falling, falling, forever light,
Falling, falling, into the night.
 
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Eliana said:
^_^ I just got one done...its short but whatever XD

Falling

Falling, falling, from the trees,
Leaves of red, leaves of green.
Falling, falling, to the ground,
They fall in silence, without sound.
Falling, falling, forever light,
Falling, falling, into the night.
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Really great, Eli. Hard to explain why, but it's awesome XD
 
Eliana said:
^_^ I just got one done...its short but whatever XD

Falling

Falling, falling, from the trees,
Leaves of red, leaves of green.
Falling, falling, to the ground,
They fall in silence, without sound.
Falling, falling, forever light,
Falling, falling, into the night.
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Don't worry about length. If you read the Poetry FAQ, you'll see that it states how a poem can be of any length and still be full of meaning. ^^ Your poem, had plenty of meaning.

I adored how it's symbolizing the autumn leaves, as they fall from their tree host to the earth below. In a way, it's somewhat of an adventure for them. They have to make a perilous journey from their home they once knew, to an all new world below.

Yet there are many dangers, for the seemingly carefree leaf can be swept off course by the howling wind or struck down by some other outside force. ^^

I saw no spelling errors which ish awsome. ^_____^ I did, however, have trouble with one line:
"They fall in silence, without sound."
The part "without sound" kind of threw off the flow for me. I might recommend changing it to "without a sound" instead, but it's really your decision. ^o^

Yet another awsome poem Eli, keep 'em comin'! ^_~

~Kelsey
 
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