My poems- Once again XD

Eliana

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    I have returned, cuz I found some poems I totally forgot about *blink* XD

    Lets get it started then shall we? XD

    I will start with this one,since its dedicated to all those who died in Asia due to the Tsunami...


    If Only Tears Could Bring you Back

    These endless tears roll down my face,
    Mourning for you, for endless days,
    But I cant move on, and face the facts,
    If only tears could bring you back.
    Please watch us from above,
    Send us peace, light as a dove.
    If only I could change the past,
    If only tears could bring you back.
    Life goes on, never stops,
    I'm gratfeul for what I've got,
    I wait for you, through rolling grass,
    If only tears could bring you back.

    Now....
    I'l post one more for now, I just found it. I'm gonna edit it later...

    Why

    I've always wondered- why is the world so cold?
    Fighting, Lying, Crying, Dying, its getting old.
    I wish it would all go away,
    To another Place,
    Away from me, its all waste.
    I dream of a land, far away, of hills of green.
    Why? why cant the world be this way?
    Must it be dry, like a drought ravaged ground?
    I wonder...
    Even nature fights, these ways,
    Lightning and thunder, clashing together,
    But there is some hope, a far away rainbow,
    Shedding light on the darkest of places.
    For I miss those Ruby lights, high in the sky.
    They would light up my face, so I wouldnt cry.
    But now I'm alone, away from home.
    I miss those days, long ago,
    But now...I'm alone.

    I've always wondered- why is the world so cold?
    Fighting, Lying, Dying… it's getting old.
    I wish it would go far, far away.
    Away from me, and all its waste.
    Where did the peaceful silence go?
    Why did we end up this way?
    Must the world be arid like a drought ravaged ground?
    I wonder...
    Even nature fights these deadly ways,
    Lightning and thunder clashing together,
    But there is some hope, a far away rainbow,
    Shedding light in the darkest of places.
    For I miss those Ruby lights, high in the sky.
    They would light my face, so I wouldn't cry.
    But now I'm alone, away from home.
    I miss those days, so long ago,
    But now...I'm all alone.


    I capitalized Ruby, because this poem is dedicated to Israel and my dog Ruby, and I just realized that I put "ruby" in the poem cuz it was in honor of her...Shes in Israel now...

    This is the beginning of song that I may or may not write:

    Your nothin', you always were,
    It went by in a blur,
    It was just a dream,
    Now your nothin' to me,
    It was all lies, what you've been sayin'
    Cuz you never existed, you were always nothin'

    *sits down* Comments are always accepted! XD
     
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    Meh, I made some of em songs ^^
     
    Wow, Eli, those poems are awsome!! First, the one dedicated to the people of Asia...this one has a really great flow it, and the words are also used in a great format. I see no spelling errors too, so that's wonderful! XD

    Now on to Why...this one ish soo kawaii Eli! I didn't notice any spelling errors, and the flow to your poem is very well put together. I think the overall message of your poem really sticks out, and that's good. ^_____^

    Now to the song...this song is good considering you;ve only started it, I likez teh song very much.

    Awsome job Eli, they're all very great. *glomps Eli*

    ~Kelsey
     
    0_0;;; Thank you! XD that was very insightful! XD
    I hate spelling errors, though I do make typos from typing so fast...
    I'l put another up. 'twas my first, so it has many verions...I'l put up the first one I can find XD
    This is the oldest version, I'l find the newer ones later XD

    Oh here it is XD

    Life

    Life is but sorrow and tears,
    Where darkness looms and chaos leers,
    If Hope shall fail, Light will cease to shine,
    If Light will be forgotten, Hope shall die.
    When shall the sun, come out again?
    Will the clouds clear up, will the wars end?
    Will the blue bird sing, once again at dawn?
    Instead of the crow, with its evil caw?
    Life is but sorrow and tears,
    Fear not, for peace is near.
     
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    Awwwwws, Eli, that last one was so cute! ^o^ There was only one spelling error. I think you meant Come instead of some. XD But other than that little thing, your poem is very good. Lately, everyone's been writing poems about hopelessness. ;-; It was very good though, Eli dear. ^_____^

    ~Kelsey
     
    Thanks! ^^
    Kelsey, thanks, I was typing to fast XD
     
    That's OK! I've made plenty of spelling errors in my time. XD No need to worry about it too much. ^o^

    ~Kelsey
     
    Allright! XD I think I'l post The Curse of Hate soon...@_@ its really long
     
    Woah Eli, they are wonderful! You have great inspiration!
     
    Yeah! actually, I did! XD!
    Life was because these kids were teasing me about pokemon xD;;
     
    ^^ thanks so much Tabitha! greatly appreciated! ^^
     
    Eli, you rawk. XD Those are great. I really like he second poem cause it kinda shows how bad the world is XD
     
    Yeah, thats the point, Kev thankies! ^^
     
    I hate them, there awfully bad, ekk hell know to them!









    <3 em really
     
    :'( eli....they're so beautiul, they go right to the heart, *coughthatoneabouttearsisfamilier* you should make a book with these, they're so skillfully made :'( ^^
     
    Thanks! XD when I get depressed I write my best poems ^^
     
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