Poem of the Week 5

[TJgamer]

The winner has now been chosen

This week's winner is mervyn797's "Dreams of Peace".

Spoiler:

Dreams of Peace
I woke up in dreamy state
My mind was half asleep.
I saw no thing that I would hate
The scene I saw, could weep.

A bitter battle there ensued
Clashing swords and shield.
Like a storm the men shrewd
I wept, I prayed, I kneeled.

They didn't hear; nor stopped
Though marched ahead with fear.
For glory, for honour, they chopped
Heads, their intentions were queer.

Widows and children long cried
Days and nights, all weather.
Their men, their fathers had died
All that left was old heather.

At once, I gave out a scream
The scene outside was a shock.
I realized this was no dream
No man outside did walk.

Nations and leaders always demand
All we want is peace.
Nevertheless they command
Their guns never decrease.

Congratulations to you! Your emblem should arrive soon.
And good job to all of you for showing us your works.

The next theme will be decided soon. Be on the lookout for it.

 

[Astinus]

This week's winner is mervyn797's "Dreams of Peace".
Congratulations to you! Your emblem should arrive soon.
And good job to all of you for showing us your works.

Congratulations mervyn797! Enjoy your new emblem!

And thank you to everyone who wrote an entry. Looking forward to seeing more of everyone's great talent.

 

[mervyn797]

wow!! i won!!!! thank you Astinus and TJgamer. i sure appreciate it.

 

[TJgamer]

The next contest's theme has been chosen. Look at the first post for details.
Also our winner, mervyn797, has decided to be a judge for this week.

 

[Gardenia101]

My entry:

Spoiler:

In this world I'm alone,
To all others I'm unknown.
I've barricaded my door,
Cluttered my floor.
They don't care for me,
They all leave me be.
My heart is in pieces,
My will decreases.
When they hear my cries of pain,
They all think I'm insane.
Nothing will heal me,
And I face that fact tearfully.

A change for me- it ryhmes!
Of course, it's not very long, but... oh well.

 

[TJgamer]

Your entry is in.
I can't wait to see the the other entries.

 

[Dahlia411]

Cool!! I'm going to try for next week's theme!!
Great Job to all contestants!!

My Entry:

What Is Feared?

What people fear the most
Is saddness, I must say
It brakes the heart
Causes pain
And tears flow down like rain
The only thing that can cheer you up,
Is happiness
As someone wise told me
That it may be stormy now
but it cannot rain forever

I saw this saying on a wallpaper, and now I thought it kinda sounded like the theme

 

[mervyn797]

I saw this saying on a wallpaper, and now I thought it kinda sounded like the theme

Ummmm... You must post an entry which is your own creation.

 

[Dahlia411]

Sorry but, I'm not sure of the author to give the quote credit to, if I do find it, I'll include it. :)

I just featured the quote. I'm not taking credits for someone else, it wouldn't be fair.

the rest is my creation, that's fine if you don't want to include it, I just featured the quote. Again, I'm sorry about that. Sorry if I'm coming off mean or anything

 

[TJgamer]

An entry for the contest must be the work of the contestant.
You don't have to feel hard or anything, Dahlia. I understand.

 

[Dahlia411]

Thanks I'll try again next time. Sorry for wasting your time

 

[Daydream]

I think I'll have a go at entering. Here's my poem;

Spoiler:

Too Much

I just can't cope,
With how you pressure me so.
I'm falling down a slope,
And I have no way to slow.

Yes, I have a brain,
But no one likes me.
I don't think I'm sane,
And that's what they see.

At times I just cry,
Face down on the bed.
All the reasons why,
That's the pain in my head.

And when it gets worst,
When I'm my most sad,
I'll not be the first,
A person going mad.

I'm Not done just yet,
Not the time, you see.
I'll remain here alone,
Melancholy.
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It's probably obvious, but you have to stress the "lee" sound at the end of "Melancholy" for the last rhyme to work.

 

[TJgamer]

Your poem is in.
And I can accept on how the last rhyme works.

 

[TJgamer]

-Announcement-
The entry time has been postponed until next week (September 7, 2010).
We need more entries than just two.

 

[Zirkle38]

Welp, hurrs mine. Not the best, but I'm not great at sad poems. Can't really think of a witty title, so call it... Not Again.

I lay on my bed,
Thoughts of you running through my head
You gave us a chance,
Our love was such a boring dance.
You were there for me
And the same I could not be.
I ended it on such a sad note
And that was all she wrote.
Until that day where I let my jealousy
Get the best of me
I called you up on my own time
And you gave me a happy reply
The second time through
Was even more cause for gloom
I broke your heart twice,
You were my own little vice
Now I can see the irony,
I want you, you can't stand me.

 

[TJgamer]

Your poem is in.
I hope there's more entries coming.

 

[Gardenia101]

Man, not much entries lately, huh?

 

[TJgamer]

Unfortunately, no.
But there'll be more. I can tell.

 

[chimpakt]

I love merv's and Shin. Meganium's poems on peace. Merv used better poetic devices but Meganium's poem was the one i liked better. Probably because peace is misinterpreted these days and i agree with how ppl think they can buy peace.

 

[TJgamer]

Thanks for the comment.
You could try entering the contest too if you want to.
I'm eager for another contestant.