Poetry?

[Aya-chan]

Well...this is not really poetry but I don't know where to put it -_-()()

My friend (she doesn't want her name to be said, since she's in PC) helped me with this.
Okay, here goes...

The little girl cried,
Cried for her sister.
She stopped; someone
Had been comforting her.
She looked up, she gasped
Her beloved sister
Was right beside her
Her face tear-washed
But she wept no longer
And smiled instead, smiled
At the sight of her beloved
Who was smiling back.
"From this day on.."
Her sister promised,
"I shall never leave
You anymore."

I know! It's horrible isn't it? At least the part that I did is horrible.

 

[Teara]

Aww, I think you can conzider that poetry. It dozn't have a rythem like a poem but the ztory iz very cute. It remindz me of thoze little thingz you zee knit onto pillowz zometimez ^_^
I like it, and actually, if you edited it a little you could make it into a very nice poem.
*ztartz getting ideaz*
Heh,I better go before I ztart thinking about it too much ^^;;

Keep writing, I really think you have a talent ^_-

 

[100marios]

It's a free-form poem..... at least I think it is, hehe....
I think it's really quite nice! You and your friend did a really good job on it! I hope you make more!

 

[Aya-chan]

Awww, thanks guys! I'll *we'll* try to make some more. I'll also try what you suggested Teara. Thanks so much, again!

 

[oni flygon]

It's a poem alright. You should read E.E. Cumming's Poems. They're really complicated (no rhyme, meter and stuff) but they're considered as peoms. Sometimes, a line just needs one word. O-o