FireRed hack: Pokemon Death Spawn

[Sparkcaster]

POKEMON DEATH SPAWN

STORYLINE

One day in july 27th.. Your brother brandon from patelburg city gym..he sends you a latter..
On the latter it says Hello (HERO/HEROINE) how are you doing? Today is your birthday right?
your birthday is in july 27 isnt it? well then happy birthday! There is friend of mine in the same town you live..
So just roam around and you will eventually find him..
When you find him (WHICH BECOMES YOUR RIVAL LATER ON IN THE GAME) tell him this: Brandon said you need to get to hoenn..
its is very important..


After 2 more years...

You now become 14 and you wake up. You go out to the first route without any pokemon. then your rival finds you in the route
then he says You have a death wish or something? going out to a route with out any pokemon. then he takes you to the
Proffrsors lab. then the prof gives you and your rival starter pokemon.. then you and your rival battle for testing which pokemon is
batter. Then you go out on your journey. on your way on ROUTE 1040 you find three TEAM ROCKET GRUNT and one TEAM ROCKET ADMIN. you hide
behind a Tree and listen to what they are saying. They are talking about the negative ganarator. the negative ganarator which effects a pokemon which causes it become a dark type pokemon. (FOR EXAMPLE-DARK TORCHIC) then they saw you spying on them.. then you battle those three team rocket
grunt. and then the team rocket admin and grunt goes away.Then you go back to the prof lab and report it to the prof
the prof explains what happens with the generator-The generator only detects pokemon the ganarator doesnt detect any human..
if anyone takes any pokemon next to the ganarator it gives the pokemon Black Electrical shocks wich effects there brain
and causes them to become dark pokemon. i wonder what is team rocket is doing with the generator? To stop that generator.
humans cant stop it. only dark type pokemons can.. they also has to have alot of power lavel.. well there are 2 pokemons
that meets the requirements..You either get DARKRAI or GERATINA to use his shadow ball attack on the generator.. then and
only then the ganarator will be stopped. Trust me.. I have been a professor since i was 25.. and now i became old..
i would stop it myself. but i am too weak. now its up to you.. you can only go and ask DARKRAI or GARATINA if they will help.
if not the ganarator will keep on making pokemon into dark.. and turn the world into a place of crime. there will be no justice.
so its only upto you.. Then he tells you about to stop the boss of team rocket giovanni first. Then he explained about
to train your pokemon very well.He also explains about the 8 Pokemon GYM of the Gieno Region.He says beating those gym
will help you on your adventure. And then you head for the gym and to stop team rocket. On your way to the journey you
meet new pokemon trainers.. new raivals.. new gym leaders......



TO BE CONTENUED....
EDIT:THE STORYLINE IS STILL ON PROGRESS.. NO NEED TO RUSH.. I AM WORKING ON.

FEATURES

-New Characters (HERO AND HEROINE)
-New Rivals
-New Tiles
-New Music
-New Events
-New Pokemons
-New GYM Leaders
-New MINI Games

SCREENSHOTS

SUPPORT BANNERS

-NOT YET-

TEAM

Sparkcaster-Tile Editor,Music Editor,Scripter,Mapper,Pallet Editor,Story Maker,Spriter,Graphic Artist
NTA-Indexer,Titlescreen Maker
Samike360-Scripter

And if you wanna join hear is the application form

Application Form
Name:
Skills:
Job Wanted
Proof of work:
Contact Info:
Past Experiences:

CREDITS

-Keyldove-Tiles
-WesleyFG-Tiles
-Alistar-Tiles
-NTA-Titlescreen
-VG MUSIC-Midi

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[Pokemon12345678901]

You might want to expand your storyline or a moderator might close this thread.

 

[Sparkcaster]

You might want to expand your storyline or a moderator might close this thread.

The storyline is still on progress.. thats why it says to be continued..

~Sparkcaster~

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[Crimson Stardust]

This sounds good...so you are going solo with this hack???
then good luck with it..;)

 

[Sparkcaster]

This sounds good...so you are going solo with this hack???
then good luck with it..;)

Maybe i will start a team.. if i dont get any people on the team i will go solo..

~Sparkcaster~
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[Vrai]

Well.. you really don't have much here. The storyline isn't very attractive; what you should do to fix that is to at least make it fit the title somehow. Also, you shouldn't ever, ever put dialogue into a storyline. A good storyline should say what the game won't.

The features are generic, as are with most hacks. I also only see three screenshots; some won't load on my screen, for some vague reason. But what I do see in those screens, is mostly poor mapping. You have decent skill with tiles, which is good, but you should probably have spent some more time with this before opening a thread. The mapping I see is very empty and plain-looking.. it should be filled more, and with more people (or events, whatever you want to call them.)

By the way, don't make a team section unless there are multiple people working on the hack. If you're working on it all by your lonesome, just say so in the description of the hack.

And that's really all I have to say. You should probably take some time and think about what you really want to achieve with this hack.. it might help you a bit. (Also, work on that storyline some more.)

 

[/Circa]

I'll give this to you as positive as I can, boring storyline, bad graphics.

Too many hacks are getting the same impression from me these days.
But I guess I wish you the best of luck.

 

[Sparkcaster]

Well.. you really don't have much here. The storyline isn't very attractive; what you should do to fix that is to at least make it fit the title somehow. Also, you shouldn't ever, ever put dialogue into a storyline. A good storyline should say what the game won't.

The features are generic, as are with most hacks. I also only see three screenshots; some won't load on my screen, for some vague reason. But what I do see in those screens, is mostly poor mapping. You have decent skill with tiles, which is good, but you should probably have spent some more time with this before opening a thread. The mapping I see is very empty and plain-looking.. it should be filled more, and with more people (or events, whatever you want to call them.)

By the way, don't make a team section unless there are multiple people working on the hack. If you're working on it all by your lonesome, just say so in the description of the hack.

And that's really all I have to say. You should probably take some time and think about what you really want to achieve with this hack.. it might help you a bit. (Also, work on that storyline some more.)

What dont you understand about the storyline still on progress? its very straight.. STORYLINE STILL ON PROGRESS. i understand what you say about bad mapping. but what do you mean by plain maps? i mean there is the house there is the tree there is the flowers there are the mountians and there is the ground? what else can you ask?

~Sparkcaster~
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[Vrai]

What dont you understand about the storyline still on progress? its very straight.. STORYLINE STILL ON PROGRESS. i understand what you say about bad mapping. but what do you mean by plain maps? i mean there is the house there is the tree there is the flowers there are the mountians and there is the ground? what else can you ask?

~Sparkcaster~
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Uhh, yeah, about that.. you should probably finish at least your idea for your storyline before you make a thread.. And, what I mean by plain maps, is empty maps. Take a gander at some of the maps in the Map Rating Thread (specifically, I've noticed that MASTEROFPUPPETS93's maps are excellent for this) to see how exactly good maps aren't empty. Of course, some of the emptiness is filled up with people and stuff, but still, your maps should look natural.

 

[Banjora Marxvile]

Hang on... The Still in progress storyline? If you want to get good reviews, you should have a full idea before posting. People will then see you mean business. I know it says "still in progress", but most hackers have an idea started, and sometimes even have got a lot started in the hack before posting. Story first, then maps, then scripts.

Now, to the tiles. The mountain looks good, but the grassy ground doesn't fit the mountain, and the tree's pallette doesn't look too right... But that is it.

 

[Sparkcaster]

Hang on... The Still in progress storyline? If you want to get good reviews, you should have a full idea before posting. People will then see you mean business. I know it says "still in progress", but most hackers have an idea started, and sometimes even have got a lot started in the hack before posting. Story first, then maps, then scripts.

Now, to the tiles. The mountain looks good, but the grassy ground doesn't fit the mountain, and the tree's pallette doesn't look too right... But that is it.

There.. i added the full storyline.. so tell me how is it?

~Sparkcaster~​

 

[Mana1]

I'm sorry but the story is hard to follow because of the lack of proper punctuation and constant spelling mistakes. '...' is something that should only be used at the end of the story (or just don't use it at all!).

But erm yeah, fix it up and it could be interesting.

 

[Sparkcaster]

I'm sorry but the story is hard to follow because of the lack of proper punctuation and constant spelling mistakes. '...' is something that should only be used at the end of the story (or just don't use it at all!).

But erm yeah, fix it up and it could be interesting.

There.. i fixed the spelling mistakes.. now read the storyline..

~Sparkcaster~
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[Mana1]

Spelling mistakes picked up by good old word:
Proffrsors
Ganarator
Pokemons (Pokemon is plural on its own ;))
Wich
Lavel
Raivals

You also spelt Giratina wrong in two different ways.

And Batter is probably meant to be Better.


But yeah, now I vaguely understand your story, its okay but its not that intriguing, you make it sound as though everything happens very, very quickly in the game and that puts me off.

 

[HackChu]

Hey man,I say good luck with this,from what Ive been reading people haven't said much good things about this,sure the palettes and looks of the maps should change,but when I was reading the text in such,I thought that the scripts and storyline would be decent...so I say continue on.

 

[Sparkcaster]

Hey man,I say good luck with this,from what Ive been reading people haven't said much good things about this,sure the palettes and looks of the maps should change,but when I was reading the text in such,I thought that the scripts and storyline would be decent...so I say continue on.

Thanks. you are the fifth one who is supporting this hack.. i appreciate it :D

~Sparkcaster~
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[Sparkcaster]

Hey i just noticed you had no support banner so i decided to make you an example :)

The pokemon sprites are made by me to look like dark types to go with your story!

So let me know what you think and we can talk about making you a proper one with different colours and pokemon fonts etc.

I will try my best to meet your needs!
So here you go!

Remember just an example. Well use it if you like ^.^

Hey thanks.. i will put this in the thread as a support banner..

~Sparkcaster~​

 

[Sparkcaster]

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[Ray Maverick]

I love the name!!The story is big cool,but the event is random.XD
Nice screenshots,tiles etc.

 

[KevinFx!]

looks good but the palletes are very darker...