Silent the Lucario
Novice Mapper
- 27
- Posts
- 15
- Years
- Somewhere in Hoenn
- Seen Jul 15, 2022
There isn't enough information about your character. All that we know physically is that she has brown hair, amber eyes, that she is "pretty tall", and a nice smile. That isn't much of a physical description to me. How tall is she, rather than pretty tall, estimate if you have to. How does she style her hair? Really nice smile? That isn't going to get anywhere. Everyone has a nice smile so I suggest you get rid of that trait and add something else. What happened to her clothes? Does she go out naked or something. No the sprite will not cut it. Look at the other SU's you should get a good idea about how much you need in yours.
History is really lacking. You could have gone more in-depth with her sister and actually done some things that would make her somewhat interesting. Again if you don't understand this SU then just look at the ones before you, you should get a general idea.
Personality isn't much either. She's very nice and somewhat shy? Come on I know you can do better than that. Anyone can be shy, nervous, and be nice. In her personality list things that make your character who she is. Like what she likes, what she hates, her habits, quirks, her drives/motivations, and things like that.
Did you not read the rules?
They never do :/ It's very annoying when people don't read the ****ing rules! Just read them! It's not hard at all!