Seaforma Adventure!

[~Vannah~]

Before I continue to chapter 2 rate how I'm doing right now here they are, the characters are coming soon! ^_^
Introduction
Chapter 1-The Pokemon and the Friend!

 

[Kurosaki Ichigo]

Its a little....simple to be honest, everything is rushed, and their isn't much plot to it either, try to come up with something more original than simple adventures that are rushed.

 

[~Vannah~]

OK I'll try to do that on chapter 2....

 

[Persona]

This comic really needs work. On the first episode, it was rushed. Like on the 9th section, the girl wanted to join her and now they're both together? That was fast, no?

Also, try to make the sections bigger, they're too small. And the bubble speech's need work.

Remember, I'm not saying that your comic is bad. I'm just pointing things out to help you make your comic better.

 

[The Dash]

The speach bubbles are disgusting and stick to one frame size!

 

[Simplicity]

I guess it is ok but it is rushed and the speech bubbles need a bit of working.

altarialover :t334:

 

[Krazy_Meerkat]

I didn't like the speech bubble colour, but it looked very nice with the other coloured ones :D

 

[Houndoom1]

Work on the speech bubbles and slowthe comic down a little everything is going to fast. It's an okay comic just needs alot of work.

 

[~Vannah~]

*sigh* Well that's my first comic I ever done...... Oh well I'll start all over

 

[~*!*~Tatsujin Gosuto~*!*~]

Umm.. the link isn't there anymore.

:t094:~*!*~Queen Boo~*!*~

 

[Signomi]

Considering the links are no longer there, then this thread shall be temporarily closed until the thread creator PMs me anytime concerning the comics of this thread, otherwise it shall stay closed.

~Closed