[Pokémon] The Rise of the New Aura Gaurdian!!!

[Mirimaju]

"We've reached the grand finale of this championship both only have one Pokemon left" said the announcer. The crowd burst into excitement at the sight of Sinnoh's champion Cynthia unleashing her final Pokemon "battle dance Garchomp" The crowd gets even more eager but frontier brain Palmer and his Rhyperior seem unphased. "Dragon Pulse" shouts Cynthia but Palmer's Rhyperior defends himself with Protect. "Now get'em with Hammer Arm" commands Palmer but Garchomp skyrockets upwards dodging the attack and dives in with Fire Fang and causes an explosion. As the smoke clears Rhyperior doesn't even have a scratch on it. "The time has come for Giga Impact" says Cynthia and Palmer replies with "Counter it with Rock Wrecker". Both charge towards one another the power of both attacks sends shockwaves through the stadium. Just as the two attacks are about clash everything goes black.

"What the?!" shouts A boy who strokes his hands through his dark hair in total angst. "Ethan what are you doing up here everyone's downstairs" says his mother Delilah. "Mom, you just ruined the perfect battle for me" He tries to find the remote "Plus, I don't wanna go to the ball" he whines. Delilah's Delcatty jumps onto his bed. "It's not a ball it's your farewell party for your journey tomorrow it's not every day a prince decides to leave for a journey" she replies. He looks down and smiles as he pets Delcatty who purrs. "I'm really excited for tomorrow but I just don't wanna go to my party I just wanna think" he calmly tells Delilah who nods "Fine, but good luck getting her off she seems comfortable" referring to her Delcatty.

As soon as she leaves he turns on the TV to catch the ending of the championship but instead it's Sinnoh News reporting on some crime rate rise and something about a bad organization. He switches it off and starts to think about whom he will choose. He thinks about using Turtwig and knocking out Cynthia's Garchomp with Leaf Storm or Chimchar taking Palmer's Rhyperior down with Flamethrower or maybe Piplup defeating both with Whirlpool. As his thoughts run wild his blue eyes ignite with a blinding light.

Meanwhile in a vast canyon A Lucario jumps from mountain top to mountain top trying to escape from a series of helicopters following her. A Flygon soaring above the helicopters lets out a cry signaling danger. Lucario clutches her egg sinister looking people in uniforms call out Zubats and Golbats to use Supersonic Lucario dodges each one of them. Sadly the same cannot be said for Lairon and the three Arons behind him or even an Onix who swings its tail at them. A bunch of Graveler use Rock Throw but it's no good. Soon they are captured by a barrage of pokeball.

A Golbat is about to hit Lucario with Wing Attack but Flygon swoops in and strikes it down with his Steel Wing. One of the commanders sends out his Toxicroak who gets Lucario with its Poison Jab. She loses balance and seems badly poisoned. Her eggs gets loose and is falling hundreds of feet towards the river below. She lets out a cry for help and Flygon tries to grab hold of it but fails. The last thing she sees before she is captured is her unborn child splash onto the rapids. As soon as it hit the water the light in Ethan's eyes fades instantly as he awakes screaming. "What was that A bad dream or something…" he mumbles to himself. He can't go back to sleep but it's alright with only an hour away of his alarm going off. He thinks about how vivid and realistic that dream was.

 

[bobandbill]

To be honest the story feels a little rushed in places - you do well to show us the boy's enthusiasum for Pokemon for instance, which was neat to read about - but there's some things I feel you could improve. Most of the errors seem to come from unfinished or incompleted sentences running off one another, which some proofreading or even just a spell/grammar check would have caught. For instance, looking at the first paragraph:

"We've reached the grand finale of this championship both only have one Pokemon left" said the announcer. The crowd burst into excitement at the sight of Sinnoh's champion Cynthia unleashing her final Pokemon "battle dance Garchomp" The crowd gets even more eager but frontier brain Palmer and his Rhyperior seem unphased.

Firstly, note that dialogue needs some puntuation within dialogue, so for instance here '"We've reached the grand finale of this championship both only have one Pokemon left," said the announcer.' has the comma added after 'left', and "Battle dance, Garchomp." has the full stop at the end. (Note also as it is a new sentence given the way you worded it, there's a capital B for battle, and a comma before Garchomp as Garchomp is being talked to by someone else by name there).

The colours for words and particularly attacks also is rather distracting if anything (and for some forum skins maks some words hard to read as well which just distracts more from the story) - I'd recommend against using it.

"Dragon Pulse" shouts Cynthia but Palmer's Rhyperior defends himself with Protect. "Now get'em with Hammer Arm" commands Palmer but Garchomp skyrockets upwards dodging the attack and dives in with Fire Fang and causes an explosion. As the smoke clears Rhyperior doesn't even have a scratch on it.

Also note that the description could use some improving - it's a good start that you mention at thimes how they execute some moves (e.g. 'dives in with Fire Fang...'), but a way to make the battle more intresting is to show us more on how attacks occur (say with Hammer Arm - we never really 'see' that Rhyperior throws one of his arms at the Garchomp with that attack - it's only implied that it actually does it after the Garchomp 'dodges(ing) the attack', and also with Protect - we don't see how Rhyperior protects itself from the Dragon Pulse attack and how that works).

Also adding in reactions from the Pokemon/trainers themselves would add to the battle's action - say would Garchomp and Cynthia be annoyed that the Dragon Pulse attack did nothing, and hence growl in frustration? Adding in such details makes the events more realistice and easier to imagine as well.

"What the?!" shouts A boy who strokes his hands through his dark hair in total angst.

Also note the odd small consistent mistake here and there - for instance there's no need for the 'A' to be capitalised there.

Lucario clutches her egg sinister looking people in uniforms call out Zubats and Golbats to use Supersonic Lucario dodges each one of them. Sadly the same cannot be said for Lairon and the three Arons behind him or even an Onix who swings its tail at them. A bunch of Graveler use Rock Throw but it's no good. Soon they are captured by a barrage of pokeball.

Proofreading would have helped here as this part was not easy to read. Firstly, it seems that there's two sentences merged into one in the first sentence (...clutched her egg sinister looking people...) - either separate into two sentences or add in a ', while' after 'egg'. Then it's also hard to keep track exactly who is attacking who - I assume the Arons behind 'him' are beind the Lairon, but it was not very obvious and needed some re-reading.

Just some things to consider - it could turn out to be a neat read, but fixing the basic grammar is one of the essentials for a good story. It's an interesting start (I am guessing the dream is more than a dream and mass-Pokemon-catching criminals is always interesting, although if the character ends up getting that Riolu egg then the story may be a bit too predictable in that regard), but you just have to watch out with the execution of the story itself. Hope that helps, and good luck with your fic.

 

[Mirimaju]

The mystery continues...

Ethan still buried in his thoughts doesn't even hear his Hoothoot clock go off. Than a knock at the door snaps him out of it "Huh" he mumbles. "Sir Ethan, your mother asked me to check if you're ready for departure in the next hour" says Jeeves who's the family head butler. "Yeah I'll head down in a bit" he replies. A few minutes later Ethan runs downstairs and has a strong urge to head outside. "You alright Ethan" says Delilah who has Delcatty jumping onto her lap. "Yeah I'm just gonna get some fresh air" he tells her "Very well just be back before nine because…" before she can even finished Ethan is out the door

As he walks through the kingdom many of the town's people congratulate him on starting his journey today. He than spots a couple Pokemon such as Luxio, Staravia, and Furret along with few Oddish and even a local artist's Smeargle going towards the river. 'what's going on here" he wonders. Than spots an Azumarill fishing something out of the water as its two Azurill, Marill and the other Pokemon watch. She pulls out a blue and black egg. The egg starts to glow and than unleashes a harsh light blinding everyone in its sight. Except for Ethan who has flashes of his dream and how that egg was in it.

The egg's light than fades. "Can I see it" Ethan ask Azumarill who looks at the egg than at Ethan and back at the egg. Azumarill smiles and hands the egg to Ethan. "Could this be the same egg" he mumbles. "He than catches the time on his watch 8:45 a.m. he needs to head back to the castle. He than paces himself as the other Pokemon happily follow. He spots his mother and Jeeves with their Delcatty and Mime Jr. "Ethan, what do you have there" asked Delilah. He holds up the egg. "A Pokemon egg where on earth did you get it from" Jeeves follows up with. Ethan explains how Azumarill fished it out and that he thinks it's best if they hold on to it after all it was in the river. Delilah looks unsure than the Egg flashes a familiar light. The Pokemon who had followed stare in aw.

Several townspeople crowd around the beautiful light Ethan is holding. "Is that a crack?! I think its hatching" says Ethan in sudden excitement. "Riolu, Ri Riolu" whimpers the newborn. He opens his eyes to see Ethan's smiling face than looks to see everyone else's faces. Riolu jumps out of Ethan's arm. The townspeople get closer. Riolu than has a flashback of the humans who separated him from his mother as an egg "Rio" yells Riolu and launches an Aura Sphere towards the crowd who disband evading it. The townspeople scream only evoking Riolu. Riolu in a panic keeps launching them. His body is glowing a harsh reddish color. Ethan runs towards Riolu and holds on to it telling it to stop and how they're not a threat.

Than the two are alone everything is pitch black except Ethan is glowing blue and Riolu red. Riolu than looks at Ethan in the eye. "Rio" Riolu says in a calmer tone. For some odd reason Riolu has total faith in Ethan. His deep red light starts to change color and becomes a zen blue like Ethan's. Soon reality sets in and both of them are back at the kingdom smiling at one another. But the block is wrecked by Riolu's surprised attack move. Everyone looks frighten of the small hatchling even his mother Delilah and Jeeves look deathly afraid. The pokemon who had folllowed Ethan along with Delcatty and Mime Jr. have sad expressions on their faces. Ethan looks at them and thinks "uh oh"

To be continued…

 

[bobandbill]

Oh, I replied to your PM before seeing you had another chapter. =p

So it seems Ethan really was a prince - I had assumed that when his mum had just referred to him as so it was just a term of endearment... I feel you could have established that fact more in the opening chapter then as this still feels a bit rushed, seeing I had assumed the such.

You still could use some time to proofread and expand on the story - are you typing this in the reply box? If so I strongly recommend taking the time to write in a proper program like Word (or if you don't have that thre's always the free-to-download OpenOffice) which has built-in spelling/grammar checkers (and you can find online ones as well). It just feels that you're rushing the story, as there's simple things like

"Yeah I'm just gonna get some fresh air," he tells her. "Very well, just be back before nine because…" but before she can even finished Ethan is out the door.

As he walks through the kingdom many of the town's people congratulate him on starting his journey today. He than spots a couple Pokemon such as Luxio, Staravia, and Furret along with a few Oddish and even a local artist's Smeargle going towards the river. 'what's going on here?"he wonders. Than he spots an Azumarill fishing something out of the water as its two Azurill, Marill and the other Pokemon watch.

All the red, bolded things are stuff that were missing and ned to be added (like the punctuation, and words like 'but' and 'he') or things that are incorrect (like the 'a' in Then rather than, well, 'Than' should be an e, the tense of finish/finished, etc) - and a bunch of this would have been picked by a spell/grammar checker, and a proofread would have lft his looking far better too.

The egg starts to glow and than unleashes a harsh light blinding everyone in its sight. Except for Ethan who has flashes of his dream and how that egg was in it.

This seems rather odd for an egg to do as well without any reason - even if a Riolu is inside of it I don't see a reason for it to do that.

Riolu than has a flashback of the humans who separated him from his mother as an egg "Rio" yells Riolu and launches an Aura Sphere towards the crowd who disband evading it.

I also question how the Riolu knows about the humans when it had been still unborn... and how it could use an Aura Sphere attack just after being born as well (especially as it's not a move they are typically born with in the games for instance) - it strikes me as too unrealistic, to be honest. Then Ethan somehow manages to calm it down as well which was predictable and risks your character being a Gary Stu (as mentioned as being a potential risk in PMs)... and there's still a lot of telling of events with the description as opposed to showing us how things occur and everyone reactions to it, and so forth.

In short it still seems rushed, and I would recommend taking some time to go back through it and editing it so there are less mistakes (which can put off many a reader and makes your work look worse) and that more things in the story is better established. Maybe consider a Beta Reader as well from the Beta Reader thread and check out some other fics which may help with improving your one.

 

[Mirimaju]

Warm Welcome?!

Out of content: Some things in the story may not make sense... now but eventually will it's the fun of the mystery =) Please let me know what you think of the fanfic

The air is filled with tension. It's only been a few seconds since Riolu has calmed down yet it feels like an eternity. At least for Ethan it does. He decides to break the ice "Is everyone okay" he asked the startled crowd. They seem afraid to say anything. A few more moments of silence passed. "He's not dangerous or anything like that" He says. Riolu looks at the ground as if he's ashamed. Ethan grows more tense but than a stroke of hope. Azumarill along with its family come up and hug Ethan ad Riolu. "Huh?" Ethan mumbles than he smiles as does Riolu. The crowds keeps staring still afraid yet skeptical. Soon Luxio, Staravia, the Oddish, and Furret join in. The air seems to be getting less tense. Smeargle goes into the group hug which sparks Delcatty and Mime Jr. to join as well.

"They say Pokemon can sense every sort of emotion, especially when it comes to friendship, and I hope you can forgive Riolu and be his friends because he needs friends, and we're his friends" He tells everyone around him. Than little by little people start to crack a smile. Granted they are still a few faces that aren't convinced by Ethan. "That's very profound of you Sir Ethan" says Jeeves. Ethan stands up and the Pokemon break from the hug and they all face the crowd. "So, what do you guys say?" Ethan asks. "It's all good, he is a baby after all" says a deep voice. "I have a couple of kids myself" jokes a woman. "My Poochyena rips the cushions all the time" exclaims a little boy petting his Poochyena. It's quite a stretch between ripping cushions and almost exterminating a bunch of the town's people. But Ethan will settle for it. He looks back his mother who has a faint smile on her.

"I think we've seen and heard enough we're already late for our departure to Sandgem town" Delilah tells the crowd in a somewhat calmed tone. The crowds steadily return to their daily routine after bidding a farewell to the royal family. "A word" demands Delilah. The Pokemon wave goodbye to Riolu who waves backs awkwardly but with a smile on his face. Ethan follows her to the back courtyard where a helicopter is already waiting to take them to Sandgem town. "I'm guessing you're planning on keeping Riolu" says Delilah her arms crossed. She wasn't sure she was okay with Riolu traveling with Ethan after what it did. Riolu hides behind Ethan's left leg. After looking at him Ethan responds with "Honestly, I haven't thought about it, but now that you bring up, yeah I am". Delilah shakes her head "Just like your older brother" she tells him and follows up with "Okay than and if you ask me Riolu is pretty cute". Riolu starts to blush

"Is everything quite alright you two?" ask Jeeves who's peeking through the helicopter's door and of course Mime Jr. doing just the same. "Yes, everything's perfect" exclaims Ethan. Delilah "You do realize we have to inform Professor Rowan about Riolu, right?" says Delilah. Ethan nods and has Riolu jump on his shoulder. "This will have to do in till we get you a pokeball Riolu" laughs Ethan as does Riolu. They board the helicopter whose blades start spinning send a cool gust of wind across the courtyard. Riolu doesn't seem very fond of helicopters but still manages to keep its cool. "Ready to see Sinnoh Riolu?" shouts Ethan. "Riolu!" Riolu replies

To be continued...

 

[Mirimaju]

Another New Trainer?!

We're going to be taking a slight detour from Ethan and Riolu to introduce some new faces. But in the words of Dawn "No need to worry" because Ethan and Riolu are still here... You'll see what I mean

On their ride to Sandgem town both Ethan and Riolu are captivated by the views of the Great Marsh a swampy safari zone covered in vines and is said to be crawling with Pokemon. They fly through mount coronet and catch glimpses of Nosepass and Magnemite. Skarmory pass by the helicopter. Riolu is in a daze and Ethan is simply amazed that he's getting a small taste of what's to come on his and Riolu's journey together. Meanwhile, in a small town known as Twinleaf a young lad is getting ready for his first day as a Pokemon trainer.

The blonde headed boy turns on his computer and instantly goes to video chat with his dear friend a Brown headed girl with sparkling green eyes. "What do you think of my new hat?" She asks him pointing a white hat with a red pokeball design on it. "Look good Kelsey I'm guessing that was a present for yourself" he laughs. "Haha oh how you know me so well" she says. "So, are you excited for your big debut a Pokemon coordinator?" He asks her. She answers and follows up with another question. "Absolutely, and let me guess you're just as excited to get your starter Pokemon, huh Trevor?" "Well duh Kelsey" he exaggerates. "Apparently we have another kid coming in today Dad told me he's giving two Pokemon away today" Kelsey tells him.

As they speak a small cry is heard in Kelsey background. She turns to see her Togepi has woken up. "Well I gotta go give Togepi a little something to eat" She says her goodbyes to Trevor. "I'll see you and this new trainer very soon at Professor Rowan's. "My dad and I and Togepi shall be waiting" she exclaims. Trevor catches the time 10:30 he needs to be at the lab in half an hour. He fixes his blonde hair and rushes out the door. On the route to Sandgem town. Trevor spots a few Starly flying by and thinks to himself "I gotta get me one of those". He also sees Bidoof and Shinx and thinks "Those two would be a good addition". "But first things first I gotta get my first Pokemon" he shouts out loud.

He finally arrives at Sandgem town and scouts for Rowan's lab. One small problem he can't find it. "Um… excuse me ma'am uh sir" Trevor tries to ask for directions but everyone just walks back. "A little lost are we" says a familiar voice behind him. He turns around to see Kelsey holding her Togepi who's chowing down on a bluk berry poffin. Togepi's lips are covered in sweet black juice. Trevor sighs and follows Kelsey back to her father's lab. "Here we are" she announces. Than a strong gust of wind comes out of no where startling Togepi. Trevor covering his eyes from flying dirt takes a glimpse upwards.

He sees a helicopter preparing to land. "Talk about an entrance must be this other new trainer" squeals Kelsey. Trevor thinks it's a bit of a show-off move. The helicopter lands and out the door comes a boy with bright blue eyes and a small blue Pokemon on his side. It's none other than Ethan and Riolu. "We're finally here" shouts Ethan in total bliss. His eyes make contact with Trevor's light brown eyes.

To Be Continued…

 

[Mirimaju]

Off To A Rocky Start... is an understatment

My story may seem fast-paced but I'm kind of impatient haha please let me know what you think about my fanfic so far I've worked hard for this =) Please and thank you


"Hey there" says Ethan as he raises his hand like he's going to wave. "Hi" exclaims Kelsey. "Hello" Trevor says as he mirrors Ethan's hand gesture. Kelsey decides to take one for the team and tells Ethan "That quite an entrance". At first confused about what she's talking about and than looks back at helicopter. "Oh yeah haha that was kind of my mom's idea" he laughs. "Ethan, we're going to be late" says Delilah she than notices Kelsey and Trevor who introduce themselves. "So, are you two here for a starter?" ask Delilah. "Nope not me" chuckles Kelsey as she holds Togepi a tad tighter. It's their sign of affection. "I am" says Trevor who notices Riolu. "Wait is that Riolu yours? "Ask Trevor.

"Yeah it actually is" proudly says Ethan. "But I wasn't expecting it today" he tells Trevor. "I actually have to let Rowan know that we had a change in plans haha" Ethan laughs. "So, what are we waiting for let's go see daddy" says Kelsey. As they walk inside they are welcomed by an unpleasant surprise. The lab is completely wrecked. "Hello there we seem to have a couple technical difficulties going" announces a man white a thick white mustache and a lab coat to match. "What's going on Dad?" questions Kelsey. Professor Rowan looks at Ethan and Trevor "you two are the new trainers if I'm correct but sadly the starters have ran off". "What on earth do you mean?" Delilah frowns.

Professor Rowan tells them how the three starters ran away and how they thrashed the lab. The aides had been feeding them when Chimchar who had finished instantly went for seconds. Thing is that his seconds happened to be Piplup's dish. Piplup wasn't so happy and used Pound on Chimchar upside its head. Chimchar retaliated with Scratch. The two went at it. As Turtwig just continued to eat and watch the two go back and forth. The aides noticed this and tried to stop them. But than Chimchar blasted Ember at Piplup dodged the attack The table caught flames aides rushed to get it out. Piplup launched Bubble but Chimchar ran behind Turtwig who took the attack instead. Turtwig just stood down as if nothing happened.

The aides tried to return them to the pokeball but kept missing. Piplup went for Chimchar with Peck. Chimchar got out of the way and Piplup broke through the glass door. Chimchar hopped through the hole and onto Piplup's head, Chimchar kept going and taunting Piplup by shaking and smacking its bum. Piplup ran for it and Turtwig curious about where the two was going followed steadily. When Rowan himself had walked in to see how the water and fire attacks had destroyed a good chunk of his lab he wasn't pleased. He got even more upset when he found out the three had gone off to the wild.

"I hope they're okay the aides have been a searching for twenty minutes but who know that can happen to them in such a short amount of time" said Rowan. Than an idea came to Ethan. A light bulb went off in Trevor's head as well. Than in perfect sync the two shouted "We'll find'em" the two looked at one another puzzled and smiled. Kelsey stood up and agreed with both of them. "its might be dangerous out there" yelled Rowan. "We can handle after all we have my Riolu" said Ethan with determination. "Don't forget Togepi" Kelsey added as Togepi cheered. Rowan was taken a back to see Ethan with a Pokemon already. But he shook it off and accepted their offer. He handed the three the starter Pokemon's pokeball. The trio went off in search of Turtwig, Chimchar, and Piplup.

To be continued...

 

[Astinus]

Your signature picture is killing me with the cuteness.

OK, now I will admit that I haven't taken the time yet to actually read your story. I'm kind of tired and so I'm unable to to give your story the attention it does deserve. But I know you're trying and having fun, and that's great! Let me just give you a little bit of advice, OK?

While I know you're ready to post your chapters as soon as you finish them, five chapters in two days is a little too fast for readers to catch up on. Slowing down your chapters will not only help entice readers (because they can catch up easier) but will also help you out. If you take the time to write your chapters following bobandbill's advice, then your chapters will be cleaner and easier to read, which will also help bring in readers.

So far, what I did read looks to be like a good story. Though I do have a weakness for stories with a Lucario. I'm going to have to come back and read this some day soon, since...Lucario! And I also like reading stories where it's apparent the writer is also excited about the story. More fun that way.

 

[Mirimaju]

Your signature picture is killing me with the cuteness.

OK, now I will admit that I haven't taken the time yet to actually read your story. I'm kind of tired and so I'm unable to to give your story the attention it does deserve. But I know you're trying and having fun, and that's great! Let me just give you a little bit of advice, OK?

While I know you're ready to post your chapters as soon as you finish them, five chapters in two days is a little too fast for readers to catch up on. Slowing down your chapters will not only help entice readers (because they can catch up easier) but will also help you out. If you take the time to write your chapters following bobandbill's advice, then your chapters will be cleaner and easier to read, which will also help bring in readers.

So far, what I did read looks to be like a good story. Though I do have a weakness for stories with a Lucario. I'm going to have to come back and read this some day soon, since...Lucario! And I also like reading stories where it's apparent the writer is also excited about the story. More fun that way.

I understand where you're coming from and thanks I'm really psyched so I haven't stop writing. But to be perfectly honest I only have weekends really to put posts so that's why I been posting super fast but I shall slow down =) Please keep letting me know what you think and that's Ditto (pokemon shout out) to everyone else out there whose reading

 

[Mirimaju]

Not fond of heights...

"It's probably best if we split up that way we could cover more ground" Ethan told the other two. Kelsey instantly agreed with a smile which seem to bother Trevor. "I was just going to say that too" exclaimed Trevor. Ethan and Riolu went right; Kelsey along with her Togepi continued going straight and Trevor decided on going left. "Alright Riolu remember we're looking for Piplup, Chimchar and" before Ethan could even finish he was interrupted. "Turtwig!" a voice cried. "Exactly" responded Ethan. "Wait that wasn't you was it Riolu" mumbled Ethan. "Rio Riolu" shouted Riolu as he pointed upwards. "What the heck?!" Ethan was in total shock

There it was Turtwig on the ledge of a small mountain but it was one big enough that if Turtwig were to fall. Ethan didn't want to think about what would happen if Turtwig slipped off the ledge. "Turtwig hold on we're coming for you" yelled Ethan. Turtwig just stared with its doughy eyes. It was as if it wasn't even aware of the danger it was in. It took a while for Ethan and Riolu to catch up to Turtwig. They watched every step they took. The cliff became smaller and smaller with every inch. Ethan broke a sweat but was determined to get Turtwig. He took a look at his Riolu who seemed fine. "How can he be so relaxed" wondered Ethan.

Than out of nowhere a hand swung up and clutched onto Ethan's leg. It was a Geodude who he had accidentally stepped on. Ethan couldn't shake it off it was way too heavy. "Rio Rio Riolu" Riolu growled at it. Geodude just stared at him and let go. Turtwig was close in sight. He called for Turtwig but Turtwig just gave him a blank stare. Turtwig blinked once than twice and started to come closer to Ethan. Turtwig slipped almost falling. Ethan pounced and shoved Turtwig to the side preventing him from falling. Ethan however lost his balanced. He was about to plunge to his doom. Riolu grabbed hold of his pant leg. Riolu was too small and not strong enough to keep holding onto Ethan.

He was losing his grip on Ethan but than Turtwig bit onto the other pant leg and pull with Riolu. Both Pokemon pulled as hard as they can and finally Ethan was back on the strip that was securing all three of them. "Thanks you two" sighed Ethan. He couldn't be more grateful/ neither could Turtwig. After seeing what happened to Ethan it realized what the he and Riolu were trying to do. That was to save it. All seem fine when they got closer to the ground. A rumbling sound came about. A couple of Geodude using Rollout we're charging towards them. "I'm guessing that Geodude wasn't so happy when you growled at it" awkwardly laughed Ethan. Instead of running Ethan called out an attack. No way he was going to run from these guys.

"Aura Sphere" commanded Ethan. Riolu created a sphere of shining blue light and shot it straight at the Geodude. There was minor explosion and three Geodude went flying off. "That was amazing" Ethan congratulated Riolu. Four more Geodude kept coming. Than Turtwig swung the tiny leaf on its head and sharp leaves struck the remaining Geodude. "Cool that was Razor Leaf" announced Ethan. The coast was clear and the three headed back to the lab. "Hopefully Kelsey and Trevor found the other two" said Ethan with a worried expression on his faced. That wouldn't be the case for both Kelsey and Trevor…

To Be Continued…

 

[Mirimaju]

Thing couldn't possibly get worst... Right? Right? Wrong!!!

Thanks for all of you who have been reading my fanfic... So, please pretty please let me know what you think of it... Happy Thanksgiving by the way

Trevor kept calling out the names of the missing starter Pokemon "Turtwig, Piplup, Chimchar" but no answer. He couldn't give up hope. He had to keep looking for them. He had a slight disadvantage than Kelsey and Ethan because they had partner Pokemon. He had only one set of eyes and one voice. He walked by the river seeing his own reflection. "C'mon you gotta keep going Trevor" he told himself. "Chim Chimchar" laughed a red monkey-like Pokemon with a small fire burning on its bottom. It skipped across a dam clearly enjoying itself

"Chimchar over here" shouted Trevor. Chimchar looked back and simply waved. Trevor gestured it to come to him but Chimchar refuse and slapped its backside repeatedly. "Looks like I'm just going to come and get you" he mumbled. Than a Bidoof popped out underneath the log Chimchar was standing on. The log splashed onto the flowing river. Trevor jumped but luckily Chimchar landed on it. Chimchar paced back and forth on the log thus balancing it so it wouldn't fall into the river. As Trevor ran to rescue it he spotted a stepping stone on the water. "Chimchar jumped on that rock" he pointed towards the stone. Chimchar automatically listened and gave a thumbs up when he landed safely.

"Perfect now just hop on those other stepping stones to get over here" Trevor told it. Chimchar was too scared to do so. So Trevor jumped on them himself instead. One problem occurred the stepping stone between his and Chimchar's were too far apart. "Chimchar jump I'll catch you, promise" exclaimed Trevor as he held out his arms. Chimchar looked at him "Chimchar" it nodded and leaped into Trevor's arms. Once they made it back on land they laughed in victory.

Meanwhile…

Kelsey searched far and wide in the forest but not a Tutwig, Chimchar, and or Piplup in sight. It had been an hour her father was probably ripping his hair out worrying not only about the Pokemon but her, Trevor and Ethan as well. Than she heard a rustling of leaves before something bumped her on the head. As soon as it made contact to her skull she fell over. Her Togepi had jumped out of her arms as soon as she landed on the back of her head. Togepi poked at her cheek. She opened her eyes to a see a bagworm-like Pokemon quickly picking up its leaves to cover its bare body. "A Burmy is that what knocked me out?" cried Kelsey.

She than heard footstep but they were coming from above her. She looked upwards to see Piplup plucking some berries with it's beak before devouring them. "Hey Piplup" she called out. Piplup looked around to see who was calling it. "Down here Piplup" waved Kelsey with both her arms. Piplup puffed up its chest and chose to ignore Kelsey. "Togepi maybe you could convince Piplup" Kelsey told her adorable pal. "Toga toga Togepi Togepi" whined Togepi. Piplup just turned its head and continued to pluck at berries. "Pine" cried a voice. "Pip?" said Piplup in total confusion. Piplup had accidentally pecked a Pineco who didn't look happy after being pecked. Pineco squeezed its body and shutter as it began glowed.

Kelsey being the daughter of Professor Rowan had seen enough Pokemon and their attacks to recognize that Pineco was using Selfdestruct. "Piplup watch out" screamed Kelsey but it was too let Pineco let out an explosion. Charred chips of wood flew everywhere Kelsey covered her Togepi. The smell of burnt leaves engulfed the air. Kelsey and Togepi were fine. As the smoke cleared Kelsey saw Piplup fainted and covered in ash on the ground. "Piplup" cried Kelsey. She ran over and picked up Piplup. She quickly grabbed a revive out of purse. "Thank goodness Dad always told me to be prepared" she said in utter disappointment as she sprayed the Piplup she had failed to protect.

Piplup opened its eyes to see Kelsey staring at it with her green eyes watering. "Thank goodness you're awaked" she cracked and hugged Piplup. Togepi cheered as Piplup embraced the hug. She handed it a poffin made of Pamtre berries "Forgive me?" asked Kelsey. Piplup wasn't sure what she meant but accepted the poffin. "Piplup pip pip" said Piplup in delight as he ate the poffin. Kelsey called Trevor and the two shared their good news and decided to head back to the lab figuring Ethan had found Turtwig by now. Neither one had his number. But little did they know Ethan was having a bit of trouble…

To Be Continued…

 

[Mirimaju]

Out of the Ordinary

I'm well-aware my fanfic is at a faster pace than usual fanfics but that's only because i've been planning to write this for the longest time now.. please let me know what you think of my fanfic... reviews/creative critism/ compliment/ comments are always welcome haha


Kelsey and Trevor had finally arrived at the lab after all the obstacles they had endured. Professor Rowan was relieved to see they had made it back with both Chimchar and Piplup. "Job well done but where's the other one?" he asked them. "Wait Ethan's not here" Kelsey exclaimed. "No he hasn't shown up yet I'm getting worried" said his mother Delilah in a sadden tone. "How about you call him and just tell him to head over here" Trevor told her. Delilah gladly agreed and called her son Ethan. He told her that she was just fine and he had Turtwig safe and sound. They ended the call after he found out the other two starters were okay and that he should head back. Granted they were a few "Young man do you have any no idea how worried I was" and "are you hurt? Are you okay" and not to mention "Come this instance" from Delilah who said these things in a sweet yet commanding dialect.

"Alright you two time to head back" Ethan told both his Riolu and Turtwig. Riolu saluted to agree which made Ethan laugh a little and Turtwig just stared and yawned. After walking around for a while Ethan started to think that they were running in circles. So he placed two twigs to make an X. Turns out his gut was right they had found themselves at the X once more. "X does mark the spot haha" he laughed awkwardly. "Rio Riolu" Riolu had sensed something. He turned his head to the right and starting to run towards that direction. "Riolu where are you going?" shouted Ethan who followed. He went back to Turtwig who stayed watching.

Ethan had caught up to Riolu a lake. He saw Riolu trying to find something or someone. He tried finding whatever it was too and spotted a sign that read Lake Verity. "Mes" a voice sighed. "Huh?" said Ethan as his eyes focused on the lake. For some reason he couldn't take his eyes off it. He was waiting for something to happen and than it did. A light appeared in the lake as the center of it began to funnel. The silhouette of a Pokemon appeared. The very sight of it was breathtaking it gave this eerie feeling off. It than quickly faded away. What was a few seconds felt like an eternity for Ethan and Riolu who were starstrucked. As for Turtwig it just stared to the other way without even noticing what had just happened.

Ethan soon snapped out of it when he noticed the lab in the background. He and Riolu rushed towards it. Than after running a few feet went back for Turtwig who was still staring the other direction. Once they arrived Delilah greeted him with a hug and a goodbye she was needed back in the kingdom ASAP. As soon as the helicopter left with Delilah, Delcatty, Jeeves and his Mime Jr. the three told Rowan about everything from Chimchar and the Bidoof damn to Piplup and its Pineco encounter to Riolu and Turtwig tag teaming to take down the Geodude. Rowan brushed moustache with his finger "You three are quite impressive for beginning trainers". He than followed up with "So, it appears to me you already have a starter Pokemon of your own" he directed that towards Ethan and his Riolu. 'Yeah about that I wasn't expecting to get Riolu today actually I didn't expect it at all but I'm really happy I did" replied Ethan with a smile on his face which Riolu mimicked.

"I see well I did promise you a starter Pokemon and I am a man of my word" Rowan began as Ethan's eyes went big "So, I will make an exception by giving you one anyways". Ethan instantly thanked him. The four of them went to the lab which was now surprisingly spotless. Rowan unleashed all three Pokemon. "Trevor you go first" announced Rowan. "Will it be Turtwig the grass type" Turtwig yawned "Chimchar the fire type" Chimchar gave a thumbs up "or Piplup the water type" Piplup pounded its chest. "I'm going with Chimchar" he shouted. "Now you Ethan" Rowan told him. "Definitely Turtwig" said Ethan. Kelsey stared at Piplup who was the only one not chosen wanting to ask if she could keep it. She held her Togepi a tad closer and rubbed her cheek against it. Both Pokemon gladly approved as did Riolu. Rowan handed the two trainer the starter's pokeball and five additional ones along with a state of the art Pokedex. "Hold on!" shouted Ethan he had just realized something he had never actually caught Riolu…

To Be Continued…

 

[Mirimaju]

Is this real?!

It's only been a few days since my last post but to me it feels like an eternity so, here is the next installment... please let me know what you think... reviews are always useful =)


Professor Rowan simply sighed and picked up a pokeball "So, what are you waiting for?" he asked Ethan. Ethan smiled at Riolu and asked "Are you ready for this?" Riolu nodded. Ethan throw up the pokeball and Riolu jumped for joy meeting it halfway thus capturing him. The pokeball secured the capture than Riolu burst out of it. "It appears to me Riolu isn't a fan of pokeballs" Rowan told him he also mentioned how it's common now-a-days for trainers to have a Pokemon following them. It was getting late so Rowan invited both Ethan and Trevor to spend the night at his guest house. It was better to start their journeys with daylight and feeling refreshed.

As the night went on Ethan couldn't go to sleep. He stepped onto the balcony and stared at the moon wondering what was to come. Riolu woke up and stood beside Ethan. Riolu gave a smile at him which Ethan mimicked. He clutched Turtwig's pokeball. "Riolu, I can't believe I'm finally starting my journey or that I have someone has awesome and powerful as you for my partner, I know it hasn't even been a day since we've been a team but for some reason I know we're destined for greatness and of course Turtwig and all the Pokemon who are going to join us are going to be right there with us". Ethan sounded determined; he had this passion burning inside his eyes as he spoke. This made Riolu feel something in his the pit of his stomach. A funny feeling that felt pleasant. Ethan couldn't help but wondered how did Riolu know Aura Sphere? That dream what did it all mean? What was that Pokemon at Lake Verity?

Meanwhile across the hall Trevor sat on top of his bed petting his new Chimchar. His tail of luminous fire was dormant. "Wow, I'm actually a trainer now, I'm actually doing this, and it's with you Chimchar" exclaimed Trevor. "Chim Chimchar" sighed Chimchar. His fire had ignited and his eyes slowly opened. "Oh I didn't mean to wake you" apologized Trevor. Chimchar half asleep gave Trevor a big hug and his fire once again went out.

Back at Rowan's house tip-toes could be heard. It was Kelsey she had entered her father's lab without permission. Togepi followed a few steps behind. "Where is it?" she whispered. "Togepi Toge Togepi" exclaimed Togepi who pointed at a single pokeball lying on Rowan's desk. She tossed it up in the air and out came Piplup. "Hey little guy remember me?" greeted Kelsey. Piplup hopped up and down clearly remembering how she had healed him after the Pineco incident. The lights switched on "What are you doing in here?" Rowan questioned his daughter. Kelsey tried coming up with an excuse but it was no use. She decided to tell him why she was in his lab in the middle of the night. "I thought I would just come say hello to Piplup" she told him. But Rowan knew she had more to tell him. So, she confessed how she wanted Piplup to come with her and Togepi. She saw how lonely it looked when Chimchar and Turtwig went with Trevor and Ethan with his Riolu. "Well it seems to me Piplup wants to go with you and I don't have any new trainers coming soon" Rowan didn't even need to finish. Kelsey hugged her father and shouted "Oh thank you Daddy" she shouted.

The next morning Kelsey and Ethan tried looking for Trevor the three of them had agreed to travel together. "Any sign of him" Kelsey asked Ethan who shook his head. An aide came up to them and handed them a note. Ethan began to read aloud…

Dear Kelsey and Ethan,
I decided it's best if I go at this alone with Chimchar of course, I hope to see you guys very soon. Best of luck you two…

Sincerely, Trevor

P.s. Ethan the next time I see you I want a battle

"Look like it's just us two" said Ethan as he closed the note. Kelsey was a tad disappointed that Trevor had left on his own. She than smiled "Let's not forget our Pokemon" she laughed. "Of course not" laughed Ethan. He than wondered why Trevor had added that he wanted to battle with him the next time they crossed paths…

To Be Continued…

 

[Mirimaju]

Too Little, Too Soon!

It's been a long time since I've been on here and I have plenty of catching up to do. I'm back so please let me know what you think! Please and thank you =)

Kelsey is bursting with excitement as she and Ethan get closer and closer to Jubilife City. "I can't wait! It's gonna be my first contest ya know" she tells Ethan. He doesn't respond. He's thinking about Trevor and the note. It's not unusual that he wants to battle just the way he wrote it. If that makes any sense. "Hey you there" Kelsey shouts as she waves her hand in his face. "Huh? Yeah you were saying something about your first contest and what not" he told her. "What's going on?" she asked.

He decided to tell her about the strange feeling he had about Trevor and him wanting to battle the instant they saw one another. "Well, have you ever battle?" was Kelsey's next question. "Actually I haven't but I've seen my brother Ian do it plenty of times" he answered. "Well let's say you and me have a battle it'd be good practice for my contest" Kelsey suggested to him. Ethan looked at Riolu and they both agreed without hesitation.

The two of them found a nice area for battle. "Two on two sound good?" Ethan asked Kelsey who replied "its fine with me". Dawn sent out Piplup who flipped onto the field while Ethan unleashed his Turtwig who let out a not-so-menacing yawn. "Bubble on the double" shouted Kelsey. Piplup launched a spray of bubbles but Turtwig countered with Razor Leaf that popped each and every bubble. The attack slashed the small blue Pokemon who let out a small cry.

"Piplup! Are you okay hun?" Kelsey yelled. Piplup pounded his chest and charged towards Turtwig with Peck. His beak glowed a yellowish orange and increased in size by thee times. "Stay put Turtwig" Ethan commanded. As soon as Piplup was close enough Ethan had Turtwig clamp on Piplup's beak with Bite. "What the?" Kelsey couldn't believe her eyes. "You're quite the natural battler" she commented on Ethan's technique. "Thanks Kels and now finish him off with Tackle" Turtwig rammed Piplup into a tree still biting onto his beak. Thump! Piplup was unable to battle.

"Piplup, you tried and that's all that counts" Kelsey told Piplup as she returned him to his ball. "How about we jus call it a tie" she recommended. "Why?" Ethan asked in confusion. Kelsey looked at Togepi she was scared to use him in a battle. "Because, don't want Togepi to get hurt he's too little" answered Kelsey. Ethan put his hand on his forehead started to say…

To Be Continued?!

 

[Mirimaju]

Ah Ahhh AHHHHH!!!!! Furball...

Hey thanks guys for reading my fanfic but please comment I need to know what you guy's think haha =)

"I guess I get where you're coming from it's like a mother and child you don't want your pride and joy to get hurt" Ethan told Kelsey. "Yeah that's exactly it… I've had Togepi since it was an egg… My dad took me on a trip to Hoehn where there's this palace full of Togepi. The princess was kind enough to give me an egg of one." Kelsey explained her reasoning behind not wanting to battle with it. She continued with "After seeing how badly Piplup was defeated… I just didn't want to risk it with Togepi". Kelsey held Togepi harder. Ethan looked at his Riolu who looked as concerned as he did than at his Turtwig who just yawned… That's Turtwig for you.

"It's sweet how much you care for your Pokemon Kels… but, sooner or later you're gonna have to battle. Especially if you want to be a coordinator it's not all appeal." Ethan consoled her. Kelsey looked at him. "Let's have some lunch" he suggested. After a few minutes Piplup was healed thanks to a bundle of potions and the sandwiches were finished. Turtwig chowed down than started to choke. "Turtwig1" yelled Ethan. Riolu went behind him and started the Heimlich maneuver. Turtwig spat out its food and thanked Riolu. Ethan and Kelsey sighed in relief and turn back to see all the poffins Kelsey had prepared were missing.

"What the?!" she yelled. "It couldn't have been any of us" said Ethan. "Than who" asked Kelsey disappointed that all of the Pokemon's food was gone. "Than they noticed a small ruffling sound. Ethan looked up and pointed out a small fluffy tailed Pokemon with yellow cheeks gnawing at the poffins. "Pachi pachi" he cried in delight. Kelsey pulled out her Pokedex which said in a feminine robotic voice the following.

"It makes fur balls that crackle with static electricity. It stores them with berries in tree holes." Something was off the Pachirisu on the screen had blue in it's coloring this one was pink. Than like a bad pun one of those electrical fur balls hit Kelsey on the head shocking her and messing up her long brown hair. "That Pokedex wasn't kidding (Kelsey stares at him in a that wasn't funny sort of way) maybe we could reason with it" suggested Ethan. "Fair enough, excuse me mister or misses Pachi but may we please get our poffins back" asked Kelsey as she fixed her hair. Pachirisu ignored and continued to drop fur balls. Ethan and Kelsey dodged each one of them. Pachirisu just laughed and ate and laughed and ate.

"Alright than maybe we could scare it away from the poffins… Piplup use Bubble" shouted Kelsey. Piplup blasted a spray of them but Pachirisu used Discharge bursting the bubbles and shocking Ethan, Kelsey, Turtwig, and Piplup. Togepi was close to getting shocked but Riolu grabbed him in the knick of time. Kelsey saw how Togepi almost got hurt. "No more nice girl, Piplup use Pound on the tree" cried Kelsey. Piplup repetitively pounded the tree knocking Pachirisu off of it along with the remaining poffins.

"Peck on the double" commanded Kelsey whose Piplup's beak glowed as it tripled in size. Piplup charged towards Pachirisu. Pachirisu lit up with pink electricity and hit Pachirisu dead on with Spark. Ethan considered stepping in but Kelsey was so determined. Piplup was out twice in one day. Togepi escaped Riolu's grasp and stepped up to Pachirisu. "Togepi are you sure you want to battle" asked Kelsey. Togepi responded by pounding it's chest in respect of it's fallen Conrad. Pachirisu glowed with pink static in preparation of Discharge. "Extrasensory" shouted Kelsey cheerfully. Togepi unleashed rainbow colored waves that seem to have paralyzed Pachirisu damaging it steadily. Ethan was amazed at how strong Togepi really was. Pachirisu was swept off its feet and hit the tree behind it knocking down a fur ball that hit its head. Kelsey than tossed a pokeball at the shiny Pachirisu. After a few seconds Pachirisu was captured.

'Kelsey! You did it you just used Togepi in a battle and won not to mention you caught your first Pokemon officially" shouted Ethan as she came over and hugged him along with Togepi. She than applied revives and potions to both Piplup and Pachirisu. Ethan collected the poffins that were now roasted but strangely good. Kelsey couldn't help but stare at Pachirisu and wonder "Why are you so cute and pink… why pink why not blue granted pink is more your color". "You know that shiny Pokemon are rare right?!" said Ethan. "Yeah, my father told me about them but I never thought I see one!" she replied.

To Be Continued!?

Do you like that Kelsey caught a shiny Pachirisu?
Do you like Togepi's special attack?
Do you like the charaters and their Pokemon?

 

[Mirimaju]

I'm back and this chapter may be short but it gives a good insight on what's ahead please comment =)

Kelsey was happier than ever. She had finally battled with Togepi and caught herself a Pokemon a shiny Pachirisu at that. She was so excited for her first contest she could barely sleep that night. Meanwhile Ethan was sound asleep as we're the Pokemon. Except for Riolu who had trouble that night sleeping. He kept waking up to something rustling in the bushes.

Riolu decided to go see what it was. He started looking around he saw eyes glowing at him as if a Pokemon was using Leer. Riolu started to step back but he was struck by a sharp point. Riolu let out a cry "Ri!" Ethan instantly woke up. He could see Riolu was badly poisoned. He woke up Kelsey who gave him a Pecha Berry. Ethan looks around to see what hit Riolu with Poison Sting. "Skorupi" shouted the small purple scorpion-like Pokemon.

"There you are" shouted a voice. Ethan looked up to see a guy with purple hair and violet-colored eyes. "Is this yours?" Ethan pointed at Skorupi. "Yeah it is the thing ran off" snorted the purple-haired guy. His tone made Ethan uneasy. Kelsey explained that Skorupi had poisoned Riolu out of nowhere. "Ha that's funny what can I say Skorupi likes to have fun" he laughed. "I guess its okay" said an uncertain Ethan. The guy than started to walk away without saying a word. His Skorupi followed him. "What's your name by the way" asked Kelsey. "Merrick!" he replied. Ethan looked at Riolu and for some reason they knew they would come across Merrick and Skorupi in the near future.

To Be Continued...

What do you think of Merrick?
and his Skorupi?

 

[Mirimaju]

A lot of um... purple

Our heroes cross paths with Merrick once more and Riolu will finally battle! Please comment or msg. your thoughts!!!!

The next morning marked the day Ethan and Kelsey would be arriving in Jubilife city. As the walk closer and closer they saw a flock of Starly flying right above them along with an occasional Combee here and there. It was a delightful sunny day and Budew and Buneary could be seen prancing around. Riolu looked up in amazement. Riolu enjoyed seeing new things. He found comfort in his trainer Ethan. "Look Togepi" Kelsey told her small egg shaped Pokemon whom she held firmly in her arms. As they looked at the gorgeous day they were interrupted when a flurry of Pin Missile struck a few of the Starly.

"What the heck?!" shouted Ethan as the Starly fled the scene. Ethan than saw a familiar face. "Merrick! What on earth are you doing" shouted Ethan. "Target practice" replied Merrick with a sly smirk on his face. "Seems a bit cruel and unusual for training" said Kelsey with disgust. Its okay had he caught them but no instead he used them simply for training. Which didn't seem right to Ethan ad Kelsey. "You may think that but all I'm doing is making Skorupi stronger for the Oreburgh gym" Merrick snapped back. Ethan stayed silent. "Are you two planning on nettling the gym. "Ethan is" announced Kelsey.

"Luck with that" snorted Merrick. "What do you mean by that?" asked Ethan. "Please you don't look tough enough to take on a gym let alone a battle" replied Merrick. Now Ethan knew Merrick was trying to get under his skin. "Wanna bet? Let me prove you wrong right here right now" Snapped Ethan. Merrick simply nodded and said "your funeral kid". They agreed on a two on two battle. Merrick decided not to use his Skorupi and instead sent out Gligar. Kelsey pointed out a pattern in Merrick's Pokemon seeing how that but had sharp tails and looked fierce.

Ethan analyzed Gligar with his Pokedex which said in a masculine nerdy voice "It glides without making a single sound. It grasps the face of its foe using its hind and large front claws, then stabs with its poison barb"

Ethan sent out his Turtwig who let a yawn and seemed dazed. Merrick made the first move with X Scissor he already had an advantage due to Gligar being a flying type. Ethan called it to dodge in an instant Turtwig switched into fighting mode. He barely dodged Gligar's attack. Turtwig than hit Gligar from behind with Tackle. Merrick grunted and commanded it to use Poison Sting. Gligar flew up and dived down clamping onto Turtwig's face. Gligar than struck Turtwig with its poison barb.

"Oh no that's super-effective against grass types like Turtwig" shouted Kelsey. "Wing Attack now" shouted Merrick. "Counter it with Razor Leaf" responded Ethan. The sharp leaves slashed Gligar. Ethan was determined to win this battle. Gligar than swept the field with Sand Attack. Turtwig was blinded and than hit by Wing Attack. "Once more Gligar" ordered Merrick. "Duck" yelled Ethan. "Duck?" muttered Kelsey. Turtwig had successfully evaded the attack and in the split second that Gligar was above him. Ethan had Turtwig Tackle Gligar from bottom up. "Gli!" cried Gligar.

Merrick was down to one Pokemon. He had Skorupi go next. Go figure. Turtwig was exhausted but insisted on continuing. Turtwig went in for a Bite. "Toxic Spikes" commanded Merrick. A blob of venom sprung up from the tips of Skorupi's tail and than exploded in the air. The venom buried itself in the ground. Turtwig got distracted by the attack he had stopped in his track. "Pin Missile Skorupi" yelled Merrick. The attack caused Turtwig to faint. "You did amazing" Ethan consoled his fallen Pokemon as he returned it to its pokeball. "Ready Riolu" Ethan gave a thumbs up to Riolu. "Ri!" replied Riolu with a smile and thumbs up. Little did Ethan and Riolu know that they were stepping into a trap….

To Be Continued…

how do you like the battle?