The Time When I Used To Love You

[Sweet Jasmine]

Hi, It's me again, XD;, I made a very simple poem, but it does not really stand as a poem, since it's story-telling. : P, but oh well, enjoy~ ^^:

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The Time When I Used To Love You


Melodies, tones, notes keeps spinning in my mind.
Trying to make a romantic song about me and you.
I wrote it in my story book, cause my mom might see it and it's my secret.
Then my mom secretly opened it and read it, I got scolded, and she burned it.
I was sad, that I broke your heart. and I'm really sorry.

I remember when the time I love you.
I remember when you were late at our first date.
But I didn't mind because I trust you.
That's the time when I used to love you.

I made another song, about us and our happy endings.
But I know that you love me and you know that I love you.
I'm very sorry but this is the best way to stay away from you.
So, please accept it, don't curse yourself cause I'm gonna curse myself too...

I remember when the time I love you.
I remember when you were saying sorry to me.
I accepted it because mistakes are often coming through us.
That's time when I used to love you.


Played my guitar, sing the songs that I write about us.
But I think the melodies are gone and the happy tones are fading.
Because our hearts is broken, and that's the time I LOVED YOU!


I remember when the time I love you.
I remember when you were late at our first date.
But I didn't mind because I trust you.
That's the time when I used to love you.

I remember when the time I love you.
I remember when you were saying sorry to me.
I accepted it because mistakes are often coming through us.
That's time when I used to love you.

Broke my guitar, crying in the corner.
I remembered the time when I used to love you..
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[インフェルノの津波]

I LOVE IT. It reminds me of my old girlfriend...But still, awesome poem. Keep on doing stuff like this and more!

 

[Sweet Jasmine]

Thanks, It's good to know that you liked it. :)

 

[TJgamer]

Very well done.
It's almost as if I was listening to a song.

 

[Sweet Jasmine]

Thank you for the compliments everyone. :)

 

[Uecil]

sounds awesome ^^ it's great.

 

[Sweet Jasmine]

Thank you sspokemon for the compliment. :)

 

[BHwolfgang]

That poem is very Taylor Swift-influenced. :0 I see it in almost every verse.

That aside, it's really nice and deep. However, I personally think that you can make the chorus better.

 

[Sweet Jasmine]

Definitely, : D

I can't think of any good words that would suite the chorus, but I'll try my best in my next poem/song. ^^:

Other than that, Thank you for the compliment. :)

 

[Soul.]

Wow, I never actually believe that someone writes a great song or poem here.

 

[Sweet Jasmine]

Thank you for sharing all of your thoughts about my poem/song. :]