Well there's still the line spacing gap thing you could implement (so e.g.
As opposed to what you are doing throughout ie:
As for the further additions, there's more than just adding in events - for instance:
Sure this shows us more of what actually happens, but what does happen isn't that interesting nor tell us much about the characters or setting. For instance to make this more interesting, detail how she says things (is she patient and happy to tell Touko what a mart is even though arguably a person who is 10 or years older should know what a shop looks like, or maybe tired, or so forth?) and what things and places look like (is this shop big or small? Is there a lot of people shopping, or is it empty save for the shop keepers?). Make the stuff you add in interesting to read about - show rather than tell, as it's more interesting to read when one can visualise what things look like or how they are done. There's more on showing rather than telling in those guides linked to at the bottom of the rules if memory serves btw.