I think you'd better just post Chapter 3 first so I'll get more time to do an extensive review. At a glance, you don't seem to have many grammar mistakes (what with your credentials and all) so I'll mostly be focusing on character and plot development.
As for your Illuminati Conspiracy theories (yay another conspiracy theorist. XD) I'd be happy to continue that conversation via PM if you'd activate your PM to contacts/friends/members.