Well, I'm not too good at reviews, but I'll do my best.
Overall, a good chapter. I forgot if I've mentioned this, but I like the move you made by having different starters, away from the cliche. Anyways, that made for a better battle against the Trainer and his Machop. I only noticed a couple spelling errors, but I didn't notice any sentence errors. If there is, I'd have to read through it again, which I wouldn't mind.
I like how full your chapters are too. Shortening them is something I would not recommend. If they were shorter, the chapters wouldn't be as full. I guess what I'm trying to say is, you have a good balance on chapter length. They're just right.
edit: Yeah, like I said, I suck ass with reviews XD
Anyways, I read what you said in the FFL, about 'deciding if its worth keeping up with'. If I wasn't a fan of the story, I'd still say yeah. Anyone who puts as much effort as you do into a chapter deserves the recognition for the chapters he/she writes.
So yeah, definitely worth keeping up with :p