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[Pokémon] Anima Ex Machina: Redux [R]

JX Valentine

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Over a month later and hello, thread!

First, a bit of housekeeping.

Slowly going back over the older chapters to do some editing, so if you see an edit by line pop up or change, that's why. Mostly minor stuff, though; for once, I'm actually satisfied with how this is going.

Also, I'm officially starting a PM list, so if you're interested, feel free to poke me to get added.

Finally, a small note about this chapter. I know I say the word "ignore" a lot in the first half. Originally, it was an error, but I sort of liked the effect it created for the last line of the first scene. But my tastes aren't everyone else's tastes, so feel free to tell me if it's getting pounded into your heads. I'm just saying this in case someone thinks it might be a mistake or something along those lines.


Anima Ex Machina: Sixteen
Keep your friends close and your enemies closer.


"You're kidding, right?" Veronica deadpanned.

In the examination room of the pokémon center, the police officer observed one of the sights she hoped she wouldn't have to see. It wasn't death, destruction, or mayhem. It was Ellen Joy helping an ixodida get dressed. In human clothing.

Bill wasn't exactly comfortable with the whole idea himself. For one, it made him realize, much to his embarrassment, that he had been completely naked since he first awoke as an ixodida. While he couldn't argue with covering himself up in light of that fact, the fact that the idea never dawned on him until now served as a not-too-kind reminder that his body was far from what he would call human.

For another, clothing felt strange against his skin – almost unpleasant. He felt too warm, and although he could no longer feel the texture and softness of fabric, the way it brushed against his armor felt like it was touching a numb limb. His nerves prickled uncomfortably, perhaps because his nervous system knew it should be feeling something but simply couldn't.

For a third, he couldn't get Adam to shut up about it.

Clothing. Is that what you humans call it? Adam muttered bitterly. Your species must be incredibly vain. Why would you need to cover your bodies? Is there something you all consider repulsive about your form? It is a wonder that any of you breed.

He kept silent, even fixing his jaw to avoid speaking. Craning his neck, he tried to focus on the ceiling while Ellen worked on tightening the leather belt around his waist. The loose material of the gray slacks and the white shirt he wore did wonders to hide his form, but because of his claws, he couldn't do much to put on the disguise himself. He wished he could, not only because he felt embarrassed about having another person dress him but also because it would have given him something else to focus on besides Adam.

Is it an adaptation technique? Adam continued. I noticed that your human form lacked a pelt. All of your skin was thin and flimsy before I changed it. It may be a wonder that you evolved at all. One would think that your kind would die from something as humiliating as exposure shortly after it decided a pelt was unnecessary for survival. It amuses me that your kind could be so fragile and survive. You would hardly be considered the most intelligent species on this planet alone if you must know, and the more intelligent species are far better equipped to handle this planet's environment.

Just ignore him, Bill chanted in his own mind, but he couldn't help but feel as if something was smiling at him with just a little too much teeth.

Luckily, Ellen, having finished with the belt, looked around her companion and proceeded to give him just the distraction he needed.

"We should do something about your tail," she said.

"Hmm?" Bill looked over his shoulder and lifted his tail. "That shouldn't be too difficult. What if I tried this?"

He wormed his tail under his shirt and, while taking care to not let the tip shred the material over his torso, wound it around his midsection in tight circles. Eventually, the last segment disappeared under cotton.

"How does that look?" he asked.

"Well..." Ellen smoothed the fabric over his torso. "It's a little bulky, but if we let your shirt hang the way it is, I don't think anyone would notice."

Veronica crossed her arms and sighed. "This is not going to work."

Ellen sent a glare towards her partner. "What makes you so sure? He looks all right to me."

"So, you plan to have him just pretend to be human for Jirachi knows how long?" Veronica moved her hands to her hips. "How is he supposed to hide the fact that he's an ixodida when we feed him raw meat? And what about all the fighting? He can't exactly keep pretending to be a human when he's using his hands to slice up another ixodida."

She is right, you know.

Bill recoiled, not so much at Veronica's words but more because of Adam's tone. The parasite was practically purring inside his head.

You see, Bill, Adam said, while you can hide as much of our form as you would like, there are things you cannot conceal. Our instincts, for example.

He felt something tingle in his head. His mouth filled with a coppery taste, and he shivered with a sudden pang of hunger. All around him, the air smelled sweet. He knew it was Chansey's scent, but right then, he felt like he wanted to follow it, rip her throat out, and taste the soft flesh beneath her pink fur. A second later, he realized how easily that thought floated into his mind, and clearing his throat, he tried his best to dispel it.

With a quick sweep of his hands, Bill grabbed a pair of leather boots that sat waiting for him beside the examination table. He jammed his feet into them, piercing the paper stuffed into their toes with his claws. The brown leather would have gone up to mid-calf on his human self; now, it braced his heel.

Above him, he listened to Ellen and Veronica's argument continue.

"It's not going to be forever," Ellen replied. "Once we can convince the Caravan that Bill has a good heart and wouldn't hurt anyone traveling with us, he won't have to hide anymore."

"And what about that girl? The one you said recognized him?"

Bill stopped where he was, his fingers halfway done with tying his boots. Lanette. He couldn't begin to imagine what might have happened to her. In his mind, he could envision the way she was before the quarantine. She wasn't exactly what he would call happy-go-lucky, but it was very rare for him to see her without some kind of expression on her face. A smile. A shadow of nervousness. A glint of determination. Something that made her look human.

The Lanette he met recently was cold. Expressionless. Robotic. He could recognize the face anywhere, but the spark that had been there – the part of her that he considered his best friend – was nowhere to be seen. Yet he wanted so much to believe she would help him.

"Well, Nurse Joy?" Veronica asked.

"Okay, I don't know," Ellen replied, "but we'll figure something out. Bill, isn't she a friend of yours?"

Finishing with the boots, Bill kept his eyes on the floor. "Yes."

"Then, what's there to worry about? I'm sure she'll be happy to help us," Ellen told Veronica. "So long as Bill is covered up and isn't causing any trouble, why should any of us worry?"

"Because it's a stupid idea," Veronica snapped. "Look at him! No one's going to believe that!"

Although I would hate to admit to agreeing with a human, she has a point, Adam drawled. Bill, I feel ridiculous wearing human clothing. Take it off.

Doing his best to ignore the parasite, Bill stood. He was just in time for Thom to burst into the room with a bundle in his arms.

"Sorry I'm late!" the boy chirped. "Is he ready yet? Lemme see!"

Veronica rolled her eyes and leaned against the examination table. At the same time, Thom leaned forward and squinted, prompting Bill to reel back slightly.

"Hey!" Thom said. "Not too shabby! This'll work! Here, I've even got a few things to finish it off!"

Before Bill could protest, Thom pulled a puffy, gray hat out of the bundle and jammed it on top of the ixodida's head to cover his horns. The second thing that went on was a red scarf flung around his neck. Finally, Thom shoved a pair of black leather gloves into Bill's hands.

"Here, put these on, and we'll see how it looks!"

Bill blinked in response. Then, carefully, he slipped his hands into the gloves and let his arms fall at his sides. Ellen stepped beside Thom and gazed at the finished outfit as Thom tapped his chin with a finger.

"Y'know, I think everyone out there's a genius. They really outdid themselves this time, didn't they?" Thom said.

Ellen smiled. "It's for a good cause. But they did a great job finding all of this. Bill, you should see yourself before we leave. It's amazing how a few pieces of clothing can make you look so human!"

Bill adjusted his scarf and replied softly, "Do you really think so?"

"Oh yeah. We're not just saying that to be nice. You'll be fine," Thom said. "What d'you think, Officer Jenny?"

For a few moments, she was silent. Then, she huffed and snapped a glare at all three of them.

"And what will the Caravan say when they find out we've been harboring an ixodida?" she snapped.

Right away, Bill felt awkward as Lanette's words echoed through his mind. The ixodida could hunt him down wherever he was. That he understood. What he never thought about was the idea that he would make things even more complicated for the survivors. Would anyone try to help the people of Mauville if anyone found out they were trying to protect him?

"Oh!" Thom suddenly quipped. "That reminds me. The Caravan's already outside."

Veronica turned her full attention to Thom. "What?!"

He pointed a thumb towards the door. "Oh yeah. Arrived here about ten minutes ago. That red-headed girl we told you about said she's looking for the authorities here."

"Why didn't you tell me this first?!"

"I forgot."

"****!"

Veronica balled her hands into fists and gritted her teeth. Then, she exhaled and relaxed her shoulders.

"Y'know," Thom said, "you've gotta relax now and then, officer. Too much stress'll cause a heart attack."

"If assault wasn't a crime, I'd punch you in the face right now, Wattson."

Without another word, Veronica stormed out of the room. Thom stammered out the beginning of a question before quickly following her. All that was left was Ellen and Bill. The nurse turned to her charge and rested a hand on his shoulder.

"Don't let her get to you," she said. "Everything will be fine. We'll make sure of it. You saved us, after all. We can't leave you behind."

He looked into her eyes and nodded. "Thank you, Nurse Joy. This means a lot to me."

Her smile returned as she pulled away and started for the door. "Coming?"

"No, not yet. If it's all right, I'd like to make sure I'm ready to go out there."

Looking over her shoulder at him, she replied, "Of course. Take your time, Bill. The Caravan shouldn't be leaving today."

With that, she glided through the doorway, leaving Bill in a completely empty room. As soon as she was gone, Bill raised his hands and stared at the gloves. He flexed the fingers experimentally and listened to the creak of the hide.

Then, he lost feeling in his left hand.

Grabbing his wrist with his free hand, he tried to keep his arm from moving as it strained to rise on its own.

"Adam!" Bill hissed. "What are you doing?"

You were ignoring me, it answered. Therefore, I will take action myself.

The left hand yanked the glove off the right and started tugging on the scarf. Bill gagged and grabbed for the red material around his neck.

"Isn't this a little petty?" he coughed.

In a flash, he felt numb all over as his body acted on its own. It took off the scarf and gradually slipped its hand out of the other glove.

"Not at all," Adam said with his mouth. "Listen, Bill, we need to talk about this Caravan. About that girl, Lanette."

Shuddering, Bill felt his consciousness slip forward, and his body once again started responding to his own will.

"I'd listen to you, even if you didn't take such drastic measures!" Bill objected.

"Somehow, I doubt that. You seem distracted."

Bill shook his head. "Will you stop that?! I thought the whole point of making me the dominant mind was because you didn't want to have control over this body!"

"Oh, Bill, you can be entirely too naïve sometimes. I am what you would call a parasite. Of course I would want control over your body. The problem is I lack the ability to do so for extended periods of time." Adam paused. "Does this disturb you that much?"

Grimacing, Bill responded, "Of course it does! Why wouldn't I be disturbed by the fact that I don't even have the free will to move on my own all the time?!"

It got your attention, did it not?

Sighing, Bill turned and placed his hands on the examination table. He closed his eyes and bowed his head.

"All right, Adam," he murmured. "I'll listen to you. Just... don't do that anymore, okay?"

Very well.

Bill snatched the gloves and scarf again. He leaned against the examination table and began to slip the gloves on. Suddenly, his tail unwound from his waist and yanked itself from between the rest of his body and the table behind him. Before Bill could correct his balance, he smacked his back against padding and stumbled to the floor. The arrowhead tip flashed beside him, and he glared at it.

"What did I just say?!" he snapped.

I find you amusing. Besides, you should learn to stop thinking of this as your body when it is ours. After all, you did not have a tail. This is completely mine.

Bill growled and looked away. He didn't want to watch something he knew was attached to him act on its own, let alone think about Adam's point with any depth.

"You were saying something about the Caravan and Lanette?" he asked.

Adam hesitated, and the arrowhead tip of the tail tipped downward. Bill, I realize this may be difficult for you, but if we are to succeed in our mission, then we must learn to work together. You must trust my judgment and listen to me when I have something important to say.

"What is this all ab--"

Bill turned his head sharply, only to come face to face with the point of his tail. He stopped short, watching the tip carefully as it came close to his face. There, it hovered, tilting and bobbing with Adam's every word.

I sense that you care deeply about this Lanette, Adam said.

"She... she's my colleague," Bill answered quietly. "That's all."

Is it? Bill... I have studied you closely since I chose to accept you as my host. I have given you incredible power. That combined with your intelligence should make you unstoppable. But do you know what your weakness is? What keeps you from becoming a true warrior? Your emotions. You let your heart judge for you. You hesitate to hurt others because you think too much about the consequences. You avoid trusting those who may be your greatest allies, and you trust those who may be your greatest enemies.

Bill tensed. "What are you saying?"

I am saying that I do not trust Lanette, and neither should you.

At once, Bill scrambled to his feet. His tail lashed upwards, wrapping it around his arms and torso tightly. Trapped, he stared downward at the arrowhead.

"Are you saying I shouldn't trust my closest friend?" he demanded. "She hasn't lied to me before!"

She is not the same as she was before my kind came. Neither are you. You cannot deny that.

Bill squirmed his arms out of Adam's grip and yanked his shirt up and over his tail.

"I appreciate your concern, Adam, but I'll be fine. I can at least tell when I'm being tricked."

He felt his tail tighten around his torso, but as he strode forward, he did his best to ignore it.

As your partner, I cannot force you to change your mind, Adam replied, but I do hope for our sake that you are right about her.

His tail went lax, and for the first time in the past several minutes, Bill could feel it again. Stopping at the door, he adjusted his scarf while he wound his tail around his waist himself. He paused, taking a deep breath to calm himself.

"We'll be fine," he whispered. "There's nothing to worry about."

Then, he stepped out into the hallway and walked down the short corridor to the common area. It struck him as odd that even then, he couldn't hear any voices. Normally, there would be people talking in the pokémon center's common area, and he expected there to be even more activity with the added population of the Caravan. While he heard the muffled sounds of something outside, the common room itself was quiet.

As soon as he arrived, it didn't take him long to discover why. The entire place was empty. No one was at the green videophones lining the wall. All of the tables were bare and the seats unoccupied in the dining area. In the lounge clustered in the opposite corner of the room, the plush couches that normally were crowded with people were almost empty.

Almost.

Veronica leaned against one of the chairs with a glass of amber liquid in her hand. Even from several feet away, Bill caught the bitter scent of alcohol, and this was part of the reason why he instinctively bristled. The other reason was sitting on the couch Veronica leaned against. Lanette took one last sip of her own beverage – coffee, if Bill's nose was correct for a second time – before she placed her cup on the table. At first, she didn't say a word, opting instead on fixing her ruby-red eyes on her colleague.

"Lanette," Bill murmured. "I..."

He stopped, remembering the point of his disguise. Pressing his lips together, he pulled down on the hat's brim to hide his eyes. Lanette narrowed hers at him.

"The Caravan reached a decision," she said.

Bill looked up. "What... what did they decide?"

Lanette stood. She brushed past Veronica and started for the door. The officer downed the rest of the contents in her glass before placing it on the table. Immediately afterwards, she fell into step behind the red-head.

"A test," Lanette said. "Follow us, if you please. We don't have much time to administer it."

Bill took a step forward and froze where he was. It wasn't his doing.

I sense something wrong here, Bill. Be on guard.

"I know," Bill whispered harshly.

"What was that?" Veronica asked.

Shaking his head, Bill smiled and walked after them. "Nothing."

Lanette gave the ixodida a strange look before turning back to the door. Inside his head, Bill could hear Adam's growl; once again, he tried to ignore it.

Later on, he would wish he hadn't.

---​

Adam was right about one thing: Bill's main weakness was the fact that he was afraid of hurting anyone. But Bill already knew this. He knew before he was a researcher, back when he was still training pokémon. To be specific, he was terrible at battling even then. At first, it was just inexperience, a lack of understanding as to how battles worked combined with a stubborn refusal to trust his pokémon. After awhile, inexperience turned into compassion. As soon as he began seeing his pokémon as friends, he became reluctant to exert real effort into winning a battle. Of course, he knew pokémon were never seriously injured by matches, but every time he walked onto a battlefield and tried to order his pokémon to do something, he would hesitate, thinking about all the things that could go wrong and land a pokémon in Nurse Joy's hands for more than just a band-aid and a potion.

As a result, Bill never earned a single badge. In fact, after he realized what his problem was, he avoided gyms as a general rule. They made him uneasy with their wide, open battlefields that invariably struck him as being suspiciously pristine and well-kept for sites of long, arduous matches. Whenever he looked at one, he didn't see a smooth surface with neatly painted white lines, and he didn't imagine one flashy attack after another in an epic struggle between two equal forces. He saw the craters, trenches, and burn marks with his pokémon in the center of each one, just as they were at the end of the last few gym battles he ever bothered to fight. He saw the thousands of ways a pokémon could be left with broken bones, psychological trauma, and the gods knew what else.

Naturally, Bill was fully aware that it was ironic that he supported trainers, despite what he thought of gyms. It's just that the thought of going back to being a trainer left an unpleasant feeling in his chest.

In short, when Lanette and Veronica led him into Mauville Gym, he was wary, not because of what Adam had told him about Lanette but instead because he just didn't like gyms.

At the edge of the battlefield, Lanette started up a metal ladder leading to a catwalk. Veronica stepped beside it and motioned for Bill to follow the Caravan's leader. He hesitated, waiting for Lanette to reach the top before climbing up himself. Inside, he felt Adam stir, and he sensed that the ixodida was watching every move he was making. When he reached the top, he shut his eyes briefly, as if to drive the parasite away. In the darkness, he heard Lanette's footsteps across the steel walkway. They stopped after a few seconds.

"Come," she said.

Opening his eyes, he turned and followed her in a trot until he stood behind her. Keeping her back towards him, she pulled a poké ball from one of the pouches on her belt and released a pokémon in front of her. The gloom trilled and skirted around his master until he stood, squinted eyes staring up at the other pokémon. Bill shifted uncomfortably on his feet, staring first at it and then at Lanette. Behind him, he could hear Veronica coming up the ladder.

"Er... Lanette?" he asked softly. "What... what kind of test are we performing?"

There was a cold look in her eyes, and finally, Bill realized something was terribly wrong.

"Lanette," he muttered. "You know it's me, right? You know me. I'm not a threat to you. I'm... we're friends, aren't we? We... we designed the system together."

She blinked and shifted her gaze to a point behind him. "The Caravan has reached a decision. Officer. Now."

Veronica grabbed Bill's wrist. He gasped and tried to turn to face her, and in the quick second of distraction, she snapped a set of handcuffs around his arm and part of the rail along the catwalk. Instinctively, Bill grasped his bound wrist and tried to wrench it away from the metal bar, but the handcuffs held fast. Lanette took the time to skirt past him, her gloom trotting behind her. Veronica, her job complete, turned and walked towards the ladder silently.

"Wait!" Bill said. "Wait! What's going on?"

After putting several feet between herself and Bill, Lanette turned and continued, "Ixodida, on behalf of the Caravan, I hereby sentence you to exile for the crimes your species have committed against humanity."

"Exile? Crimes? Lanette, you can't mean that you think I had anything to--"

"The Caravan will be leaving Mauville City this afternoon."

"Lanette, please, just listen to me!"

"You are forbidden to leave this gym until we've departed, and if you attempt to follow us, we will terminate you on sight."

Bill hesitated, his body trembling. Terminated? Exiled? He kept his eyes on his partner, his mouth slightly open. Right then, he began to realize just how different this woman was from the Lanette he knew.

"Lanette," he murmured. "I..." His wrist shook, rattling the handcuffs against the rail. Glancing down at them, he let his next few words tumble from his lips. "I understand. May I at least have the key to set myself free once you're gone?"

She turned away from him. He watched her from the corner of his eye, and in his chest, a stabbing pain hit his heart.

"No," she replied. "Gloom, Sleep Powder."

The weed pokémon tilted his head towards Bill, and from the bulbous flower on his head, a cloud of blue spores burst and swirled towards the ixodida. Bill made no effort to dodge, instead inhaling the powder as it engulfed him. At once, his vision began to get hazy, and his body felt weak. He dropped to one knee with a bang while he turned his head at last to watch Lanette recall her gloom and move towards him again. Surprised by this action, Bill struggled to keep his eyes open as she knelt in front of him and placed a hand on the side of his face. Her skin felt inordinately cold.

"Your face still looks the same as it did the last time we saw each other," she said tonelessly. "I wish I could help you, Bill, but I can't give you a merciful death. Please forgive me."

"Lanette..." Bill whispered. His voice was getting fainter and fainter as his head began to drop. "Aren't we friends?"

The expression on her face darkened, and she let him go. "All ixodida are monsters. If you aren't one now, you will be one soon. I can only hope that parasite has enough sense to die with you."

Bill tried to shake his head, but by then, his body could only manage slight motions. "No. Don't be... don't be confused. Cover... book... not the same... I..."

The last thing he saw was Lanette standing and the blurry, brown blobs that were her boots moving away from him. After that, Bill crumpled to the floor of the catwalk, his eyes shutting at last.

In the darkness of his mind, he heard Adam's voice.

What did I tell you, Bill?
 
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Bay

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Haha, really love Adam's comments over clothing. Of course he'll criticize over how humans are weak by not running around in the nude. :P The conversation the two had over Bill's emotions and Lanette is a good one and I feel sorry for Bill so thrown off over how to get her trust back.

Nice backstory on Bill's thoughts over Pokemon battling and you did well mentioning how the physical and mental injuries the Pokemon face after battle didn't sit with him well. The scene where he's being tied up is a really intense one. You really hit home with the interaction between Bill and Lanette there, him being very terrified and Lanette not feeling that much emotion (as Adam mentioned the change in her eariler). Caravan!Lanette is scaring me a little, actually. ._.

Only minor nitpick is I wonder why Veronica got drunk there. I guess it's because she's stressed over the Caravan and the situation at hand? Looks like she drank a bit too many this time there. D:

Real quick, the "ignore" being thrown around a few times didn't bother me at all. I actually thought the use of the word in the last line of the first scene was used very well.

Overall, nice work there. Looking forward to what happens next!
 

bobandbill

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And yet again I catch up with this. =p (I last read chapter 11 so now back onto 16). Certainly still entertaining as well! I quite like the events that occurred after the battle. Wattson is nicely used I feel - I quite like his personality, reay and attitude thus far, and he's fairly entertaining. XD Same for Veronica - I like your take on this certain Jenny given their whole history (as warped as it may be when one thinks about the anime, heh). And Bill continues to be entertaining too, along with his fellow parasite. I also particularly likes Bill's scenes with Lannette there - as Bay said the emotion between the two was quite well done, along with the flashbacks. Now I'm wondering how Bill gets (or doesn't?) get out of this one... and the use of ignore in the last chapter did not bother me either.

Now for rambling thoughts vaguely in order, wahey! =p

Coincidently enough I actually recall one of the few Hoenn anime episodes I had watched... which had involved Wattson's fake Raikou, so I found that to be a nice touch, and I had an inkling it might have been fake too.
The man's grin faded slightly. "Huh? Oh! You don't have to be nervous or anything. We got off on the wrong foot, right? You're an all right guy, it turns out, so I won't hurt ya! ...Not that I was going to in the first place, but, uh."
Quotes like this is why I like Watson. =D
In short, she really needed that drink.
Certainly think you had a lot of nice one-liners going in chapter 12 there. XD


I did feel that there was a bit too much emphasis on the fact that Bill's expression was throwing Veronica off imo - it seemed to be mentioned a touch too often for my liking. But I liked the end of that chapter on the flip side with Veronica's threat there. XD
He started to stand up, taking the Styrofoam cup of coffee with him.
I'm not sure if styrofoam actually needs to be capitalised there...?
"Lucid," John repeated. "An XP-650 that's lucid."

He started for the door. For a long while, he didn't say anything. He only finished off the rest of the scotch, the clink of the ice cubes against glass providing the only sound in the room. Then, placing a hand on the door knob, he said two words without even looking at Oak.

"That's interesting."
Another quote I particularly liked.
I did feel that the fact that C
hansey knew it was foggy and dangerous was a bit odd, because later on it told Bill some battling tips. Then later on Vronica infors Bill it's dangerous to go outsid when it's foggy which he clearly didn't know about, which did make me wonder why Chansey had not told him about it so they could practise elsewhere. Probably fixed easily enough if you feel it's an issues - thought I'd mention it.
Bill, do something, it hissed. If my core breaks, then we will both die. Therefore, if you allow her to continue, I will be forced kill her myself.
'to kill'?
Just ignore him, Bill chanted in his own mind, but he couldn't help but feel as if something was smiling at him with just a little too much teeth.
'just a little too much teeth' sounds a bit odd to me, although I'm not sure how else you'd word it off the top of my head without changing the whole second half in structure. Maybe it's just me though.


Anyways, this was enjoyable to catch up with again - looking forward to more!


 

Miz en Scène

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Don't ask me what language that's from because I've conveniently forgotten. Aside from that, it feels good to be up to date once more, and I'm also eagerly awaiting the next chapter, particularly with the cliff-hangers you keep springing on us. Shame that since you're posting online, with an indefinite schedule, it loses its effect after waiting for a few weeks for the next update. So yeah…

Anyway, review, since I've got about seven more to do after this. It can be done! Supposedly.

So far, I'm enjoying how you're portraying Bill getting used to his new body. If I can remember the previous version correctly, I'd say that you've done a much better job here in terms of character development, you know with Bill actually doing a bit of training and Adam acting more like a frustrated mentor person. Then there's the general atmosphere surrounding Mauville that seems more of a homely, refugee camp rather than the dinghy hobo encampment you made it to be previously. I realise that they were all residents, but I kind of imagined it with said environment because of the ixodida attack in the centre. From there it was really a quick cognitive leap to dark alleyways and hobos. I'd be lying, however, if I didn't say that the part I miss most from the last version was everyone in Mauville getting slaughtered in a horrible, pulpy parade of bloody, ixodida awesome. I'm not sure how well I'm remembering this, considering my memory is not something I'm particularly proud of, but I'm going to ignore it for now, if only for the sake of the adjectives used in that last sentence.

Still, I'm impressed with how long Bill spent in Mauville this time round, and also Thompson. I like Thompson. A bit on the Robin/fanboy side of things but nothing major since it's a bit character-defining to think of him that way. At least he's not wholly useless like Robin, you know having his Manetric actually kick Bill's ass and all. Sorry for hating on Batman, but I've never like Robin anyway. Back to the point I was making on asskicking, I actually enjoyed that part because it was a bit more of a deviation from some other things I've been watching where the hero suddenly gets his powers and knows how to use them instantly. I say watching because certain fanfics as of late have been getting good and to put them on the same pedestal as the cliché-ridden things I watch when bored would be demeaning… to the fanfics. In any case, that scene did have something which made me do a big double-take however.

It took him awhile to muster up enough energy to speak, but when he did, he replied hoarsely, "Oh, hello, Nurse Joy. Daijoubu da."
I get that Bill's Japanese --in fact most of my own fanon, with regards to geography and not Pokémon-human relations, is derived from yours—but that sentence just left me feeling a bit iffy. In fact, I won't sugarcoat it. It felt incredibly weird. Having him revert to Japanese mid-sentence seems a tad weabooistic to me (though weren't we all at one point?), and it felt entirely unnecessary. "I'm alright" would have sufficed imo. If, say, he was in a state of confusion, shock or some other extreme emotion and reverted back to his native language (as I do when I swear), I'd be fine with it. But not in this case seeing as he's just used English with English grammar thrown in to boot. I imagine actual Japanese would go something along the lines of "Joy-san desu ka? Daijoubu da."

On that note, here's another quote. (Just for the rhyme.)

"So, you plan to have him just pretend to be human for Jirachi knows how long?"
I don't have any qualms about the way the sentence is constructed per-se, but I do have a slight nitpick on religion and blasphemy of all things. And please note, this is a very slight nitpick, but using Jirachi there seems a bit inappropriate since Jirachi's not really one of the major demi-gods in the Pokeverse. Actually, I'm not sure he qualifies as a demi-god, since he doesn't do much in terms of Universe creating, but that's another thing. Shinto deity maybe… But I'm rambling. Point is, Jirachi makes appearances in the Pokémon universe very rarely, and not everyone knows about its existence or so I assume. Even Gen III had limited in-game hints as to its existence so I'm not sure how well in-grained the Pokémon is in canon mythology.

So yes, overall, great chapter, aside from the nitpicks, and I look forward to more. :D
 

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Finally getting a chance to sit down and respond. Sorry, guys!

Haha, really love Adam's comments over clothing. Of course he'll criticize over how humans are weak by not running around in the nude. :P

Of course. ;D And then he'd criticize humanity for other things, but this is an R-rated fic, not an NC-17-rated one.

The conversation the two had over Bill's emotions and Lanette is a good one and I feel sorry for Bill so thrown off over how to get her trust back.

Aww, yeah. Lanette's definitely making him work for her friendship, but don't worry. He'll be over it soon. ;D

Nice backstory on Bill's thoughts over Pokemon battling and you did well mentioning how the physical and mental injuries the Pokemon face after battle didn't sit with him well.

Thanks! It was pretty much the best solution to a problem that's always bugged me. I mean, he knows Pokémon pretty well, yet he's canonically supposed to be a terrible battler. PokéSpec explains that he's not a good strategist, sure, but I would've figured someone who can tell that a Fearow's about to use Drill Peck from its stance would be able to figure out what move to use to counter it. /rantyrant

So... yeah. I'm happy with this one because it's the first real time I didn't just say "he's a wuss."

The scene where he's being tied up is a really intense one. You really hit home with the interaction between Bill and Lanette there, him being very terrified and Lanette not feeling that much emotion (as Adam mentioned the change in her eariler). Caravan!Lanette is scaring me a little, actually. ._.

*le bow* I have to admit, it's a little fun to write her that way. She thinks what she's doing is right, and it's definitely a challenge to write a character who's just dead inside. Or mostly dead, anyway. And, for that matter, technically an unintentionally terrible person who's also just a little bit on the racist side. In short, Lanette. I love that *****.

Only minor nitpick is I wonder why Veronica got drunk there. I guess it's because she's stressed over the Caravan and the situation at hand? Looks like she drank a bit too many this time there. D:

XD Oh, there's a lot that Veronica's doing wrong here. My explanation to the drink, though, is that she's only had one and has a pretty high alcohol tolerance. Technically, though, you're right in saying that she shouldn't be drinking on the job at all, but she's really stopped taking her entire duty seriously (despite the fact that she will still try to kill anything that threatens the Mauville residents) a long time ago. I mean, she really has no trouble threatening Thom now and then. And assaulting the innocent.

Real quick, the "ignore" being thrown around a few times didn't bother me at all. I actually thought the use of the word in the last line of the first scene was used very well.

Awesome. Thanks! :D

Overall, nice work there. Looking forward to what happens next!

And thanks for this and the review in general. I'm hoping to get the seventeenth chapter done as soon as I can.

And yet again I catch up with this. =p (I last read chapter 11 so now back onto 16).

I'm amazed by you folks who can sit down and plow through five chapters in one sitting. Drinking to you tonight!

Seriously though, thanks, Marcin. ♥

Wattson is nicely used I feel - I quite like his personality, reay and attitude thus far, and he's fairly entertaining. XD Same for Veronica - I like your take on this certain Jenny given their whole history (as warped as it may be when one thinks about the anime, heh). And Bill continues to be entertaining too, along with his fellow parasite. I also particularly likes Bill's scenes with Lannette there - as Bay said the emotion between the two was quite well done, along with the flashbacks.

Thank ya kindly! Seriously, the characters. They're a lot of fun to write, and it really makes me happy to hear that people are enjoying how they're coming out.

I also have a special place in my heart for Thom as well. Although I have to say I probably should make it a bit clearer that Thom's actually Wattson's grandson and not Wattson himself. Reading back over the part where I mentioned this, I realize it is a bit on the vague side, so.

Now I'm wondering how Bill gets (or doesn't?) get out of this one...

By being the awesomely brilliant person that he is. ;D (Or, y'know, maybe not.)

and the use of ignore in the last chapter did not bother me either.

Awesome! Thanks!

Coincidently enough I actually recall one of the few Hoenn anime episodes I had watched... which had involved Wattson's fake Raikou,

*high five for coincidences* XD

Quotes like this is why I like Watson. =D

Certainly think you had a lot of nice one-liners going in chapter 12 there. XD

Thank you. XD It helps that half the cast are snarkfests. Or Thom.

I did feel that there was a bit too much emphasis on the fact that Bill's expression was throwing Veronica off imo - it seemed to be mentioned a touch too often for my liking. But I liked the end of that chapter on the flip side with Veronica's threat there. XD

Hmm. You bring up a good point, and now that you mention it, that did seem to go on for awhile, especially since she doesn't buy the idea that Bill is completely trustworthy at the end of it anyway. I'll check it out during my edit run-through and see what I can do with it.

I'm not sure if styrofoam actually needs to be capitalised there...?

You know, I thought it didn't either until I looked it up after my spell checker kept pointing it out, and it turns out, it's actually a trademarked term that needs to be capitalized. ._. Who knew?

Another quote I particularly liked.
I did feel that the fact that Chansey knew it was foggy and dangerous was a bit odd, because later on it told Bill some battling tips. Then later on Vronica infors Bill it's dangerous to go outsid when it's foggy which he clearly didn't know about, which did make me wonder why Chansey had not told him about it so they could practise elsewhere. Probably fixed easily enough if you feel it's an issues - thought I'd mention it.

Probably because Chansey is a sadist with a death wish. Seriously, though, I've thought about why Chansey would insist on dragging Bill outside to train when she knew it was dangerous, and I came up with a reason that for some reason wasn't implied that well or otherwise added to the chapter. (Namely, they were right in front of the Pokémon Center, so she figured it was safer than attempting to battle inside or making the journey all the way to the gym. She probably didn't get that she could have waited until a better time, either, given that Bill was the one who asked her to train, and she seems a little too eager to respond to his requests.)

'to kill'?

Yes. XD I'm not sure how I've been talented enough to leave out entire words, but.

'just a little too much teeth' sounds a bit odd to me, although I'm not sure how else you'd word it off the top of my head without changing the whole second half in structure. Maybe it's just me though.

Hmm. I'll check it out during my edit spree to see if there's something I can do with it. I can definitely see where you're coming from.

Thanks for the review, Marcin! I hope for the sake of your sanity you don't make yourself catch up with five chapters again. XD


Buona sera! ;D

Aside from that, it feels good to be up to date once more, and I'm also eagerly awaiting the next chapter, particularly with the cliff-hangers you keep springing on us.

Thank you! :D

Shame that since you're posting online, with an indefinite schedule, it loses its effect after waiting for a few weeks for the next update. So yeah…

Yeah, I definitely get what you mean. I'm hoping that after March, I'll be able to have a decently regular schedule again. Not every week, but hopefully more than once a month. I've got all these ideas in my head for what I want to do with the fic, so it really sucks to have to slow down (even if real life is sort of a good reason... sort of).

So far, I'm enjoying how you're portraying Bill getting used to his new body. If I can remember the previous version correctly, I'd say that you've done a much better job here in terms of character development, you know with Bill actually doing a bit of training and Adam acting more like a frustrated mentor person.

Thank you! And it's a lot more fun doing it this way. ;D Last version, he was able to get used to it pretty quickly, yeah, and the closest thing he got to lulz was when Rose's Whismur handed him his tail on a silver platter. This time around, the lulz pretty much happen every time he attempts to battle or learn something new about his body, which means it's a little bit closer to the campy shenanigans I set out to write in the first place.

Then there's the general atmosphere surrounding Mauville that seems more of a homely, refugee camp rather than the dinghy hobo encampment you made it to be previously. I realise that they were all residents, but I kind of imagined it with said environment because of the ixodida attack in the centre. From there it was really a quick cognitive leap to dark alleyways and hobos.

Huh. Admittedly, I never thought about it that way (although the reason why the residents moved to the center of town in this version was because I wanted that refugee camp feeling you mentioned). Now that you describe it like that, though, I'm both amused and totally able to see where you're coming from.

I'd be lying, however, if I didn't say that the part I miss most from the last version was everyone in Mauville getting slaughtered in a horrible, pulpy parade of bloody, ixodida awesome.

The Mauville arc's not done yet. ;D

Still, I'm impressed with how long Bill spent in Mauville this time round,

Same here. I think part of the problem is I keep going, "OH HEY I'M ON THE FIFTH PAGE TIME TO WRAP IT UP" and I only get a tiny bit into the plot.

and also Thompson. I like Thompson. A bit on the Robin/fanboy side of things but nothing major since it's a bit character-defining to think of him that way. At least he's not wholly useless like Robin, you know having his Manetric actually kick Bill's ass and all. Sorry for hating on Batman, but I've never like Robin anyway.

I think I love your analogies.

Seriously though, high five. Thom's definitely one of my favorite characters to write in this whole shebang. He's definitely going to be staying in for the ride I've got planned. *tents fingers*

Back to the point I was making on asskicking, I actually enjoyed that part because it was a bit more of a deviation from some other things I've been watching where the hero suddenly gets his powers and knows how to use them instantly. I say watching because certain fanfics as of late have been getting good and to put them on the same pedestal as the cliché-ridden things I watch when bored would be demeaning… to the fanfics.

Amen to that last part of the comment wholeheartedly. :| (And a thank you for the first part, natch.)

I get that Bill's Japanese --in fact most of my own fanon, with regards to geography and not Pokémon-human relations, is derived from yours—but that sentence just left me feeling a bit iffy. In fact, I won't sugarcoat it. It felt incredibly weird. Having him revert to Japanese mid-sentence seems a tad weabooistic to me (though weren't we all at one point?), and it felt entirely unnecessary. "I'm alright" would have sufficed imo. If, say, he was in a state of confusion, shock or some other extreme emotion and reverted back to his native language (as I do when I swear), I'd be fine with it. But not in this case seeing as he's just used English with English grammar thrown in to boot. I imagine actual Japanese would go something along the lines of "Joy-san desu ka? Daijoubu da."

Yeah, I was gunning for a subversion to the Non Sequitur Thud trope (which is awesome and needs to be used more often). As in, Bill was meant to be so completely out-of-it (due to getting electrocuted and all) he couldn't keep track of what language he was speaking while still being conscious enough to make perfect sense at the same time. I think I'll change the line to your suggestion, though, because it actually sounds a lot better (and makes a bit more sense) if he just accidentally transitioned completely into the wrong language.

I don't have any qualms about the way the sentence is constructed per-se, but I do have a slight nitpick on religion and blasphemy of all things. And please note, this is a very slight nitpick, but using Jirachi there seems a bit inappropriate since Jirachi's not really one of the major demi-gods in the Pokeverse. Actually, I'm not sure he qualifies as a demi-god, since he doesn't do much in terms of Universe creating, but that's another thing. Shinto deity maybe… But I'm rambling. Point is, Jirachi makes appearances in the Pokémon universe very rarely, and not everyone knows about its existence or so I assume. Even Gen III had limited in-game hints as to its existence so I'm not sure how well in-grained the Pokémon is in canon mythology.

This tends to be up to writer headcanon. Personally, I feel more inclined to say Jirachi is comparable to Mew (who actually had pretty much an equal amount of significance to canon mythology if we take out all the fanon parts but is seen as kinda a big deal according to fans), just because of its power as a potential reality warper, what with its wish-granting ability and all. On the other hand, it's true that Hoenn's mythology is centered more around the triad of Rayquaza, Groudon, and Kyogre, but this is also keeping in mind that besides Jirachi, they really don't have a creator figure if they're not overlapping with Sinnoh's mythology. (There's a long and complicated explanation to why there's a difference between Sinnoh's mythology and Hoenn's, but yeah. In my headcanon, each region has a different flavor for Pokémon-related folklore.)

More than that, to vow an oath to Jirachi, in a Hoennian's eyes, is a way of saying, "God willing" -- as in, they hope something happens (because Jirachi can make it happen). In this sense, yeah, what Veronica said still doesn't make sense unless one takes it to mean, "You're actually hoping for it to be long?" But because I wasn't considering it this way when I wrote it, it might be better if I changed it to simply "gods" instead to have her vow an oath to pretty much every god in Hoenn's religion, just because I really can't think of a suitable replacement. (I mean, in my headcanon, the weather trio deal more with the creation and maintenance of the world, and the Regi trio and Lati@s are guardians and not really gods per se. Hoenn's mythology just kinda sucks like that in my view. It's the only thing I didn't particularly care for in Gen III. Besides fishing. /ramble)

So yes, overall, great chapter, aside from the nitpicks, and I look forward to more. :D

Thank you! :D
 

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And then real life punched me in the face. Sorry for the slow updates and the fact that I still haven't edited much (especially the last chapter), guys. Here's to hoping that I might actually have some free time to write now that I may or may not actually not spend ~14 hours working/commuting to and from work a day. (No, seriously.)

I may or may not also be half-asleep, so chances are, there are still a few things I missed in the proofreading bits. Feel free to point them out.


Anima Ex Machina: Seventeen
In the first act, there is a pistol on the wall.


The security system of Polaris Institute was top-of-the-line. Every second within its halls was on record in some way. Every conversation was taped. Every motion was filmed. Each clip from the countless recorders and cameras was meticulously stored within Polaris's security database, and these were carefully kept by the complex's security forces.

Of course, with the proper access codes, one could tap into these security records, and John McKenzie had them. Within his locked, darkened office, he sat at the desk and computer, the only two objects that occupied it as of yet. One hand was on the mouse; his other hand held the bulky headphones to his left ear.

On the screen was a single window. A list of files were queued in a media player, and these, in one of John's most noteworthy moments of professionalism, were blanket-labeled the Adam Files.

Although his team was expecting him in one laboratory or another, he left them to study XP-650A. He, meanwhile, spent hours poring over each video. Silently, he watched as a team of chansey pinned his son's limbs to a bed while doctors struggled to inject anesthetic after anesthetic into his body. He didn't flinch as he listened to his son's screaming, the babbling, the whimpering, the cracking of bones. He felt nothing as he watched the creature shed his son's skin, use his hands to claw at everything within reach, thrash against the bonds that pinned him to the bed. It should have been horrific, but John tried his best to remain as professional as possible. Even when his heart pounded and the bile rose to the back of his mouth, he sat and forced himself to keep watching. It was in the name of science, after all.

Yet, one video caught him completely off-guard. It was the second-to-last one. By then, his child was recognizable only by his face; every other part of him was a monster. John had watched hours of the creature barely even pretending to be the human he knew. He had expected nothing else but more footage of the demon lashing out against its bonds, but this time, the last time, Bill simply woke up.

Intrigued, John watched as Professor Oak had the cuffs taken off. He watched as Oak entered the room and Bill, while crying and shuddering with his hands on his head, struggled to adjust. Minutes marched on, and the creature John watched became steadily calmer. The shivering ceased. His hands drew away from his scalp. He stopped fighting against his own body and eventually came to look into Professor Oak's eyes.

Then, for the first time in a long time, John McKenzie heard his son's true voice.

"I don't have much of a choice," he said.

Professor Oak's expression remained calm through his response. "Of course you do. You know how the ethical codes work these days. If you said you'd be uncomfortable with it, we wouldn't be able to conduct anything on you, not even an interrogation. You'll always have a say, Bill."

"No," Bill replied, not even missing a beat, "I really don't, and it has nothing to do with what the ethical codes state. Professor, as a researcher, it's my duty to do everything in my power to help this project. While I don't know if you'll let me resume my place on the staff, I can't say no to allowing you to get as much information as possible from me."

"You're really starting to sound like your old self now."

John sat back and sighed. "Indeed he is, Sam. Indeed he is. But why?"

With a flick of the mouse, John moved the cursor to the next video. Clicking on it, he was presented with the image of a hallway. Corpses of security staff littered the sides and corners, and a fainted jynx lay limp on the floor. Standing over her were two sides of a war. On the one side, he immediately recognized Professor Nettle, and by her sides were interns and other scientists, all ready and waiting for her commands. On the other side were a crouched electric-type ixodida and the creature he was studying. Right away, it struck John as strange that the steel-type wasn't crouched like his companion was. Rather, he stood with his hands open, palms facing his would-be attackers. Turning up the volume, John found himself entering a conversation.

"Wait!" Bill exclaimed. "Just let us go. Professor, he can kill us all, but he won't if—"

"He's intelligent," Nettle interrupted.

The blonde to her left smirked. "Mm-hmm. Not at all like Pandora or Abel. Giovanni will adore this."

John practically threw the headphones onto the keyboard. The video continued to play as he placed his hands on the desk. Bowing his head, he breathed. Outwardly, he showed no other signs of shock; his face wasn't pale, his eyes weren't wide, and his breathing was natural. Inside, he began to feel a creeping sensation crawl under his skin.

It only got worse when he realized he wasn't the only one in the room.

"Codename Adam is a remarkable specimen, don't you agree?" a voice drawled.

He straightened and sat back in his chair. Although he wasn't smiling, he still responded as casually as he would if Professor Oak had made the comment.

"I don't believe I've met you," he said.

"I wouldn't be surprised, Professor McKenzie," the red-head said as she stepped forward. "I was promoted long after you left the firm."

She placed her hands heavily on the back of his chair. As she leaned down to put her mouth close to his ear, he could feel her breath and warmth looming all around him.

"The famous John McKenzie," she murmured. "They still talk about you. It's not often that one quits Team Rocket, much less someone as important to our operations as you."

He shrugged. "Forgive me for saying this, but of course I would. I realized a little too belatedly that maintaining a relationship with you wasn't profitable. Mr. di Roketto understands, most likely."

"Less likely than you assume," Ariana responded. "You're a very difficult man to track down, professor, but Giovanni is an equally patient man. Perhaps you shouldn't have left Goldenrod City."

"Hm. Of all the times to decide not to bring a drink with me into the laboratory." He clicked the media player closed. "Forgive me, my dear, but even if Mr. di Roketto wanted me that badly, he surely should have realized by now that capturing me would be pointless. It's been almost twenty years. Given that I haven't heard anything noteworthy about your organization in the news, I think it's safe to say that the project was a failure anyway, and besides that, I had twenty years to go to the authorities, didn't I?"

"It was hardly a failure, and I believe you're a smart enough man to know why going to the authorities would be a foolish move."

At last, John cracked a grin. "You can't use my family against me, love. My wife can take care of herself, my daughters were raised to be strong, and I'd hardly think you'd waste my son on bait. I wouldn't be stupid or sentimental enough to take it anyway."

"You have it all wrong this time, Professor McKenzie," Ariana replied. "Perhaps we would have considered all of that earlier, but the circumstances are quite different now. As I've said… Codename Adam is a very fascinating specimen, isn't he?"

The creeping feeling returned in full force, and the smile faded from John's face. Still, he kept his eyes on the computer, although he forced himself to relax as much as he could.

"It's a grave mistake to underestimate a McKenzie, least of all William," he said.

"I'm not underestimating anyone. I'm simply asking you for a favor."

"Which is?"

Ariana's hands moved to John's shoulders. He wanted to shrug them off, but he knew the woman would use any indication of emotion against him. She was a member of Team Rocket, after all. They were all the same that way.

"Study him," she said. "Our operatives are right now attempting to locate him, and we have infiltrated every position possible within this institute. We can give you everything you need to unlock the secret of why Adam is such a unique case."

"So you can use that to create an army of XP-650."

Ariana withdrew, allowing her hands to fall to her sides. Exhaling, John shook his head and logged off the computer.

"Team Rocket never changes," he muttered. "Not even when it was run by that nitwit of a woman. No offense intended, ma'am."

"Giovanni would agree with you concerning that statement. What about my proposal, professor?"

John crossed his arms. "Why bother me about it? Why not one of your operatives?"

Ariana grinned. "Because Bill would trust you the most. You are his father, after all, aren't you?"

As soon as she finished, John burst into laughter. Ariana took a step back, her expression faltering as she eyed her associate carefully. In the meantime, he stood, wiped tears from his eyes, and gave her a smile.

"All this time you've been chasing me, you really never learned anything about me?" he asked. "I'm the last person William would trust. We're not exactly on speaking terms, you know. He thinks I'm a lazy, womanizing, drunken git, and I respond with, 'Thank you, and I was hoping you'd be a girl.' We compliment each other all the time like that. Our relationship is the envy of every father and son across Johto."

He sauntered over to her and leaned in close to her face, forcing her to reel backwards.

"Here's a lesson you could learn from Giovanni," he told her. "If you're gonna ask someone to do something for you, you'd best be prepared with either something they desperately want or a fine ultimatum. Right now, there's nothing I want, and if I had a choice between working for you again or saving William from the pits of Hell, I'd say I couldn't imagine anyone who would enjoy a place as boring as Heaven anyway."

Turning, he walked towards the door. Ariana didn't bother to stop him. She simply stared as John unlocked the door and turned the handle.

"Professor McKenzie," Ariana abruptly said, "what if I told you I could pay you handsomely?"

John opened the door a crack. "Funny. That's what Giovanni said the first time around."

Then, he left the room before the executive could say a word.

---​

"Bill?"

He opened his eyes to see sunlight filtering through a lush, green oak tree. Sitting up, he stretched, taking in the warmth of the sun and spring breeze. Turning his head, he caught the red-eyed gaze of his companion. Lanette looked different then. Her hair was shorter, and most of it hung down to her shoulder blades except for a few orange locks clipped to the back of her head by a barrette. Her clothing was neater. No rips, no tears, nothing out-of-place on either the crisp, white blouse, the lab coat, or the green pencil skirt. Most importantly, on her face was a sharp frown, yet Bill knew that a few seconds ago, the softness of her voice betrayed a completely different emotion.

"What on Earth are you doing out here?" she asked. "You have ten minutes until you speak in front of the most prominent researchers in the nation, and here you are, sleeping under a tree!"

Bill rubbed his eyes. "I was not sleeping. I was meditating."

"I thought you didn't like being outside."

"I don't like speaking in front of large groups of people, either."

"Too bad. It's in your job description."

"Where?"

"Right under writing theses, attending Symposium events, and the thousand other things you say you don't like to do. Why are you a researcher anyway, Bill?"

He stood and dusted himself off. After a moment of thought, he replied, "The spare moments I spend studying anything at all make it worth it. How do I look?"

Lanette eyed him carefully. Glancing at her in response to the silence, Bill noticed her press her lips together and fight off a smile. He looked down at himself and then back at Lanette. Then, with a tilt of his head, he gave her a glare.

"Come on, Lanette. I'm wearing the plainest outfit I own," he said.

"It's not that. You, uh…" She pointed at his head and lowered the volume of her voice. "You have leaves in your hair."

"What?"

He shook his head vigorously and then ran his fingers through his curls. Sure enough, a rain of dead leaves and leaf debris rained down around him. Straightening his gaze, he pulled his bangs out of his eyes.

"How about now?" he asked.

Relaxing, Lanette let herself grin sympathetically as she reached up to pluck a twig out of her partner's hair.

"Better," she replied. "Now, come on. I promised Brigette I wouldn't be long, and I think poor Celio will give himself a heart-attack from waiting for you."

Bill ran his fingers through his hair one more time. "And Bebe?"

"If we don't get back soon, she'll think we… well, you know Bebe."

He sighed. "Indeed I do."

"Absolutely no refinement," Lanette added dryly. "Why on Earth would we do that kind of in the open anyway?"

Instantly, Bill shot her a wide-eyed look. His face grew bright red as he snapped, "Or at all, I should hope!"

She simply looked at him.

"Or I mean to say… you and I… we're, ah…" Bill hesitated. "I've gotten into a bit of a mess, haven't I?"

"Once again," Lanette said, "but I forgive you because you're you."

She turned to walk away. Bill stared at her back for several beats before straightening.

"Hey! What do you mean by that?!" he called.

Without even turning around, she answered, "You're a genius, Bill. Figure it out!"

He stood rooted to his spot as he watched the distance between the two of them grow larger. Then, he glanced towards the blue sky and clenched his teeth.

"Adam," he said, "get out of my head."

Snapping back into reality, Adam let the image in front of it dissolve into what Bill was seeing. Instead of the warm campus, the two of them looked at a bare wall in a cold, dark building. Bill was sitting, not standing, and their hand was still chained to the parapet around the catwalk, not running through soft, curly hair.

Forgive me, Adam drawled, but Lanette seems too intriguing to resist.

Bill narrowed his eyes at the wall. "You weren't supposed to see that."

On the contrary, Bill. We are two halves of a symbiotic pair. So long as you and I coexist within this body, I have every right to know the darkest secrets of your mind. Perhaps one of them could be important. Besides, I would hardly call that particular memory dark.

"It wasn't," Bill admitted, "but I would still appreciate some sense of privacy when it comes to my memories."

I have no desire to argue with you this time.

"Then don't."

Bill shut his eyes again. His encounter with Lanette left him with a sour taste in his mouth, and because of that, he wasn't in the mood to deal with Adam. Slowing his breathing, he cleared his mind and sat in silence, his hand hanging heavily within the cuff. In that state, only one question floated into his mind. It filled every crevice of his brain, and his lack of an answer to it gave him an uncomfortable, painful feeling in his chest.

There is something else I learned from your memories besides the depths to which you care for your Lanette, Adam commented.

At the sound of the parasite's voice, Bill winced. He opened one eye and stared at the ceiling. Although the last thing he wanted at that point was to deal with Adam, he didn't stop the creature right away.

It is fascinating that humans had so many different languages, but you all distilled it down to one hybrid, it said.

Bill sighed in exasperation and shut his eye again. "What are you on about now?"

Your name. What does it mean? William. From an old place – Germany, it was called. Yet your people did not consider themselves German. No, not for nearly a thousand years.

"It doesn't matter anymore, Adam."

But it does, the parasite drawled. You search for your purpose, but you need not look any further than your own name. Wil. From the word will, meaning the unwavering inner strength to carry out one's desires. Helm. From the word helmet, a metaphor for protection. Together, they mean "willful protector," he who defends others regardless of the risk. Your purpose is there, Bill. Every moment of your life is pointing you towards protecting your people. Do not give up on them, even if they turn you down.

For a few moments, Adam waited in silence. Then, when not a word came from his host, it tried to push itself back into his mind to search for his thoughts. It was mildly surprised to feel a division between them. Pressing against the wall around Bill's mind, Adam realized that the human was learning, was actively attempting to keep the parasite out of his head. Amused, Adam withdrew and mentally circled around Bill, searching for a weak point.

On the other hand, it is curious that you shorten your name. A bastardization of your true purpose. Perhaps you already realized this?

For a second time, Bill sighed. He opened his eyes and glared at the wall straight ahead of him. "Adam, I'd like to make two comments. First, I have absolutely no problem with my real name. I simply prefer being called Bill because I like the way it sounds. Second, if this is the best you can do with attempting to force me to act, I would like to say that if I hadn't already made up my mind and if my actions would be determined by your charisma, I would almost certainly prefer sitting here to die."

Adam stopped where it was. Already made up your mind?

"Yes. I never liked sitting around doing nothing, and I detest the idea of suicide. The only reason why I'm still here is because--" At this point, Bill lifted his arm, allowing the handcuffs to rattle against his wrist and the bars of the parapet. "--there seems to be a minor inconvenience preventing me from escaping. Furthermore, the longer you continue to distract me, the less time I can spend answering the question of how we might be able to resolve this issue."

Oh. You should have said something. I could have offered assistance.

Raising an eyebrow, Bill lifted his hand just enough to pull the chain taut between his wrist and the bars behind him. He eyed the few inches of chain carefully, long enough to give Adam a good look.

"The chain is too short to cut with claws or my tail, Adam, even if I could concentrate enough to execute an attack properly."

Hm. I would not be so simple as to assume if I were you, Adam replied. Try pulling.

"Pulling," Bill repeated incredulously.

Correct.

"You're serious, aren't you?"

Gravely.

Bill looked towards the ceiling and considered Adam's advice. It sounded crazy in his mind, but crazy or not, he couldn't think of many options himself. Knowing this, he humored Adam and pulled his arm until the cuffs resisted. When it did, he snapped his limb forward to make it clear that it wasn't going anywhere.

No, no. Pull harder.

"…Harder?"

Correct.

Pressing his lips together, Bill pulled. Again, the cuffs held.

Slower. Put as much force into it as you can. Do not be afraid of damaging your wrist. You will not, I assure you.

Bill hesitated. He fixed his gaze on the chain, already pulled as far as it would go. What would yanking it harder do?

Sensing his uncertainty, Adam added, You must learn to trust me, Bill. I need your body to survive. Therefore, everything I tell you will be in your best interests.

Relaxing just a bit, Bill whispered, "A-all right."

Then, he pulled at the chain. At first, it continued to resist, but the more he leaned away from the bars, the more it creaked beneath his weight. The metal stretched like flimsy plastic, thinning gradually until at last, it snapped, sending Bill crashing to the floor of the catwalk. At once, he sat up and lifted his wrist. The severed chain dangled from a bent cuff still around his arm.

"What is this?" he breathed.

Refined strength, Adam explained. I have taken the liberty of adjusting how well your body is capable of performing physical work. Call it another gift.

Bill held his head and shakily stood. "How many more gifts did you give me?"

Enough. Is there a problem?

He shook his head. "No. I just… it's quite a bit to take in. I wish you would just tell me what you would did to me."

You would never understand until you learned for yourself. Is that not one of your personal defining traits?

Bill turned and tilted his head to the side. "What are you implying?"

Ignoring him, Adam continued, But no matter. You are free now. What is your next move?

Wrapping his hands around the rail, Bill peered downward. Adam was right in one respect: the need to learn more about himself had to be put off for later. Right then, he had to think of what to do after that. Focusing, he quickly scanned the room for a possible way out. Gazing straight downward, he realized there were at least two stories between himself and the floor of the battlefield, and lying neatly beneath the catwalk was the ladder he had used to follow Lanette and Veronica. He knew exactly what their intentions were, and they had nothing to do with giving him a chance to escape.

"We need to get down somehow. Do I have a power that would let me survive this far of a drop?"

Several, but why do we not simply use the way I had entered this place the last time?

Bill looked around. He had nearly forgotten that this wasn't his first time in the Mauville Gym, but no matter how hard he tried to remember, nothing was coming to mind as to how his partner had broken into the gym. Adam noticed his silence, and in the ensuing beat, Bill could feel the parasite in his head.

Give me control. I will show you.

Stopping, Bill considered it with a shudder. At first, he could think of a thousand reasons why Adam's proposal felt wrong. Then again, what choice did he have? Adam knew his body more than he did at that point, and although it was his job to test unknowns, there was a line between scientific curiosity and suicidal levels of crazy. Reluctantly, he closed his eyes and let himself be pulled back into his head. From that point forward, he trained his mind not to think about the possibilities as his eyes opened on their own.

"It seems you have begun to learn," Adam commented. "You trust me."

Adam, I'll do whatever needs to be done. Please keep us safe.

"Did you think I would fail at that much?"

Adam unwound their tail and snaked it out from under Bill's shirt. The parasite stretched, dropped to all fours, and darted across the catwalk a wall at one end. Bill watched from inside, trying to piece together what his companion was about to do until he noticed the rows of holes dotting the wall. As Adam approached, Bill noticed that they stopped a few feet from the floor of the catwalk but ran straight upwards to just beyond his field of vision. He couldn't imagine where they might have led until he noticed chunks of plaster and dust littering that end of the catwalk. Adam ignored these as he bound over them to the wall, leaving Bill no time to think about them.

Then, Adam sprang up and latched onto the wall with both hands and feet. For a moment, Bill was left completely speechless, unable to react as Adam scaled the wall. At times, the parasite used the holes as footholds; at others, it created completely new ones by punching its claws into the plaster. Bill struggled to process all of this until, finally, his mind came up with one line.

Surely you're joking.

"Why?" Adam asked. "Is this amusing to you?"

Certainly not! Bill paused. It's just… defiant of… almost everything that I was thinking.

"I must reiterate, Bill. Stop seeing our body as human. It will be much easier to accept that you no longer have the limitations you once did."

Bill couldn't think of anything to say to that. Instead, he sat back and watched his body traverse the wall, eventually arriving at the ceiling. There, Adam continued, hooking their tail directly into the tiles as an added anchor. Fixing their eyes on a small hole hidden above one of the gym's lights, Adam skittered quickly upside-down until it climbed through the roof.

Outside, the sun sat high in the sky, forcing Adam to squint at the sudden, harsh light. Yet, even then it didn't slow down as it darted across the roof to the edge. It peered down over the parapet along the roof to an empty alley behind the gym. Although Bill couldn't think straight, he could tell it was well above a few feet from the ground to where they were.

That's… that's a long way down, Bill mumbled. Perhaps we should—

Adam mounted the parapet and launched itself directly downward. It pretended not to hear Bill's screams.

The fall was short, ending in Adam landing with a bang on the pavement. The cement beneath its hands and knee was cracked and indented, but it showed no signs of pain as it waited until Bill fell quiet. Pushing off the ground with its hands, it slowly rose to its feet. Then, Adam shuttered and retreated, pitching Bill's consciousness forward. Finally in control once more, Bill trembled and breathed. He could feel the adrenaline Adam generated, the tingle of his muscles and bones beneath the parts of him that hit the ground, the ache in his tail from hours of being wound around his waist… but otherwise, he wasn't hurt.

"Remarkable," he breathed.

Inside his head, he felt Adam curl up and rest, but he could tell the parasite still had his attention focused on him. He moved a hand and prepared to speak. A thousand questions stumbled over each other in a frantic dash to escape his mouth.

Before a single one could get out, however, a scream rose from a distance, followed by the sounds of gunshots. Jolting out of his meditations, Bill looked to the sky. The shrieks were uncomfortably familiar to him.

"Ixodida calls…" His eyes widened. "The Caravan!"

His feet sprang into a run. He didn't think twice about it. All he could do was imagine what was happening blocks away.

Bill, Adam said, what are you doing?

Turning a corner, he forced himself to pick up speed. "They're in danger!"

And you plan on saving them?

"Yes!"

By any means?

Bill stopped under a streetlamp. His body wasn't built for speed, and because of that, he could tell he would have to take it easy if he wanted energy left over for a possible fight. Placing a hand on the pole beside him, he panted.

"Yes!" he finally replied.

Even after they trapped us?

He nodded and bent over.

Why?

Bill lifted his head. Several different faces flashed across his brain, but the one that lingered was Lanette's, fresh from that memory Adam had summoned not too long ago. He felt Adam slide into his thoughts and look.

Her? You must care deeply for her.

Bill stood straight and frowned.

Why do you insist on trying with her when she does not see you as her friend?

"Because she's her," Bill answered simply.

Before Adam could argue, he started into another run.

Behind him, a pair of purple eyes peered out from the alley by the gym. 009 pursed her lips as her hand reached up to press a button on a communicator attached to her ear.

"This is 009. Target spotted."

"But not captured?" Nettle hissed over the device.

"Good things come to those who wait, Professor. Trust me."

With that, she stalked out into the empty street, taking her time to follow.
 

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This review is pretty much my thoughts as I was reading along, but just so you know I enjoyed this chapter a lot. :)

Oh man, the first part Professor McKenzie is awesome there standing up to Ariana like that! That is all! ^_^

Sure enough, a rain of dead leaves and leaf debris rained down around him.
I think for this part you can replace the first "rain" with something else because you have "rained down" right after.

The short flashback with Bill and Lanette is cute. Poor Bill being embarrassed of Bebe thinking the both of them are in a relationship. :P

But it does, the parasite drawled. You search for your purpose, but you need not look any further than your own name. Wil. From the word will, meaning the unwavering inner strength to carry out one's desires. Helm. From the word helmet, a metaphor for protection. Together, they mean "willful protector," he who defends others regardless of the risk. Your purpose is there, Bill. Every moment of your life is pointing you towards protecting your people. Do not give up on them, even if they turn you down.
I really like this. Never thought Bill's name like that. Then again, I didn't research what William means, so this is neat to me. ^^;

Haha, the part where Adam and Bill fall down from the roof is quite fun. First Bill screamed, and then after realizing he was alive his reply was "remarkable." XD And the ending…ah oh, better watch out for Domino, Bill! D:
 

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This review is pretty much my thoughts as I was reading along, but just so you know I enjoyed this chapter a lot. :)

*high five* That's the best way to review, in my opinion. Because there are times when you might write a lengthy commentary on one part and then, five paragraphs later, add, "OH WAIT WTF IS GOING ON." This has happened to me many a time, and it's hilarious in all seriousness.

Also, thank you! :D

Oh man, the first part Professor McKenzie is awesome there standing up to Ariana like that! That is all! ^_^

Why, thank you! John's one of those fun-to-write kinds of characters. In my mind, he's a straight-up con artist and smarmy, magnificent bastard, so it's always fun putting him in the same room with anyone and sit back to see how long it takes for the other person to get pissed off.

He is also apparently Father of the Year.

I think for this part you can replace the first "rain" with something else because you have "rained down" right after.

Thanks! I quite agree with that. Clearly, I should stop proofreading when I'm half-asleep because, yeah, besides that weird habit I have of leaving words completely out of sentences, there's also that "I like to repeat myself a lot" habit I've yet to kick.

Or, um, get a real beta.

The short flashback with Bill and Lanette is cute. Poor Bill being embarrassed of Bebe thinking the both of them are in a relationship. :P

You should see the other things Bebe says about him/to his face. ;D

And yet Lanette is A-OK with all of this. Kiiiinda says something about their relationship, doesn't it? (Namely, that Lanette doesn't take it seriously. At all. Probably thanks to Bebe.)

I really like this. Never thought Bill's name like that. Then again, I didn't research what William means, so this is neat to me. ^^;

Thank you!

Also, yeah, that's what happens when you're bored and happen to have Behind the Name open. And that's how I spent a lot of at least one of my college semesters. I swear, the related names pages are like TV Tropes. At least, if you're really bored. /tangent

Haha, the part where Adam and Bill fall down from the roof is quite fun. First Bill screamed, and then after realizing he was alive his reply was "remarkable." XD

Bill would be an awesome judge for Pokémon Contests. *shot*

And the ending…ah oh, better watch out for Domino, Bill! D:

*cue chapterly evil laugh and finger tenting*

But seriously, thanks! I'll check out that part you pointed out, and we'll just have to see about Domino sometime soon. ;D And of course, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter as well! ♥
 

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I hope for the sake of your sanity you don't make yourself catch up with five chapters again. XD
I was insane well before but i is doing better? ;p

Anyways, I found the reveal about Bill's father working for TR to be a neat twist, and I enjoyed the conversation he had with Ariana. The whole scene was quite nice to be honest in fact, although Bill's flashbacks (if not by his own choosing) and cooperation with Adam was also intriguing. But I quite like John's character and manner of speech and... reactions? to the scene's events there. I already want to see more of him. =p

But my favourite part of the whole chapter would probably have to be that bit from Adam delving into Bill's whole namesake and origin for said name there. But I can't say it surprises me given you are probably the world's authority on Bill. ;p

Hurrah for the potential or a rather interesting battle (or attempt anyway given Bill's, uh, skills) in the next chapter too!
"Right under writing theses,
I suddenly had a moment of 'wait, that's the plural of thesis?'. And I'm not sure why I'm mentioning it (because it is) but...well I felt like it. =p To make this less pointless I will say I laughed when Bill got himself into another socially embarrassing position there with his mouth - that scene went nicely in terms of reading, imo. Bill might disagree but that's his own darn fault!
Forgive me, Adam drawled, but Lanette seems too intriguing to resist.
Adam x Lanette time? *runs*
Adam mounted the parapet and launched itself directly downward. It pretended not to hear Bill's screams.
This part was amusing to read, heh. XD


All in all rather enjoyed this chapter, as usual, and am looking forward to the next chapter! why did this change fonts halfway through I don't even
 

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And I finally have a spare moment to reply. o_x

Anyways, I found the reveal about Bill's father working for TR to be a neat twist, and I enjoyed the conversation he had with Ariana.

Thank you! It's always fun to come up with shiny backstory for random characters. :D

But I quite like John's character and manner of speech and... reactions? to the scene's events there. I already want to see more of him. =p

Ask and ye shall receive... in a few chapters. ;D

But my favourite part of the whole chapter would probably have to be that bit from Adam delving into Bill's whole namesake and origin for said name there. But I can't say it surprises me given you are probably the world's authority on Bill. ;p

Damn right I am. I mean, what?

Seriously... *bow* That part was a lot of fun to write for me too. Just having Adam taunt Bill with tiny details like that? Adam's just very easy for me to write for pretty obvious reasons, I'll say that.

Hurrah for the potential or a rather interesting battle (or attempt anyway given Bill's, uh, skills)

Haha, yeah. XD Bill's going to get his rear handed to him repeatedly. *solemn nod*

I suddenly had a moment of 'wait, that's the plural of thesis?'. And I'm not sure why I'm mentioning it (because it is) but...well I felt like it. =p

Totally okay. I had to look it up to make sure I was spelling it right too. Because, lolwut theses.

To make this less pointless I will say I laughed when Bill got himself into another socially embarrassing position there with his mouth - that scene went nicely in terms of reading, imo. Bill might disagree but that's his own darn fault!

Bwahahahaaa, yes. He never did learn how to keep his mouth shut, luckily for the amusement of the rest of us.

Adam x Lanette time? *runs*

Actually, I have fun things planned for the two of them. ;D

Um, fun things that don't involve terrible ideas leading to trips to the emergency room and very awkward things said to ER technicians.

All in all rather enjoyed this chapter, as usual, and am looking forward to the next chapter!

Thank you! Working on it as quickly as I can~!

why did this change fonts halfway through I don't even

The same kind of talent that, in combination with my awesome timing and procrastination skills, helped delay the BBS Christmas Tree for about a month?
 
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I haven't had time to go into detail - and truth be told i'm no GOOD at detail - but I adore this story. I truly do. I love Adam, Bill, everyone involved. Adam reminds me of Alex Mercer from Prototype, oddly enough... perhaps its the superhuman aspect of him, or the way he looks at the world around him.

On that note - actually on the note of Adam overall - I don't know what it is about him (y'know, besides being a Sentient Alien Parasite badass from the land of awesome) but he's perhaps my favorite character and you've certainly inspired me to do the series i've had in my head for a while (don't worry, not ideas wise, simply because this is so awesome!)

ANYWAY I hope you write more and good luck with it! :D

Thanks,
RabidMaggot93
 

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*dusts off the ol' account* Man, every time I say I should be more active, it turns out I get heaps of crap to do. Sorry 'bout that, folks. I will eventually finish this fic. Eventually.

Also!

Adam reminds me of Alex Mercer from Prototype, oddly enough... perhaps its the superhuman aspect of him, or the way he looks at the world around him.

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Seriously, thank you, and brofist for the classy reference right there. While I have to admit I haven't gotten my hands on Prototype myself, I know the storyline, have read the comic (mmm, zombie outbreak), and watched enough videos to know that it's all kinds of awesome. I can also appreciate the comparison because, seriously, Alex Mercer is badass incarnate, in my opinion.

On that note - actually on the note of Adam overall - I don't know what it is about him (y'know, besides being a Sentient Alien Parasite badass from the land of awesome) but he's perhaps my favorite character and you've certainly inspired me to do the series i've had in my head for a while (don't worry, not ideas wise, simply because this is so awesome!)

And now I'm making a mental note to sit down and read your fic (also eventually because I'm equally terrible at actually reviewing these days).

ANYWAY I hope you write more and good luck with it! :D

Thanks very much! :D And I certainly won't disappoint you with the "write more" part of that.

Iiiin fact, how's about a new chapter?



Anima Ex Machina: Eighteen
The power is yet unknown.


A wise man once said that if a normal person pulled a lever and received an electric shock, he wouldn't pull the lever again; if a scientist did it, he'd do it at least twice to see if it would happen again. This was largely true in Bill's world. In terms of common sense, pokémon researchers were generally stupid people. This would also explain why Bill, who had very little battling experience and an equal amount of understanding as to how his powers worked, ran headlong into hurricane force winds.

Slamming into a telephone pole, Bill grimaced and braced his back against the fixture. As he opened one eye, he cautiously surveyed what he was up against. Before him lay a war zone. The street in front of the pokémon center was, in a sense, just as he left it: crammed with cars, tents, people, and pokémon. Yet, the difference here was that the orderliness of the Caravan was gone. Cars were overturned or in the process of being overturned. Debris – everything from trash to pots and clothing – sailed along strong currents of wind. People, all of whom were to his luck too distracted by the fighting to notice him, were armed and shooting towards the sky if they weren't running or being tossed right along with everything else the gusts picked up. Pokémon turned their limbs towards a spot above them and fired everything from flames to leaves. Glancing towards the sky, Bill caught sight of what was causing the commotion, and that sight alone was enough to stop him right where he was.

Above the battleground were three white ixodida. All three of them whipped their wings furiously, churning the air into strong gales. Blue feathers of light shot from one harpy's wings to cut through the air and slam into the trainers just beneath her. The second twisted her wings, and the gales she generated picked up every pokémon and person in her path. At the same time, the third held out her hands and turned them in front of her as if to weave the winds around her sisters. All of this happened while they suspended themselves far above their attackers.

Having had enough of this sight, Bill dashed for a nearby building. The windows had been blown out by the storm, so he had no trouble slipping inside to find the comparatively peaceful interior of a wind-gutted shop. As he scrambled over broken glass and overturned shelves of shirts and clothing, he concentrated on only one thing.

"Flying," Bill muttered. "Why are they flying?"

Inside his head, he could feel Adam's presence. Well, Bill, I do believe they would be what your kind call "flying-types."

"Yes, but…" He shook his head. "I'm not a flying-type! I think."

Your point?

"Why are they flying?!"

Adam sighed. If you are asking why they are of the Wind Clan but you are not, that would be explained by the fact that I hardly care for their kind at all. Bill, you are in the middle of a battle. What is your next move?

"My next move?"

Yes. I would assume you are planning on doing something besides run.

"I-I'm working on it."

He tore across the store and to the opposite wall. Seemingly at random, he began throwing open every door he could find along it – doors to closets, to bathrooms, to back rooms. Adam watched as its host scrambled into the latter, clamoring over cardboard boxes in search of another door.

Is that so? Adam asked. And what, may I ask, are you planning on doing exactly?

"I need to get to the roof," Bill replied, as if it was the simplest question in the world.

And from there?

"I haven't the faintest."

Bill reached a door on the opposite side of the wall. Shoving it open, he slipped outside once again, but this time, he found an alley just behind the store. Just outside, the wind was not much more than a cold breeze carrying the strong scent of garbage. The other ixodida were nowhere to be seen, but Bill could hear them clearly on the other side of the building – a sharp reminder of why he was out there. At the same time, he couldn't see any sign of what he was looking for: a fire escape, a ladder, anything that would help him climb the brick walls surrounding him. Realizing this fact, he raised his claws and examined them.

"Adam," he said.

Yes, Bill?

"When you climbed the gym wall, you didn't need to do anything else but pierce the surface, correct?"

Correct. If you tried it, our body will know what to do.

"Is that so?" Bill replied quietly. Then, he gazed at the brick wall of the shop. "Well. Nothing to lose, I suppose."

He approached the wall and placed a hand on it. Experimentally, he pushed his claws into the brick, feeling their hard tips grind against the solid surface.

You will need to hit it harder than that, Bill.

Bill hesitated, hand feeling the solidity of the brick and mind acknowledging that stabbing a wall with one's own fingers would most likely hurt just a bit. Nonetheless, he closed his eyes and tried to follow Adam's advice. His body would know what to do, but how was he supposed to make a connection between what he wanted it to do and what it could do?

The sound of the birds' shrieks from the other side of the building snapped him out of his meditations. Looking up, he saw a flash of light, and he could hear a crack of thunder. With that, Bill steadied himself and turned his eyes back to the wall. He brought a hand back and let it cut through the air until it slammed into the surface. All five of his claws sank into the material like nails being driven into it with a hammer. His other hand followed, and soon, Bill found himself climbing up the wall without much effort.

"I can't believe I'm doing this," he murmured.

You can do much more, Adam replied, but this is a good start.

Bill briefly thought to ask Adam what he meant, but as he climbed onto the roof, he felt the wind from the ixodida not far away. It served as his anchor, his focus point as he clambered over the edge of the building and onto the roof. Looking up, he caught a glimpse of the three birds, still stirring winds between them above the main street. Jumping to his feet, Bill launched himself forward until he stood on the edge of the roof closest to them. Part of him felt shudders of nervousness; he knew he didn't really think his plan all the way through. The other part, meanwhile, was the one that drove him to lift an arm and wave it at the other ixodida.

"Hey!" he shouted. "Hey! Over here!"

While two of the harpies broke formation to dive at the crowd beneath them, the third turned her head to look at Bill. He opened his mouth, prepared to speak and address her, but then, something hot hit him from behind. In the next few seconds, all he could see was green light. He felt as if a sledgehammer slammed into his spine. The ground slipped from beneath his feet, and all of a sudden, his limbs flailed through the air until his fingertips hit brick. His entire body jolted, and right then, Bill realized he was hanging from the wall, back and arms throbbing with a stabbing, hot pain. The other ixodida's shriek filled his ears, and mid-wince, he caught sight of a white blur sailing above him.

Shakily, he pulled himself upwards and back onto the roof just in time to watch the harpy slam her entire form into Lanette's altaria. Lanette herself leapt into the air to dismount, landing with her back turned towards Bill.

"Altaria! Blind it with Toxic!" she ordered.

The bird screeched and enveloped the alien with her wings. As soon as she realized what was about to happen, the harpy thrashed as her enemy craned her slender neck and began hacking and coughing. The bird's beak opened, and a black, viscous mass splattered onto the ixodida's face. Skin hissed beneath a coat of slime as the harpy screamed and violently twisted her body in an effort to get away.

Across the roof, Lanette pulled her crowbar free from the straps across her back. "Altaria, send her back. DragonBreath!"

Once more, the altaria whipped her head upwards and opened her beak. This time, sparks of green light gathered in the back of her throat. The glow grew quickly until it filled her entire mouth. Then, she unfolded her wings and exhaled, breathing out the energy in the form of a wide, green beam. Blind and unable to defend herself, Altaria's opponent took the brunt of the attack and sailed backwards, her screams drowning in the roar of the blast. At the same time, Lanette gracefully stepped aside and swung her crowbar into the incoming harpy. Metal met the ixodida's skull with a sickening crack, driving her to flip in the air and fall limply like a ragdoll onto the tar roof. Lanette wasted no time from there: she flipped her crowbar with one hand and stabbed the white-feathered creature through her stomach. Green liquid and blood spurted out from the jewel on the alien's torso.

Bill had never been so terrified of someone he knew in all his life. He watched her yank her crowbar free from the ixodida's body. In his silence, he rose to his feet once more, but he couldn't force his mind to work enough to say something to her. It was Lanette who had to break the quiet between them, although she never turned to face him.

"Do you want to die?" she growled.

"W-what?" Bill murmured.

Lanette flicked her wrist, shaking blood and the parasite's bodily fluids off her crowbar.

"I was very clear with the sentence I gave you," she said. "Exile or death. And here you are."

"Lanette…" Bill forced himself to smile at her. "You-you wouldn't really… would you?"

She turned her head to look over a shoulder at him. Without warning, she screamed and lunged at him, swinging her crowbar at his head. Instinctively, he ducked, dodging her first strike narrowly. His arms flew in front of his face to defend himself as his entire body began to glow silver. Her crowbar connected with his forearm with a resounding clang, but with Iron Defense reinforcing Bill's armor, Lanette's weapon slid off him harmlessly. For Bill, a dull ache radiated from the spot she hit, but it was nothing compared to the pain he felt when Lanette's crowbar nailed him on the side of the head. His vision flooded with fuzzy spots as he reeled away from her. One of his hands grasped the side of his head, and he closed one eye and gritted his teeth.

"You're serious!" he yelped. "Lanette, stop!"

His vision resolved just seconds before he saw another flash of silver headed towards the other side of his head. A gasp caught in his throat as he sidestepped his colleague, but this put him in clear range of a large, round sphere of green light launched by the altaria hovering nearby. For the second time in a span of fifteen minutes, Bill pinwheeled through the air, hot pain lacing through his limbs before he faceplanted into the roof on the opposite side of the building. Groaning, he lifted his head and squinted just enough to see a blue blob hanging several feet away from him. A brown boot came down hard next to him, and, already shaking, he turned his eyes to see Lanette standing above him.

"Why won't you put up a fight?" she asked.

Bill coughed. He planted his hands on the roof and pushed until he knelt with his head bowed.

"Because I'm not your enemy," he replied.

"No," she said quietly. "That's not what I meant."

She swung one more time, smacking Bill in the back of the head. He sprawled onto the roof again, but this time, Lanette pushed him onto his back with one of her feet. That same foot planted itself onto his chest, and both of her hands drew in front of her to encircle the crowbar tightly.

"I mean you're possibly the most pathetic ixodida I've ever met," she told him.

She raised her crowbar, pointed end aimed at Bill's head. Right when it was raised as high as she could lift it, a white figure swooped down and grabbed the other end. Lanette had no time to defend herself before she was pulled into the air by a pair of white-feathered arms. Altaria shrieked and turned her head, beak open as green light gathered in her beak, but she hesitated as her target held her master close. Bill sat up, eyes wide as he watched both Lanette and the creature rise into the air with altaria trailing far behind. Two other ixodida joined them shortly afterwards.

It didn't take long for two realizations to hit Bill. First, the obvious – that Lanette was just captured by a bunch of ixodida. The second was a bit more obscure.

"Adam, weren't there only three ixodida?" Bill asked quickly.

Without hesitation, Adam replied, Yes, Bill, I do believe there were.

"One of them is dead."

Yes, Bill.

"There's…"

Bill forced himself to his feet as quickly as his injuries would allow. Yelping, he held his head as the world swam around him.

"Adam, I need to think. How quickly can my body recover from Lanette's attacks?"

Luckily, not that long. We should be within fighting condition in a few minutes.

Grumbling, Bill opened an eye. "I really don't plan on fighting, but I need a way to follow those ixodida. How high can I jump?"

Not very.

"Can I draw them to me?"

I would hardly suggest it.

"What if I used an attack to launch myself towards them? Perhaps Hyper Beam or something of that nature?"

I do believe that would be considered a ridiculous idea.

Bill sighed in exasperation. "Then what can I do?"

There was a pause as Bill watched the white figures grow more and more distant. He thought for a moment that Adam was simply not going to help him at all, but as he began to rattle his brain for a plan of his own, the parasite responded.

There is one thing you can do.

Bill glanced down. "What?"

Run forward and jump.

"What?!"

Do it. You will see.

Bill fixed his jaw. Glancing around him, he couldn't quite see anything that would help him put together a better idea, and in any case, Adam knew his body best… right? Taking a deep breath, Bill fixed his eyes straight ahead. Once he cleared his mind, he sprinted forward, his every muscle focused on carrying him to the edge of the building as quickly as possible. He had no idea what he was going to do. No combination of powers came to mind. All he thought about was running, as if that would somehow magically bring Lanette down safely.

Then, he ran out of ground. His body launched over the edge, arms flailing through the air and wind rushing around him. That's when it clicked. A sudden thought – one that he considered simple at that moment, as crazy as it would have sounded if he wasn't free-falling from a three-story building. In preparation for that single plan, Bill's body began to glow with a golden aura. His mouth opened, and without thinking about it, he uttered two short words.

"Magnet Rise!"
 

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*dusts off the ol' account* Man, every time I say I should be more active, it turns out I get heaps of crap to do. Sorry 'bout that, folks.
Don't say it any more then - clearly larger forces are at work here! =o

Overall I enjoyed the action in this scene, from Bill learning how to climb walls to Lanette being awesome with crowbars to...well actually Lanette being awesome with crowbars stands out too darn much in this chapter. =p I am intrigued by how she tried to kill Bill anyway and the fact she's now being kidnapped - wonder how Bill will manage in his attempt to be a big damn hero?

My bet is on 'not very well' but we shall see! =p

I was wondering curiously if you would have used that opening paragraph's quote sooner or latter, so I like that it started that way. XD

Bill's conversations with Adam continue to be entertaining although I do feel that Adam went a touch 'missing' during the middle part of the chapter - no instruction or anything given how close Bill was to dying by Lannette's hand there imo - maybe a comment or two here and there would be something to consider.
Lanette gracefully stepped aside and swung her crowbar into the incoming harpy. Metal met the ixodida's skull with a sickening crack, driving her to flip in the air and fall limply like a ragdoll onto the tar roof. Lanette wasted no time from there: she flipped her crowbar with one hand and stabbed the white-feathered creature through her stomach.
Aside works but I just wonder if 'to the side' might be a touch better as aside - for myself anyway - seems to have the connotation of being more 'away' than to the side... idk if that really makes sense though. =p
"What if I used an attack to launch myself towards them? Perhaps Hyper Beam or something of that nature?"

I do believe that would be considered a ridiculous idea.
I do believe he is right. XD That was quite amusing, that line.

Keep it up and may life stuff be less...full of stuff for you!
 

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Don't say it any more then - clearly larger forces are at work here! =o

Yeah, good point there.

Rock off, karma! I only shoved aside one senior citizen this month!

Overall I enjoyed the action in this scene, from Bill learning how to climb walls to Lanette being awesome with crowbars to...well actually Lanette being awesome with crowbars stands out too darn much in this chapter. =p

Thank you!

And I love alternate practical applications for a crowbar. I'm thinking of getting one myself, just because it's so versatile. One part tool to pry open those pesky crates; one part blunt weapon! It's all you'll ever need around the house!

I am intrigued by how she tried to kill Bill anyway and the fact she's now being kidnapped - wonder how Bill will manage in his attempt to be a big damn hero?

My bet is on 'not very well' but we shall see! =p

Pfft, yeah, pretty much.

I was wondering curiously if you would have used that opening paragraph's quote sooner or latter, so I like that it started that way. XD

Thank you!

And it's funny because it's true. Thank you, xkcd.

Bill's conversations with Adam continue to be entertaining although I do feel that Adam went a touch 'missing' during the middle part of the chapter - no instruction or anything given how close Bill was to dying by Lannette's hand there imo - maybe a comment or two here and there would be something to consider.

Ooh. You bring up a good point, and that is a one way to lengthen the chapter in order to keep it from being so short. I'll have to consider that and play with it next time I have a chance to do an edit blitz. (Hopefully, that'll be before the twentieth chapter. :|)

Aside works but I just wonder if 'to the side' might be a touch better as aside - for myself anyway - seems to have the connotation of being more 'away' than to the side... idk if that really makes sense though. =p

I think I get what you're saying. It's easier to picture if it's "to the side," right? I like the sound of it too -- like it's implying that the jump has more control than if Lanette just leapt aside.

I do believe he is right. XD That was quite amusing, that line.

Thank you! I aim to entertain. ;D

And yes, Adam is totally right there. Because a certain researcher apparently can't think of basic laws of gravity when he's got a mild headache. *le nod*

Keep it up and may life stuff be less...full of stuff for you!

Here's to hoping. I'VE GOT MY EYE ON YOU, LIFE. ಠ_ಠ

(But luckily, chapter nineteen is about halfway done. I'm planning on blitz-writing the rest over the weekend, so hopefully a new chapter sometime next week?)
 

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In what pretty much was speed writing in my book (lolwut @ this year), AEM's longest chapter yet. Le woot!



Anima Ex Machina: Nineteen
In the third act, the pistol is shot.


At the time of the attack, the children of the Caravan, save for the capable trainers, were herded into the pokémon center. Most of them were huddled away from the windows in tight, whispering groups of three or four. Ellen and Chansey hovered from cluster to cluster holding trays of mugs filled with steaming hot cocoa. Across the room was a young, purple-haired girl with a furret close behind her. Ellen had nothing to say to her, to this girl she knew as Julie, for a long time. After all, her priority was keeping the children calm and inside the center where it was safe.

But then, something caught her eye. It was a flash of dark green passing by her, so low it nearly knocked the tray out of her hands. Stepping out of the way, she saw the back of a girl; the flash of green, as it turned out, was her pigtails bouncing with each step her sneaker-clad feet made across the floor. She held something close to her chest, something Ellen couldn't see until the girl approached the window. Once she did, the object jumped out of her arms and perched itself on the windowsill. The blue turtle leaned out of the broken front window of the center, peering almost hungrily at the battle outside.

Ellen stepped towards her, reaching for her shoulder with a hand, but before she could touch the girl, Julie appeared by her side.

"Oh, that's Hope," she said. "Don't worry about it. I can take care of her."

Swiftly, she approached the girl and took her hand. Hope looked over her shoulder, revealing a heart-shaped face and large, brown eyes. At once, Ellen stopped. Something about that face struck her – something she couldn't she couldn't place.

"Come on, Hope," Julie cooed, as if she was speaking to a young child. "It's too dangerous to stand by the window like this. Let's go back with the others, okay?"

Julie's hand slid to Hope's wrist, but the girl wasn't about to let herself be led away without a fight. She squealed and twisted, wrenching her arm away from Julie. Her squirtle trilled and jumped out of the open window, followed closely by the trainer herself.

"Hey!" Julie called. "Hope! Wait! Don't go out there! Furret!"

The ferret's ears twitched as he turned. He didn't even need instructions. Furret simply bound across the room, weaving his way between clusters of children until he reached the open window where Julie was already climbing onto the sill. Within seconds, the both of them were outside, leaving Ellen to stand dumbfounded in the room. Chansey approached and gazed at her partner with an inquisitive glance.

"Chansey," Ellen finally said, "take these and keep an eye on the children. I'll be back in a moment."

Obediently, Chansey nodded, took Ellen's tray in her free paw, and watched as the nurse mounted the windowsill and bounded outside with the others.

She didn't get very far. The fighting had ceased, but everyone was frozen in place. Julie stood in the middle of the street with her arms wrapped loosely around Hope, and both of them were turned in the same direction as the others: facing a spot in the sky over the building next to the center. With a blink, Ellen followed their gaze and stopped as dead in her tracks as they had in theirs.

Hanging in the air was what looked like a person -- at least, in terms of size and general shape and the fact that the figure was fully clothed. Beyond that, Ellen could see the tail curled around his form, the claws clutching at the hat on his head, the golden aura surrounding his body, and most importantly, the two pairs of gold, translucent insect wings jutting from his shoulder blades, an addition she knew he didn't have not too long ago.

Ellen's mouth moved, but her voice couldn't connect to it. All she could do was watch as the figure uncurled himself slowly and glance at where he was. Bill looked down and then over his shoulder. He murmured something, but what, Ellen couldn't hear, even with the quiet of the street. Seconds later, he winced and grabbed his head again before looking towards the western horizon. His hands dug into his pockets and pulled out his gloves. Afterwards, the rest of him bent, arms flailing and tail thrashing in an attempt to stabilize himself in the air until, finally, he started off in a wild, zig-zagging path down the street.

The nurse stood there for a few seconds, watching the ixodida bolt for parts unknown. What snapped her out of it was a sharp cry. Something bumped into her, and Ellen realized just a second too late that Hope had broken away from Julie once again. This time, the girl stumbled away from the rancher before bolting in the same direction Bill had followed.

"Hope! Don't!" Julie paused to cast a frantic glance towards Ellen. "Nurse Joy, stay here! I'll go get her! Furret, come on!"

Before Ellen could react, Julie sprinted after the girl, the ferret in tow. The nurse was, once again, left behind in utter, stunned silence.

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A year ago, Lanette would have screamed bloody murder at being carried high into the air by three alien monsters. She never liked heights, much less flying. Now, she had her knife in hand, her arm swinging in a frantic effort to gut her captor. Eventually, one lucky swing planted the blade between the bird's ribs. The ixodida screamed and snapped her arms apart, releasing her victim mid-flight. Lanette slipped through the air, freefalling until she landed on something soft and warm. Sitting up, she sheathed her knife and patted her altaria on the back.

"Good job, Altaria. Now, finish it! Flamethrower!"

The dragon chirped and swiveled her head towards the ixodida. Opening her beak, she spewed a jet of flames at the injured harpy. The fire engulfed the creature, scorching her feathers and sending her to the ground in a fireball. She hit the cement with a crack, and there, she lay burning in a mess of feathers and limbs.

Suddenly, something slammed into Altaria. Rider and mount flew in opposite directions. The second ixodida latched onto Altaria and drove her into a nearby rooftop. At the same time, Lanette fell, her hands grasping desperately for something to break her fall.

Luckily, another hand grabbed hers. Her body jerked to a halt, and in the pause, she looked up to see a gloved hand. Above it, Lanette spotted a familiar face.

"You!" she snapped.

"Good to see you're safe, Lanette," Bill said.

He glanced towards the rooftop where the other ixodida pinned Altaria. The harpy lifted her head, turning her blank eyes to Bill and Lanette.

"That's not good," Bill muttered. "I'm sorry, Lanette, but it looks like we'll need to have this conversation later. Hold on!"

Lanette yelped as Bill pulled her into the air and circled his arms around her waist. When he was sure he had a good grip on her, he darted back towards the pokémon center.

He didn't get far. As soon as the shock wore off, Lanette began thrashing in his arms, pushing her hands against her colleague's chest in an attempt to get away. Bill held her tighter, but this diverted his concentration away from flying. As a result, the two of them began to bob and dart through the air uncontrollably.

"Lanette, hold still!" Bill cried. "I can't—"

She slapped him. Because of that, Bill's concentration completely snapped, driving him to swerve directly into a nearby shop wall. His aura vanished immediately, and both ixodida and human plummeted to a blue awning between the ground and them. Lanette bounced once on the canvas, but Bill, considerably heavier and sharper in a literal sense, ripped straight through and hit the sidewalk with a bang. He groaned and squirmed on his aching back until he propped himself up on his elbows. Then, Lanette slipped through the hole in the awning and landed squarely on Bill's torso. The blow forced the breath out of his lungs all at once as he smacked into the pavement again.

Sitting up, Lanette glanced towards the street. She noticed how quiet it was. How still.

Her lips moved as her voice spilled across them in a low mumble. "Altaria… Altaria! I'm coming!"

She twisted and began to stand, but before she could, a hand grabbed her wrist. Looking down, she found the eyes of her partner.

"Lanette, wait," he pleaded, hoarsely at first until he paused to clear his throat. "Altaria is a very strong pokémon, isn't she? Once we can convince the ixodida that we mean them no harm, we can get her to Nurse Joy, but please, don't hurt them."

"'Don't hurt them'?!" Lanette wrenched her wrist free from her former partner's grasp. "Are you an idiot?! Bill, do you even know what you eat?!"

He looked at her confusion. "I'm not sure how that's relevant, but raw meat."

"It's perfectly relevant!" she snapped. "Where do you think that raw meat comes from?!"

"I…" Bill stood. "Isn't it the same as what humans eat?"

"No!" She huffed. "Bill, ixodida like you eat other pokémon!"

"…What?"

He fell quiet as he placed a hand over his stomach. All of a sudden, he felt queasy while the memory of his first meal as an ixodida surfaced in his mind. His mouth tasted acidic, and for a second, he thought he was going to throw up. In the meantime, Lanette drew her crowbar from the straps on her back and pointed it at Bill.

"That altaria evolved from Brigette's swablu. If something happened to her…"

"Lanette…"

Bill shook his head and gave her a half-sick, half-sympathetic glance. Then, he caught a glimpse of something beyond her, and his expression completely dissolved into one of surprise. As quickly as he could, he lunged at her and shoved her out of the way of a stream of blue, disc-shaped lights. As soon as she hit the road, Lanette looked up, eyes darting back towards the storefront where she watched her partner get knocked clean off his feet. He crashed onto the sidewalk not far away, and through a wince, he looked up to see a white-feathered creature. This one stepped forward, folding a set of wings as he offered a hand to Bill.

"My intent was to prevent her from harming you, not doing so myself. I apologize," he said.

Bill smiled and reached for the other ixodida's hand, but before he could grasp it, it fell numb.

Be wary, Adam hissed. Do not let your guard down.

As quickly as it happened, Bill could feel his hand again, and with a sigh of relief, he grasped the ixodida's. The creature pulled him to his feet and looked him over carefully.

"No harm done," Bill said. "She really wasn't going to harm me, you know. Lanette is just a bit cautious around ixodida like us. I promise you, if we can show her that we have no intent to fight any human, we can—"

The flying-type's tail twitched. "Are you a rogue?"

Bill released the ixodida's hand and blinked. "A… what?"

Adam sighed. Bill. When someone asks if you are a rogue, the proper answer is no.

"What?" he murmured. "Why?"

Do you not remember the last time someone found out we were a rogue?

The other ixodida narrowed his eyes. "A rogue of the Iron Clan. My empress would be most interested in you. Please come with me."

Bill looked up. Adam?

The proper answer would be no again, Bill.

With a nod, Bill took a deep breath, straightened his back, and replied, "I'm afraid I can't. But please—"

Without warning, Lanette's scream cut through their conversation. The feathered ixodida turned and extended his wings. He flapped them furiously, churning the air into a gale that met Lanette halfway through her lunge towards them, and before she could change direction, she was blasted back into the street. She landed on her side with a thud and skidded for several more inches before coming to a stop.

"Lanette!" Bill shouted.

A shadow cast over her, and she looked up to see the second harpy flying high overhead. The female extended her wings, readying them for one more attack. Lanette sat up, struggling to force her body into moving quickly, but the ixodida was faster. Her wings flapped rapidly, shaking blue arcs of energy free from her feathers. They cut through the air towards the human as the latter closed her eyes and braced herself for impact.

That impact never came. Before it could, something warm hit her and held her tightly. Opening her eyes once more, she first took notice of a green barrier of light standing between her and the arcs. Each strike drummed off the surface of the translucent wall, causing it to flare brightly. Then, she realized the warm something was more of a warm someone – someone embracing her with his own eyes closed.

"Bill…" she whispered. "You can use Protect?"

Opening one eye, Bill gazed at the barrier. "So that's what he meant…" Then, with a grunt, he held Lanette a little tighter. "Lanette, I can't keep this up forever. What are we going to do?"

Lanette regained her composure and frowned. "Listen. I won't ask you to kill anyone, but without Altaria, I won't be able to fight these monsters by myself. I need your help."

The attack stopped, and with it, Bill's barrier faded. He relaxed his hold on her as he pulled away just enough to look at her face.

"What are you saying?" he asked. "Wait, you don't mean… Lanette, the ixodida are just like me! They're people inside! We can't hurt them! Please, just let me—"

Lanette, whose eyes remained on the other ixodida in the sky, abruptly gasped. She threw her arms around her partner and embraced him as tightly as she could.

"Use Protect now!" she yelled.

Without even thinking about it, Bill held her and closed his eyes again. Another dome of green light surrounded the two of them, blocking a stream of high-speed wind generated by the female. Lanette's fingers clenched fistfuls of cotton cloth from her partner's shirt as she tightened her hold just slightly.

"If we don't act against them, they'll hurt someone," she told him. "If it's not us, then it will be the people of the Caravan. We don't have time for diplomacy. They won't fight fairly, and if we show them we won't fight back, they'll take that as an opportunity. Bill, I'm not asking you to kill anyone, but I have to do whatever it takes to protect the others. If you'll help me, I'll know I can trust you, but if you won't, then don't protect me. Do you understand?"

The wind died down, allowing Bill to let the barrier fade. He relaxed just enough to look at Lanette once again.

"All right," he said quietly. "What can I do?"

Lanette pushed herself away from him. "You can fly. Distract the other one and try to lure it into landing. I'll handle the one on the ground. Go!"

She shoved him away and bolted to her own feet. Nodding, Bill rose and cleared his mind until his body regained its golden aura. His feet left the ground, and the gold insect wings burst from his back. Looking up, he cast a glance towards the female.

"Let's hope I can do this," he murmured to himself.

Lanette didn't spend much time watching her partner; she only waited until he slapped his tail against the ground and rose quickly into the air. Once he did, she whirled around and plucked a ball from one of the pouches on the belts across her chest. Her feet stepped forward in wide, graceful arcs as her hand swept downward, fingers clicking the button on the ball to enlarge it before she let it slip from her grasp.

"Spinda, go! Teeter Dance!" she cried.

The ball opened with a pop, spewing out a brilliant, white light onto the pavement. In seconds, the light formed the shape of a small, red-and-white bear, and from there, the spinda leapt immediately into action – literally. She hopped from one foot to the other, bounding in a half-stagger towards the male ixodida. Blue light outlined her body as her paws rose in drunken waves, adding to the stumbling dance. With a growl, he responded by flicking his wings up and over his head, shielding his face from the bear and her dance.

"Take the opening," Lanette ordered. "Water Pulse! Now!"

Spinda stopped where she was and lifted an arm. The blue light around her body pulled upwards, swirling into a glowing ball the size of her head. She jerked her paw backwards and threw it down, slamming it into the pavement as her momentum pitched the ball towards the ixodida. The sphere of light splashed against Spinda's opponent seconds later, and once it made contact, it expanded until the feathered creature was completely engulfed in water.

Lanette clenched her hand around her crowbar and barked one last order. "Finish it! Shock Wave!"

At her master's order, Spinda let loose a cry and raised her arm once more. Blue electricity crackled off her body before rushing up to a point of light at her paw's tip. She twirled once, bringing her arms down until she pointed them, paws out, at the ixodida. The ball of white light bobbed in front of them and burst into a beam of electricity that sliced through the air and slammed into the water surrounding Spinda's opponent. Instantly, the attack exploded, sending electricity and steam arcing into the air. For the next few moments, the battlefield on the ground was shrouded in smoke until, finally, it cleared enough for Lanette to peer at what was left.

The ixodida's feathered wings were still clamped around it, but his coat was no longer snow-white. Rather, patches of feathers were colored black, curled with burns and still slick with moisture. Part of the wall of feathers fell, tilting the whole thing to an angle as if the bird within it fell to one knee.

Lanette took that to be her cue. Her voice ripped from her throat in a yell as she raised her crowbar above her head and stormed forward. Just as she was within a foot of her intended victim, the ixodida spread his wings, knocking her back onto the pavement. He glared at her, eyes narrow and teeth bared as his chest heaved with one breath after another.

"How weak do you think I am?" he snarled. "Do you know who I am? I..." He slowly stood, his legs shaking in an effort to support his body. "I am a monarch. I am one of the empress's chosen guardians. I am not only one of the Wind Clan. I am its lord, the Lord of the Skies. I am not one you should underestimate!"

He held his hands together as a golden orb grew between them. His hands separated, allowing the ball to grow to the size of a basketball as he pulled his arms back, reading an attack. Lanette simply stood and narrowed her eyes at her opponent, waiting for the strike. She didn't move. She didn't speak. She merely watched as the ixodida threw his hands forward and released his pent-up energy in the form of a hot, wide beam of light.

It sailed right through what he thought was Lanette and blew a massive hole in the side of the building across the street.

"And I am three feet to your right," Lanette told him matter-of-factly.

The ixodida froze, his arms shaking as he suddenly became aware that Lanette was very close to his side. A stabbing pain racked his body, and he threw his head back and screamed. His hands flew to his side where Lanette had wedged her knife into the parasitic core sitting on top of his ribs. Looking to his side, his mind finally cleared, and his vision focused until he could see the real Lanette at last.

"Confusion is an inconvenience, isn't it?" she purred. "So would being a member of a species with a fatal Achilles' heel."

She pulled her knife free from the ixodida's body and sheathed it once more. Then, she turned and began walking away.

"Spinda, put it out of its misery. Rock Tomb."

With a grin, Spinda held one of her paws up. Then, she twisted it as she spun around wildly, kicking one of her legs up as she turned. She paused at the end of her rotation, fixing her spiral-shaped eyes on her target before swinging herself around. Her body gained speed as it lowered closer to the ground until, finally, she stopped on her knees with one paw rising in the air and the other slamming into the ground. The pavement beneath her rumbled as a crack rushed from beneath her paw to the ixodida. Once it reached the bird's feet, the ground split open, sending him falling into a hole as the cement rose and slammed together to swallow him completely.

In the ensuing silence, Lanette huffed and looked to the sky.

"That was almost too easy," she muttered. "Now, if only Bill would stop fooling around and pull down the other one."

A cry from Spinda snapped her attention away from the sky. Casting a glance Spinda's way, Lanette immediately froze as her lips parted slightly. The reason why was staggering towards her with a nose smashed into the skull, two arms hanging limply, a leg dragging behind it, a back crooked, and what appeared to be burns all over its body.

"You've got to be kidding," Lanette sneered as she watched the half-dead female stagger towards her. "Fine. If you want to play like that…" She raised her crowbar. "…Come get me, then."

Meanwhile, Bill was literally flying circles around the other female – with good reason, too. Every moment he hesitated, she extended her wings and flapped them to launch another attack: another gale, another stream of blue lights, another rain of feathers. He bobbed and darted through the air in an attempt to dodge each one. One blast of wind caught him, driving him towards the ground again. The golden aura around him flickered and nearly faded before flaring up brightly just before he could smack into the ground. As a result, he glided just a few inches from the cement and launched himself into the air to analyze the situation again.

Protect becomes less effective the more times I use it in a row, he thought. I've already used it twice so far; using it a third time would be too risky. And she's using distance attacks, so Iron Defense won't be effective. What does that leave me?

Actually attacking?
Adam inquired.

"I can't, Adam," Bill replied as he dodged another stream of wind. "She's too fast, and I'm not ready to fight an ixodida yet. I can barely fight a normal Pokémon!"

Then you propose doing nothing at all?

Bill opened his mouth, but a cry prevented him for responding. He glanced down to see Lanette and a spinda freeze in their tracks. Ambling towards them was an ixodida, limping and flopping like a walking, half-burnt ragdoll.

"Oh no," he whispered.

Suddenly, something collided into him, and the next thing he knew, the harpy latched onto him and dragged him close to the ground where she threw him into the pavement. She sped away after that, pulling up and out of her Aerial Ace with a cackle. Groaning in effort, Bill sat up.

Bill, we cannot simply sit here and do nothing, Adam barked at him. One female is attacking us, and the other is threatening your friend. What will you do?

"I can't kill anyone," Bill said. "Isn't there another way? Can't I just convince them to stop attacking?"

That will not work with my kind. They only know war. Why will you not understand this?

Bill felt the wind pick up slightly. His nerves prickled as he cautiously cast a glance towards the female in the sky. She held her hands in front of her as a blue sphere of light swirled between them. Pulling her hands back, she aimed her palms at Bill and pushed on the ball, sending it flying right at him. He snapped his arms in front of his face and summoned another bright, green barrier to block the attack. The orb exploded on impact, flashing with a brilliant blue light as the energy contained within it rippled across the emerald wall. It took a few seconds for the dome to fade completely, and Bill took that as his cue to stand.

However, his opponent wasn't finished. With another flap of her wings, she pulled her hands in front of her once again to generate another ball of blue light. For a second time, Bill cringed, holding up his hands and drawing yet another barrier around him. Once again, the female sent the ball flying just a second too late, and the attack smacked against the steel-type's force field and exploded harmlessly across its surface. This time around, as soon as it faded, Bill let his arms hang limply. They felt heavy and numb, as if they had been tied to weights for the past hour.

Bill, you must fight back, Adam instructed. Only defending yourself will get you nowhere.

"I know! I know!" Bill answered. "I just need time to think!"

You will need to think faster than that.

For a third time, the harpy drew her hands in front of her body. Wind swirled around her as another blue ball of energy formed in her hands. Bill, ignoring the numb feeling in his arms, forced himself to raise them one more time and summon one last barrier. This one glowed with a fainter light than his first one, however, and his arms shook as he held it up. As a result, when the ball flew at the barrier, it didn't strike it. It passed right through.

Bill had no time to react. The ball slammed into his arms and chest, tearing him off his feet and sending him flying backwards. He landed in a heap a few feet from where he started with a loud bang.

Seconds before that moment, Lanette had directed Spinda into another attack, one that was in the process of being executed. Spinda opened her mouth and inhaled deeply as her spiral-shaped eyes filled with tears. Then, she bellowed, her voice rising in volume to the point where the shop windows around her shattered. Blue ripples of light ebbed from her mouth and struck the ixodida, causing her to screech and flail her arms wildly until one of them struck and swept Spinda. The feathered alien sent the panda flying at an angle into a shop wall while the other struck Lanette just as she darted in to deliver a blow with her crowbar. Lanette was flung backwards, crashing onto the ground with a cry just after Bill landed. The steel-type's attention was drawn to her again at once.

"Lanette! No!" he cried.

Now do you see? Adam asked. If you refuse to act, you will not fulfill your true purpose.

Bill lowered his head. "Adam, I can't do this by myself. I need to help Lanette, and I need your assistance to do it."

Then what do you propose to do?

Bill stood and held his arm. Above him, a screech sounded. He looked up to see the other harpy diving at him, her entire body glowing with a neon, teal color. That's when he tensed.

"I have an idea," he said.

Several feet away, Lanette picked her head up and shook it. A shadow loomed over her, and realizing that the injured ixodida was just above her, she reached for her crowbar, only to notice she had dropped it exactly where she had started. She sat up and pushed herself backwards, her eyes steadying on her opponent. The alien's lips parted, jaw unhinging to stretch her mouth wider than a human's could ever open. Yet, Lanette didn't scream. She didn't make a sudden move. She didn't even make a sound.

That is, until she let loose an involuntary yelp when the second feathered ixodida crashed into the first. Bill skidded to a halt in front of her, shielding himself with his arms as he stood between the ixodida and her.

"Are you okay?" he asked.

She raised an eyebrow. "Fine."

"Good. Don't move."

The two harpies untangled themselves, snarling at one another before the healthy one spread her wings. With a flap, she was airborne again, but she wasn't that far from the ground before Bill rushed at her and grabbed her tail. He yanked her down roughly, ignoring the high-pitched screams that tore from her throat. Once she was down, one of his hands grabbed a wing while the claws of the other hand began to glow white. His fingers slashed across the base of the wing, severing it from the rest of the harpy's body with a crack. Her shrieks grew louder, and still, Bill didn't react to them. He simply focused on channeling the energy in his hand into his tail, and once it began to glow white, he turned quickly and swung it into the female. The metal cut through her body easily, sending her torso falling to the ground with a wet thump as her waist and legs dropped to the ground like a puppet cut from its strings.

Bill raised his claws, ready to finish her off when the other ixodida grabbed him from behind. Her jaw unhinged again, releasing a hot breath of air that smelled strongly of fish. Shuddering, her prey wrinkled his nose and reached up to grasp her forehead.

"You lot need to learn new tricks," he stated.

With that, he sank his claws into his skull and flipped her up and over his head. As soon as she hit the pavement, her screaming stopped, and her head snapped clean off her body. Her arms flailed, grabbing onto Bill's feet as a red glow flashed in her back. He stooped down, his claws digging into the glow until he felt the smooth, glass-like surface of the parasite's body against his palm. Then, with a yank upwards, he ripped the ixodida's core free from her back. The rest of her body fell still as Bill stood over her, examining the parasite closely. At last, he clenched his fist, crushing the squealing pokémon in a burst of green liquid.

"One down," he murmured.

A scraping noise drew his attention to something crawling behind him. He lifted his tail, once again channeling energy into it until it began to glow white. Then, he turned, gliding his tail clean through the other female's neck. Her head dropped to the pavement and bounced until it rolled for a few feet, but the rest of the body continued towards him.

"Where is your core?" he muttered.

Suddenly, as if to answer his question, a crowbar jammed into the female's hand. Green liquid spurted out of the wound, and the headless torso collapsed. Lanette pulled her crowbar from the ixodida's body and flicked it to shake off the parasite's fluids, but she kept her gaze on the ground as she did it.

Sighing with relief, Bill grinned at Lanette and walked to the middle of the street where the flying-type's blast forced him to drop his hat. Scooping it up, he fitted it back over his horns as he spoke to his partner.

"That's quite enough excitement for one day, don't you think? Thank you for your help, by the way. You did spec—"

He turned, only to come a mere inches from letting the pointed end of Lanette's crowbar stab through his scarf and into the flesh on the front of his neck.

"Okay," she growled, "who are you?"

He blinked. "What? Lanette, it-it's me."

"********," she said. "It might have been Bill who saved me the first two times, but you're not him. Who are you, and what did you do to him?"

Instantly, his expression blanked, and the creature that was controlling him reached up to grasp the end of Lanette's crowbar. She was about to slide it out of the ixodida's grip when it forcefully pulled her close.

"My kind normally do not give one another names, but you may call me Adam," it said. "I assure you, Bill is safe. Watching this, even. Our hosts are fully conscious for everything we do – even when we get them killed."

"If you're trying to force me to feel sympathy for monsters like you, you failed. Now, let Bill go," Lanette snapped.

"Or what? You will hurt me with this little thing?" Adam narrowed its eyes. "Do you realize how easy it would be to kill you right now? I could stab you with my free hand. Decapitate you with my tail. Pull you high into the air, drop you, and watch you crack on the pavement like an egg. And those are just the possibilities Bill is aware of. He has no idea of half the weapons I have given him."

Lanette released her crowbar and drew her knife from her belt. "Don't underestimate me. I know all about your weakness. The parasite body. If it's destroyed—"

"Then you will live with the knowledge that you killed one of your closest friends," Adam finished. "Little girl, not that I happen to be proud of this fact, but I have killed far more of my kind than you could ever hope to eliminate yourself. Your threats do not scare me. And another thing."

The creature stepped forward. Lanette flicked her knife downward, pointing it at Adam. It twitched its tail and grabbed onto the blade with a bare hand.

"Bill can feel everything right now. Pain. Excitement. The heat of your body. It was his idea, you know. To help him learn about this body, just for this battle, he can feel everything I am experiencing. So, if you drive that knife into me, he will feel every second of blinding, excruciating pain until he and I finally die together. Do you really want to inflict that upon him?"

Lanette's skin paled just a shade. Her red eyes glanced to the side, unwilling to peer into those of her colleague.

"And do you want to know something else?" Adam asked.

"What?" she snapped.

It grabbed her chin and turned her head slowly – gently, even. "The reason why I have not attempted to kill you right now is because you entertain me. Your insistence on pretending to be a warrior. Your harshness. And most importantly, all the things Bill is saying about you right now, right inside my mind."

Against her better judgment, Lanette stared into the alien's eyes. Outwardly, they were the same eyes as the ones she knew her partner to have, but somehow, these seemed dead. Cold. Unfeeling.

"What is he saying?" she asked as firmly as she could.

"'Don't you dare,'" Adam replied, mimicking Bill's voice perfectly.

Lanette stiffened. "What's that supposed to mean?"

If the creature could smile, Lanette knew exactly what kind would be on its face right then. It wasn't one she would have wanted to see.

"This," it said.

And then, its arms wrapped around her, drew her close, and kissed her forcefully.

For the first time since she joined the Caravan, Lanette Chastain was completely stunned. Her fingers loosened until her knife slipped from her hand and clattered onto the pavement. Although it wasn't the best kiss she had ever experienced, she still felt her eyes widen and her body tingle. Her arms twitched, rejecting her every command to push the ixodida away. Instead, she stared directly at the closed eyes of the all-too-human face in front of her.

Finally, the face pulled away, and its eyes opened. The dead eyes studied her carefully until they flicked to something over her shoulder. Abruptly, the creature's expression cracked. Its face paled, and its lips parted. Something returned to its wide eyes – a spark of emotion that signaled to Lanette that Adam was no longer the being in front of her. She was about to snap something when her partner let loose a soft whisper.

"Hope?"

Lanette looked over her shoulder sharply, and sure enough, behind her stood an alarmed, purple-haired woman holding a young girl close. They had the same eyes -- the alien in front of her and the young girl behind her, but this girl stared at her with a steady, serious expression.

At the sight of that, Lanette's hands tightened into fists. Gradually, she glanced back at Bill, her mind struggling to form the words she wanted to tell him. She didn't want to explain to him why she was there. He wasn't supposed to know at all. But now…

Luckily, before she had a chance to say a word to him, something clocked him in the back of the head. The ball split open, and right away, a red light surrounded him. Lanette backed away, watching as her former colleague and friend was pulled into a purple-and-silver poke ball. It dropped to the road, twitching and swaying violently as the button on its face blinked. All three of the humans stared at it, waiting for something to happen.

And then it stopped. The button turned from red to an unlit gray.

Gingerly, Lanette stooped, her hand reaching out to grab it. Before she could touch it, something struck the ground between her fingers and its plastic surface. She pulled her hand away, rubbing it gingerly as she studied the black tulip that was now planted in the cement. Its blossom crackled with white electricity before it exploded, spewing a thick cloud of smoke into the air. Lanette, Hope, and Julie all began to cough violently as the adults waved their arms in the air in an attempt to clear the cloud.

It took a long while, but eventually, the screen cleared, allowing all three of them the ability to see and breathe. Lanette looked to her feet for the ball that contained the steel-type, and her heart began to pound when she realized the only thing on the ground was the broken stem of the flower. The ball was nowhere to be seen.

"What was that all about?" Julie asked hoarsely.

Lanette turned to her. "Julie."

At once, she straightened and held Hope close. "Whoa, Lanette. Wait! I can explain!"

"Take Hope back to the Caravan and tell them to leave immediately. Don't let Vito try to convince anyone to stay."

Julie hesitated. On the one hand, she felt relieved that Lanette wasn't about to tell her off about letting Hope wander so far from camp. On the other, something was most definitely wrong if Lanette was telling her to order everyone to pack up and leave immediately.

"What about you?" she asked softly.

"There's something I have to do," Lanette replied. "Just do it, Julie."

Before the rancher could object, she pulled out Spinda's poké ball to recall the bear and then yanked another one free from one of her pouches. Her feet began pounding the pavement as her hand worked to enlarge this ball and toss it into the air.

"Solrock, I need you!" she called.

The ball cracked open and released a flash of light into the air. Lanette snatched the orb as soon as it shut and continued to run forward as the ball of light followed until a red, sun-shaped rock burst from it and followed close behind its master.

She didn't know how or why, but Lanette knew two things at that point. First, that Bill was an idiot. Second, that she had to get him back.
 

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Oi, sorry for the late review. Been crazy busy the past few weeks. D:

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LOL, I love how Bill's first question upon seeing the Wind Clan is, "Why are they flying" and then he said that again. And yeah, Bill, running won't do any good as you'll only get slashed in half.

The part where Lanette goes and use her crowbar to stab the harpie, that is dang awesome. Bill's reaction to that, however, is hilarious, haha.

Hm, I feel the part with Lanette trying to kill Bill and then was kidnapped was a bit sudden there. Maybe it's because of Adam not saying anything there, like bobandbill had mentioned. It would indeed be nice if Adam makes a couple comments over why Bill isn't defending himself or something of the like.

Chapter 19
Wee over Ellen and Hope. It's been a while since they last appeared (actually, it's been QUITE a while since Hope appeared D: ).
"It's perfectly relevant!" she snapped. "Where do you think that raw meat comes from?!"

"I…" Bill stood. "Isn't it the same as what humans eat?"

"No!" She huffed. "Bill, ixodida like you eat other pokémon!"

"…What?"

The flying-type's tail twitched. "Are you a rogue?"

Bill released the ixodida's hand and blinked. "A… what?"

Adam sighed. Bill. When someone asks if you are a rogue, the proper answer is no.

"What?" he murmured. "Why?"
Love both of those parts because Bill is clueless still over being an ixodidia, haha.

Okay, you just made Spinda very awesome when Lanette had that Pokemon go against the monarch. And woot for her able to take advantage of its confusion (that's why I love and dread Water Pulse, LOL)! :D

I admit, I was a bit confused over Bill smacking down the other ixodida and, like Lanette, thinking, that's not Bill! "You lot need to learn new tricks?" So not him to say something cool like that to me. :P However, that kiss between him and Lanette…oh my. XD; Too bad he got caught, though. D:

Overall, I enjoyed the two chapters a lot. Both chapters have a lot of fun action going on and the interactions between the characters are great .
 

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Hurrah for more entertaining action scenes! I did kinda think that Bill would have let Adam take control there personally, but that's more a guess of my part/me constantly thinking 'bloody hell Bill, let someone who knows how to fight do it then! =p Hope and Spinda's scenes were pretty neat too but Lanette still takes out the coolest character award here I feel, simple as that.

I'm somewhat glad she's kinda coming to her senses with Bill though (well, "senses") given that she was constantly attacking him still for a good while - it was...well, getting towards a bit too repetitive but it hadn't yet become so imo, if that makes sense. In other words, the timing with that is fine because I was thinking if it continued some more it might have been too dragged out.
She hit the cement with a crack, and there, she lay burning in a mess of feathers and limbs.
The pause with the comma after 'there' sounds a bit odd to me personally...
Bill looked up. Adam?

The proper answer would be no again, Bill.
Presentation thing here - Adam's line there was not in italics unlike the other lines of his earlier what with the telepathy/thoughtspeak/whatever one would call it.

"And I am three feet to your right," Lanette told him matter-of-factly.

The ixodida froze, his arms shaking as he suddenly became aware that Lanette was very close to his side.
Stuff after 'froze' seems a bit unnecessary to me as Lanette's dialogue already tells us where she was.

"You've got to be kidding," Lanette sneered as she watched the half-dead female stagger towards her. "Fine. If you want to play like that…" She raised her crowbar. "…Come get me, then."
So essentially Lanette was saying 'COME AT ME BRO' in different words? XD

"********," she said. "It might have been Bill who saved me the first two times, but you're not him. Who are you, and what did you do to him?"
I liked this moment, although I'll note if you didn't intend the censor bar to get you... it did.
Although it wasn't the best kiss she had ever experienced
XDDD This amused me - during the kiss she still thought such a thing. Poor Bill...Adam be trolling him hard there.


As usual keep it up!
 

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Oi, sorry for the late review. Been crazy busy the past few weeks. D:

*bro-to-the-fist* I completely understand there. Real life can be a bitter. Hopefully, though, things are settling down for you!

LOL, I love how Bill's first question upon seeing the Wind Clan is, "Why are they flying" and then he said that again.

Inorite? Ladies and gentlemen, the thing that finally broke Bill's brain.

And yeah, Bill, running won't do any good as you'll only get slashed in half.

He's slowly learning! Sort of! Maybe!

…Okay, yeah, not really, and that boy will get his face beaten in someday. Again.

The part where Lanette goes and use her crowbar to stab the harpie, that is dang awesome. Bill's reaction to that, however, is hilarious, haha.

Yay more brain breakage! \o/

Hm, I feel the part with Lanette trying to kill Bill and then was kidnapped was a bit sudden there. Maybe it's because of Adam not saying anything there, like bobandbill had mentioned. It would indeed be nice if Adam makes a couple comments over why Bill isn't defending himself or something of the like.

Ooh, yes. Will do! ;D I'm currently working on rewriting that conversation for the edit spree, which hopefully should happen soon because I may or may not have been talked into joining another forum by a darling on SPPf.

Wee over Ellen and Hope. It's been a while since they last appeared (actually, it's been QUITE a while since Hope appeared D: ).

Yeah, sorry about that. XD I promise not to jam the story full of filler chapters again, seriously.

Love both of those parts because Bill is clueless still over being an ixodidia, haha.

And he still will probably be clueless for a long, long time. Attempting to understand sociopathic aliens through the power of friendship? Silly, silly British man.

Okay, you just made Spinda very awesome when Lanette had that Pokemon go against the monarch.

Thank you! I do have to admit, the lack of love for Spinda in general makes me go :(. I mean, seriously, the thing is adorable and full of "OH GOD OH GOD WHY AM I CONFUSED AGAIN"? Except it's NU, so that's probably why. (It also has roughly the same stats as tissue paper. Or at least the ones I kept training did, so I don't even know why I never got fed up with it.)

So not him to say something cool like that to me. :P

Eeeexactly. ;D Bill is of the "let's be polite and have tea and crumpets" school of stereotypical Britishness, unfortunately. Adam, meanwhile, is of the, "LET'S CHARGE INTO BATTLE NAKED" variety. And it totally would if it didn't take too much effort to strip in the middle of a fight. (This unfortunately is not a magical girl fanfiction. Although that would be pretty amusing. Puella Magi Lanette Magica? Bill would make a terrible cutesy familiar.)

However, that kiss between him and Lanette…oh my. XD; Too bad he got caught, though. D:

Too bad or luckily? Just where would those claws go? X_x

Overall, I enjoyed the two chapters a lot. Both chapters have a lot of fun action going on and the interactions between the characters are great .

Thank you! I hope I'll be able to maintain that kind of feel in the next chapter. :D

Hurrah for more entertaining action scenes!

*le bow*

I did kinda think that Bill would have let Adam take control there personally, but that's more a guess of my part/me constantly thinking 'bloody hell Bill, let someone who knows how to fight do it then! =p

Good thing he did too because I'm pretty sure that at that rate, he was probably going to get the two of them killed. XD

Hope and Spinda's scenes were pretty neat too but Lanette still takes out the coolest character award here I feel, simple as that.

Thank you! And I'm sure Lanette would be pleased to know she's awesome. When she's not trying to kill something, anyway.

I'm somewhat glad she's kinda coming to her senses with Bill though (well, "senses") given that she was constantly attacking him still for a good while - it was...well, getting towards a bit too repetitive but it hadn't yet become so imo, if that makes sense. In other words, the timing with that is fine because I was thinking if it continued some more it might have been too dragged out.

Thanks, and I'm really glad it's coming off the was I want it to. I do have to say that, yeah, I'm sort of getting tired of writing Lanette as a constantly spiteful ***** towards Bill, and I really can't think of how I could maintain that kind of attitude in her after he saved her multiple times.

Her attitude towards Adam, however, is a completely different story, and now that it's come out that Adam thinks of her as its entertainment, the two of them together should be hilarious to write.

The pause with the comma after 'there' sounds a bit odd to me personally...

I have to agree, and in fact, I think the sentence would be better with "there" moved a couple words to the right. I'll have to keep that in mind when I do the edit blitz.

Presentation thing here - Adam's line there was not in italics unlike the other lines of his earlier what with the telepathy/thoughtspeak/whatever one would call it.

Knew that would happen. XD Not sure if you've read my review responses over on SPPf, but that's the one thing I hate about writing Adam's speech: coding everything afterwards. This kind of error actually happens once a chapter, but I'm usually a bit more careful when previewing it. Not sure what happened this time, but in any case, definitely taking care of that one when I can.

Stuff after 'froze' seems a bit unnecessary to me as Lanette's dialogue already tells us where she was.

Good point there. I'll check that out and fix it up as well. b)'')b Because redundancy is not for cool kids.

So essentially Lanette was saying 'COME AT ME BRO' in different words? XD

PRETTY MUCH. ;D She is just that awesome.

I liked this moment, although I'll note if you didn't intend the censor bar to get you... it did.

Yeah, whenever I insert that kind of language in a fic and post it on forums, I just let the community's censor do its thing. I know that not every community is A-OK with censor bypassing, so just to be on the safe side, I don't bother trying. This goes especially with PC. I mean, I know you and Asty probably wouldn't entirely give a damn (because attempting to beat up everyone who bypasses the censor once or twice in massive chapters would involve a crapload of policing and whatnot), but I know that a couple months ago, the higher staff emphasized the "DO NOT BYPASS THE CENSOR" shebang, complete with an entire flipping announcement about how we're a family-friendly board.

So… yeah. It's sort of intentional, even though I know it causes the line to lose some of its punch.

XDDD This amused me - during the kiss she still thought such a thing. Poor Bill...Adam be trolling him hard there.

What's hilarious is that she probably is comparing it to a kiss she shared with Bill. WHAT WHAT I AM TOTALLY NOT A PRODIGYSHIPPER WHAT.

Also, yes, Adam is in general a massive troll. Just wait until it starts interacting with the rest of the cast more often. ;D

As usual keep it up!

Thank you and will do! o>
 

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Knew that would happen. XD Not sure if you've read my review responses over on SPPf, but that's the one thing I hate about writing Adam's speech: coding everything afterwards. This kind of error actually happens once a chapter, but I'm usually a bit more careful when previewing it. Not sure what happened this time, but in any case, definitely taking care of that one when I can.
Nope, but I am aware of it being an issue myself, because I sometimes have to do that myself and end up missing a bit of italics here with thoughts/poke speech which is kinda how I do it. >_<

Yeah, whenever I insert that kind of language in a fic and post it on forums, I just let the community's censor do its thing. I know that not every community is A-OK with censor bypassing, so just to be on the safe side, I don't bother trying. This goes especially with PC. I mean, I know you and Asty probably wouldn't entirely give a damn (because attempting to beat up everyone who bypasses the censor once or twice in massive chapters would involve a crapload of policing and whatnot), but I know that a couple months ago, the higher staff emphasized the "DO NOT BYPASS THE CENSOR" shebang, complete with an entire flipping announcement about how we're a family-friendly board.
I'll just note that Astinus and I got the censor thingy to be an exception here as long as it's part of the fic and all, so you don't need to worry about that, as mentioned in this post in the FF&W rules thread. But up to you!
 

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Nope, but I am aware of it being an issue myself, because I sometimes have to do that myself and end up missing a bit of italics here with thoughts/poke speech which is kinda how I do it. >_<

*brofist* Why must we have our fics be all fancy-like, bnb? Clearly, we're super awesome. And by that, I mean silly, silly people.

I'll just note that Astinus and I got the censor thingy to be an exception here as long as it's part of the fic and all, so you don't need to worry about that, as mentioned in this post in the FF&W rules thread. But up to you!

:( Yeah... but then I'd have to stop being too lazy to code a version of the fic that bypasses the censor, however. But good to know!
 
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