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Yay! People have posted in the IC, man you guys are quick! Absolutely loving the posts thus far guys, keep up the good work.
Another thing, lets please give everyone a chance to post their first post before we start making second, third, etc. In the first post so many things happen and I don't want to overload someone with them having to include all of these details. Plus, the first post is probably going to be on the long side. Once that's done, posting can definitely become more fluent as the posts will be shorter and more concise.
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Finishing SUs mean that it's time for judgment .
Skymin -kira yukimura. ANOTHER FEMALE, THANK THE HEAVENS. REJOICE IN HER NAME. Plus, she's an Engineer just like Claire, I think I sense there's going to be some admiration on Claire's parts. I'm loving Ryuko! The prosthetic leg is also a nice touch, it's nice to see some diversity when it comes to ability status. When it comes to her personality she seems like she's going to be a match for these guys and become the leader of the group. Loving the Achievement section, definitely interesting. I do have questions about your personality, I'm not really sure if those statements are hyperboles or something Ryuko would really do. Is she really so aggressive that she would take something and smash someone in the face with it? It seems like you're implying that she's aggressive and arrogant. Or am I reading that wrong? Just double-checking. Overall, I'm going to have to say that you're Accepted! Welcome to the frenzy!
Lt. Col. Fantastic - Whoa, that picture tho... Does this mean Dr. Brandt has competition? Osiris seems like an excellent spy! I wonder how he's going to get along with everyone. I do see that you noted that he has OCD, but you rarely mention how it affects him and having OCD certainly affects people. It would make him being this excellent spy probably a lot harder depending on his obsessions, compulsions, anxiety, etc. Also, there's common misconceptions about OCD, one of those is commonly mistaking it for OCPD. I'm going to link you to some stuff, here, here, and here. Please take the time to read over some of this stuff and then expand on his OCD. Secondly, your RP Sample seems to end abruptly, I feel like it started out really great, like I was going to get to know this character then it just stopped. Could you possibly beef it up a bit? Perhaps more about the target, how Osiris felt about the mission, what he's going to do next, etc. Also, for his Achievement... It seems a little too successful. He has taken out a lot of high-ranking military commanders, right? Then Kalbion shouldn't be losing the war like they are... Does that make sense?
Marking you as pending. Address the OCD or get rid of that part, up to you, and maybe just change that sentence a bit in your Achievement. I know I haven't given your description of the Officers, but Captain isn't a listed rank in the Kalbion Army, maybe the Naval Forces.
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I got some really nice questions that I want to openly address.
Are there checkpoints in and out of Summer Grove?
I totally meant to mention this as a thing when I had Claire enter the city. Yes, checkpoints are a major thing when entering an important city such as Pixley, Aluma, and especially Summer Grove. Definitely read revlis' first post about the checkpoint and that's how extreme it is.
Is time the same?
Yes, days are 24-hours long, minutes are 60 seconds, etc. so, yes, the 15th hour would coordinate to 3pm.
How does money work?
Ahh, yes, I totally meant to address this in the LOCATION section. All major cities use the eye recognition, fingerprint, and/or voice command like Claire did in the cab. In Onzor they've completely left behind the paper money and coins all together while in Kalbion the smaller cities and on the outskirts, yes, paper money is still used, and coins are rarely used except for in really poor areas.
Technology?
Okay, well, I'm definitely working on a Technology Section for the first post.
Not all cars have AI, yes, you can still drive cars. In a majority of the major cities your vehicle has to be able to float, but vehicles with wheels are still a thing in the lesser cities of Kalbion. In Onzor all cars float, in fact, they don't even have wheels. Communication? Cell phones still exist, except that they are super thin, all touch screen, and rectangular shaped. Capable of anything phones can do now, but clearly faster, 3D holograms are a thing when you call someone. In Kalbion it's not a live-feed, you see the life-size or miniature 3D model standing there and talking but in Onzor if you have the right programs and phone then, yes, it is fully capable of live-feeding exactly what the person is doing. Tablets, earpieces (bluetooth) and web-cams exist, yes. Even watch-communicators that use the same 3D hologram program but not in life-size exist but they're kind of tacky and no one really wants to be seen talking into a watch. Voice command is also a really big thing, essentially, anything and everything can be turned on by voice.
I think that was it... If you have any others question, feel free to ask.
Another thing, lets please give everyone a chance to post their first post before we start making second, third, etc. In the first post so many things happen and I don't want to overload someone with them having to include all of these details. Plus, the first post is probably going to be on the long side. Once that's done, posting can definitely become more fluent as the posts will be shorter and more concise.
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Finishing SUs mean that it's time for judgment .
Skymin -
Lt. Col. Fantastic - Whoa, that picture tho... Does this mean Dr. Brandt has competition? Osiris seems like an excellent spy! I wonder how he's going to get along with everyone. I do see that you noted that he has OCD, but you rarely mention how it affects him and having OCD certainly affects people. It would make him being this excellent spy probably a lot harder depending on his obsessions, compulsions, anxiety, etc. Also, there's common misconceptions about OCD, one of those is commonly mistaking it for OCPD. I'm going to link you to some stuff, here, here, and here. Please take the time to read over some of this stuff and then expand on his OCD. Secondly, your RP Sample seems to end abruptly, I feel like it started out really great, like I was going to get to know this character then it just stopped. Could you possibly beef it up a bit? Perhaps more about the target, how Osiris felt about the mission, what he's going to do next, etc. Also, for his Achievement... It seems a little too successful. He has taken out a lot of high-ranking military commanders, right? Then Kalbion shouldn't be losing the war like they are... Does that make sense?
Marking you as pending. Address the OCD or get rid of that part, up to you, and maybe just change that sentence a bit in your Achievement. I know I haven't given your description of the Officers, but Captain isn't a listed rank in the Kalbion Army, maybe the Naval Forces.
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I got some really nice questions that I want to openly address.
Are there checkpoints in and out of Summer Grove?
I totally meant to mention this as a thing when I had Claire enter the city. Yes, checkpoints are a major thing when entering an important city such as Pixley, Aluma, and especially Summer Grove. Definitely read revlis' first post about the checkpoint and that's how extreme it is.
Is time the same?
Yes, days are 24-hours long, minutes are 60 seconds, etc. so, yes, the 15th hour would coordinate to 3pm.
How does money work?
Ahh, yes, I totally meant to address this in the LOCATION section. All major cities use the eye recognition, fingerprint, and/or voice command like Claire did in the cab. In Onzor they've completely left behind the paper money and coins all together while in Kalbion the smaller cities and on the outskirts, yes, paper money is still used, and coins are rarely used except for in really poor areas.
Technology?
Okay, well, I'm definitely working on a Technology Section for the first post.
Not all cars have AI, yes, you can still drive cars. In a majority of the major cities your vehicle has to be able to float, but vehicles with wheels are still a thing in the lesser cities of Kalbion. In Onzor all cars float, in fact, they don't even have wheels. Communication? Cell phones still exist, except that they are super thin, all touch screen, and rectangular shaped. Capable of anything phones can do now, but clearly faster, 3D holograms are a thing when you call someone. In Kalbion it's not a live-feed, you see the life-size or miniature 3D model standing there and talking but in Onzor if you have the right programs and phone then, yes, it is fully capable of live-feeding exactly what the person is doing. Tablets, earpieces (bluetooth) and web-cams exist, yes. Even watch-communicators that use the same 3D hologram program but not in life-size exist but they're kind of tacky and no one really wants to be seen talking into a watch. Voice command is also a really big thing, essentially, anything and everything can be turned on by voice.
I think that was it... If you have any others question, feel free to ask.