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Pokémon Pokemon: Lee's Kanto Arc

Started by P-K-123 November 23rd, 2018 5:18 AM
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So I had this idea before "Pokemon: Let's Go Pikachu/Eevee!", about the return of Team Rocket and Mewtwo. It takes place a few years after the events of Gold. Red's fight against Team Rocket has changed Kanto forever, but Giovanni has gone away...and finally, his evil plan comes into fruition, as a new generation Trainer sets out into the world of Pokemon...
That's the premise. Just posting this just in case anyone gets confused.


Chapter 1: Another New Day

The region of Kanto welcomed another morning the sun had brought, the warm rays blessing the people down below. It was like as if the land was trying to wash away its dark history with the infinite, gleaming light of the sun. Even though Red had removed the bane called Team Rocket several years ago, people could not simply let go-no, more like, they refused to let go. Because so much had been lost to them. The pokemon that got taken away from their owners, and those who died while going against Team Rocket...forgetting them would be like defacing their honor. However the young ones who see the future ahead of them must move on. And today, another child was about to begin his journey to adulthood, with a friend who he will form a lifelong bond with.

In a small two-story house in Viridian City, a 10-year old boy was already up in the morning unlike other boys of his age. The boy's short, black hair rustled from the morning wind, as he donned a red-orange vest over his attire of a white t-shirt and cobalt blue jeans. Putting his feet inside his white sneakers, he tightly pulled the strings of his shoes together into a knot, the sudden jolting pain confirming that his shoes were firmly attached to his feet now.

"Lee! Are you done ?"

"I've just finished, mom, I'll be down in a second!"

Lee combed his black hair down, before picking up his glasses from his desk. His pupils struggled to match its focus with the glass before stabilizing onto the sight. Then he picked up his green trucker cap, pushing it down until it fit onto his head. A quick look in the mirror and he smiled-perfect, ready for the adventure ahead of him. Picking up his yellow bag, he wore it on his shoulders, the weight pressing onto his shoulders.
Before he went, he looked a bit into the poster of Red at his room: the legendary pokemon trainer and Pokemon League champion, Red. For Lee though, he was more than just an awesome hero. he was his role model, a blessing to the pokemon world, the messianic hero that saved Kanto from Team Rocket. But like all heroes, problems arise: He let Giovanni go. He kidnapped, sold, even KILLED pokemon, and Red let him get away. And it was time for someone to finish the job.
And now that meant Lee himself.

Opening the door of his room, the trainer walked down the stairs, his mother waiting down for him at the bottom. The boy flinched as his mother sprayed him with Repel.

“There you go, honey. Please be careful of wild Pokemon,” She said with concern on her face before revealing she was holding what appeared to be a box full of items, “I’ll give you some extra repels just in case.”

A quick zip of the bag, and his load felt heavier. But it was given to him for a good purpose-with love from his mom

"Thanks mom." Lee hugged his mother.

"Good luck with your starter Pokemon, honey."

He nodded and opened the door of the house, waving to his mom before looking at the road ahead of him. Heading out of town, he passed the newly renovated Viridian City Gym, thinking about how that place was once a site where Red beat Giovanni. Whoever assigned that scumbag of a man as gym leader was a total idiot. The boy thought to himself, going down to Route 1. The repel should work against the wild Pokemon. But what will I pick? I can't rely on repels forever. Charmander? First two gyms are too unforgiving. Bulbasaur? The poison type gym is going to get me. Squirtle? There's the grass-type gym. And what would I catch...ahh, not the time Lee, not the time. Maybe after getting the starter.

Walking down the dirt road and through the patches of grass, Lee's thoughts were broken up by a phone call. Taking it out of his pocket, he looked at the screen to see "BF-Gray" on his cell phone, a call which he immediately accepted.

"Hey! Gray, what's up?"

"Hey Lee! You know what day it is, I'm so hyped right now! Today's the day we begin the hunt for Giovanni, buddy! You'd better hurry, I chose my starter and I have the urge to take the remaining two!"

"Wait, you chose your starter? Didn't we-"

"Bye!"

Dang it, Gray. Lee thought to himself. A friend that likes to kick you in the rear for fun with actually good intentions-he's the asswipe you weirdly can't hate. But taking the starter by himself? When they promised that they would choose together? Unacceptable! He started walking faster, before going into a full sprint to Pallet town.

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Pallet Town

By now, Pallet Town had become a must-visit location for every pokemon trainer, every Red fanboy, even his rival Blue-well, it was his hometown too. Lee, going by all the people on the street, went into the pokemon lab.

"Hey! I've been waiting for some time!" Gray shouted, holding one of the pokeballs.

"Sorry...I woke up later than you." Lee muttered. "But I thought we were choosing together?"

"Nope! The early Pidgeotto eats the berry!"

"Well, I did come a bit late, but...uh..."

...And with that, his rebuttal ended. Gray wasn't wrong. He'd heard of a tale of a kid who overslept and ended up with a Pikachu.

"Hello, kids!"

"Professor Oak!" Lee turned to the familiar voice, the voice he had heard in television, videos, and audio tapes about Pokemon. The very best of the Professor batch.
Professor Oak.

"Welcome to my lab! Now, are you boys, or are you girls?"

"What?" Lee said.

"Just kidding! What's your name boy?"

"It's Lee, Professor."

"Ah, yes Lee...take a starter pokemon, your friend already took one." He said, pointing to the desk with only two pokeballs on it.

Walking over to the desk, he started thinking again: maybe he should take Charmander just like Red, but the problem was he wasn't Red-he was just a rookie trainer, a weak hatchling, who didn't know how to beat Rock with Fire. So(with great regret), Lee picked up the ball...of Squirtle.

"Great! Now you know what trainers do..." Gray said, poking him.

"What? No! We can't do it here, don't you know about etiquette?"

"Okay then...let's do it outside!

"Hey, wait for me!"

Lee followed his friend out the door and got into battle positions on the sidewalk. The two friends, looking at each other in the eye, both nodded at each others' consent. Curious bystanders gathered to look at the unfolding battle, as both children readied their Pokeballs.

"As a trainer, I'm calling you out Lee! I challenge you to a Pokemon battle!"

"Bring it!"

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Hi there! Always nice to see new faces here. All right, onto the story!

So far the prose is fine, and the beginning is okay. We get a bit of a glimpse of Lee interacting with his mother and Gray, which is cute.

The main setback though is how you setup your premise. We got a little exposition on Red and Lee's thoughts of him, but that would be better shown than an info dump. For instance, you could have a scene where as Lee was getting ready he took a look at a poster of Red and maybe he glares at it or rips it off from the wall. That way, we're shown how much Lee is disappointed with Red and wants to take down Giovanni himself.

So far you have the beginning be similar to the games that features Kanto. What I would like to see throughout this fic is how Red's actions from before affected Kanto as mentioned in your notes/summary. Maybe certain cities/businesses took a hit, maybe there's certain changes to the League due to what happened before, or some people that knew Red personally have similar feelings as Lee, that kind of thing. I might come back to check up on this every so often, so I wish you luck on the rest of the project!

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Chapter 2: Hard Start

Trainer Gray wants to battle!

"Go, Bulbasaur!"

The ball was thrown into the air. There was no turning back now, as the Seed Pokemon had landed onto the ground.

"Bulba, Bulbasaur!" Letting out a roar, Gray's Bulbasaur readied its vines.

"Go, Squirtle!"

"Squirtle!" The Tiny Turtle Pokemon popped out of its shell and got up on its feet.

"Alright Bulbasaur, use Tackle!"

"Withdraw, Squirtle! Then Tackle!"

The little Squirtle hid in its shell and took the hit from Bulbasaur, as the shell ricocheted on a buidling wall and crashed into the enemy!

"Keep going Squirtle!" Lee shouted out. "Use Tackle, but use your entire body!"

"Watch out!" At Gray's word, his pokemon formed a defensive stance, blocking with his vines.

Lee's pokemon nodded and squinted its eyes, focusing on the target that stood before him. Then he leapt at Bulbasaur, but the latter jumped away at the last second, making him flip backwards onto his shell!

"Squirtle! No!"

"Get him! use Tackle!"

The plant dashed at the little turtle, who, seeing this, flipped himself as fast as he could, and in order to win his first battle and make his trainer happy...he started dashing too, and at full speed, they both collided head-on! Both pokemon were blown away from the crash, landing into their respective trainers' arms.

"Hydro! You okay?"

"Squirtle." The hurt pokemon nodded. This pokemon is really energetic!

"No! I lost to you! How can this happen, I had the type advantage!" Gray shook the , who was shaking Poison Ivy, who had gone unconscious.

"Now now, boys." Professor Oak patted both the boys in the back. "Your Pokemon has to grow up battling, or there will be no advantages. Let's get them healed inside, shall we?"

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The healing machine produced the ring that alerted those around it that the healing process was complete, and soon Professor Oak gave the kids their Pokemon, who were safely inside their Pokeballs.

"Here you go boys, all healed!"

"Thank you, professor." Both thanked the professor, and Lee tipped his hat too.

"Well, I think you boys are very talented at Pokemon battling! Reminds me when I gave my grandson and Red their pokemons...hold on, what was my grandson's name?"

"It's Blue, sir." Gray replied to the question, not impressed by the Professor's short memory.

"Ah yes! Blue." Professor Oak scratched his head at the sudden information. "Anyway, would you boys like to nickname your Pokemon?"

"Yes sir...Poison Ivy." Gray looked into his Bulbasaur's ball, looking at the pokemon that was nuzzling inside. "He's a Poison Type and Grass Type, no name suits him better."

"Really? Cool. But I'm gonna tell it straight to my Pokemon, so he remembers well!"

Lee pressed the button on his Pokeball, making his Squirtle come out.

"Squirtle!" The Tiny Turtle Pokemon was swooped up by Lee, who nuzzled him.

"Alright little guy, your new name will be...Hydro!"

"Squirt, Squirtle!" The pokemon now known as Hydro happily clapped at his new nickname.

"Say, could any one of you run an errand for me?"

"I think we have the winner here." Gray said, getting up. "Lee, you beat me, so you do the job, okay?"

Before Lee could say anything, Gray ran out the door and left him alone with the Professor.

"Why am I friends with that guy again..." The trainer said to himself, shaking his head over the fact that he had been tricked twice by his own friend.

"Don't worry, the task is simple. Could you go to the Poke Mart in Viridian City and get me the Pokedexes I ordered for new trainers like you?"

"Sweet! Can I show my pokemon to my mom while I'm there? I live in Viridian City and..."

"Take your time as long as you want, boy! Your mom will love the pokemon I gave you." Professor Oak looked at Lee again. "Say, what's your name again?"

"It's Lee, sir."

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Viridian City

Lee stepped into the house, with Hydro out of his ball tagging along with him for his mom to see. Also, he thought that giving his Pokemon an experience of the world would be beneficial.

"Mom, I'm home!"

"Oh, my little adventurer is back!" Lee's mom gladly replied to her son while coming down the stairs. She walked over to Lee, before looking down at the starter that the boy had picked for his adventure. "And you chose a Squirtle! How nice of Professor Oak to give him to you!"

"Squirtle!" Hydro waved his hands at the mother of his master.

"My little sweetie has become 10 years old..."

Lee was hugged by his mom, and in response he hugged back-if he goes on an adventure it's gonna be a while until he can be hugged again.

"You'll be leaving town after the errand, right?"

"Nah, I'll come home mom. I can't just go without a goodbye."

"Okay. Now that you're with your Pokemon, you should be safe wherever you go." Lee watched his mother look at Hydro like he was another son of hers. "But don't overdo it, both you and Squirtle."

"You don't have to worry mom. Me and Hydro will make it through anything." Lee knelt down and with a quick grunt, picked Hydro up, who laughed a bit in joy. "We'll be safe."

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Lee could hear the box of pokedexes shake in his bag, as he and his pokemon walked down Route 1. The clerk said to him that Professor Oak recently ordered for more Pokedexes, something that was expected since now, new trainers were popping up like plant sprouts. Two of those numbers included him and his friend, and maybe one of them was going to accomplish something amazing...or so he hoped. The boy's train of thought stopped for a moment when Hydro tugged on his pant sleeve, who, as soon as the trainer turned his eye towards him, blew a bubble of water as to show his owner a trick.

"That's cool, Hydro! You should totally use that in battle. Hey, we're almost at Pallet Town. After this we can go on an adventure, and make new friends for us both!"

"Squirtle!"

In its eager desire to become stronger, Hydro ran ahead of the owner and into the town.

"Hey! Wait up!" Lee ran after Hydro into Pallet town, soon catching up with his pokemon by the side. But when he was passing by the two houses of Red and Blue, respectively, he heard a glass shatter. Then alarms blared.
To Lee's horror, it was coming from the Pokemon Lab. Fear dominated both the boy and his Squirtle, as both ran toward the door of the lab and quickly went inside!

"Professor!"

"Lee! Just in time! This fiend is trying to steal my Charmander!"

The Professor pointed at the thief - a young girl holding the last Pokeball, who had long hair dyed pink, its top covered by a white cap. She was wearing purple sneakers and black shorts, but the most obvious part of her clothing was a black tank top with a red 'R'-the dreaded logo of Team Rocket!

"Stay out of my way, gramps!" The sudden arrival of Lee seemed to agitate the thief. "And you too! This pokemon is mine and you can't say anything! You know who my parents are? They work for Team Rocket!"

"But...but Team Rocket disbanded like, years ago. What are you talking about?" Lee said, confused by what she was saying. It may have sounded scary several years ago, but now, with Team Rocket long gone, it seemed like she was bluffing or mentally unstable.

"No! Dad says they're up and running again!...Argh, Forget about it! Prepare for trouble, make it-"

"You're all alone, kiddo! Surrender now or prepare to fight! Get back Professor Oak, I got this!"

Stupid Rocket Girl ??? Wants to Battle!

"You know what? Let's fight! Go!" The girl tossed her Pokeball into the air, which popped and dropped the Charmander, who landed on its feet.

"Charmander!"

The Charmander roared and took a look at the girl, before snarling at Hydro.

"Oh boy..."

Lee took a step back. Time for a battle.

"Get him Hydro! Use the move you showed me, Bubble!"

"Squirtle!"

Hydro took the position in front of the Charizard, and spit out bubbles from his mouth, covering Charmander in bubble foam and weakening his fire!

"Char?" Charmander looked at the bubbles, before getting confused and looking back at the girl.

"No, no, no! Use Scratch!"

"Nice try trying to look cool! Finish him!"

The Tiny Turtle Pokemon nailed the finishing blow with a tackle by his shell, sending the Lizard Pokemon flying back into the desk, where the starters were before all three were taken.

"Dammit! Charmander, return!" The girl looked at Lee, clearly frustrated that she lost the battle.

"I won! Now give that pokemon back." Slowly walking towards the girl, Lee put his hand forward, motioning it to give back what she stole, and even his pokemon glared at the girl.

"...You won't win like this next time!"

"Next time? There won't be a next time if you don't-"

The girl then suddenly pushed nearby Professor Oak into the wall! Lee tried to order his Pokemon to get her, but she crashed into the boy and he fell down onto the floor, and Hydro got kicked away like he was a soccer ball, hitting the wall in the process. The thief disappeared into the night with the stolen Charmander.

"Oof! Ow..." Lee painfully got up, as Hydro painfully recovered from the kick too. "Professor, are you alright?"

"I'm fine, Lee." Professor Oak muttered. "But that thief got away."

"We'll get her Professor. In fact..." Lee picked up a glowing item from the ground: the girl's trainer card that the thief had dropped when she crashed with him!

"...I think we know who she is now."

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I admit, I was a little worried at the beginning that your story will be almost the same as the games for a while. You then pulled a slight twist there with one of the Pokemon stolen, so I'm interested how you'll handle that situation now.

One thing I would like to see is the reaction to the bystanders that you mentioned from last chapter. I'm not sure how many people you imagined were watching, but I'm assuming there's a few at least. Maybe they were very interested in that battle, or they only watched a little of it due to them being beginning trainers. But yeah, a smudge bit of that description of that would probably be nice.

A couple quick positives. I chuckled at when Oak forgot both Blue and Lee's name, it's pretty much a running meme now. I also like that your'e giving Hydro a bit of personality there, having him doing some cute things like making bubbles and also having similar reactions to Lee.

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Chapter 3: The Road Ahead

Professor Oak's Laboratory


Lee had never seen so many police officers in his life. But it was understandable-first sign of Team Rocket, several years after they had been eradicated. From what the cops found out from the Trainer Card and testimony from both witnesses(and him), the girl's name was Belle, whose parents disappeared months ago without a trace. Lee walked over to Professor Oak, who just finished talking to an officer.

"Are you alright, professor?" Lee spoke to Professor Oak, with Hydro in his arms.

"Not quite, Lee, this is a disaster, one of my Pokemon stolen...it's not the best time to ask, but did you get the parcel I requested?"

"Ah, Here it is, Professor..."

Unzipping his bag, Lee pulled out the parcel and gave it to the Professor, who cut it open with a cutter knife.

"Thank you, looks like this is the only good news for today, after all that's happened...but just as I promised, here's your Pokedex. Also, have an extra one, give it to your friend."

"Thank you, sir." Lee put the Pokedex for Gray in his bag, and pressed the power button on his Dex. The blue screen soon lit up, welcoming the user.

"Hydro, look!" Lee showed the screen to his Squirtle, as the Pokedex began a scanning process to identify the Pokemon and give out information.

Squirtle, Tiny Turtle Pokemon. After birth, its back swells and hardens into a shell. Powerfully sprays foam from its mouth.

"Squirtle, squirtle!" Hydro clapped at the screen which featured him and looked into it out of fascination, before the turtle Pokemon's owner closed it and put it in his bag.

"We're ready Hydro...but first, let's get back home."

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Walking back to Viridian City, the boy thought about all the things that had happened on this day: he just starts his adventure and a girl steals a starter, claiming to be from Team Rocket? This doesn't make sense, something was going on-something he had no idea with. He decided to rest his mind for a bit as the boy opened the door to his home, but peace was quickly broken when his mom came running out of the door.

"Oh thank god! I heard what happened at the lab, are you okay?" The panicked mother looked at her son, checking for signs of injury.

"I'm fine mom, don't worry. I can look out for myself now that I have my pokemon."

"Thank goodness for your Squirtle...you'll be leaving soon, right?"

"Yeah. Gray left without picking up his Pokedex. I gotta catch up with him, mom."

"Alright. Just call home often, okay?" The mother hugged her son tightly, before slowly letting go. "And, when all this is over..."

"Don't worry mom, I'll be back before you can say 'Pokemon'!" Lee now looked down at his little Squirtle, who gave a big hug to Lee's mother on the leg, and nodded back at his trainer.

"Alright, Let's go, Hydro."

"Squirtle!"

The child and his Squirtle ran into the sunset, as the mother said "Pokemon" silently, then wiped tears from her eyes, turning away so her child could not see her crying...

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That very last sentence in that chapter I think would work better as two sentences as you have a lot going on there in one sentence. A minor suggestion, though!

Compare to last chapter, this one doesn't have too much going on as it's just Lee checking up on Oak and saying goodbye to mom. Nothing wrong with that as those events would happen naturally after the stealing incident. In any case, Hydro is still cute and looking forward to what happens next.

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Chapter 4: First Night, Second Day

Viridian Forest

The moon hung high above the night sky, coating Viridian Forest with its icing of moonlight. Trainers, in this case, knew not to continue because a place like this was dangerous at night. The 10 year old boy set up his sleeping bag on the grass, before untying his shoes and laying down to sleep. Lee sighed at the thought of sleeping outside, without his mom...but then he remembered, he wasn't alone.

"Hydro, do you wanna sleep with me?"

"Squirtle!"

The little Squirtle jumped into the bag with him, and the boy zipped up the sleeping bag to cover both of them. With his Pokemon, Lee felt safe-whether the scary thing be the darkness or ferocious pokemon, he could protect himself now, with his friend. Closing his eyes, Lee hugged Hydro tight like he was a doll, and the little turtle pokemon hugged back.

"Do you like adventuring with me, Hydro?" Lee hugged his little Pokemon tighter.

"Squirtle, Squirtle!"

"Yeah, that's my little turtle I chose...good night."

The boy fell asleep petting his Little Turtle Pokemon, as the stars shone above them as if to give them a beautiful first night.

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It wasn't the morning that awakened Lee-rather, it was a Caterpie that crawled up the trainer's face, who crawled on it for some time. When the boy woke up, he screamed in horror at the insect Pokemon, and the surprised Caterpie ran away.

"Squirtle!" In an instinct to protect his owner, Hydro tried to use Bubble on it before it escaped!

"No! Leave it alone Hydro! It's probably mistaken me for something else." Ordered Lee, as he got out of the sleeping bag and started packing up his stuff. "No reason to get too excited Hydro, stay calm now..."

He zipped up the bag and got back on his feet, the bag pressing down on his shoulders again. It's time to keep moving again. With his trusty Squirtle in tow, Lee started walking again, to get back to his friend and to get out of the forest, which just looked disgusting with all the Bug-type pokemon crawling around. Some minutes later, Lee could see a human figure throwing a Pokeball at a Weedle, shouting in a voice he recognized immediately. The boy saw the Hairy Bug Pokemon stab the Bulbasaur and run away, with the disappointed figure turning to Lee's direction.

"Hey Gray! It's me, Lee!"

"Hey Buddy!" Gray quickly picked up Poison Ivy and walked over to his friend. "You're pretty quick, catching up to me."

"One question: Why were you trying to catch a Weedle? Bugs are pretty useless, you know."

"That could have been my first pokemon catch, but I haven't had much luck. What about you? Oh wait, You don't have any pokeballs, do you?"

"Well, you don't have a Pokedex, ya idiot. Here you go."

Lee opened his bag, handing the other Pokedex meant for Gray.

"Thanks, man! You're a lifesaver!" The brown-haired trainer looked at the device closely before putting it in his back. "Looks like I was the idiot that didn't know what I was doing. I'll give you some of my Pokeballs! Just weaken the pokemon you're gonna catch and throw them."

"Right...thanks." Lee grasped the Pokeballs he was given, before giving one of them a practice swing. Handles nicely, these new Pokeballs-compared to clunky old ones. "Wanna go to Pewter City together?"

"Follow me, I know the way out. Let's go, Poison Ivy!"

"Bulbasaur!"

"We're following this guy, Hydro!"

"Squirtle!"

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Pewter City

Lee was surprised at how much Pewter City had changed. Having only seen old photos of Red's time, he thought that cities wouldn't have changed that much in just a few years. Boy, was he wrong-from a small town to a bustling metropolis, Pewter City had grown into a small city rivaling Celadon City. The museum was also now a full-scale fossil research lab, and the gym was renovated to house all the new rock types. All thanks to no Team Rocket, to disturb a change like this.

"Well, I'm going straight to the gym," Gray turned to Lee, now that both friends would be free to explore the city. "You?"

"I'm going check out the Pewter Museum of Science. I always wanted to go there, see the fossils, you know?"

"Take your time, buddy! Hey, and when you get the first badge from Brock, let's battle at Route 3, and we'll see a difference in training skill!"

"Right, see you soon."

Lee waved bye at Gray, and Into the museum he went, with Hydro following him eagerly. What would be waiting for him inside? He didn’t know what to expect in the museum, but he knew it would be interesting all the same...

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Okay, Lee not liking bugs is kinda amusing. Wonder if he'll react the same way if he encounters the bug trainers.

Hm, I feel like there should be more happening this chapter. Lee and Hydro sleeping together is cute, but I think Lee having a conversation with Hydro and then they fall asleep might be much more adorable and have more intearction between the two. You can probably take more advantage of Lee's fight of bug types by having him stumbling upon more of them.

Looking foward to what happens in Pewter Muesum, since it sounds like the plot will finally move forward once more.

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Chapter 5: Museum Brawl

The Pewter Museum of Science-a place where the latest technology is shown in the world of Pokemon. And it became Lee had come a bit late to the tech craze-he had to wait in line for some time before he was able to get to the counter.

"Welcome to Pewter Museum of Science, sir! The admission fee is 50 Pokedollars." The clerk said to the boy, giving him a brochure covering the museum's current events.

"Of course." The trainer gave a 50 Pokedollar bill.

"Thank you sir, please enjoy yourself!"

This month's Special Exhibit: Evolutionary Stones. That should be interesting. Lee folded the brochure and put it back in his pocket, as he climbed up the stairs to the 2nd floor, the special exhibit. He would have climbed up to 3rd floor if it wasn't closed to the public, due to fossils being extremely rare-but for now, if this kid had a rap sheet, his crime was an interest in all things new. After he was made to go through a body scan for anything suspicious inside his bag or pokeballs, Lee wandered around the exhibit looking if a Moon Stone was on the exhibit. But then, as he was looking into a Dusk Stone inside a case, he heard a weirdly familiar voice from the crowd, and it wasn't something that sounded pleasant.

"Evolutionary stones, eh?...Well, they'd be good for the team. Maybe even upgrade every one of them into beasts...I'd better call the boss, hatch a heist plan."

Hey...I recognize that voice, is that...? Turning his head to the voice, Lee gasped-it was that thief girl again! Pink hair, black t-top, with that stolen Charmander's ball on her belt, that Belle girl or something. Lee had to spring into action-before she got away again!

"Hey! You! You're the girl that stole the Charmander from Professor Oak's lab!"

"What the-!?" The girl turned around and Lee's suspicions proved correct-Belle immediately glared at him. "You again! I thought I had lost you!"

"I'm not a guy that gives in that easy." Lee laughed a bit at his own comment before turning to the nearest museum employee. "Help! This girl is Team Rocket! Call the cops!"

"What!?" The guard looked confused, but he knew what to do when he heard the word, and he ran to the phone. The onlookers, confused at the sudden change of events, gathered around the two children.

"Guess I'll have to shut your mouth! Go, Flame!" She said, throwing the ball with Charmander inside into the air.

"Charmander!" The little fire lizard landed, as his tail flame immediately shot up at the sight of the enemy.

Nicknames? A Team Rocket girl cares for her Pokemon? Lee was doubted by this sudden thought, but he stood firm nonetheless, pulling out a Pokeball from his bag for the moment!

"Go get him, Hydro!" The ball was thrown by Lee at full speed, as Hydro shot out of the ball and crashed into the Charmander now nicknamed Flame! The crowd cheered.

"Grr...Tactical as always! Alright Flame, use Metal Claw!"

"Hydro, use Bubble!"

Lee's Squirtle let out a beam of bubbles, which softened the Metal Claw's damage.

"Flame, use Smokescreen!"

At Belle's command, her Charmander puffed up smoke, and effectively blinded Hydro! The Fire Lizard Pokemon disappeared into the smoke...

"Squirtle!?"

Hydro was confused, as he looked around for traces of the Charmander. He could see nothing, and suddenly he heard his trainer scream "Look out, Hydro! Behind you!" And at that moment, Flame landed a blow from the back, pinning him to the ground! The little turtle could only struggle.

"Who's laughing now? Use Bite!"

"Char!!"

Flame's sharp teeth sunk into Hydro, as Hydro screamed in pain! And because he was immobile under the weight, Lee could do nothing but watch as Flame threatened to rip Hydro apart! Then all of a sudden, Hydro closed his eyes, before spitting out water into the air, which landed on Flame's tail, making him scream and fall off of him in pain!

"He's learned Water Gun!" Shouted one of the onlookers. Lee realized that too-he had to use this new move, bubble won't do against a stronger enemy now.

"Finish him! Water Gun, again!"

Lee shouted, as a drizzle of water finished Flame's reign of terror.

"Rrr...this isn't good! But I've got backup you...MOM! DAD!"

"Yeah, go ahead!" Lee laughed at the call for help. "Go cry to your parents, why don't you, ya coward-"

"Hold on, you! You think you can mess with Team Rocket and get away?"

The boy froze when he actually heard a female voice: he turned around to see purple haired woman in a white-and-black Team Rocket uniform!

"Especially, when you're messing with our daughter, you twerp!" Another man, who had a cap on, along with a black-and-white Team Rocket uniform.

"What the!? What do you mean your 'daughter'!?" Lee exclaimed, confused at this sudden reveal of family relations.

"Well, I think we should teach him who we are!" The man shouted out loud, before turning to his...wife? or that's what Lee assumed.

"You go first, honey." The Rocket grunt took pose, next to his woman.

"Prepare for trouble!" The woman exclaimed out first, striking a pose sliding onto her knees.

"Make it double!" The man followed suit.

"To protect the world from devastation!"

"To unite all peoples within our nation!"

"To denounce the evils of truth and love!"

"To extend our reach to the stars above!"

"Bonnie!"

"Clyde!"

"Team Rocket, blasts off at the speed of light!"

"Surrender now, or prepare to fight!"

"Yeah, that's right!" Belle joined the two at the end.

The crowd started murmuring-they could not believe what was happening. First a battle ensues, then Team Rocket appears for the first time in years!? When they got entirely dismantled?

"Seriously!? You actually brought your parents into this!? You cheating bastards!" Lee curled his hands into a fist, angered at the lack of fair play the enemies were showing.

"We're Team Rocket, foolish child!" The lady, whose name was Bonnie, spoke up. "We do anything to fool our enemies!"

"And we never play fair, because fair players are the ones who lose!" The man, Clyde, pulled out a grenade, which froze everyone in sheer horror.

"Whoa! W-what are you doing!? I-Is that a real-"

Before Lee could say anything about all this, the pin fell to the ground with a clink, making everyone, including the boy, scream and cower down in fear.

"We'll go away for now, pesky brat-but remember that you're never getting my daughter's Charmander back, fool!" Belle's father pointed at Lee, who looked up at the grunt in anger. "I'll deal with you personally next time you interfere with my daughter's business!"

BOOM! Fortunately the grenade only produced a harmless layer of smoke, but the entire family of baddies had already disappeared when the haze cleared. Hydro growled and stomped the ground in anger, before his trainer put him back in his ball.

No wonder that girl was so vulgar! The trainer bared his teeth, his anger rising as he thought of Belle. The whole family is a member of a crime syndicate! If I can't get back at some lowly grunts, I can kiss this vendetta against Giovanni goodbye! I'll get you all someday, you Pokemon-harassing jerks!

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So after reading chapter one, I have some critique.

Starting with the positives, I think you do a good job with descriptive language when setting a scene - such as with the first few lines. You immediately conjure up images of that first, warm sun in the early morning. I would however like to see this same descriptive emphasis applied when you describe physical objects. For the most part, you simply told us the colour of the item which after enough repetition can start to feel like reading a shopping list.

You did a good job of establishing the sort of relationship Lee and Gray have through their short vocal exchange in the first segment. However, much like with the descriptive language, you need to work on applying this method of "show not tell" more broadly since much of the chapter's text felt more like an info dump than a strong narrative.

Overall you've got some good beginnings for your writing in there that I would love to see you continue to improve on as you go to maximise the reader's engagement with your story.

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All right I admit I didn't see Belle having her parents joining in heh. I'm a bit mixed Bonnie and Clyde seemingly like Jessie and James, so I hope they have different personalities from them. The battle itself could use a bit more touch up on the description, but is still good overall. Good on Hydro learning a new move!

While the contents of this chapter works fine, I think it would benefit with more description of the atmosphere. Is the museum filled with a lot of patrons that day, for instance. At one point you had Lee asked one of the employees to call the police, but there's no mention of them rushing to the phone. Same goes with seems there's no reaction to the crowd upon Team Rocket entering.

I'm also wondering when we'll get to finally see how the aftermath of Red and Team Rocket changed Kanto, both on micro and marco scale. I'm assuming though Belle with her parents foreshadows that, and if so am curious what role the family will have.

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Chapter 6: Rocked to the Bone

Pokemon Center


"Mom...mom, please, for the 3rd time, I'm alright, they didn't hurt me, I got checked. Mom, I know can return anytime, but I've just started my Pokemon journey, I can't go back now."

Lee brushed his hand against his forehead, feeling his head hurt like it was about to blow up from the inside. He knew his mother was concerned for a long time about a journey with Pokemon, but not to this extent. And unfortunately that motherly love was turning into one of his worst worries that had been popping up in his head after the incident at the museum.

"I know you're worried mom, but I can fend for myself, I'm 10 years old now with my Pokemon. Alright, alright...Okay, I'll call back when all of this is over. I love you mom."

With a sigh, Lee shook his head and pressed the end call button, before putting it back in his pocket. To ease his mind he picked a random book from the bookshelf-what he needed was a rest, off everything. He just spent the last hour in an interrogation room, telling the police officer what happened in detail: the girl, the battle, her accomplices, which were her parents, and the smoke grenade. Who knew that battling encounters count as important parts in a case. And right now he had a worried call from his mom, which he had to babble for thirty minutes to calm her down and end the call. And most of all Hydro was hurt. He knew he could be healed at the Pokemon Center, but everyone becomes heartbroken when a menace messes up your Pokemon.
He looked at the cover-the latest issue of Era, this month's issue being Team Rocket's Return-Surrender Now? Prepare to Fight! Although he never got to see the original Team Rocket's plight, he had a good idea about why people didn't want to have the whole Red situation going on again. The article in the page he was reading said that as response to this incident, The League denied any rumors and officially announced that they were just some rogue extremists, citing an incident that happened after the suppression of a Team Rocket uprising in Johto by Gold; a rogue Team Rocket goon with a foreign accent tried to do something funny to the radio tower in Kanto. But the author wrote by his opinion that this case was-

"Yo, Lee!" Gray sat down next to him. "You gotta see the news. Everyone's babbling about Team Rocket!"

"Yeah, I was there, you know." Lee said, looking into his magazine, trying not to think of his friend as an annoyance who added to his headache. "Luckily I got out of there before the reporters came to the scene. It would have added to my nuisance if I had to say the same testimony to every one of them. Did you get your badge?"

"Well, I have a grass type, what do you think happened?" He said, showing his badge case, before opening it and showing his Boulder Badge. His friend turned his head to the gleaming badge.

"Are you sure you want to catch Giovanni? You are not fighting Rockets but fighting Gym Leaders." Lee put the magazine down, as the nurse called his name to retrieve his Squirtle. "I'll personally deliver a can of whoopass on you on Route 3 in some time, ya traitor."

"If you can survive that long against Brock!" Gray commented on Lee's enthusiasm, before chuckling to himself. The boy picked up his Pokeball and, without replying to his friend like he normally would, just stormed out of the center.

Just fantastic. The trainer thought as he put his hands on his face in anger, before taking a deep breath to calm his thoughts. A family of Rockets, that thief, mom, and now a friend who ain't with me...no, forget it! I'm here for a reason, to achieve my dream! I won't stop until Giovanni and his Team of Rockets are six feet under, and no gym badge is going to get in my way!

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Viridian City Gym

Lee gave a look at Hydro, before Hydro nodded and looked back at him. Both were ready for what was ahead-one filled with anger, the other with curiosity. Without any regrets the kid walked into the Gym and onto the battle ground.

"So, you're here." Brock said, turning around to face Lee. "I'm Brock. As you know, I'm Pewter City's Gym Leader."

Lee wasn't a big fan of Brock: he didn't like most Rock types. If they were just a little bit less ugly, he would have caught one already. To him, a Geodude was just a ball of lump with arms.

"It's an honor to battle this first gym, sir." Lee tried to cool down his emotions, no matter how angry he gets he doesn't have the right to deface the opponent. "I challenge you, Gym leader Brock!"

"You look willing unlike many who walked into my gym. But my rock-hard willpower is evident even in my Pokémon. That's right - my pokemon are all Rock type!"

"Then I think I'll crush some rocks today with some steel-tough willpower, sir. I need experience...for a personal 'friend' of mine."

"I like your attitude! Then show me your best, trainer boy!"

"Come at me, Gym leader!"

Like a gunman pulling his weapon out of the holster, Lee took out his Pokeball and threw it at the Gym Leader.

"Go, Geodude!" Brock said, as the Rock Pokemon landed onto the sand. Hydro popped out of his ball, and immediately took battle posture.

"This should be easy." Lee said. "Hydro, use Water Gun!"

Hydro let out a spout of water, as the Geodude jumped and tried to punch him, only to be stopped by the shot of water, making him faint.

"This is just the easy part." Brock grinned readying his attack, as he put back Geodude into his pokeball.

"Go, Onix! Show him what you've got!"

With a throw of the Pokeball, The Rock Snake Pokemon roared as its landing shook the entire arena, as the comparatively tiny Squirtle flinched from the look of massive Onix.

"You've got this Hydro! Don't get shaken, he's super weak to water!"

"Squirtle!" The Tiny Turtle Pokemon, empowered by his trainers' words, bared his teeth.

"Onix, dodge its water attacks and use Rock Tomb!"

"Onix!"
Cried the Rock Snake pokemon, and soon a barrage of rocks fell onto the arena.

"Hydro! Use Withdraw, then use the rebound to get up!"

"Squirtle!"

The little turtle jumped up, before hiding in his shell as the impact of the rocks lifted him up. Then the shell bounced on several rocks in the air, and rose up above Onix !

"You've got him in your sights! Use Water Gun!"

A spray of water overtook Onix, crying out in pain as its body was whittled away by the high-pressure jet of water, as it fell down shaking the whole arena again, and Hydro landed on his fainted body. Brock gave a bitter smile of defeat, while Lee grinned.

"Well, well!" Brock called Onix back into its pokeball. "I never expected a tactic like that. I guess I got what I deserved, being overconfident of myself. As proof of your victory, here's the Boulder Badge, the official Pokémon League-approved Badge!"

Lee got the Boulder Badge from Brock!

"And take this, too! This move is good for Ground or Rock-type pokemon."

Lee obtained TM34 Rock Tomb!

"Thank you sir, I feel...relieved." Lee smiled, comforted by the fact that at least one thing went well today. "You did a good job Hydro, let's get you healed...come back now."

"Squirtle."

With his Squirtle back in his ball, Lee left for the Pokemon Center. Both the trainer and his Pokemon needed rest-Brock was easy, but he was about to face his friend who had beat Brock, too...

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Man, I feel bad for saying this but I think you could really spice up the battle a bit more. Geodude was gone in one sentence, and it didn't take Onix that long to go down either. Brock mentions being overconfident, but you didn't showcase that at all during the battle. He's a gym leader, so he's used to going against Water Pokemon and another other types that Rock Pokemon are weak against.

Nice that Lee got a strategy there, but Brock should too! There should be dialogue between them too, have Brock make Lee almost lose confidence but then he pulls back.

Don't know if you plan to revisit this chapter or move forward, but if the later for the next gym battles perhaps consider some of the advice I mentioned here!

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Man, I feel bad for saying this but I think you could really spice up the battle a bit more. Geodude was gone in one sentence, and it didn't take Onix that long to go down either. Brock mentions being overconfident, but you didn't showcase that at all during the battle. He's a gym leader, so he's used to going against Water Pokemon and another other types that Rock Pokemon are weak against.

Nice that Lee got a strategy there, but Brock should too! There should be dialogue between them too, have Brock make Lee almost lose confidence but then he pulls back.

Don't know if you plan to revisit this chapter or move forward, but if the later for the next gym battles perhaps consider some of the advice I mentioned here!
Yeah, but I didn't know what to do. It's the first gym after all, and Lee had the type advantage. I followed my battle experience on FireRed on this one.

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One way is to have Brock's strategy be countering the water attacks. Like I said before, he's a gym leader so he knows he'll be dealing with them. Check his Pokemon and his movesets (physical, special, status, the works), get creative with them! The anime is sometimes (I say sometimes lol) good with that where Ash and gym leaders are able to counter despite a type disadvantage.

As for dialogue between Lee and Brock, you have Brock be like, "I've battled Water types so many times I can predict their moves already" and such.

I understand the gym leaders can be easy sometimes if you have a type advantage. Again sorry if I'm harsh, but a lot of journey fics will have the same problem you have if you keep it to your experiences.

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Chapter 7: Hero Encounter

Route 3

The fabled Mt. Moon of Kanto stood tall on the horizon, like a ground Pokemon trying to dig its way up into the sky. Lee watched in amazement at this marvel of nature-he had heard hundreds of legends, fairy tales, even conspiracy theories about Clefairies and Moon Stones. It was kinda natural-a natural wonder filled with Pokemon believed to have come from outer space, how would that not be a good story material? But the kid knew had a job to do at this location-a "friendly" match with Gray. He grinded his teeth against the very thought of losing to someone who strayed from their original adventure objective.

If I lose to that jackass, I'm hanging up my boots and going straight back home. Lee thought to himself, looking down at Hydro's ball. If the partnership between him and Hydro was not a great match, there was no way he's going to succeed in future quests...or so he thought.

"Yo! Lee! Over here!" Gray waved his hand from a distance, standing in front of the Pokemon Center just outside the cave of Mt. Moon.

"Yeah, I'm here." Lee shouted, running up to his friend. He proudly showed his Boulder Badge, glowing in the fading sunlight.

"Ready to get your ass kicked, Gray?"

"Bring it on...now that Poison Ivy learned Grass-type moves, I can win against you this time!"

"We'll see about that! Let's go!"

Both trainers took a step back, making room for the battle. And at the same time...

"Go! Poison Ivy!"

"Go, Hydro!"

...Both threw their pokeballs high into the air, releasing their respective Pokemon. The Squirtle and the Bulbasaur landed on the ground with a thud, before growling at each other. They were ready to follow their masters for victory, and tensions rose between the two starters as no one knew who would act first.

"Poison Ivy, use Vine Whip!"

"Bulbasaur!"

Poison Ivy stretched out vines from its bulb and went straight for Hydro!

"Hydro, use Bite!"

"Squirtle!"

Hydro nodded at his trainer's command and dodged the vines, and quickly grabbed one of them and bit down! Poison Ivy hid its pain and tried to focus on attacking him, swinging his vines and making Hydro crash against some rocks!

"Shake him off, Poison Ivy!"

"Hang in there Hydro! Keep giving damage!"

As the vines swung harder, Hydro bit down harder, and Poison Ivy threw his vines high into the air!

"Now! LET GO!"

Following his trainer's command, the Squirtle let go, and the rebound from grabbing onto the vines flung him into the air!

"Wh-What!?" Gray muttered.

"Betcha weren't expecting this, weren't you?" Lee said. "Hit him hard from above!"

The Little Turtle Pokemon's 9 kilograms gained momentum while falling, as the Squirtle hid inside his shell to endure the shock! Hydro smashed into Poison Ivy, the resulting shockwave causing a cloud of dust! And when the dust was settled, Lee's Squirtle safely popped out of his shell on the unconscious body of Poison Ivy.

"You did it! You great turtle Pokemon! Come here!" Like a mother lifts up her baby, Lee picked up his Squirtle and hugged him tight, giving subtle rubs on its head making the Squirtle giggle in pleasure.

"I guess was to proud of myself." Gray put the ball back in his bag, with disappointment and self-deprecation clearly written out on his face. "Of course. Why did I think only I would improve?"

"Well, you were pretty good. You almost got me there, so I think you'll improve if you try harder." Lee patted his friend in the back to cheer him up. "Come on, it's a trainer battle, not a gym leader battle."

"...I was taking this too easy, wasn't I?" Gray smiled a bit, cheered up by the epiphany. "Yeah, you're right-you never know what a trainer can do, compared to a Gym Leader limited to a type. Let's work harder-you and me both, for becoming an ultimate trainer that can defeat Giovanni, Lee!"

"That's the spirit!" The two friends cheered over their rekindled spirit, going into the Pokemon Center.

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Pokemon Center

Lee flipped through the pages of this month's National Pokegraphics while waiting for Hydro to recover-although he had won the battle, victory was costly as the ensuing crashes against the rock wall had severely beaten up Hydro. And because it was faster to heal fewer more-damaging wounds than various hard knocks, Gray had left earlier than him, who was probably trying to catch more Pokemon for his journey. But Lee was different-he wanted to plan for his team, not catch any Pokemon willy-nilly. Who will be in your 6-man team? It was always a difficult question to answer. Maybe he could get a Zubat for Grass coverage-But then again, probably not. Zubats couldn't learn Wing Attack until gaining a lot of experience, which was too much for him.

"Hey, Kid?"

Lee turned suddenly at the call of his name, coming from someone who was sitting behind him. The man who had called for the boy was wearing a purple shirt with green pants, and there was a somewhat familiar face underneath the combed brown hair.

"Yes, sir?"

"I saw you on the news footage...you're the kid that stopped the family of Team Rocket, at the Pewter Museum, right?"

"Yes sir." Lee said, scratching his head. "Is there anything to do with that, Mr?"

"Well, I was impressed by your actions, kid. Thought everyone got soft after not seeing the Rockets for a long time. But turns out, you're not."

"Thank you sir." Lee smiled a bit at the praise.

"It's a pleasure to meet a little hero like you." The man got up from his seat, and shook Lee's hand. "William M. Sonezaki, Pokemon PC System administrator. But feel free to call me Bill."

Bill? Yes-the man who came up with the pokemon PC storage system. A central figure in the field of cyber technology, he made the storage OS usable for anyone when he could have made millions from it.

"Oh wow! It's an honor to meet you, sir! I've heard about the great things you have done, but I'd never thought I would see you in person!"

"Why, thank you." Bill said. "But I'm also surprised to meet a hero like you too, and I'll tell you one thing: it's risky carrying around only one Pokemon. Come meet me in Cerulean City, the house to the north, and I'll help you with setting up your Pokemon team. Oh, and By the way, what is your name again?"

"Lee, sir."

"Good, good." Bill grabbed Lee's right hand with both his hands. "Be strong Lee, keep fighting against those who wish to harm Pokemon. See you later!"

Lee waved bye at him too.

What a noble guy...and he's so cool, too. Lee thought to himself, as he got up at the call of his name to pick up his Pokemon. Time to enter the cave...

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Lee and Gray's battle is a little short but I think is better paced than Lee's battle with Brock. Next scene in the Pokemon Center you mentioned rocks being used, but during the battle there wasn't any mention of that. I can picture the action more or less fine, but slight more details how the environment was used can go a long way (describing a Pokemon jumping on rocks and trees, for instance).

Oh, hi there Bill. I've seen screenshots of him from Let's Go games, and have to say he sure had an upgrade there hahaha. Very cute Lee is a fan, and seems like Bill's role will be slightly different from the games so that should be interesting.

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Chapter 8: Prepwork

Mt. Moon

The dark, cold cave that was located inside Mt. Moon was not pretty confusing: Lee couldn't find a way out of this forsaken underground. He met so much wild Clefairies and Hydro had gotten hurt in the repeated skirmishes. If he couldn't get out of this mountain...no, he didn't want to think about that.

Should have brought Escape Ropes.

The boy thought to himself, as he took out a golden can and sprayed repel at a Zubat. The bat pokemon flew away screaming in irritation, but in this cave he would be seeing another Zubat again, and soon. With a worried look on his face, Lee looked down at Hydro's ball strapped to his waist holster-Bill was right, he needed more Pokemon...Hopefully Cerulean City can't be that far away, right?

Walking through the cave, Walking through the cave, the lone trainer looked around for any sign of light, anyone to request for help. He didn't like the dark, especially when he was almost alone and his only friend was on the verge of blacking out. His mind could only think of the darkness and the things inside it, and his heart raced as Lee ran toward a random direction. But suddenly, at one point, he couldn't feel his feet touched the ground...and he felt his body dip into the abyss!

"Gah!" The boy spurted out a shout before falling on his side on the rock hard floor! Lee spent the next few seconds wincing at the pain, before dusting himself off and getting back onto his feet. His arm hurt like hell and his glasses were toppled on the ground along with his hat, but both him and his tool of sight survived the impact without any damage.

"Be more careful, Lee." He spoke to himself. "Calm down..."

But as the boy reached down to pick up his glasses and hat, he could see that, although faint, there was a shadow. And in a dark place, shadows only appear for one reason.

A light! Lee placed his glasses back on his nose, focusing at the direction the illumination was coming from. The exit's got to be near!

He quickly picked up his hat and scurried following the light. He didn't want to be in this darkness anymore. Not until he gets another friend to protect him, and Hydro. The kid skimmed along the walls for a faster navigation, noticing his shadow becoming darker and the light surrounding it becoming more brighter.

"This better be a way out!"
Lee spoke to himself, not wanting to be in the dark any longer. Getting attacked by more pokemon in this pitch-black place was the last thing he wanted to go through. At that point the trainer had an epiphany: he was now caring for the safety of not only himself, but also his companion. He finally had something to care about personally, when fear strikes him: his partner, who always be alongside him. The boy stroked Hydro's Pokeball for comfort while walking to the exit now closer to him, as the sunlight shone in his face, easing his phobia.

I have one more friend. But that just means I have one more thing to be worried about. Lee sighed at this thought, reminding himself all the dangers that put them inches away from separation. [I]And one more valuable thing I could lose...[I/] It was glad that the city of Cerulean was only short walk away from Route 4. And the city specializes in Water types due to it being located right next to a big lake, so they should provide Hydro with a good, powerful move to better defend himself. Lee hurried into the Pokemon Center, with a newfound fear found in his heart. Him and Hydro needed a friend to watch their backs in case either of them falls, and quick. He had to get to Bill, ASAP.

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Cerulean City

Coming out of the Pokemon Center with Hydro out of his ball, Lee was still not feeling too comfortable after the revelation in the cave. You gain something, you lose something. And we're talking about something you've had so long a bond, that you become afraid of losing. There could come a time when he will lose Hydro, or vice versa. What will happen then? They've paid too much attention to each other to not break down about it-that would truly be a tragedy. And considering the things he had gone through recently, it was just a matter of time before that Rocket family, or those supporting said family, will try to take Hydro away from his clutches and use him for experiments, sell him, or just outright kill-

"Squirtle?"

The train of thought suddenly derailed off Lee's mind when he felt a tug on his pants from his beloved Squirtle. Stopping at the tug, Lee watched as Hydro also looked into his master's eye, and stretched his arms out. Of course.

"Alright." Lee crouched down onto Hydro's level, looking at him straight in the eye. "But just this once."

The 10-year old cradled Hydro in his arms and got back up, to continue walking to Bill's house. As heartwarming as this experience was, Lee was trying not to show uneasiness carrying the 9kg monster.

"Squirtle, Squirtle!" Hydro waved his arms in joy, his tail wagging.

"Yeah...you like it, little guy?" Lee barely replied to the happy Squirtle in the best smile he could squeeze out while using his strength, trying not to upset Hydro over the fact that his owner was lacking power to carry the little Pokemon. And soon Hydro jumped off his arms and ran ahead of him, overjoyed by his trainer's kindness.

The boy, lagging behind, walked over the Nugget Bridge , the legendary place where Red made his mind, and decided not to join Team Rocket. This was the moment the history of Kanto was decided on, to fight against those who desecrated the land. But it wasn't enough, or that's what Lee thought. In his opinion, Red failed to destroy the root of the problems. Everyone thought the Rockets were gone, a water under the bridge like the one Lee was looking into for his reflection. And look what's happening now.

"Squirtle! Squirt!"

Seeing his beloved starter join the reflection, Lee turned his head around to find Hydro waving his arms behind his owner, a clear look of distress on his face.

"What's the matter, Hydro?"

The Tiny Turtle Pokemon frantically pointed at Bill's house, leaving Lee without an explanation about what kind of danger his Pokemon had witnessed.

"Settle down Hydro, I'll check out what's happening." In an attempt to coax his only Pokemon, Lee petted Hydro's shell and signaled him to follow behind him. If Hydro's this jumped about about Mr. Sonezaki then either something is going horribly wrong or there's been a great misunderstanding! Thoughts raced across his mind as he ran toward the little cottage/lab that was a short distance away from the bridge.

Coming up to the front door, the boy frantically knocked on the wooden door of the house, full of worry that one of his misfortunes had found its way to invade the sanctum of one of his heroes.

"Mr. Sonezaki!? Is everything alright in there!? Hydro came running to me and-"

And at that moment the door flung open, right into the kids face! The ten-year old trainer was hurled backwards into the air, roughly falling onto the ground before rolling over a couple times, scattering blood on the ground. And mere seconds later Bill was thrown out the same entrance, landing next to Lee. Amidst the dust a small figure, that of a 10-year old child, appeared with a Charmander.

"That's what happens when you don't hand over all your Pokemon research to Team Rocket, old man!" Belle stood in front of Bill, with Flame having the same arrogance as her owner. "Hand it over!"

"Gah! You jerk!" Hearing the familiar voice, Lee slowly got up, blood dripping from both his nostrils and tears welling up in his eyes. "You're going down today, you hear me!? Both you and your little Charmander, for-for harming Mr. Sonezaki!"

"Oh, it's you again!" Before Lee could spit out more profanities, the girl gave him a strong kick in the abdomen, forcing him to lie down again. "What is it with you and me that makes us meet!?"

"Ugh!"

"SQUIRTLE!"

Hydro, seeing his owner get beat up, roared in rage and sprung into action immediately! The Squirtle opened its jaws and threw itself onto Belle, biting her in the leg!

"GAH! Get off me, you insolent Pokemon!"

Belle grabbed Hydro with both her hands, and threw the Tiny Turtle Pokemon away! Lee could only watch as his Pokemon crashed on the ground, unable to retract itself back into its shell!

"Finish him. Flame!" The Charmander sprung into action at his trainer's commands.

"Hydro! No!"

The turtle retracted all of its limbs into the shell, and Lee knew, that the soft, beginning shell would not protect Hydro completely from the imminent attack. But then, unexpectedly, the shell started to emit light!

"Lee! Never thought I'd see you this way." Meanwhile, Bill, who was back on his feet, helped Lee up into his feet and handed him a handkerchief. "Are you alright? Is it bleeding bad?"

"I'm fine, sir!" Lee wiped his tears before squeezing his nose, the handkerchief turning red at this attempt. "But Hydro...what's happening to Hydro!?"

"Nothing to worry about, kid...in fact, you better smile for this moment!"

The limbs sequentially popped out of the shell-white stuff on the head, its tail changed into a wave, the whole body size increased...and when the light had subsided, a completely new Pokemon was there instead of a Squirtle!

"Congrats, kid! Your little Squirtle just evolved..." Bill shouted out as the newly reformed Pokemon stood up on its hind legs. "...into Wartortle!"

"Oh-Oh my god!" Amazed at the evolution happening before his eyes, Lee could do nothing but let the smile take over his lips. "You can do this Hydro! Get back at Flame, the Charmander!"

"This doesn't change anything!" Both Belle and Flame were thoroughly confused by the evolution process they had just witnessed, seeing that the Pokemon they just shook off minutes ago now a monster ready to rip them apart. But the girl had to show an example, for her Pokemon to stay strong.

"Flame, go! He's just the turtle, get him like you did for all that time!"

"Char!" The little Charmander gained courage thanks to his trainer, then proceeded to engage Hydro in a glaring match. None of them wanted to lose their dignity-not especially after their trainers got into shock because of each other!

"Use Metal Claw!!"

Belle shouted, and Flame shot into the air, hardening its claws and getting ready to swipe Hydro.

"Hydro, go for it! Use Withdraw!"

"Wartortle!"

Lee shouted in time, as Hydro hid in its shell, taking the Metal Claw like it was nothing!

"Grr! Why now of all time!? Use Bite!" Belle shouted at Flame, who immediately opened its jaws, but then...

"Water Gun!"

Hydro suddenly shot out of its shell and shot out a jet of water straight into Flame's mouth, launching the Charmander into a bookcase! A rain of books fell on Flame.

"Dammit, not again! Flame, return!"

"Hell yeah! That's for making me bleed, you!" Lee spoke in a partly muffled voice, due to him still clutching his nose and having shed tears from the pain. "I'd have taken your Charmander from you and back to the professor if I wasn't bleeding...oww. Get out! And don't ever come back for Mr. Sonezaki!"

Lee watched the girl, with now one of her eyes twitching from anger, run off before giving him the death stare. This was surely a tough fight, even when Hydro had been evolved.

"I owe you twice now, don't I." Bill put his hand on Lee's shoulder.

"Always a pleasure to serve a hero like you, sir." Lee replied to the adult, taking out a pokeball with one hand while holding the handkerchief on the other . "Hydro, good job...come back now."

"Wartortle."

Lee put Hydro back in his Pokeball, focusing his efforts on stopping the blood still flowing from his nose.

"I have so much debt to repay you, Lee-at least for now, just as I promised, I'll give you a new addition to your Pokemon team."

"Yessir."

"I may have the perfect Pokemon. Come in-let's get you and your Pokemon treated."

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Wanna visualize? Here's my character refs for those who want it:
Lee: https://www.deviantart.com/j-k-123/art/Pokemon-OC-Lee-Kanto-Outfit-757786026
Gray: https://www.deviantart.com/j-k-123/art/Lee-s-Rival-Gray-the-Pokemon-Trainer-757788465
Belle: https://www.deviantart.com/j-k-123/art/The-Enemy-Belle-the-Team-Rocket-Trainer-758577710
Lee's Mom: https://www.deviantart.com/j-k-123/art/Lee-s-Mom-Laura-760452398
I'll be drawing Bonnie and Clyde soon.
Also, if any of you have a surname idea for my charas, suggestions are welcome.

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Walking through the cave, The lone trainer looked around for any sign of light, anyone to request for help, he didn't like the dark, especially when he was almost alone and his only friend was on the verge of blacking out.
I would break it up into two sentences, like this:

Walking through the cave, the lone trainer looked around for any sign of light, anyone to request for help. He didn't like the dark, especially when he was almost alone and his only friend was on the verge of blacking out.

Anyways, I admit I like the mention of battle hungry clefairy and Lee using repel on Zubat, heh. At first I thought it was fine for you to skip the Moon Cave part, but then you mentioned Lee feeling very bad at Squirtle being injured. Now I think the Moon Cave part would really benefit one or two scenes with Hydro and Lee dealing with the Pokemon and/or trainers, and then finding a way out. You can perhaps even have Moon Cave as its own chapter.

Oh, hello again Belle. Yikes over her kicking Hydro like that. Good thing he evolved, though! Seems he was at a huge advantage due to both him being water type and evolving. Hm, I probably have an idea what Pokemon Bill will give to Lee.

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Chapter 9: A New Friend to Fight With

Bill's Lab

One last sweep under the nose and Lee let out a sigh of relief, as the rag had stopped turning red and only crusted blood remained on the handkerchief. The trainer put down the bloodied rag down on the table gently, like a mother Krookodile laying down her baby Sandiles, thanking Arceus that the door did not break his nose. To think that someone would do such sacrilege to Bill and almost smash the nose of someone who was just being a good samaritan...Team Rocket never learned from their past experiences to be nicer to people. But then they wouldn't be villains anymore, would they? If Team Rocket had a right mind they should be busy cleaning up their mess, but you can't change an evil person. Then again, maybe they're returning to evil because we're the ones that still don't forgive, but how can/would you forgive-

"Lee?"

His train of thought was derailed again by the voice of Bill, making the boy suddenly raise his head at the PC researcher, who was standing by the microwave with some frozen meals in his hand.

"Are you hungry? It's almost lunchtime."

It's that time already? Lee let out a silent sigh, before giving a thought about his lunchtime meal. "What have you got, Mr. Sonezaki?"

"Oh, nothing fancy." Bill unpacked one of the meals, revealing a frozen spaghetti underneath the tinfoil. "I've got...hold on, let's see...tamato spaghetti, hash browns, large burrito, cheese and cornn berry, and charti hearts."

"I might be getting a bit greedy here sir, but could I have a tamato spaghetti with some hash browns?"

"Well, you have every right to be, son." The PC Researcher gladly opened the pack before putting them in the microwave, setting the timer to 5. "Let's get you refueled so you can stop Team Rocket from harming others."

"Thank you, sir."

Alright, lunchtime! The trainer threw Hydro's pokeball into the air, and his beloved Wartortle did a spin in the air before landing on Lee's lap.

"Let's get you some tasty lunch!" The boy petted him in the shell softly, making the tiny turtle pokemon growl cutely.

"Lee?"

Both the trainer and his pokemon turned to the PC researcher at his call.

"This could be a nice time to show the new Pokemon that I was going to give you." Bill said, bringing a bag of Pokemon food for Lee's Squirtle. "Do you want to see him?"

"Of course sir! Hydro, you're getting a new friend!"

"Wartortle, Wartortle!"

"I'll take both your reactions as a yes! Hang on a second now..."

The PC Administrator rose up from his seat, making his way toward a big chest and opening its cover. Soon pokeballs, toys and miscellaneous research material littered the floor, before Bill rose up holding a dusty safari ball.

"I caught the guy in the Safari Zone, but I haven't been able to give him much attention. I hope you can give him the attention he deserves."

"Of course Mr. Sonezaki."

Receiving the Safari Ball, the trainer pressed the button, opening the contraption and setting out the monster. The light separated into 6 orbs, before forming themselves in front of Lee's eyes as...pink eggs?

"Wartortle!?" Hydro approached the unknown Pokemon in curiosity, whose heads all turned around and faced the tiny turtle pokemon with the same mystery-shrouded faces.

"Whoa, what is that!?" Quickly the trainer whipped out his pokedex, before activating it in order for it to scan the Pokemon for identification.

Exeggcute, the Egg Pokemon. Grass/Psychic type. Even though it appears to be eggs of some sort, it was discovered to be a life-form more like plant seeds.

"Whoa!" Lee cradled the Eggs in excitement. "Thank you Mr. Sonezaki! They're so adorable!"

"I'm just glad they are in good hands now." Bill smiled at the excited young boy. "Would you like to nickname him?"

"Yeah...Eggshell."

"Eggshell! You've got a sense of wit, kid!"

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Lee sat outside by the Cerulean riverside, looking at Hydro and Eggshell playing with each other. Cerulean City was a welcoming town-other than the incident with the Rockets, the trainer and his pokemon were all treated well-they were all happy and well-fed, what more could you wish in a small, peaceful town? But now it was time for a challenge-he wasn't here in this town to loll around, he was here for the 2nd gym badge. He had to move on.

The 6 Egg Pokemon, now named "Eggshell," looked at his trainer before resuming to play with Hydro. Now with two Pokemon, Lee was worried if they would get along, since his Wartortle had spent most of the time alone until now. He wasn't sure if he should talk to them about it, but it's always better to be safe than sorry.

"Eggshell?"

All of the Eggxecute's heads turned around to Lee, and then to Hydro.

"Okay, welcome to our team...This is Hydro, a water type, he'll be fighting with you. Be nice to him, will you?"

"Wartortle!" Hydro waved hi to the new Exeggcute, and Eggshell's heads sprang up smiling in a naughty fashion. They seemed to be getting along...for now. Time to introduce the new guy to the world of battling.

"Alright guys, we're about to head to the gym. What do you know, Eggshell?"

With that question Lee was met with a barrage of seeds, which pelted him everywhere on his body, making him fall backwards from the kinetic energy from the seeds. Okay...Bullet Seed. That's one. The trainer winced in pain for some time before brushing the seed casings off him.

"Exeggcute!" Eggshell's heads cried out, as they proceeded to emit a weird psychic energy on Wartortle, making him yawn and drop to the grass.

Okay, Hypnosis, that's another one. This pokemon must be Impish nature. Lee thought, as he sighed and picked Hydro up before Eggshell could do anything bad to him.

"No, Eggshell...Bad Pokemon." The trainer calmly, yet sternly scolded the Egg Pokemon. The boy, with ease, put the bad pokemon back in his ball with the touch of a button, before heading to the Pokemon Center to regain lost PP and wake Hydro up. If he learned anything in his trip, it was that Pokemon are like babies: really cute, yet sometimes annoying.

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Cerulean City Gym

This gym was one of the gyms that had a use outside of battles, as it was used as a public swimming pool. Sometimes the gym leader would personally instruct those who could not swim. Lee's face turned red thinking of Misty in a wetsuit, before he shook his head. He had to focus on the battle, not weird thoughts.

"Welcome to the Cerulean Gym sir! This gym is water type, so spare clothes are recommended."
The man at the counter said to the kid, giving him a changing room locker key.

"Thanks, but I'll be fine."

He went into the changing room, and opened his locker. Quickly untying his shoes, Lee took off his socks and put them in his shoes, before putting it in the locker and turning the key. The trainer rolled up his pants to minimize getting wet-no shame in getting caught with your sleeves down here, it's that or get wet.

Going into the gym, Lee walked carefully not to slip on the water. He didn't want to get wet before the big battle. Maybe during the battle was fine, but...

"Hey Trainer! You're just in time!"

Lee looked up at the sudden voice. He knew who it was-Misty, the Water type gym leader, wearing a white tank top and short pants. Nothing to distract him, that was fortunate...

"The show's about to start! Get on the water mat."

"Okay...hold on!" He almost fell into the water while getting on but he managed to keep his balance. As the two trainers faced each other on the mats, the lights went off! And when the spotlights flashed at both of them, both the trainers were met with shouts and applauses from the crowd that had come to see the battle!

"Ladies and Gentlemen, prepare for the battle of your life! Another Trainer challenges the Queen of the Water, the second gym leader of the Kanto region...Misty!!!"

Misty waved his hand at the crowd, and Lee could even see someone playing an air horn.

"And on the other side, we have the challenger...Lee!!!"

Wow, that counter guy was the announcer? Lee thought to himself, as he raised his left fist in the air.

"Will another trainer bite the dust? Or will the challenger leave with the badge? We'll find out in 3! 2! 1! Battle!"

Gym Leader Misty wants to battle!

"Go, Staryu!"

"Go, Eggshell!"

Both Pokeballs collided in mid air, as the respective Pokemon landed on their respective water mats, shaking the water!

"Oh, we've got a type advantage here folks! What will Misty do?"

"Eggshell, use Bullet Seed!"

"Staryu, Tackle!"

Eggshell fired at the Staryu on the other mat, which dodged by spinning its body! The seeds hit the walls hard, penetrating through them.

"And Staryu dodges the Bullet Seed! This is just like a movie I saw!"

"Staryu, Water Pulse!"

Staryu let out a concentrated ball of water, which hit Lee's side! It didn't damage Eggshell, but it sure made Lee's water mat shake! He fell onto his right knee, making the shallow water on the mat touch his legs.

"Oh! The lifeguard should be ready!"

"That was a close one! Eggshell, use Hypnosis!"

Eggshell fired a beam of psychic energy, which hit Staryu hard! The foe pokemon became unresponsive to Misty's commands, before slumping to sleep.

"Oh my, the challenger uses a sleep-inducing move!"

"No!"

"Eggshell, use Bullet Seed!"

And with that command, Eggshell gunned down Staryu, knocking it into the water!

"You're good! Staryu, return!"

"Good job Eggshell, return!"

"Go, Starmie!"

"Go, Hydro!"

Both Pokemon growled at each other, as Hydro shook its tail to make himself look more intimidating, while Starmie's rear body started spinning for an attack.

"Oh, this is it folks! Misty's in a critical state! Can the challenger win, or is this another one of her tricks!?"

The shouting became louder, as both Pokemon lunged at each other!

"Use Swift, Starmie!"

"Hydro, Bite!"

A stream of stars hit Hydro repeatedly, but with its one last attack, Hydro bit Starmie, as both Pokemon went down, straight into the water! The wave shook the entire water in the pool, toppling Lee onto his back and throwing Misty off the mat.

"Oh my! That was a wild and wet battle! Both team's respective Pokemon are down, but Misty couldn't bear the aftershock of the battle and fell into the water! That means...The queen has been dethroned! The challenger with the remaining Exeggcute wins!"

The crowd cheered onto the two trainers, as Lee hopped off the mat along with Misty, who climbed up from the water with her clothes and hair completely drenched..

"You did a great job out there! I loved battling with you."

"Thanks, you were great too."

"Here, you fought valiantly...take this Cascade Badge!

Lee received the Cascade Badge!

"And try using this! It should be good for your Wartortle."

Obtained TM03 Water Pulse!

"Great! Let's battle again sometime, I loved the thrill of staying on the water!"

"You betcha! That's the great thing about water battles!"

Lee left waving at the crowd, as the spotlight stayed on him until he went for the exit. Another gym down. Let's keep going.

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Oh, so Lee gets a new Pokemon! Eggshell seems like they'll be a handful, heh.

Misty's gym battle I have mixed feelings with. I do like the audience aspect of it, especially when in the anime at least it's part aquarium, and the pacing with Eggshell and Staryu is fine. However, Hydro vs Starmie I can't picture in my head what was going on because it only lasted for a couple sentences. I also would like more reaction and body language from Lee and Misty during the battle. For instance, Misty's face fell when Staryu got hi with Hypnosis, and Lee's grin getting wider at that result.

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Chapter 10: Bad Encounter

Cerulean City Pokemon Center

Lee leaned back in his seat, resting his tired body against the seat. It was a hard battle-Hydro almost fainted and frankly, and even Eggshell showed signs of disobeyment before the battle. Well, it wasn't surprising considering that he only had only one badge, but it was still a challenging battle. Speaking of the two Pokemon...Lee turned his head toward Hydro and Eggshell on the floor, both enjoying a nice meal from their bowls, after the hard fight. The trainer thought if he should have fed them with street food instead for more flavor, but he was unsure if a instant taco was healthy for beginner Pokemon like his Wartortle and Exeggcute. But anyway, back to the battle, it was, in Lee's own words, worth it-Hydro didn't have to rely on the weak Water Gun anymore.

As Lee looked up at the ceiling contemplating about the effectiveness of his all-offensive strategy, his right pocket started to buzz. Seeing the screen display "Gray" he accepted the call without any hesitation.

"Hello?"

Nothing but crackle made a reply to his question.

"Hello? Gray?"

"...elp me! They've got me, Poison Ivy's down! I'm on Route Fi-argh!"

"What? Who's got you!? Gray!? Hello!?"

All that could be heard after the sentence was an unending crackle, before a short beep commenced the beginning of total silence. Lee looked at the phone in disbelief-what just happened?

Whatever that situation was, Gray is in trouble! Lee thought as he barely moved his trembling hand back into his pant pocket, to put the phone back in. And the last thing he said was that he was Route fi...Route 5! Lee tried to stay calm and keep his bearings together, to not muck up the situation even further. He had to get to Route 5, help his friend out-out of whatever situation he was in!

"Hydro! Eggshell! Get up, Gray's in trouble! We have to help him and Poison Ivy!"

"Wartortle! Wartortle!"

"Exegg! Exeggcute!"

Both Pokemon leaped up and followed their trainer, leaving a pile of uneaten Pokemon food behind. The shouts of onlookers were ignored as the boy sped out the center...

Route 5

...and even then the adrenalin still dried up. The trainer fell down into a one-leg kneeling position, huffing and puffing out to catch his breath as sweat drizzled down his glasses and clothes, before coughing a bit from the extended usage of the air in his lungs. And yet unlike humans, their trusted pets still had young, endless energy. Almost too realistic that you still use your stamina unlike in those movies...

"Wartortle! Wartortle!" Hydro pulled at his master's sleeve, to get him to keep going for his friend.

"Just go first Hydro I...gotta catch my breath..." Lee breathed in deep before coughing a bit again from the strain of his lungs. "Eggshell, go ahead...and find Gray! Come back to...to me when you find him, okay?"

"Exeggcute!"

"Wartortle...War!"

Lee's Wartortle suddenly smiled in epiphany, before spewing out some water and storing them in his mouth. Without his master's orders he still performed Water Gun...right into Lee's face.

"What the-PSHAW!" Lee tumbled backwards as the cold water hit his face, which went into his mouth and nose. Still, the boy couldn't dare to scold the turtle Pokemon-it came out of a good intent to recharge his trainer, and it worked...sort of, that is. Ohh, the morality of animals that care about you...

"Well...thank you Hydro, but try aiming for my mouth next time, alright?" Lee smiled a bit before petting the Wartortle's head, who growled softly in pleasure.
"Now go on, follow Eggshell! Find Gray before anything worse happens to him!"

"Wartortle!"

As the trainer watched his Pokemon run off, he got up and wiped as much water he could from his clothes before looking around, then walking looking for any signs of his friend. Hopefully, my Pokemon, they'll turn up with Gray...I experienced what they did for me. If they're that smart. They can do this. I just hope they didn't take my message the wrong way like Hydro did before-


...His thoughts were broken when Hydro came back and tugged Lee's hand, while Eggshell gathered around the boy.

"Good boys, did you find anything?"

Both pokemon shook their heads, making a sad pouted face.

"Ah...Gray, where in Route 5 are you..."

As the boy tore out his hair in frustration, Lee could smell something weird...a scowling stench, not of meat, but something akin to the smell of a burning cigarette. In a moment of realization, the boy froze, dead in his tracks and realized-Gray said that Poison Ivy was down and out. Maybe, just maybe, if the enemy had a Fire-type pokemon and used it on Poison Ivy, the result of the fire burning poisoned grass on the fainted Bulbasaur's body would create such a foul stench... and when there was something burning, there had to be smoke. The boy looked up-maybe he could be wrong and it could be another wrong battle, but it was the only chance he had as of now! And sure enough the black smoke was coming not too far from them, somewhere near the Underground Path's entrance if the town map was to be trusted.

"I think we've found him! Come on, Hydro, Eggshell, let's go!"

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It took Lee about 10 minutes to get down to the end of Route 5, with him running at full speed to get to Gray. As he got closer the singed smell got worse, and he could hear voices too-and finally through the tall grass, he could see his friend on the ground, his stuff thrown on the ground away from him, and his Bulbasaur smoking beside its Trainer!

"Please! I'm all out of Pokemon!" Gray nervously crawled backwards, his clothes being dusted from what Lee could assume was a beforehand fight.

"Nice try, kid!" The assailant, who Lee could not see through the tall grass, kicked Gray despite his moans of pain. "Now give me your Bulbasaur or my daughter uses Ember on you."

Daughter? Lee thought. There was only one person he knew, to do something this heinous-with a daughter! He sprung into action, emerging from the tall grass!

"HEY! That's my friend you're messing with!" Standing in front of his friend, Lee's face became red with anger as he faced the Team Rocket family. "This is the end for all of you! I won't forgive you especially for this one!"

"Lee!"

'Ah! The decoy worked like a charm!" Clyde crossed his arms, as if he was waiting for the boy. "Tough luck, kid-you've fallen right into our trap to save your idiot friend!"

"Yeah, and too bad we've got the high ground now!" Belle slyly came out front and shoved Lee backwards, which made him flinch-however the angry expression on his face could not be changed. "We outnumber you this time, and we will win! Mom! Go for it!"

"Alright now, then! Perfect timing, my child!" Bonnie took the pose, with Clyde and Belle at the ready.

"Prepare for trouble!"
"Make it double!"
"To protect the world from devastation!"
"To unite all peoples within our nation!"
"To denounce the evils of truth and love!"
"To extend our reach to the stars above!"
"Bonnie!"
"Clyde!"
"Team Rocket, blasts off at the speed of light!"
"Surrender now, or prepare to fight!"
"Yeah, that's right!"

Team Rocket Grunts Bonnie, Clyde, and Belle want to battle!

"Hydro, Eggshell! Get them!" Lee shouted. This was bad, he had two Pokemon to face off against three people! Nevertheless, he had to fight, for his friend!

"Wartortle!" The Turtle Pokemon turned towards the Egg Pokemon.

"Exeggcute, Exeggcute!" All the heads nodded back, as the heads all performed a death stare at their opponents.

"Go for it, Flame!" Belle yelled, her pink hair swishing from her throw.

"Char!" This time, a Charmeleon popped out-a clear sign that Belle had been training too!

"Get them, Raticate!" Bonnie took out a Pokeball too!

"SQUEAAK!" Bonnie's Mouse Pokemon shrieked out a battle cry.

"Ekans, go!"

Clyde's Ekans hissed, before getting ready to lunge at the Pokemon-or the kids, depending on whatever he ordered.

"Lee!"

At the cry of his friend, Lee turned his head to Gray, realizing he had crawled over to his bag while Lee had distracted them!

"Take this! You too, Poison Ivy!"

Gray threw a small piece to his Pokemon and Lee, with the latter fumbling at the catch and barely grabbing it. The Bulbasaur shook off its ashes and growled lowly-this piece was a revive!

The two trainers and the three Rocket goons faced each other in silence, as the Pokemon all looked at each other in a showdown about to happen, in one, first, attack...

"Okay, Hydro! Eggshell! Water Pulse against Flame, Confusion against Ekans!"

"I'll help!" Gray painfully got up, limping on his right leg. "Poison Ivy, Vine whip against Raticate!"

Eggshell shot out a beam of psychic energy, while Hydro spat out a ball of water directly aimed at Flame's tail, with Poison Ivy helping choking Raticate with its vines!

"Flame, use Smokescreen! Take cover!"

"Ekans, Poison Fang against that Bulbasaur!"

"Raticate, go for Hyper Fang!"

Although the Charmeleon hid behind his wall of smoke, the Water Pulse still hit his tail, making him yelp in pain. But with Ekans biting poison into Poison Ivy and Raticate nibbling on its vines, the boys' Pokemon were forced to retreat.

"Little help over here, Lee! Poison Ivy, use Bide!"

"I got you! Hydro, Water Gun against Flame, Eggshell-use Confusion again!"

Ekans was once again at Eggshell's mercy, which gave a final shrill over the unending psychic energy before propelling itself backwards and falling over. Flame was on all fours drenched in water with its tail weakly burning, with Raticate getting double of what he had given by Poison Ivy.

"Goddam-Urgh, Ekans, return!"

"We're winning, Gray!" Lee shouted before turning to his Pokemon. "Guys, Push forward! Hydro, use Water Pulse! Eggshell, Stun Spore!"

"Poison Ivy, use Absorb!"

"Raticate, use Hyper Fang against that insolent Wartortle!"

"Flame, use Fire Spin against that Bulbasaur!!"

"Incoming! Brace, Poison Ivy!"

As Hydro was mauled by the big-fanged rat Pokemon, with Eggshell trying to uselessly pepper the Raticate with paralysis-inducing spores, there was no one to block the fire from reaching Gray's Bulbasaur...or did it? The Seed Pokemon closed its eyes, before its bulb started glow-and then its body!

"Poison Ivy! What's going on!?" Gray gasped in shock and awe.

"Gray! He's-"

The flame spin hit its target but it only forced him backwards-not the resulting flaming carcass it was before! Instead its bulb burst open revealing a red bud, and long, green vines shot out of it and struck Raticate, sending it flying backwards right into Flame-knocking them both out of commission!

"...Ivysaur!"

The now-evolved Poison Ivy, now an Ivysaur, helped Hydro up using his vines-the boys were victorious!

"Urgh! No!" Clyde shouted in frustration. "Raticate, return!"

"You-you defeated my parents!?" Belle was not amused as she cradled Flame in her arms. "That's impossible! They-I mean, at least mom is a high ranking official in Team Rocket-"

"Hold it, hold it! Just stop right there!" Lee interrupted their speech, anger evident in his eyes as he stood alongside his injured friend. "I don't know about you guys, but it's been years since Team Rocket went KAPUT! What are you talking about!?"

"Ah...that's where we beat you! In knowledge!" Bonnie said. "Let me explain this to you idiot kids! Our great leader, Giovanni, has returned to save us Team Rocketeers from losing our ground in Kanto!"

"That's right, little runt!" Clyde followed up after his wife, taking off his hat to reveal his bald spot. "After Red forced our great leader into hiding, the righteous people of Team Rocket lost against the forces of evil and were banished from society. However, our Johto team managed to make contact with Giovanni before they were disbanded by another evil trainer. Hearing of our resistance against this evil society, he came to us people in need, once again, to make Team Rocket great again! And this time, we will triumph!"

"You're crazy!" Gray shouted, walking in front of Lee despite his injured body. "Team Rocket sold, tested and killed Pokemon! What kind of sickos are you to revive a team like that!?"

"So you don't want the money? The power?" Belle stepped out in front, before standing up to Gray face by face. "You won't say the same thing when you lose all your stuff and all you've got is people who mock you back home!"

"Stand back, Belle!" Clyde stepped in front again. "Don't you call my daughter like that, for you shall face the wrath of Team Rocket!"

"Red is gonna kick your ass!" Lee shouted, stepping up to Clyde in defiance. "You'll never succeed!"

"Like that's gonna happen again!" Clyde forcefully poked the trainer in the chest with his finger, but Lee managed to remain in his posture. "Listen up, you...you Red follower, Giovanni has trained in the years following our disbandment, and he is no longer afraid of that pesky...pest!"

"Then I'll stand up. In fact, every trainer is gonna be against you!"

"Pshaw! You'll never be as great as the great Giovanni!" Clyde poked Lee again, harder, this time making him flinch and take a step backwards. "No, in fact, you will never be great as your idol, Red! If you want to stop us, you'll need something more than your little turtle and pink eggs!"

Before Lee could think of more profanities to say to his enemy, Clyde pulled out a smoke bomb! The pin dropped to the ground, and in seconds...

"See you around...you brats."

POOF! With a gray smoke, they were gone, leaving the two trainers behind.

"Those grunts! Argh!" Lee threw his hat on the ground in anger, huffing in rage. "They hurt you just to lure me! And now we have Team Rocket returning!"

"Lee, calm down!" Gray grabbed Lee. "They're right. Giovanni has come back, along with a new Team that they claim can defeat red...that means We have to get stronger-"

"What do you mean he's right!? We have to get stronger!?" Lee turned to Gray, anger still not vented out of him. "Hell no! Lemme at em! I'm gonna rip them apart with my own hands!"

"Sweet Arceus, calm down!" Gray barely grabbed his friend by his arms. "We barely won! We can't take on them right now!"

"Grr!" Lee let out a final growl before an angry sigh. Gray let him go from his grasp.
"Gah, I still don't believe this. Are you alright?"

"Yeah...barely." Gray replied as he limped to his friend. "They sprained my right leg. I've got a few bruises too but they'll heal."

"Yeah...right right...gotta calm down..." The trainer was still restless, his Wartortle and Exeggcute worried by his side as the former brought his hat back. "You said we had to get stronger to beat them, right? Now that I think about it...you might be right, sorry about before. We gotta get to Vermillion together for the next gym. I'll help you until you can get medical attention, but could you also help me to relax? I might lose it if I keep thinking about those Rockets."

"Alright..."

As Lee got Gray's right arm around his neck, both the trainers and their Pokemon opened the door to the Underground Pass, a path that would lead to Vermillion City, toward an unknown yet ominous future to clash with the evil forces that had returned...

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Dani California
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I think this is your best chapter so far, pacing and writing wise. I like the sensory description of the smell of Poison Ivy's burns. You have the rest of the chapter focus on Gray and Lee going against Team Rocket and the news of Giovanni returning. With all the references to Red, I wonder if he'll ever make an appearance.

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I think this is your best chapter so far, pacing and writing wise. I like the sensory description of the smell of Poison Ivy's burns. You have the rest of the chapter focus on Gray and Lee going against Team Rocket and the news of Giovanni returning. With all the references to Red, I wonder if he'll ever make an appearance.
Oh, you will get to see Red later on in the story alright!
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