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A Pokemon Journey!

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OOC: Yeah, I was worrid I was being over dramatic. I just hope I haven't interfered with Randall's planned gym battle or anything.

IC:
Somewhere I thought I could hear a voice calling to me. It was a female voice and it sounded oddly familiar...
"L-liane?!" I somehow was able to think.
"Li...errr..." I mumbled in th real world.
 
"I take it back!" I shouted over to Drew and Ash, waving "He mumbled something!"
"We'd better get him to the pokemon center fast..." Brock said running over.
"I can't carry him! I'm waiting for those slowbros to get over here!" I said defensively.

OOC:4 lines dane.
 
OOC - Naoko, counting that short OOC you've done 3 lines. =/

Drew sighed, throwing his messenger bag aside.

"Put him on my back." Drew commanded.

Liane guided Dane until he rested on Drew's back.

"One... Two... Three!" Drew yelled out at 3, using all his energy to lift up Dane. He stood strong for a few seconds, only to collapse again.

Drew took out 3 Pokéballs. "Time to try out my new Pokémon... Go Pidgeotto! Synthes! Cyndaquil!"

The 3 Pokéballs exploded in a burst of light as a bird, a 'thing' and a hedgehog emerged.

Cyndaquil was excellent. He was black with a cream underbelly, and a flame on his back. It looked real, but it didn't move much.

"Pidgeotto, drag Dane... Cyndaquil and Synthes, push from behind." Drew commanded, scratching his head at the pathetic orders he had just commanded.

Cyndaquil was confused. He got called upon the for the first time and he just gets commanded to push a guy?

The Pokémon motioned towards the human. All signs of conciousness have been lost again, after the short murmur.

"Wanna chip in some of your Pokémon?" Drew suggested in a direct way.
 
Returning ot the gym, I seen the knocked out Dane and the knocked out Mankey. "What the hell happened here?" Ash blurted out. "Did you do this?" Ash said looking at Brock.
"Hey don't look at me!" He replied. "Well ya know what? I have waited long enough! Lets battle!" Ash yelled. "Go Totodile!" Ash tossed a pokeball in the air. "Geodude go!" He said tossing his ball in the air.
"Ok Totodile! Start off with water gun!" A burst of water came from Totodile as it hit geodude head on. "Yes critical hit and it super effective!" Ash cackled. "Geodude, magnitude!" The attack came and rang through the building. "Now tackle it!" Brock commanded. It did so but with no avail as Totdile dogded it.
"Finish Toto! Bubblebeam!" The bubbles came like crazy. Atacking the geodude knocking him out.
 
OOC:Well whaddya know?! LOLZ I better shut up then. Sorry, It's four lines in the quick reply box, but apparently three lines in the actual post. Excuse Excuse. And, Why are you doing a battle in the middle of a 'crisis' Randall??? *mumble* and you call my gym battles short Outskate *mumble* JK! sorry. I'm happy and hyper.

IC:"I don't think Dane wants a murkrow clawing at him, both my delibird and squirtle are too small, Ash is having a gym battle..." I shot a quick glare at him "So I'm sorry, I can't really help."
Once again I felt my uselessness, but I shrugged it off this time.
It wasn't time to go depressed again...or ever.
"We can try some of his pokemon..." I said "But his Charmander is the only thing big enough...we're not getting his Mankey out." I added quickly.

OOC:Okay just a heads-up, all my pokemon except the murkrow are pretty much baby pokemon. And Dane, I'm asking permission to release your charmander.
 
"Return geodude. Very good but lets see you take one him." Brock said throwing a pokeball in the air. An Onix was revealed and it roared loudly. "Ok, Totodile return. Go help with Dane, and for now go Pikachu!" I said as Pikachu jumped from my shoulder.
"A Pikachu? Have you gone mad?" Brock laughed. "Electric is useless against my Onix." He bellowed.
"Who said he was going to use his electric attacks? Quick attack Pikachu!"
Like lightning Pikachu dissapeared and reappered behind Onix. It struck the Onix in the back. It just shook him. Brock who was laughing had no idea what was in store for him.
 
OOC: Naoko: Permission granted.
By the way, I know your just enforcing rules and all, but after writing two very chunky gym battle post's I thought you might give me a little bit of a break or something, especially seeing as it is new for me to describe being semi-unconcious.
Oh and feel free to use my pokemon or whatever whenever you need to. As long as you don't mess up my personality I'm not really bothered.

Randall: ...
As a novice RPer I can't really comment on much, but your battle feel to me to be out of place and oddly paced.
This is your characters first ever gym battle after all. :\
Is it really worth rushing it like this?

IC:
"Where the heck am I, and what the hell is going on out there?" my mind wondered furiously. I could think now quite clearly and I could definatly feel the effects of what was happening to me, but I couldn't seem to control my body or speak.
"It feels like I'm neither here nor there..." I thought glumly.
My body twitched as I felt a small jolt of pain rush to my head suddenly.
"Are they even gonna help me out there or what?" I thought angrily.
I felt myself slip a little further from reality but the pain remained constant.
"If they don't hurry soon I could be stuck like this..."
 
OOC:I know I hate gym battles too, but seriously Randall...I think you know what I'm going to say, so I"m not even going to bother. As much description as One_Winged_Angel! *gasp*

IC:'Let's go already!' I thought angrily to myself.
"Come on out charmander!" I said annoyed that I couldn't find the pokeball.
"Can you help us get Dane to the pokemon center?" I asked quickly.
It nodded with a cheerful "Char!"
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"Oh my!" Nurse Joy said looking down at Dane, the pokemon underneath him straining now.
"Can you hurry?" I asked awkwardly "It sorta took us a long time to get him here."
"Of course!" She said, calling a few chanseys.
"Now all we can do is wait." I said, sighing and plopping myself down in a maroon red plush chair.
"I'm sure he'll be okay." I said.
 
OCC: Naoko, I have been very calm with you lately with you smart alliac comments and I am getting sick of it! You need to shut you mouth! Got it! I battle how I battle. I break my battles off in to sequenses. This will be the third part of the battle. If you put all three peices of the battle together it would be just like yours!

IC: With Brock still laughing I decided to show what my surprise was. "Pikachu! Iron tail!" I yelled. It hit onix right in between the eyes. It landed sideways on the ground shaking.
Brock was stunned. He couldn't beleive it. "I will explain, that person on the Nav was Prof. Oak. He had a TM for me. He wanted me to test it out on Pikachu. I gave it to him and his attack came through. Thats when I decided to take out Totodile to fight with Pikachu. Get it now?" I asked cackling.
Just then Onix got back up. "No way!" I yelled. "It hit him dead on! Ok Pikachu, iron tail. It hit again and the Onix fell to the ground.
"Onix is unable to battel. Ash and Pikachu win!"
 
OOC:I'm not saying anything Randall, because I can control my temper no matter how repulsive the other's post is. Be thankful I didn't bash you like you bash others. I think I may remove my OOC posts from now on and only OOC in answer to someone's questions. You may not see me here so often either. I have nothing to build on right now, so I'm not even going to bother to put an IC post.
 
OOC - Randall, Naoko was only trying to help.

Drew followed Dane into the ward as a doctor finally stopped Drew from continuing any further.

Drew stepped out the Pok?mon Center.

"How could Ash could have been so ignorant?" Drew asked himself. He stepped back and forth until he sighted an empty bench and sat down.
 
OOC: OK THAT'S IT!
I hate getting into arguements but I've taken just about as much as I can of you Randall. You must be the most obnoxious and nasty person I have ever met.
From my point of view I don't think Naoko has exactly done anything wrong.
All she did was make the same point as me that your posts were out of place and just didn't fit right in the story.
From what i've seen, Naoko is a far better RPer than you. Her posts are creative and often fun to read as well as making more sense than yours. She develops a good solid story, and follows what others write quite well.
Your posts are flat and often very boring. Your character lacks personality and you just randomly use weird moves without even explaining how your Pokemon learned them. You sometimes deprive us of important infomation that we need to know in order to continue the RP you started.
I may not understand the rules of RPing too well, but you certainly need to learn how to write better. :\

Oh, and please don't bother repling to this if your just going to moan at me Randall I'm really not bothered anymore.

Oh, and stop spamming your own RP!

IC:
"Ohhharggg!" I moaned as I awoke on the medical table clutching my head.
"Oh, thank goodness your awake!" Nurse Joy cried rushing over "We thought we may have lost you there!"
I looked around for a second taking in my surroundings.
"W-what happened to me...how did I end up here?" I asked her as she fussed over me checking I was alright.
"Wha-? Oh! Yes, that girl and boy brought you here unconcious after that Mankey attacked you..." she replied still checking me over "I say, a few more minutes and we may have lost you. I'm not used to healing humans but hospital would have been too far away and you wouldn't have made it..."
She stepped back and allowed me to get up.
"Ow..." I said grabbing my head "It still kinda hurts..."
"Well of course it will!" she scolded "You just got kicked in the head by an enraged Mankey, you should count yourself lucky! A few more inches and you might have been a gibbering vegetable..."
Leaving the ward and counting myself lucky I headed down the hall with the Nurse at my heels assessing my health every step I took.
"Look, I'm fine!" I said to her after I couldn't take it any longer.
"Hm!" she replied "Well you couldn't see yourself after those friends of yours brought you in, else you would be concerned too!"
But finally after a little while she decided I was fine and left me be.
I pushed open the doors to the waiting area to find my friends waiting for me.
 
"Hi Dane!" I said as I stood up.
I was just about to follow Drew outside, but change of plans.
"You feel alright now?" I asked as Dane's charmander flew past me at an alarming rate and clung to his leg.
I giggled and jerked my thumb toward the sliding doors "Drew just went outside. You had us worried!"
I dragged Dane outside, and said cheerfully to Drew "Dane's all better now! Where's Ash?"
 
OH, find a new RP this one's getting closed! STRIDER CAN YOU PLEASE CLOSE THIS!
 
Oh, alrighty, Ky Ky's gonna lock this. <_< Typing in all caps is against the rules, btw.

+CLOSED+
 
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