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I know, but my fanfic isn't THAT cliche! Hell, in chapter two its already breaking new ground.....although you don't know what new ground was broken until chapter 3.
 
No swearing~ Especially if you're twelve.

And Frosty, I like when the hero dies at the end. In sacrifice or something~ It's so sad.
 
I go out for two weeks and the fanfiction forum floods with these... fanfics... geez...
 
Never thought that'd happen, did you Niko ;D

Gah...I don't even read the fics here. I love this forum for the FF Lounge <33
 
Katsuro said:
No swearing~ Especially if you're twelve.

And Frosty, I like when the hero dies at the end. In sacrifice or something~ It's so sad.
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WHAAAAT? I'm not 12, thats how many posts I have! (Now I have 13 posts though....) xD
 
Ok 0o;

Sorry~ Guess I didn't get enough sleep last night ;D

...zomg Niko... you're right D: FF forum did get spammed up~
 
It's ok Katsuro, it happens to me too -_-"

In other news, can't ANYBODY leave me a comment on my fanfic topic? I know double psoting is allowed as long as your posting a chapter, but I think triple posting my be pushing it.

Please, somebody, say SOMETHING about my fanfic! Pleeeaaaase...... >.<"
 
You can post however many times in a row you want~ as long as they're quality chapters.

I'll take a look at it if I get time. Right now I'm doing a science report. x.x;
 
Katsuro said:
You can post however many times in a row you want~ as long as they're quality chapters.

I'll take a look at it if I get time. Right now I'm doing a science report. x.x;
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Thank you Katsuro, I mean it! Feel free to take your time, however.

And you don't have to worry about the quality of the chapters...i've written up to chapter 25, actually o.o"

And I can quote many, many people's comments on them (from another forum) if you want assuance that they're quality work.
 
I'm the owner of an RP, created by a friend who dropped out and put me in charge.
However, I suppose I could write a fanfic here on some of the story.

The is called Pokemon Wars. When it was first constructed, the idea of having a war was perposterous.
However, after I joined in, things elevated to a new scale, and I quickly became the main villian of the RP.

The story, related to my character, is as thus:

This takes place around a green Sandshrew, who has named himself Dark Quill. He seems peaceful enough on the outside, untill he spots a human and challenges them to a battle. Yes, he can speak, and has many other unique traits as well.
Dark Quill was captured by Team Rocket while young, and had been their lab rat for 18 years. For the past year, he had been living a free life which had been long delayed from him. He made friends, and even found love, but that was when the hand of man striked.
His girlfriend was shot and killed brutally by her owner, causing Dark Quill to let himself drown in his sorrow.
Eventually, Dark Quill evolves into a Sandslash (That'd be him in my avatar), which is when the fun begins.
Dark Quill decides to test his newfound strengths and abilities on the residents of Cerulean City. A very vicious and gory onslaught ensues, which ends with the city being evacuated, while the rotting corpses and blood-stained Sandslash give farewell to the sunset, and Dark Quill realises the magnitude of the task he has vowed to undertake.
He declares war against the human race.
 
assurance~ And don't worry, I'll be making my own judgements ;D But...I'm not the softest reviewer, so you're forewarned oo;

BTW- How long are the combined 25 chapters?
 
Dark Quill said:
This takes place around a green Sandshrew, who has named himself Dark Quill. He seems peaceful enough on the outside, untill he spots a human and challenges them to a battle. Yes, he can speak, and has many other unique traits as well.
Dark Quill was captured by Team Rocket while young, and had been their lab rat for 18 years. For the past year, he had been living a free life which had been long delayed from him. He made friends, and even found love, but that was when the hand of man striked.
His girlfriend was shot and killed brutally by her owner, causing Dark Quill to let himself drown in his sorrow.
Eventually, Dark Quill evolves into a Sandslash (That'd be him in my avatar), which is when the fun begins.
Dark Quill decides to test his newfound strengths and abilities on the residents of Cerulean City. A very vicious and gory onslaught ensues, which ends with the city being evacuated, while the rotting corpses and blood-stained Sandslash give farewell to the sunset, and Dark Quill realises the magnitude of the task he has vowed to undertake.
He declares war against the human race.
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Brutal comment: Thank you for telling me this story. Now I don't have to go read it myself.


Seriously now...

When a summary reveals way too much about the story, the readers lose interest in the story because the readers simply know too much. Read the sticky thread about Pokemon Fanfiction Writing Guide, and look under the summary section for more details about what I mean...

K I feel so compelled to add something in that guide against human-speaking Pokemon... changing canonic materials, such as Pokemon language, can't happen just for the heck of it people. Where's the explanation for this mysterious power to speak human for the Pokemon? >>;
 
Katsuro said:
assurance~ And don't worry, I'll be making my own judgements ;D But...I'm not the softest reviewer, so you're forewarned oo;

BTW- How long are the combined 25 chapters?
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Errrr.....About 100 pages (in word), give or take. I do actually have them all complied in Word as one document, and that thing is 110 pages long...but for each chapter I start a new page. (note: I combined 'fic' chapters in many cases to form actually chapters in my full comilation, so right now there are about 16 1/2 chapters in it.....so about 8-10 pages are lost in starting new pages for new chapters.)

And FYI, the thing is still going! By the end of the fic there will be many more than 25 chapters, although 25 chapters is defenetley more than halfway through the series as I have it planned out.

EDIT: And also, some of my early chapters were quite short - so I have actually complied a couple chapters into one when I posted chapter 2 here, and I plan to do so for a while until my chapters became a suitable length.
 
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Well, that's only a basic summary of the frist two chapters. The story itself spans well over 200 pages. (Counting on Microsoft Word)
If you hate speaking human, then you'll hate the rest of it as well.
Of course, I have explinations for everything, but all of that is connected to the main plots and such. If I tell you the reasons why, I'd be giving away more of the story, which as you said, makes it uninteresting.
However, if you MUST be convinced that I give you a reason...

As said before, Dark Quill is an experimental Pokemon operated on by Team Rocket. By using a series of special technological implants which have been surgically equipped to the inside of himself, Dark Quill has an array of unique abilities.

Some of these include abilities such as:
The ability to converse with humans in their native tongue.
A sort of permanent Rage attack.
Faster healing and boosted immunity systems.
Boosted reflexes and impulse systems.
A crystal-clear memory. (Not particularly good in his case)
A special Team Rocket TM, which taints the target Pokemon's soul and forces it to learn a few Ghost/Dark moves, such as Faint Attack and Shadow Ball.


I didn't create this RP to appeal to everyone. I don't expect anyone to fully understand the subtlety and delicacy of the pieces I write, but DO try and refrain from any form of critisism directed towards me. I'm not the kind of person who takes negative comments well.
 
frostweaver said:
K I feel so compelled to add something in that guide against human-speaking Pokemon... changing canonic materials, such as Pokemon language, can't happen just for the heck of it people. Where's the explanation for this mysterious power to speak human for the Pokemon? >>;
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To be fair, it's not exactly changing canonic material considering that in some of the manga (Pipipi Adventures, Pocket Monsters or more commonly known as the "Scary Clefairy manga", etc.), almost all Pokemon can talk with humans. However, maybe it is a different case considering those manga do it for comedy purposes and really don't need much background so long as it makes people laugh, unlike a dark fic.
 
My fic starts out bad (:P), and I intend to keep it that way. I can easily make it better of course but I use it as a constant reminder of how I improved.

I figure my case is different though.

Most people do have a Pok?mon's native tongue translated for comedic purposes like Yamato-san said above.
 
Thanks muchly for the review, Breezy! :D
You were very nice to me considering how much of my beginning can be considered cliche....
 
Yamato-san said:
To be fair, it's not exactly changing canonic material considering that in some of the manga (Pipipi Adventures, Pocket Monsters or more commonly known as the "Scary Clefairy manga", etc.), almost all Pokemon can talk with humans. However, maybe it is a different case considering those manga do it for comedy purposes and really don't need much background so long as it makes people laugh, unlike a dark fic.
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If there's once again, messed up scientists (which again, happens to be Team Rocket) doing some genetic engineering and experiments it on Pokemon. This Pokemon goes off into a fueled rage against all humans, and proceed to destroy all of them... that is clearly a darkfic. I'll love to see how can you make a comedy out of that.

I haven't read Pipipi Adventures (of course... even Pokespecial is hard enough to find at all), but I'm pretty sure that it's a comedical manga.

There are of course many methods to easily change Pokemon to speak human, but the glaring problem is that only *selective* Pokemon can speak, while all the others cannot. Then you are stuck in a situation where clearly your view of the canon is that Pokemon cannot speak human, yet somehow a few of them can (usually, unexplained too, or use some terribly stretchy reasons to it. Magical mountains, fairies, or a simple knock on the head by a tiny rock... I've seen some reasons as lame as that). Of course, there is no problem if people are willing to "sacrifice" setting by not using the words Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, Orre, Southern Islands and Battle Frontier. Then easily, by making all Pokemon (and not just a few) talk human, then you have qualified your story to be in an alternative setting where Pokemon can talk, and the problem is solved.

Of course... 90% of all fanfics with talking Pokemon take place in Kanto/Johto/Hoenn, and always only the main character (or sometimes the main Pokemon villain and the main character's girl/boyfriend) can speak human... AHEM >>;

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About "clich?" beginnings, there are a few fanfics that have a very good start even though it's your typical "ch.1 meet the professor." Yet, those stories will develop a very special and attractive traits, usually within the character/s, that will make the story standout above all other typical OT stories. It all depends on how it's done, and you will need the reviewers to read your story to judge that detail. But, how are you going to get the reviewers to go to read the story in the first place? That involves advertisment skills, and it's part of what fanfic writers have to care about as well. A section of this involves a key rule where you shall *never* make any promises, especially "it will get better later!"



*stares at his still, unfinished battle fanfic*

<= will never, NEVER, write full 6-on-6 Pokemon battles ever again
 
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frostweaver said:
If there's once again, messed up scientists (which again, happens to be Team Rocket) doing some genetic engineering and experiments it on Pokemon. This Pokemon goes off into a fueled rage against all humans, and proceed to destroy all of them... that is clearly a darkfic. I'll love to see how can you make a comedy out of that.

I haven't read Pipipi Adventures (of course... even Pokespecial is hard enough to find at all), but I'm pretty sure that it's a comedical manga.

There are of course many methods to easily change Pokemon to speak human, but the glaring problem is that only *selective* Pokemon can speak, while all the others cannot. Then you are stuck in a situation where clearly your view of the canon is that Pokemon cannot speak human, yet somehow a few of them can (usually, unexplained too, or use some terribly stretchy reasons to it. Magical mountains, fairies, or a simple knock on the head by a tiny rock... I've seen some reasons as lame as that). Of course, there is no problem if people are willing to "sacrifice" setting by not using the words Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, Orre, Southern Islands and Battle Frontier. Then easily, by making all Pokemon (and not just a few) talk human, then you have qualified your story to be in an alternative setting where Pokemon can talk, and the problem is solved.

Of course... 90% of all fanfics with talking Pokemon take place in Kanto/Johto/Hoenn, and always only the main character (or sometimes the main Pokemon villain and the main character's girl/boyfriend) can speak human... AHEM >>;

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About "clich?" beginnings, there are a few fanfics that have a very good start even though it's your typical "ch.1 meet the professor." Yet, those stories will develop a very special and attractive traits, usually within the character/s, that will make the story standout above all other typical OT stories. It all depends on how it's done, and you will need the reviewers to read your story to judge that detail. But, how are you going to get the reviewers to go to read the story in the first place? That involves advertisment skills, and it's part of what fanfic writers have to care about as well. A section of this involves a key rule where you shall *never* make any promises, especially "it will get better later!"



*stares at his still, unfinished battle fanfic*

<= will never, NEVER, write full 6-on-6 Pokemon battles ever again
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My beginning isn't THAT cliche...Banov never, ever meets any professors over the course fot the entire fic (or at least far, 25 chapters into it...)

The only cliche thing about my beginning is that it is about a new trainer who leavs home and sets off on a journey. He meets no professors, his quest isn't to become a pokemon master, he doesn't own a starter pokemon, he doesn't have a rival....jeez, looking back, my fanfic's beginning really isn't too cliche at all! 0_0 People are just afraid it'll be cliche after reading the first paragraph and never bother to finiish it!

That shows you just how unaccepting perople are of fanfics that begin by introducing a new trainer about to leave on a journey. How ridiculous is that? xD

I will admit that while my fic does lack many basic staples of cliche'd OT fanfics, in the beginning it doesn't include anything that really seperates it from other fanfics.
 
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