Asch said:
AE: n00blets? I like that term. XD. I might sticky it, I don't know. Some people probably need it at this point. The truth of the matter is that the next step will be using forum permissions, in which only members that have shown capability to post properly will be allowed to RP, which would be the death of the RP section cause that would kill off a good 80% of the active RPers. Throwing that threat out there may help.
Yeah, a permission system would hurt activity a lot...threats ftw, I guess. :3
Jyukai said:
1. Description. Because I don't even need to explain this.
2. Spelling. Because I don't need to explain this either.
3. Capitalization. If you're lazy and you know it clap your hands! *clap clap clap clap clap*
Let's not forget grammar, paragraphing, and interaction (i.e. noticing and responding to the posts of other RPers) either; they all seem to be problematic points (Paragraphing has two simple rules and yet people are still doing it wrong T_T). And yes, technically people are supposed to learn stuff like grammar and spelling at school, but seeing as how not everyone has I guess they need a refresher, eh? :3
Sephiroth+ said:
Zaiku flashed around as he saw Kaki being held hostage, but then Ricky and Travis had seemed to have taken care of it. Zaiku then turned his attention to the Torchic again who was charging towards him.
Zaiku smiled and stuck out his twisted spoon, from it he manifested a luster purge. It was a spectacular ball of white light that had seemed to send the Torchic into the air, from there Zaiku teleported behind him and shot a series of the attack confusion one after another, the twisted spoon was really helping. The Torchic had seemed to fall to the floor.
"Come on punks!" Zaiku shouted "Make my day!"
This had really seemed to cheese off what appeared to be a scyther. Uh-oh bad move!
Scythers were extremely versatile and they could use bug moves which were super effective against Psychic pokemon.
However Zaiku realised that he would need to find attacks Ralts can use that aren't Psychic type. Too late, Scyther had just slashed Zaiku across the stomach rapidly with a succesion of slashes. Zaiku had fallen to the ground in agony when a spark had lit up in his brain, he had manifested his emotions (As a Ralts is the "emotion" pokemon) He had been blazing with anger, and had conjured up a wicked fire punch that had burst into flames upon contact with his opponent.
"4 down, 5 to go." Zaiku announced while gripping his stomach where he had been slashed mercilessly.
Zaiku tried using recover which normally he struggled doing, but the twisted spoon had changed that, Zaiku noticed the slashes rapidly closing uo, and the blood drying away.
He then teleported to AJ.
"Dude, you don't need to put these guys in intensive care." Zaiku tried explaining, "but if you're not gonna listen to me let's just go all out now and leave 'em with max revives when we move." Zaiku struck a battle pose as more enemies closed in.
Okay, you've got some grammar issues here, such as "turned his attention to the Torchic again who was charging against him". That should be something like "turned his attention
back to the torchic
, who was...". You also have some weird parts in your punctuation (usually full stops wer commas should be, or vice versa), some needless repetition of Zaiku's name and some faulty paragraphing (Please just leave a full empty line between paragraphs; it's a lot neater.), and a few sentences that just look very stiff and awkward, such as "He then teleported to AJ." (Very short and blunt, and also needlessly separated from the ensuing quote) and "Scythers were extremely versatile and they could use bug moves which were super effective against Psychic pokemon." (This would make sense if you connected it to the previous sentence with a semi-colon, but alone it looks out of place).
Overall, you seem to have a decent level of detail, although to be honest I'm a bit leery-eyed about the use of Luster Purge. Unless Zaiku has some bizarre connection to Latios (which I wouldn't know since this is out of context) then there's really no justification for using such a move. Not the best, but it's passable quality.
Chibi-chan said:
SCHOOL RP, YAY. I love school RPs with twists, because they can be both serious and funny; there's really no certain tone to them.
Umm...I thought it was 'school' as in 'an RP where the RPers are getting taught on the side'? Mind you, a school would be a very fitting environment, and I do agree that the concept can be extended in many directions. Besides, it's been quite some time since we had a proper one in that genre.
Poketrainer2004 said:
This particular post was done in a rush but if you put aside the horrible punctuation and maybe some of the other errors then you will see that I'm not a terrible RP'er myself...I do admit that this isnt top quality but only because I was in such a rush I forgot to make sure it was puctuated coherently.
Honestly, the 'no time' excuse is pretty lame. I mean, how long does it take to press full stop or comma instead of space? Not very long. If you had just focused on proper punctuation instead of splashing triple dots left and right you would have accomplished it in about the same time and grammatically correct to boot. If you put aside all of people's errors then everyone is great, you know, so sorry but I'm not going to do that. :\ Anyway, I'm having a seriously hard time evaluating that sample since I dislike dragging core characters into RPs, especially in a shippy manner. However, even looking past that this smells slightly Gary-Stuish; I mean, it's not like beating a bat is a hard feat by any stretch of imagination, but the fact that Kyle just spotted its weakpoint straight off the bat (no pun intended)? Uh-huh...not too cool. Plus, reducing Sora and Kairi to bystanders gaping in awe at someone defeating one of the sissiest heartless in existence is just...augh, it stinks like needless self-promotion to me. :\ You've also got a pragraphing problem. Again,
full one-line separation between paragraphs; it makes the whole thing a lot more readable. Finally, Kyle drew the keyblade 'with a ring'? Um...excuse me, but why would he use a ring (circular accessory usually worn on fingers) to draw it instead of his hand? There might have been 'a ringing sound' or something to that effect (although that's still a very weird sound for a keyblade to make).
Overall, I'd say yours is a bit weaker than Sephiroth+'s. Big minus for attitude; punctuation and grammar are not something to be lazy about. Sure, you don't always have the time to double-check, but you should always
try to punctuate correctly. If you're in a hurry at the moment then type as far as you can, save what you've written, and finish later. The way you punctuate can completely change the contents of your writing. I'd drag out the old Dear Jack/Jill letter example, but it's pretty long. Suffice to say that wars have been started because of faulty punctuation. I kid you not. :O
Poketrainer2004 said:
Which brings me to my Idea....Why dont we have a not so serious RP subforum that has only 1 restriction:Replies must contain at least one complete sentence.
This would be great for all of those members out there that dont have the time or the patience to sit and type such a long post so that it meets the standards of picky veteran RP'ers....
Umm...if you want to write one-liners then why not just do the RPing over PM or MSN? Having such a section (while I get your idea) would sort of seem like greenlighting the kind of posting that we're hoping to discourage with these regulations. If people aren't willing or able to put in the effort required for four lines of coherent English then RPing isn't really what they're cut out for in the first place. Four lines isn't much; it really isn't.
Poketrainer2004 said:
If more Experienced RPers would be less frustrated by the new persons mistakes then there would be more of them. I'm not saying dont punish the noob who has had plenty of time to learn the ropes, I'm just saying that you guys should think about it before you attribute RP's occasional downfall to noobs trying to join in on the fun...
But n00biness
is the problem here; don't confuse that with newbie RPing. N00bs don't know how to write an even close to understandable reaction to any given post, usually do irrelevant and random things, complain a lot and never listen; all of which lower the quality of an RP and reduce the incentive for experienced RPers to continue. I have nothing against newbies who honestly want to learn and improve - the kind who actually act on the advice they get - but the problem with n00bs is that they don't seem to have any intrest in posting in an even semi-literate manner and either ignore any advice they get or snap at the people giving it, which seriously makes me wonder what the heck they're doing in a writing section. Flat, emotionless, and illegible posts just aren't any fun for anyone but the writer. :\
Kuraudo Sutoraifu said:
Well look at all the people who have posted here. Over 10. Well enough for an RP, maybe even two. So why couldn't WE all start one? The only reason I don't try joining Asch's RP's anymore is because you either have to be caught up on Bleach or something but the only thing I am caught up on is Pokemon (obviously) and Naruto. That and he doesn't like me and I am not up to skill so he doesn't accept me. The sad thing is, his RPs are some of the best.
What? You're not the least bit hooked on Bleach? Shame on you. >O But yeah, the knowledge requirements for that one are pretty hefty...I didn't sign up for the same reason as I'm only at episode 90-something. Anyways, true about the sudden surge of activity. ^^ I'll probably start something within the next few days to see if as many people are actually willing to join an RP; just got to sort out these ideas in my head first. x3
Iruka said:
All you need to do is set a challenge for the RPGers, you never know i might attract a few people who want to learn how to RPG. It only needs about two-four people to run a successful RPG school, enough so that there is allways someone around to mark entrancess. Otherwise, like Asch has been given permission to do with mine, use the RPG to whip members into shape. I gave Dai permission to use my digimon RPG in order to better the skills of the people I accepted, that way, they are RPGing, but learning at the same time, y'know.
Ohh...nice idea. I might have to copy that...as far as my teaching skills will allow, anyways. xD
