I Feel a Change in Heart!

How good is the song???

  • 1/10

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 2/10

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 3/10

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 4/10

    Votes: 6 33.3%

  • 5/10

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 6/10

    Votes: 2 11.1%

  • 7/10

    Votes: 4 22.2%

  • 8/10

    Votes: 1 5.6%

  • 9/10

    Votes: 1 5.6%

  • 10/10

    Votes: 3 16.7%

  • 0/10

    Votes: 1 5.6%
  • Total voters
    18

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    Hiya!!!!! I made this song while makin my sig. I wanna know how you people like it. It might sound wierd, but your just readin it. Put some rytem to it!!!!!! Rate it out of 10.

    We live our life forever
    Not knowin' whats ahead
    But we know somthing's comin'
    Death's cold rotting hand

    He made a choice
    and came to me
    but then he saw you
    and then I was Free

    Hook:
    Why, why, why
    Death, why, why
    Why did you choose her
    and not I

    Chorus:
    Death had change in heart (Echoed again)
    Death had change in heart (Echoed again)

    Chorus

    She's now in heaven
    While im stuck here
    I dont deserve this
    Living is my fear

    Hook:

    Chorus:
    Chorus:

    I feel demented
    A demon in skin
    Im leavin' my life
    Death, you win

    Chorus:

    Hook:

    Now Im with her
    My life's love
    By my life is over
    Death you've won
    (echo) you've won
    (echo) you've won





    This is a rock song, BTW. LOLz
     
    Wow. I absolutely love this song. I am not being sarcastic this is good! I rate it 15/10. Dude you gotta make more songs like this...I love them.
     
    It's ok.... keep working though.
     
    You need more lyrical vocabulary sense. It is very good for an amateur song, but to really get it just a bit more "abstract", I reccomend a higher range of vocabulary and unique parts. For example, don't repeat the chorus a lot. DragonForce makes 7 minute songs and only repeat the chorus like 3 times. Also, put more words that express emotion. We get that you did not want a loss, but what in detail do you FEEL? Good songs have original similes that express feelings of an event, add more emotions and would be worthwhile as a love-rock song like "Duele el amor", except... more gringo XD.

    Over all, this song is a 7/10, re-touch some of those lyrics.
     
    This is a really cryptic song. But, the lyrics are very juvenile and overused. Repeating "death" and "why" isn't very lyrically and meaningfully deep. It almost seems like a wanna-be emo/punk rock song. It needs a little more time and dedication in my opinion, but it's definitely not zero. I just think you need to work at it a bit a re-post later on when you think it's really outstanding and expresses your feelings to the fullest.

    Since I feel that it is incomplete, I won't be rating it.
     
    Right, this may be a forum for polls, but this thread is way out of place. Something like this belongs in Poetry, which seems closest for song lyrics in my opinion.

    ~Moved
     
    Ok, I dont mind the ratind and all. But whats up with the tags. And yeah, im still fixin it.
    Made another song, BTw. called Take My Arm.
     
    4/10. The Lyrics, are a bit meh. It doesn't flow well, so that is meh. The Point of it is good. The Repeating Chorus, is to much. Well, at least you tried. You will get better with practice. My advice, use more emotional words, and maybe try stepping the voacbulary up a notch. You words are like a second graders words to know.
     
    Lostt said:
    4/10. The Lyrics, are a bit meh. It doesn't flow well, so that is meh. The Point of it is good. The Repeating Chorus, is to much. Well, at least you tried. You will get better with practice. My advice, use more emotional words, and maybe try stepping the voacbulary up a notch. You words are like a second graders words to know.
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    Um, Thanks? Well, yeah. I always go to Papa roach for words and advice and stuff. :)
     
    -1 for apparently love-centric theme.
    -1 for apparently emo-centric theme.
    -1 for the lyrics being English.
    -1 for short chorus.
    -1 for repetetive chorus.
    +1 for some good lines.
    +2 because I think this would sound good musically.

    So with a natural default of 5/10, the final result is 3/10.


    Edit: Accidentally gave 4/10 on the poll.
     
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    Cassino said:
    -1 for apparently love-centric theme.
    -1 for apparently emo-centric theme.
    -1 for the lyrics being English.
    -1 for short chorus.
    -1 for repetetive chorus.
    +1 for some good lines.
    +2 because I think this would sound good musically.

    So with a natural default of 5/10, the final result is 3/10.


    Edit: Accidentally gave 4/10 on the poll.
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    Ok? Thats a lot of stuff. And, yeah. Im, not emo myself, but i think emo:( (Wierd)
    And it bring English??? Im American! Or is it that your not? And I talk about love Often. :)
     
    nice job blood x u really should become a song maker/writer and make ur own band along with it :D nice job!
     
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