Poem Of The Week

[Visualization]

"Poker Joker"

We took a seat at the Poker Table,
quite cranky, not even stable.
He took the cards and dealt them out,
I have a trick, it'll work no doubt.

I recieved my cards,
slid the Joker up my sleeve,
with a mischievous grin on my face.
My eyes were drawn to my array of Jokers, only a King in the way.

I bet a plenty, I know i'll win,
I better get a tin to store my cash in.
I layed my King in the pile,
this trick will be worth while.

I retrieved my Joker from my shirt,
getting ready my winning smile.
I layed out my row of Jokers,
they flung all their cash towards me!

 

[Abnegation]

"Poker Joker"

We took a seat at the Poker Table,
quite cranky, not even stable.
He took the cards and dealt them out,
I have a trick, it'll work no doubt.

I recieved my cards,
slid the Joker up my sleeve,
with a mischievous grin on my face.
My eyes were drawn to my array of Jokers, only a King in the way.

I bet a plenty, I know i'll win,
I better get a tin to store my cash in.
I layed my King in the pile,
this trick will be worth while.

I retrieved my Joker from my shirt,
getting ready my winning smile.
I layed out my row of Jokers,
they flung all their cash towards me!

You know the theme is "Manipulation" right?
Not following this week's theme counts as a no entry because that defeats the purpose of the competition. I spoke to the one who chose this weeks's theme and he agree's it doesn't fit with it. You could argue that maybe, "It's almost about manipulating a win", but it's too sparse, you need to show more of the theme.
I'm sorry but it just doesn't fit so in the judging stage, it will lose a lot of credibility due to those reasons.

 

[Sackferth]

You know the theme is "Manipulation" right?
Not following this week's theme counts as a no entry because that defeats the purpose of the competition. I spoke to the one who chose this weeks's theme and he agree's it doesn't fit with it. You could argue that maybe, "It's almost about manipulating a win", but it's too sparse, you need to show more of the theme.
I'm sorry but it just doesn't fit so in the judging stage, it will lose a lot of credibility due to those reasons.

Um, I know I'm a nobody over here in poetry, but I see a manipulation of the cards in the trick, not just manipulating the situation into a guaranteed win. Without control of the cards, there is no win.

 

[Abnegation]

Um, I know I'm a nobody over here in poetry, but I see a manipulation of the cards in the trick, not just manipulating the situation into a guaranteed win. Without control of the cards, there is no win.

Still not a powerfull theme. I'm not disqualifying the poem, I'm aware of what is in it. I just say to keep the themes in your poems stronger due to fear of disqualification if it does not meet the theme requirements.

 

[Sackferth]

Still not a powerfull theme. I'm not disqualifying the poem, I'm aware of what is in it. I just say to keep the themes in your poems stronger due to fear of disqualification if it does not meet the theme requirements.

Alrighty, I was just making sure I wasn't looking at it completely out of wack...

I'm trying to get an entry done for this week; finding the time to write is one of the obstacles though.

 

[Visualization]

Okay, I will enter another fitting Poem soon. And this post will be the poem once edited!

 

[Klippy]

Manipulation is a mod at PC
He enjoys peanuts and jelly
When Ireland lost to France,
Manipulation did a dance

We're talking on MSN right now
About a jerk, a noob and a cow
This poem is about Manipulation
Don't try to disqualify it, Abnegation

This poem is ironic genius
It has nothing to do with zebras
Manipulation lives in England
Nothing witty rhymes with England

Give me the emblem so I can stop writing poems
In five minutes, then posting them

:>

 

[aurevesque]

I'll try.
Manipulation
Her gaze entranced him.
Made him want her even more.
So what could he say when she beckoned to him?
So he followed, her trail of floral perfume leading him on.
She was beautiful, as lovely as the moon.
And seemed as distant as one too.
No one could have her,
Because they could never get close
Without losing something precious.
She was "persuasive"
Using what she had.
He would soon learn what others had learned before
As he stared transfixed in her direction
Her name was Manipulation
And there was a reason why.
There was danger in those eyes
And it danced furiously as she "convinced" others
With her deadly glamour.

 

[Logan]

Okay, so, Gavin asked Vendak to choose a winner. Then Vendak and me discussed the winner, we came across someone and and stuff. Then, Vendak asked me to make the post, not sure why his circumstances made this happen. But idk, anyway that's the reason why I'm posting this.

Potw #10 Winner

Klippy! With his poem "Un-named".

Spoiler:

Spoiler:

Manipulation is a mod at PC
He enjoys peanuts and jelly
When Ireland lost to France,
Manipulation did a dance

We're talking on MSN right now
About a jerk, a noob and a cow
This poem is about Manipulation
Don't try to disqualify it, Abnegation

This poem is ironic genius
It has nothing to do with zebras
Manipulation lives in England
Nothing witty rhymes with England

Give me the emblem so I can stop writing poems
In five minutes, then posting them

He will join Abnegation, Vendak & S3 on the panel this week as well as choose the theme for next week, winning also grants him the POTW emblem. Well done, and thank you for your entries.

 

[Abnegation]

Congratulations to Klippy. As soon as possible, if you wish to choose a theme, then PM either myself or Vendak, or get in contact with either and I will open the next week's competition. Sorry this one was a bit late, we all seemed to be quite busy, and thanks for the entries once again.

 

[Rogue planet]

i know its kinda dumb :( my first poem ever

K, thanks for letting me know. But it doesn't matter if it's the best poem in the world, it's totally irrelevant to this thread.

Sorry for the late post, I've been away from PC and I guess nobody else wanted to do it?

(ignoring the CSS)
The theme this week is 'Lying' and the deadline is the 6th of December. Gogogo.

Also, (might seem obvious, but I'm saying it anyway) some protips: Use the rhyming dictionary, use a thesaurus, use the spelling & grammar check, use some literary devices (they don't even need to be complicated, a simple simile or metaphor can help improve your poem) and most importantly, make sure your poetry comes from your heart!

 

[Abnegation]

I've been absent for three weeks and so POTW was put on hiatus as such. So we're going to dive right into it again, starting up with a nice general theme. Details below.

Announcement

POTW #11

Theme: Anything

Entries in by: December the 27th

Theme Details: Your poem may hold any theme

Hosts: Vendak & Come Clarity

 

[Apple Juice]

"A Tree, A Home"

Once upon a very long time
There lived a very huge tree
It had roots upon roots
For many wondering eyes to see
It's leaves were dark green
A deep, attractive color
With it's strong brown trunk
And it's many multi-colored seeds for one another

Once upon a very long time
A tree lived inside a forest
The tree was biggest among the others
It's lived for a thousand years
Very lonely besides wondering birds
But then I came along
Hungry tattered and alone
I saw the tree
Its branches flown
To one side
And I found my home away from home

So once upon a time
It shouldn't be that long
I found a tree
And now it's my home

Might as well. (:

 

[Esper]

Guess I'll throw my hat in the ring again.

"The Theatre of Forgotten People"

streetlamp rain falls on my smokey shouldered overcoat
as I tell you about the theatre of forgotten people

Summerless skies sound the clap of thunder
the gloomy mood of clover grows underfoot

soot-black honey conceals the shadows of our passage
backstage - clothing us in shapeless masks and costumes

curtains draw to the silence of the crowd
crab-like, clown-like, Diva takes her cue

ghostly notes echo through the dust-sprinkled air
moved by her voiceless song and babushka eyes

already made brittle under their high-pressure gaze
unwitting performer, you Galatea, statuesque, crack
​

 

[Ayselipera]

"This Balloon"​

This balloon is renowned
it has been all over town.
From the prison to the people
the priest had seen it in the steeple.​

Past the priest and to the farm
animals viewed it from the barn.
Over hills, into the valley
flying by the concourse rally.​

Workers in the factory saw it rising high
the children in the school, waved to it goodbye.
Crack the shutters and watch it go
like a serene river this balloon surely flows.​

Above the brook and through the trees
to a distant island surrounded by sea,
this balloon is my own.
My balloon has finally found its home.​

 

[Rogue planet]

After Come Clarity & myself have read each poem, we decided that "The Theatre of Forgotten People" by Scarf was the best out of the three. Well done to Scarf, and a huge thank you to all three of you for participating.

Announcement

POTW #12
Hosts: Come Clarity & Vendak

Theme: Anything you wish.

Entries in by: The 5th of January

If you have any questions, suggestions etc. Feel free to send a PM to either myself or Come Clarity.
Good luck!

 

[Esper]

I'm glad you folks don't mind weird stuff in poetry :3

 

[Abnegation]

I would also like to thank you for your entries, and Scarf your poetry is always a joy to read and this week's entry was no exception. I was happy with the entries this week so well done! I should update the main post now I think, I'm a little behind ever since my laptop broke.

 

[Rolling Pichu]

Out of curiosity, what is the reason haikus are not allowed in this poetry contest?

I couldn't find an excuse to underestimate such a form, especially with them being a particularly complicated one due to their length. They're challenging, but they can really end up as beautiful pieces and by my thinking, perfectly fitting for a contest like this.

I personally don't plan on writing any for the contest, but I'd like to know why exactly they don't qualify to you.

 

[Abnegation]

Out of curiosity, what is the reason haikus are not allowed in this poetry contest?

I couldn't find an excuse to underestimate such a form, especially with them being a particularly complicated one due to their length. They're challenging, but they can really end up as beautiful pieces and by my thinking, perfectly fitting for a contest like this.

I personally don't plan on writing any for the contest, but I'd like to know why exactly they don't qualify to you.

Hmm, I'm going to say my initial opininion was due to thier length, and you're right there are challenging aspects so as to meet the meter rule, and making them work with the little amount of lines.
However, I did start the competition knowing there would be some snappy entries maybe not encoperating a whole lot of time to have been completed, I assumed that allowing Haiku's to be entered, they would start to become some what of a popular style in POTW due to thier length as opposed to entries which have been much more structured and very difficult to complete such as a sestina. I had hoped to see longer entries because it gives a lot more for the judges to in fact, judge where as if a haiku had been entered it might not have hit upon the theme as well.

I guess that rule is somewhat redundant, so I'm going to allow them to be entered, namely as it may increase the number of entries, as well as the hope that some haiku's may surpass my expectations. I suppose you could call it a personal prefferance when judging, but I think I had been some what short sighted when writing the rule. So it will be taken out, thank you for raising the issue~