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Okay, then, up goes another chapter... part 2 of the epic battle.
I actually went 'x.x' when I saw your post. I thought "oh no, not another chapter to review today..."XD Tomorrow, okay? I'm strained....

HUGE mistake there, and I'm glad you caught it before I posted Chapter 18. Why? You'll see. Fortunately I was able to manipulate things a little bit thanks to Cynthia's awesomeness.
^.^ That's what reviewers are for. (actually, that's what beta-readers are for, but nevermind...)

On other matters, yes, it does say "Queen Shirona," as she would love to be called. Have you noticed that Erika always calls Cynthia "Queen Cynthia"? If you haven't, it's a good time to point that out right now.
Oh, have you noticed that Erica....no, I haven't noticed that, actually.

The epilogue has been written, so this one is as good as done. I've got to keep on this writing kick and start the fifth one as soon as possible. It'll be really clear from the epilogue where the series is going.
^.^ I'm happy about that. Be ready for Chapter 2 of my fic during the next days/weekend.
 
I actually went 'x.x' when I saw your post. I thought "oh no, not another chapter to review today..."XD Tomorrow, okay? I'm strained....

I understand. Don't worry, I'll be ready for your review then, and then post the all-important Chapter 19. The title of it is a song from Star Wars Episode I, so you know it has to be something special.

Oh, and I can't wait to see Cynthia pop up in your fic. Will my Cynthia have an effect on the way you wrote yours? That'll be so interesting to see.
 
^^ Okay then. I have scipped over chapter 18, and I have to say, I started to 'hate' it when I saw the title and that only continued. >>;;;;;
(DON'T KILL LIZA&WILL PLEASE!!! XD)
I have seen Star Wars Episode one, but the chance that I know the title is slim.

Probably not. ^^;;; I have my own image of Cynthia and that one won't be destroyed so easily. BTW, her first appearance will be in Chapter two. Together with Lucian, too.
I rather think the way you described Will& Sabrina influences my story quite strongly. Actually, that's a bit sad, I hoped I could make them a bit different, but well, maybe I manage that over the sequel...lots of backstory for Will there, btw. ^^
 
Keep in mind, I like Cynthia. Or more accurately, I love Cynthia. So my intention isn't just to make her some supervillain with no feelings. That's why I include all her love scenes with Lucian... she really cares for him. And as you may have read, he really cares for her. But she is a little power-hungry too, and that hunger for power could lead to something bad happening to someone... all that, coming up (possibly) tomorrow.

BTW, Alakazam, I'll read your next chapter pretty soon.
 
Dear CPF, did you wait for me or why are you online now? XD Nah, just kidding. It's actually a first for me to go here before checking all the other forums...today with reason, of course.
Okay, will not longer let you and me wait and start the next review.
Did I mention that my longest review was 18 pages in word? XD
I still don't like the chapter title. >> Too pessimistic.
Just as Lucario was about to crash into Liza, Medicham dived and tripped the Dark-type Pokémon, causing it to fall just short of nailing Liza.
*foxyay*
"I taught it all Psychic moves," Will muttered. "What a mistake."
*coughs and hides her first Alakazam and her first Espeon* Common mistake, mister. 0=) (Though my first espeon was the complete opposite, knowing Bite, Shadow Ball....)
"I give Sabrina credit for putting up with a man as stupid as you," Liza replied
LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL You don't know how much I laughed when I first read this....omg....*shakes head* (Not to mention that Zammy liked it as well >>)
He just wanted to keep himself busy while he figured Cynthia was crushing her opponents.
It almost sounds as if Lucian's stronger than her...but he isn't, is he?
At that moment, Jasmine's Steelix came rushing over towards the balls of energy
Deus ex machine. 0=)
"Curse that thing!" Karen cried. "I would have won if I would have had the chance to keep going!"
I'm on your side, but this is too optimistic, Karen. >>;;;
but those two can't do much without their trainers, can they?"
Theoretically, they can. Pokemon often work without trainers. How would wild Pokemon survive otherwise?
"Cynthia, you almost killed us!" Lance cried.
'So what?' (imagining what she would answer) >>;;;
He then used his secret power - breathing fire out of his mouth.
*giggles* It has nothing to do with my breath....(okay, few will get this joke...)
BTW....this seriously makes me think we're in X-Men now....all these super powers....
"That's impossible!" Lorelei cried. "Steelix is strong against psychic and dark powers!"

"I'm just that good," Cynthia replied.
x.x Did you ever ask if you overpowered her? No? Well, you did. XD
"That really helped," Liza said sarcastically.

"Hey, at least he did something," Will replied.
Yeah, getting himself knocked out. >>;;;;
Hm, at least this is where our Wills are different. Mine is a better trainer, I suppose. ^^;;;;
"Did I ever say Lucario was a normal Pokémon?" Lucian replied. "He's belonged to Cynthia... she's had a strange effect on him."
^.~
"Now come on Lucian, we didn't actually mean you could kill us," he said.
Idiot. >.< You thought Lucian would play nice, eh?
"Oh, for once I wish I was battling Cynthia, not you!"

"Oh, trust me, you don't wish that," Lucian replied.
Agreed there. Cynthia is...mad. o,o

Won't quote the whole dialogue of Will& Lucian there, but, whoa....o,o That sure is a weird love. But impressive. I mean...Lucian's the driving force behind, but at the same time, Cynthia's just as much in power as he is, he was just intelligent enough to let her...I'm actually biting my tongue to say this, but EVIL Lucian is...fascinating. o,o I suppose character-wise, he beats my Lucian. ^^;;;;;;
Then everything on Will and Liza's side of the room went black.
I've died a thousand deaths during the running of the whole story....>>;;;;
But right at that moment, she was joined by an unwelcome visitor.

"Sorry I'm late!"
*headdesk* Nice introduction, Giselle. I knew it would be you without reading the next sentences.
But for once I'm happy you're here.
"Doesn't it hurt you to see me wearing this crown?"
Judging from Cynthia's fashion style and Giselle's character...yes.
The two female league champions pushed their balls of dark energy at each other, and the ultimate clash was on.
*bites tongue before she can scream 'b*tch fight'*
 
All right, I'm glad you like it. The highlight of this chapter was writing about Lucian's love for Cynthia. I was trying to explain why he lets her have the power, and basically why she even lets him hang around. She really loves him, and I hope her humanity isn't lost in her evilness.

Now for the most important chapter in the whole story... Chapter 19.
 
^.^ Well, I don't want to spoil it, but with thinking about why and how Cynthia loves, you've come quite close to my story, too. (man, either Zammy gets onlien today or I'll post that thing without beta-reading. >>)

I'll read the chapter once it's up. ff. net is quite slow again today. >>

I've thought about who could be the one who dies (if there's anyone who does), but so far, I haven't really found an answer. It can't be anyone who appears in the epilogue, and that are quite a few persons. The only ones I can't spot so far are Karen and Lucian....hm...

I'm surprised I never asked this....do you actually like my reviews? ^^;;;; I try to put effort in them, but since I have my own style of reviewing, I assume not everyone likes it....
 
No, I love your reviews. I write each chapter just hoping to see how you're going to review them. Seriously, if you didn't review, I wouldn't want to write as much. So please, please keep reviewing!

Oh, and very important: you must remember that this story occurs "half-past" the epilogue. The Pokemon League tournament actually occurred before this story. The only thing that occurred during/after this story was Roxette's birth.
 
*blush* Really? Thank you so much! ^.^
Now I've got a (another) reason to review Chapter 19 today.

@.@ Goodness, then I give up trying to figure out who might die.

*switches over to chapter*
Hm, I like the title, actually. Duel of the Fates sounds cool.
right away it was clear that Giselle's power was more than enough to stand up against Cynthia.
*foxyay*....ehm, wait, why am I cheering for Giselle? Argh, when given the alternatives....
"I'm glad the loser won't be me."
Great quote. Even coming from Cynthia. *nods*
Lucian saw fingers over his eyes. Who could possibly be putting their hands around his eyes like this?

"Peek-a-boo!" Liza shouted.
lol Liza's fun. ^^ I like that tactic. It's funny and unorthodox. XD
Sure enough, one of them ended up hitting Will, and this stopped him from teleporting.
I guess stromtrooper effect was out. Ouch. >.<
Liza shrieked as he saw blood running down Will's cheeks, as the punches began to open up wounds on Will's head.
;.; He's already scarred, so...oh, wait, my mistake, is my fic. XD
Slowly but surely, Cynthia's ball of dark energy began to overpower Giselle's.
Nooo....;.;
"Oh, hi, Erika," Cynthia said. "As you can tell, I'm having a bit of a problem with some people here."

"I understand, Queen Cynthia," Erika replied, seemingly not caring at all. "My, these are nice flowers."
Anyone tell me what kind of drugs Erica is on?!?!?!? Walking right into the battle and the only thing she comments on are the flowers?!?!? x.x
"Stop it!" Liza cried, rushing over to Lucario, trying to pull it away from beating Will to a pulp.

"Keep it up!" Lucian shouted,
I agree with Liza....STOP IT!!!
Within seconds Will could not take it anymore and dropped to the ground, knocked out cold.
;.; Poor Will. *shoves Zammy away who is about to say somethign different*
"It's too bad that Sabrina didn't show up to get beaten too."
>> Luckily, she isn't. You know, Sabrina was actually lucky that Cynthia kicked her in the face, and not the stomach...for she might have lost the baby then. ;.;
Hm, a final battle without Sabrina is weird, though. XD
"Were you planning on marrying that boy?" Cynthia questioned.

"Absolutely!" Giselle said. "In a couple years, maybe."

"Such a shame," Cynthia replied. "Because there's going to be a funeral for you and your boyfriend while I'm getting married to Lucian."
I see the hint. ^^ And her and Lucian getting married, too? Hm....
"What are you doing, yoga?" Giselle shouted at Erika. "Either help me, or help your queen, but don't just stand there!"
Oo Erica has dark powers...could this be a clue? (At least she doesn't seem to be high....)
"This is the end," Cynthia stated.
Noooo...><
However, the damage was done. The Victreebels had released Stun Spore into the air, and while Cynthia was continuing to battle Giselle, she was paralyzed by the Stun Spore. Giselle's dark energy now overtook Cynthia's, who had to release all of her power, finding herself completely immobile.
I admit, I'm good at guessing plot ideas, but THIS never came to my mind. Whoa....really good idea then. Erica's a clever girl, really. o,o
But Giselle refused to crush Cynthia with her dark energy, feeling too scared to kill another person.
I would too...I like Cynthia. ;.; Not your Cynthia but Cynthia in general. ^^
"Janine?" Erika asked. "How did you get here?"
Janine, the dea ex machine. XD
"Just promise me you'll spare my Lucian, that's all I ask," she cried.
Whoa, she really, really loves him. *cries*
A few seconds later, Lucian came running into the room. "My Cynthia!" he cried. "What have you done to her?"
I suppose he rushed out of the battle with Liza then. ^^
"Please, I beg you," Lucian said. "Allow me to be jailed with her… she doesn't deserve to be alone."
Awwwww....he loves her, too. ^.^
Liza went along with them to check in on the badly injured Will.
;.; Surprisingly, though, I somehow knew he would up in hospital (together with Sabrina again 0=) )
"Giselle? Oh, why did it have to be her! I'll hear about this for years!" Silver whined.
*sighs* Not only you, Silver, not only you...
"Janine… she's always in the right place at the right time," Jasmine commented.
Dea ex machine, like I said.
Two trainers did not wake up right away.
>.< Why did I know that it would be Will?
"I know, I look awful," Will commented. "I wish I could have helped it."

"You look more handsome than ever," Sabrina replied.
*giggles* Beneath his mask, no one will see it.
"By the way, Will, I was just wondering… what were you planning on naming our baby… if it is a girl?" Sabrina asked.
I have a feeling she knows that it's going to be a girl.
"Roxette," Sabrina replied. "I like it."
*g* I'll call probably call her Roxy all the time. Shorter and cuter.
"This land is not to be ruled by royalty," Goodshow replied.
Agreed. ^^
Because of this, Giselle's ego grew a little larger, but so did her heart,
*rolls eyes + yay* XD
This included Janine, who was somewhat disappointed she did not get to kill Cynthia, but nevertheless satisfied that yet another foe of hers was defeated.
Hopefully forever *pokes dark energy balls*.
Worst of all for Cynthia was the cold stone wall separating her from Lucian. She longed day and night to be with him, to hear his voice, to touch his skin, but she could not. She found herself totally lonely, powerless, helpless and in the dark. She could do nothing more but put her hands over her face and cry.
Omg...actually, does it have to be such a hard fate for her? ;.; I mean, she loves Lucian, she really does....that's so cruel....><

Finished. ^^
 
So no one died, I just threw that in there to throw you off. Maybe next story someone important will die, in this case all we lost were three Sinnoh Elite and a bunch of police officers and about 100 people in the Celadon Department Store (that's all!). Poor, poor Cynthia, I feel so bad for her ending up like this, but remember: another story's coming up. If she's not dead, then obviously she has a chance at returning... and when she does return, I think you'll have a soft spot for her again.

Originally she was going to get poisoned, put to sleep and possibly cut by Janine, but I decided she was too beautiful to have those things occur to her. Her crying in jail while thinking about Lucian is just so cute... see, it's possible to love a villain, after all. She really loves him, and next story you'll see how much.

And yes, Liza and Will survived. It's a big chapter for both of them in the epilogue... we know Will's becoming a father, what big thing is happening for Liza? You'll see in the epilogue, which is pretty much a bridge to story #5. I'll start writing it probably on Monday. The epilogue will be posted tomorrow.
 
...*does not want to comment*....XD
Okay, okay, enough people that died. though I did not care in the least about it
Yeah, another story, another chance for her. 0=) Although, if she gets another chance...hell on earth, I suppose. She won't be brought down again that 'easily' again, so on the one hand, I don't want her to suffer so much, on the other, her being free is quite dangerous for the other characters. Quite dangerous.
XD Good, I'm suddenly reminded of Snowwhite (sp?), or Sleeping Beauty....Cynthia kinda fits that role. I'm not sure if poisened or put to sleep would have been a worse fate. At least she could be together with Lucian (in death...how romantic...).
I never said it's impossible to love a villain (or did I?). Though....since she threated my Sabrina so bad....I feel not so well when thinking nicely about her.
Hm, so Roxy will be born in the epilogue, nice. 0=) Wouldn't have minded if there were some chapters inbetween (pregnant Sabrina is fun to write about...see Discovering), but I'll see how/if/whatever I'll like it. And how Roxy's character will be like. If baby's have a character. *g*
Something big for Liza? hm....hmn....hm.....her brother returning? Getting a boyfriend? Getting into Elite? I don't know, I'll have to see. Tomorrow. ^^
 
Liza's already in the Hoenn Elite, if you'll recall the last story's epilogue. She replaced outgoing Drake, who retired. So it's something else...

And Cynthia being free will be... well, interesting. That's if she gets free, right? And boy will it be interesting when if she does. I'll give you some hints about story #5: it's going to focus more on a land I haven't paid much attention to. It's going to have a title very similar to one of the Lord of the Rings books. And one thing you suggested is going to happen... wait and see what it is!
 
^ Kanto Elite Four, I meant. When you recall how much time she spends with Sabrina & Will in Kanto, she can go for Elite there, too, I suppose...

*glances at crossed out word* .....no, I won't say anything. I want to see Cynthia free and yet I don't
For a second I wanted to scream 'Orre', but then I was reminded that there are a whole bunch of lands now...what's the ranger's land called again, Almia? And that mysterious pokemon world in PMD....omg, too many to guess. x.x
o,o.....*lightbulb* Return of the Queen King? (Thank God I watched at least the movies) Oh no~~~......
I'll go with both. XD Liza is fifteen, she's old enough for a boyfriend. *ggg* Question is...who? 0=)
 
Return of the Queen

I think you're onto something there...

Anyway, sorry that you won't get to see Sabrina's baby today, or anything else, because fanfiction.net is experiencing a "technical glitch" that won't let me log on. So that epilogue won't be up until ff.net gets their act together.
 
Yeah, onto straciatella flavoured ice cream...*coughs*

*glares* I've stayed up for three hours (though PC logged me out) and then...*sighs* Well, okay, at least two other fics got updated today. And for me, ff. net is working, though I'm no member, so that doesn't say anything...

Edit: I guess since we both are a bit annoyed, I might cheer you up with saying that I'll post chapter two now after finishing this post.
 
Oh, all right! I can't wait to read it... please tell me my sweet Cynthia appears...

I'm pretty excited about getting to write the beginning of the new story tomorrow... I've already got so many ideas for it... and the land it's going to focus on isn't one of those you guessed, but it's still one I've ignored for the most part.
 
XD I noticed. (You were already there when I posted...but remember, it takes some time to get the breaks between the chapters and any italic words...)

^^ Beginnings of new storys and finals always are easy to write and I mostly finish them in one 'try', as that happened with most of my stories. When that happens, I tend to write three or more pages at once....

Hm...then there's only Hoenn & Sinnoh left, I suppose. Johto had its chapters... Or a land I do not know. XD
 
Wow, I finally heard Cynthia's English voice for the first time, and it is absolutely terrible. She's too... nice! Actually that's not it, she sounds too immature. Her voice needs to be deeper, sounding more like the 25-or-so year-old she is. I'll make sure to block that out when thinking of her... I usually imagine her with a voice like Lorelei/Prima. Compare that to Sabrina's English voice, which was perfect.

Oh, yes, and it's one of those two, Sinnoh or Hoenn. I'll have some fun with some gym leaders who I haven't touched yet.
 
I just heard Cynthia's English voice for the first time, too (*kisses youtube*), and I have to say it's better then the German one. XD (Tells you a lot about the German one, eh?) Of course, my interpretation of Cynthia is perfectly nailed there, because I think of her having a light, young and nice voice, but remember...Cynthia is one of my favourite characters in the NICE department. I don't like seeing her evil. ><

If I had to choose...Sinnoh. The gym leaders there are cooler. ^^
 
Well, it looks like another day without being able to post the epilogue. Stupid ff.net is really screwed up. I don't know what's wrong with it, but it's about time they get it fixed.

I don't mind her voice sounding nice, the problem is that it's too high. She needs to sound a little more mature, after all, she is the champion, not some random over-energetic trainer. But I don't think there's been anyone who's sounded good on the show since they changed the voice actors a few years back.

Meanwhile, the new story is 10 pages in and (hopefully) looking good!
 
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