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[SWC 2024] The Great Race

Here is my entry to PC GT's SWC 2024, The Great Race, for you to read. I fixed one grammar/typo issue that bobandbill pointed out in his judge's comments, so that the reading experience is enhanced for everyone else.

Spoiler:
 
I violently threw up, cried, laughed, screamed, was glad it was over and was sad it ended when I read this.

But most importantly, I cheered that fucker on the whole time.
 
Alright, so I went and reread this entry after checking the other judges's comments (I turned in my comments beforehand). So I actually read this entry twice first before writing that inital comment, and my mistake was focusing too much on "what was said" in the narrative instead of thinking what you were aiming for in this piece. Also binging 15 entries made my brain mushed somewhere lol.

Having another reread, I do agree with GP over that single-mindess and single-celled approach towards the race well. I think I'm reminded of another entry (can't remember if yours or someone else's) a few years back with a similar approach but in an office setting. GP's mention of a few places that got a bit murky is probably where I got a bit confused too. Even then, it still doesn't change the fact my first reaction after finishing "damn that's crazy"!
 
I don't know what I was expecting when I started reading this but it was not... well...

[*points to all of this*]

That makes it only more hilarious tho. And it fits so well tonally with the prompt of competition.

Every one of our waking hours was spent training ceaselessly in the slums we would call home,

I mean, what kind of "intelligent designer" place a waste disposal area next to the fun theme park?
 
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