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The attak of the great storm Part#1

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Kishijoten

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    It was a beautiful day in the woods. Pokemons are strolling across with their trainers. ''ahh... what a beaitiful day,'' said Lady Daisy with her Happiny near by. ''Ha ha Happiny!,'' said Happiny in a great mood. While they were walking in the woods a few rain drops drip on Lady Daisy. ''oh,'' said Lady Dasiy ''raindrops well hopefully it won't rain too much, drizzles I won't mind,''. As they were walking for quit awhile buzzing combees were rushing to their hives and pokemon trainers were walking back home. A while later it began to pour thunder rumbled through and lighting flashed with anger as if the world did a bad deed. ''Oh no!,'' Lady Dasiy cried ''Happiny return,''. The wind blew dothly as poor Lady Daisy hurried through the woods. A few minutes later lighting struck a few trees and that had burned them. ''Ahhh!,'' cried Lady Daisy ''Fire is in the woods oh dear i better hur...,'' But before she could finish her sentence thunder grumbled in great anger and lighting nearly strucked her. Her feet got shocked and she was wailing through the river near by. ''Ahhhhh.....,'' cried Lady Daisy but since nobody was there for all she could do was cry for help. ''Ahhhhh,'' cried Lady Daisy again as she was holding a big gray bolder. She settled down took a deep breath and hope it'll be okay. A moment later.....KABOOM! lighting shatterd the boulder into millions of peices and there Lady Daisy was sent drifted away... A moment later she saw a lot of bolders and trees but she wouldn't risk the cause again to hold onto one. Lady dasiy was drifting faster and faster she looked and saw a waterfall near by. She had no choice but to grab onto a bolder and make a quick move, but her life might be a risk. Soon she saw a bolder she thought for a moment quickly reached for the large bolder and rested on it. The scent was so sweet like a Bayleef was using sweet scent. ''Ah,'' Lady Daisy said ''This scent is so sweet and...,'' she was about to finish it but then when she was about to sit on it, The bolder shattered into ashes without a lighting strucking it. ''AHH!,'' cried Lady Daisy as she drifted toward the waterfall once again. What will happen to her no knows but her life might be a wish of miracle.
     
    The attak of the great storm Part #2

    As Lady Dasiy was drifting out about she thought she was going to die because of the storm. ''Ahhhhh,'' cried Lady Dasiy in horror. A black shadow appeared right before her eyes she was so scared she nearly fainted. ''You are here because of what you had done,'' said the voice as Lady Dasiy looked around. ''What did...did i do?,'' Lady Dasiy asked scarly. The voice had no intention of replying back to her instead a gust of wind blew her down through the waterfall as if she was the bad luck person. ''NOoooooooo,'' cried Lady Daisy as she falled right down to a small pond. She was puzzled ''What? a swamp but..but i though i was in pokemon Evergreen,'' said Lady Daisy as puzzled as yet. She wandered in the swamp for hours still nothing appeared in her path nothing but howling winds that frieghted her to death. ''Again Miss,'' said the voice ''Your natural way won't get you out of here miracles only happen to special one but a favor must be done with a remainig of no help,''. Lady Daisy was bittered and her tongue twisted and she was in a unown swamp for it must of not been discovered for thousands of years.Soon it was night the anger of the strom seems calm but yet still heavy rain. Poor Lady Dasiy was so lonly and cold no warmth but only colness surrounded her. ''Ni Nine,'' Said a voice again but this time it was a gentle greeting. A young Ninetales had walked her way up to Lady Daisy and Ninetales gave a gentle whistle smile. ''Hello there sweetie,'' Said Lady Daisy. ''Nine ni nine,'' Replied NInetales in a gentle way. Ninetales warmth soothed Lady Daisy to sleep and a sheer of wind blew through the night gentle as that the lovly Ninetales have gave her a great hope.
     
    Umm, this is extremely short and lacking of detail. You need to really sit down and put more effort into this. Right now it seems like you're writing the chapters in less than fifteen minutes and posting them right away. You should take a look around the forum and use the format preferred by authors here, as well as seeing how they use detail in their stories and emulate it.
     
    You can't even make sure that the name of your main character is spelled correctly through the entire "chapter".

    I see no change from your previously closed fanfiction. Actually read a few of the stickied guides running through this section. Reading the rules would be a wonderful place to start, in my not-so-humble opinion. Learn grammar, use spell-check, read over your chapters before posting.

    Just...try harder. :/

    And next time, make sure that all the words in your title are spelled right as well.
     
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