Recent content by Aiya Quackform

When they force their own personal opinions on your story, or attack the specific genre without reason.

*snicker* It wasn't old when I asked for the review. I thought about that, but "stink" conveys the idea of something repulsive, "smell" does not. I wanted to quickly show her contempt for destruction and death. I've read it to several people who really know their grammar. No one said anything...

Hey, all. I was wondering if any of you would be so kind as to drop me a couple of reviews at fictionpress: https://www.fictionpress.com/~aiyaquackform I haven't gotten any there, and it's starting to depress me. :/ Anyway, they're both short, "Sins & Scars" in particular, (it's less than 250...

Perhaps I did overstate my opinion. There are certainly times when you'd want to use "Yeah, sure," but you also want to make sure that words give some sort of tone without adverbs.

I noted this a little before, but here's my full thoughts on this: No offense to whoever wrote this, but this is totally wrong! "Said" is a lovely invisible verb that does not distract from flow. If you're constantly using "shouted," "yelled," "cooed," "screeched," "commented" and the like, not...

Like I said, it can be difficult to learn where to show and where to tell. Basically, ask yourself, will my reader want to read this? You could a variation of this lovely: "Mariah had recieved her first Pokemon today. A Treecko from Professor Elm." Let's see, how can I put this delicately...

Review of Chapter 1 of Hoenn Mirror World Oh, man, Nekomajo, I am so sorry how long this has taken! I haven't even read it all yet! But, here's some overall opinions on chapter 1 one of Hoenn Mirror World. I love the originality! Originality scores big with me, since it's so rare nowadays. I...

Review of Chapter 1 of Hoenn Mirror World Oh, man, Nekomajo, I am so sorry for how long this has taken! I haven't even read it all yet! But, here's some overall opinions on chapter 1 of Hoenn Mirror World. I love the originality! Originality scores big with me, since it's so rare nowadays. I...

I have a one-shot that is also something of a preview to a final fantasy fic I'm writing. I'd really appreciate some feedback! It's called "Of Miasma and Myrrh." https://www.pokecommunity.com/showthread.php?t=36756

This is currently a one-shot based on Final Fantasy: Crystal Chronicles. Enjoy! Of Miasma and Myrrh Dear Stanzi, In its quest for a miasma-free world, Shella educates us students extensively not only about the miasma itself, but about the monsters that thrive in it. I am finding it all...

Okay, I'll get it done in a few days.

I'll have a bit of free time, so I'll take on a review. Just one for now, please. Nothing over five chapters long, I love reviewing one-shots. Go ahead and post your request here, it's first come first serve.

I'd like to be a reviewer, but right now I'm really busy. I'm also about to judge a competition at another forum. I'll probably start taking requests within a couple weeks. (I know I don't do much reviewing here, but I'm really not bad at it when I sit myself down and actually do it.)

Frosty, I'll do beta reading for you if you want.

I've seen in several fan fics moves invented by the author, and not seen in the anime or games. Sometimes they're accepted as wonderfully creative, and other times bogus. What is your opinion of original moves? Are there conditions? In a couple fics I've seen original moves that are used by...