NO I found it!
Edit: I'm not promoting my fan fictions, rather I'd like to see your opinion as an advanced writer.
http://kireijewel.livejournal.com/2219.html
It might not be your genre (PG-13, Shonen and Magical girls), please tell me your thoughts about it.
Yes, I know it's not good and I don't wanna make excuses, even my mother language is not English and my writing skills are at the beginning level! But please just be honest with your opinion. ;).
Edit: I'm not promoting my fan fictions, rather I'd like to see your opinion as an advanced writer.
http://kireijewel.livejournal.com/2219.html
It might not be your genre (PG-13, Shonen and Magical girls), please tell me your thoughts about it.
Yes, I know it's not good and I don't wanna make excuses, even my mother language is not English and my writing skills are at the beginning level! But please just be honest with your opinion. ;).