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[Pokémon] Shattered [M]

Caliban

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ATTENTION! ATTENTION!
The next chapter will be up even later now, because SD's laptop is officially STUFFED.

She might be able to continue if I can persuade him to install Ubuntu...

"Indeed," Cyrus agreed. "Your specialty is not in combat, but you have unique data analysing skills that make you irreplaceable.
Does this make sense? Would the data not be analysed later in the HQ?

"I hate you."

"I know."
Star Wars references ftw.

The subject's he'd been taking at school

Subject's = subjects, naturlich.

"Yes, me again. Do you realise," she continued, "how easy it would be, right now, to push you over the edge of the boat?"

"Not nearly as easy as it would be for me to jump," he commented.

"Touché," she murmured.

i <3 this.

"Jeremiah, you're currently in Jubilife City, correct?" Cyrus was the only one who ever called him by his full name.


Ze truth is finally revealed! I love your plots and counterplots... THE PRIME MINISTER IS A DITTO!!

On that strange note, I turn around and flee.
 

Misheard Whisper

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I has my computer back. Writing will commence shortly. Unfortunately, I have exams in a couple weeks, so I won't be updating weekly like I was before.

Does this make sense? Would the data not be analysed later in the HQ?
Perhaps. But sometimes it's advantageous to have a specialist on hand to take a look at the data and draw conclusions earlier.

Subject's = subjects, naturlich.
*headdesk* Oops, my bad.

i <3 this.
Not as much as i <3ed writing it.

Ze truth is finally revealed! I love your plots and counterplots... THE PRIME MINISTER IS A DITTO!!

On that strange note, I turn around and flee.
*places jandal on la Pompa's head*
 

Misheard Whisper

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Chapter 8: Flame

:D :D :D :D IT'S THE REVIVAL! *fanfare*

Anyway, guys, I am soooo sorry this took so long. What with exams, homework, general procrastination and so on, I haven't posted a chapter for over a mon- no, since August! FREAKING AUGUST! OMG *dies*

Anyway, I have more exams in about six weeks, but till then I'll try to keep posting. It'll no longer be a strict weekly schedule, but you'll get each chapter when I finish it, whether it's three days or three weeks after the last one. Just a recap, now, in case you've forgotten and don't want to be reading the first seven chapters again . . .

Chapter 1: Tyson, Haley and Alexis learn of the opportunity of the Pokemon Journey Program.
Chapter 2: Tyson overcomes his doubts and resolves to go on the Pokemon Journey with his sister. A pair of shady characters, Jeremiah and his unnamed boss, are introduced.
Chapter 3: The groups for the Program are decided, and Tyson and Haley meet Jerry, their new teacher/mentor/guardian/whatever.
Chapter 4: Tyson, Haley and Matthew receive their first Pokemon, and have an encounter with a mysterious, green-cloaked figure.
Chapter 5: Team Jerry (wtf since when) set off on their Pokemon Journey (complete with boat! d(*.*)b)
Chapter 6: Samuel and Li are introduced, though far from the action. Tyson meets the green-cloaked woman again, who seems oddly civil this time around.
Chapter 7: Samuel and Li are assigned another mission. Jerry tries to deal with Matthew's problems. We learn that Jerry first encountered the Cult of Avos two years previously.
Chapter 8: OMG OMG here it is! ^_^

[FONT=&quot]Chapter 8[/FONT]​
[FONT=&quot]Flame[/FONT]​
[FONT=&quot]June 16, 2000[/FONT]

"This is a city?" Tyson asked slightly sceptically as Pastoria came into view. "There's . . . not much of it." It was true. Pastoria City was little more than a town; it had to have a few thousand inhabitants at most.

"Maybe so," countered Jerry, "but the Great Marsh is something we certainly can't miss. I reckon any Trainer should see the Great Marsh at least once, and it's a great place to catch a few Pokémon, seeing as you don't have to worry about battling them. Not to mention the fact that it has a Pokémon Gym, although I don't think you guys are up to that just yet." The S.S. Valeria came about, creaking ominously, and slowly chugged into reverse. Ponderously, it backed up into its niche in the dock, alongside ships much larger and newer.

"There we go!" said Jerry happily. "Told you she'd make it, didn't I?"

"I guess . . ." Tyson admitted. "Don't you think it's odd that we're the only passengers, by the way?"

"Now you mention it," Haley pondered, "that is strange. If this is the main route between Sunyshore and Pastoria, why weren't there any other passengers?"

Jerry scratched the back of his head awkwardly. "Well, actually," he said, "the Valeria's about to be put out of commission. The authorities had concerns about her safety, so she's headed for the scrap heap before long."

"What?" Haley squeaked. "I thought you said it was safe!"

"I did, and it is," Jerry demurred. "I've sailed on the Valeria many times, and she's never done any wrong. Most people are scared to so much as board her, though, so she's not bringing in enough income. Between that and the safety concerns, well . . ." He shrugged casually. "It's a shame, but we haven't got time to do this. We've been neglecting your training. I'm supposed to be laying down the groundwork for your future as a Pokémon Trainer right now, so we'll head out to somewhere that we can do that comfortably. Come on."

Five minutes later, they had left the S.S. Valeria behind. Jerry was whistling cheerfully as he strolled across the wet flagstones that stretched along the harbour, but suddenly stopped. It was only a split-second pause, but Jerry had obviously seen something. His lopsided grin vanishing like a Furret down a hole, he practically dragged them across the quay, leaving them little time to look around. Tyson barely had time to register the bustling harbour-side market before they were bundled into a taxi.

"What's the hurry?" Haley whispered to him as Jerry leant forward to converse frantically with the driver, giving him directions they couldn't hear. Tyson glanced around. The taxi was a large affair, with split leather seats facing both forward and back and tinted windows. Matthew, looking shocked, was curled in a corner, eyes slightly glazed.

"I don't get it either," Tyson muttered back. "Did he see one of those Avos people or something?"

"I didn't see any," said Haley, "but it's still possible, I guess." Breathing heavily, Jerry sat down and untangled his seatbelt, motioning them to do the same. Once they were all buckled in, the taxi shuddered as the driver put his foot down on the ignition. Jerry pressed his nose to the window, scanning the street as they dodged in and out of light traffic, heading north. Tyson and Haley exchanged worried glances, but said nothing further. Matthew continued to stare vacantly into the middle distance.

As they got further away from the quay, Jerry relaxed gradually, although he still appeared jumpy. Five minutes later, they exited the taxi in front of an unassuming red-brick building. It sat alone on the side of the road, with a line of trees stretching away to either side for quite some distance. Jerry joined them twenty seconds later as the taxi zoomed off, kicking up dust from the beaten road.

"What was that all about?" Haley demanded. "Did you see someone at the quay that we needed to avoid?"

Jerry nodded tersely. "Her," he said simply, looking rather shaken.

"Who? That woman from the Avos cult?" Haley asked. Jerry ignored her.

"This," he said loudly, gesturing at the building in front of them, "is the entrance to the Great Marsh, one of the best places in Sinnoh for observing and capturing wild Pokémon." It certainly didn't look like much, Tyson observed. The building was roughly square, squat and sturdy, with a small door set into the wall. Jerry pushed the door open and ushered them inside, ignoring further queries as to what he had seen to make him behave so oddly.

The inside of the building was equally ordinary. It didn't look like the entrance to a Great Marsh; it didn't really look like anything at all. The room was small and square. In one corner stood a public PC like the ones seen in Pokémon Centres. In the other was a small, rickety desk, in front of a large, hand-painted poster that proclaimed 'Pastoria's Great Marsh – Rare Pokémon!' in loud, garish colours. Behind the desk sat a bored-looking young woman in a worn suit that, like everything else in the room, gave off a sense of age and dustiness. She looked up immediately as they came in, greeting them with a smile that seemed a little forced.

"Good morning! Welcome to Pastoria's Great Marsh!" she said happily, but with a note in her voice that suggested she said the words multiple times a day, and was getting somewhat tired of it. Jerry flashed her a charming smile.

"Hey there," he said casually. "How much is entrance for four?" he asked. She blinked a couple of times, gazing at him blankly, before smiling uneasily.

"Um, 500 each, so 2000 altogether. With the group discount, that's only 1800," she said. Jerry pulled a wad of notes from his pocket and silently counted out the required amount.

"Um, you'll need . . . these," she said distractedly, handing each of them a small box. "30 Safari Balls. You can use these to catch Pokémon in the Marsh if you like. Alternately, you can just observe the Pokémon in their natural habitat."

"Thanks." Jerry took his box of Safari Balls and headed for a door that Tyson hadn't noticed earlier. It looked to be identical to the one they had just entered. Jerry ushered them through. Matthew hesitated for a second, but followed, shaking his head.

The first thing that came into Tyson's head when he saw the Great Marsh was that it, was, in fact, very marshy. He wasn't so sure about the 'Great' part, however. As far as he could see, it was mud. Thick, brown mud, criss-crossed at intervals by wooden boardwalks. Here and there a stand of trees poked up through the mire like the fingers of a drowning man. Where did that morbid simile come from? Tyson wondered, shivering. There was something oddly creepy about the Marsh. Tyson glanced at the others, wondering if they'd noticed. Haley was uncharacteristically silent, while Matthew was just as quiet as ever. Jerry, however, appeared to be in his element.

"Ah, it's been so long since I was last here!" he exclaimed, setting off along one of the boardwalks at a pace that required them to jog to keep up with him. "If I recall correctly, there was a great spot for training along this way! Come on, you lot, try not to fall in the mud!" he laughed, navigating the wooden walkways as if he lived there.

After ten minutes of hectic dashing, during which Tyson barely had time to register the dozens of curious Pokémon that observed them with keen interest as they raced past on Jerry's tail, they finally stopped at a large grove of trees. By the time Tyson and Haley caught up to Jerry, he was standing in front of one of the trees with a pensive look on his face. The twins were both breathing hard, but Jerry didn't look like he'd even broken a sweat. He was calmly examining the trunk of the tree he was standing in front of, a large, worn cedar that looked like it had been there for decades.

Tyson peered over Jerry's shoulder. Scratched into the bark, the edges rounded by age, was a clumsily etched heart. In the centre were three characters – 'C+J'. It was like something out of a movie.

"I didn't think people actually did that," said Haley offhandedly, seeming to read his mind.

"Neither did I . . ." mused Jerry. "Neither did I." But something about his voice rang hollow to Tyson. His eyes narrowed, and he regarded Jerry suspiciously. Did 'J' perhaps stand for Jerry?

He brushed the thought aside almost instantly. So what if that was how it was? It was none of his business, and besides, that sort of thing was Haley's department. He had no need to worry about those things.

Even so, he wondered absently if there would ever be anyone to carve his initial onto a trunk. Unbidden, an image floated into his mind's eye. A similar heart, carved into a similar tree. 'T+?' He couldn't make out the other letter.

I must be going soft, he scolded himself. Where the hell did that come from? All the same . . .

"All right!" Jerry said loudly. "We're here, so let's not waste time. Through here!" He ducked between the trees. Tyson glanced briefly at Haley and followed, Matthew drifting along in their wake like a ghost.

"Whoa . . ." Tyson breathed. It shouldn't have been terribly impressive; all it seemed to be was a large clearing in the trees. It would have been around fifteen by twenty metres, roughly rectangular, and the trees around it were so thick it was impossible to see out of them into the Marsh. The ground in the clearing was hard-packed dry dirt, as might be found anywhere else, dotted with sparse clumps of grass. It was entirely unremarkable, and yet Tyson felt something strange about it, as if some power inhabited the area.

"Doesn't look like much, does it?" said Jerry from beside him. Tyson jumped. Could everybody read his mind today? "It seems fairly ordinary, but this place is special. When I used to live in Pastoria – a few years ago – I often came here with my friend to train. It was our secret hideaway. This place has seen more battles than the local Gym, I'm sure."

"I thought it had that sort of aura around it," Tyson said thoughtfully.

"Yes," murmured Matthew unexpectedly. Tyson glanced at him sharply. He had his eyes closed, and one hand stretched out over the clearing, palm out. "There has been lots of conflict here. I can feel lots of tension, fighting . . . passion. But also . . . happiness. There's lots of happiness. And even . . . love?" His eyes snapped open with a jerk.

"Wh-what was that just now?" asked Haley, blinking. Matthew was gazing around as if he didn't know where he was.

"Huh? What? Oh, that's just . . . just the feeling I get from this place. That's all. I can't really . . ." he trailed off. Tyson narrowed his eyes. He had no idea what was going on, but he could tell that Matthew was lying. He opened his mouth to challenge the statement, but before he could say anything, he was interrupted by a strident, triumphant voice from behind them.

"A-ha! There you are, Jeremiah! I thought it was you at the quay, and now my suspicions have been confirmed!" Jerry winced as if he'd just bit into a lemon, but didn't turn around. Instead, he blocked his ears and shook his head frantically, muttering to himself.

"No . . . no . . . don't tell me it was her after all . . . crap . . . what do I do, what do I do?" Tyson glanced quizzically at Haley before turning to see who Jerry seemed to be so afraid of.

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Citrinin

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8D x infinity

I'm so happy to see Shattered back. ^-^ You're not going to escape your penalty of 90 lashes, though. :/

Loved the sense of mystery you built up throughout. c: Great chapter. And don't die again. D:
 

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Great chapter, SD, it was well worth the wait. The mystery you've added to Matthew's character is wonderful and would I be correct in guessing that...

Spoiler:
 

Misheard Whisper

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8D x infinity

I'm so happy to see Shattered back. ^-^ You're not going to escape your penalty of 90 lashes, though. :/

Loved the sense of mystery you built up throughout. c: Great chapter. And don't die again. D:
O ye gods, I won't. ^_^ And thank you. sense of mystery what sense of mystery oh well just go with it

Great chapter, SD, it was well worth the wait. The mystery you've added to Matthew's character is wonderful and would I be correct in guessing that...

Spoiler:
You most certainly would be guessing right! I was gonna offer a cookie to the person who guessed it, but I was so tired I forgot to mention it. *gives cookie* I'm looking forward to experimenting with Matthew . . . kekeke.
 

Caliban

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Ok... Matthew shows some kind of latent psychic powers (or gets stabbed in the butt by a Croagunk), Jerry's about to get his ass whupped by his old girlfriend (a.k.a. Crasher Wakette), and La Pompa thinks that the first comma in the below sentence might not be mandatory.
Jerry (a.k.a. Mr. Hyper Smiley Man) said:
Come on, you lot, try not to fall in the mud!
Come to think o' it, that's a reference to Space Cadet Moppet Mahn, init?

Are you going to put in that bit about the fridge and the Ninjask in the next chapter?


I was trying to post this last night, but Dad turned the Router off.
 

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I'm not even sure what to say to that . . .

Not mandatory, but I think it makes it run better. And 'Crasher Wakette'? Srsly, where do you get your ideas? *shakes head in despair*

And yes, I will be putting that in the next chapter.
 

Misheard Whisper

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IT. HAS. BEEN. TOO. GOD DAMN. LONG!!!!!!!!!!

Good lord, it's been over two months since I updated this puppy. I'm sorry I took so long, but I had exams and stuff, so bleeeeeeh. Anyway, this is a fairly short chapter just to get cogs turning again. And this is a personal record for the longest interval between ditching a fic and picking it up again, so, um, yay me?

I'll be restarting the PM list for this chapter, so if you want to be on it, just let me know, via review, VM, PM, whatever. If you were on it before, but lost interest, I can't blame you, so I'll include a cancel option with the reminder for this chapter. There was a brief summary of chapters one through seven at the beginning of chapter eight, if your memory needs refreshing.

WARNING: Dead, rotting Pokemon ahead. Just in case you can't take it, skip ahead a few paragraphs when Samuel smells something funny.

And if you get the title, I will love you forever. So let's goooooo~!

Chapter Nine
Down Once More to the Dungeon of my Black Despair
June 16, 2000

The unmarked helicopter set down in a clearing in the dense forest, about five kilometres west of the Solaceon Ruins. The rotors didn't stop slicing the air as a hatch opened in the sleek black side of the craft, spitting out two figures dressed in dark green camouflage. As soon as Samuel had ensured that both he and Li had exited safely, he banged three times on the metal hull of the helicopter and it took off immediately, buffeting them both with the downdraft from the rotors.

Samuel set off at once, pausing only briefly to make sure that Li was following him. Her narrow face was set in a determined frown as she tried to keep up with him. He checked his pace slightly, remembering that she wasn't an expert in this sort of thing like he was.

"Check the GPS," he said, just loud enough for her to hear him over the sounds of the forest. "I know where I'm going, but this bloody forest is too thick to really be sure."

"We're on track," she said at length, studying the screen of the GPS. Samuel had one as well, but he both of his hands were busy clearing a path through the dense undergrowth. For all his field experience, nothing short of a machete would have made it easy for him to bypass this forest, and he didn't have room for one of those. They were supposed to be travelling light, after all.

Li squeaked in surprise as a branch that he'd just pulled back to pass leapt back when he let it go and hit her in the face.

"Keep it down," Samuel hissed. "Do you want them to find us?"

"Who's 'them'?" she asked sulkily. "I thought the place was supposed to be deserted by now?" Samuel closed his eyes for a second in exasperation.

"What's to say they haven't come back? We haven't got any images of the site that are newer than last night, so for all we know, they might have. Why else do you think we landed so far away?"

"They would have seen the helicopter, though," Li protested. "If you're that paranoid, why didn't we land even further away?" Samuel pinched the bridge of his nose and breathed out heavily. This girl was going to drive him nuts by the end of the day.

"Because," he explained, "we have to balance caution with efficiency. If we'd landed much further away, the mission would have taken too long, and this could be crucial. You know how important Cyrus' mission is, and every minute counts. So I made the decision to land where we did, which was hopefully far enough away to be undetected, but not so far that it would have taken us all day to get to the ruins. Commander's prerogative."

"Commander's prerogative," she repeated wryly. "Sure . . ." Samuel shook his head and fell silent, resolving not to talk to her again unless he needed to. She had promise, sure. She was a smart girl, and almost anybody could be taught to beat the crap out of the bad guys if you gave it enough time, but . . . she was too free-spirited to be an effective agent. Too naive, especially for the kind of work he often had to do.

***​

A while later – after far too long an interval, in Samuel's opinion – they reached the spot where the Avos cultists had been working. It was a small clearing like dozens of others they had passed by or through on the way there, with fragments of ancient buildings and stone blocks poking up through the grass, but there was something different about it. Something other than the GPS told them they had arrived, and it took Samuel just a couple of seconds to figure out what it was.

Death. The place stank of death. For a while, he couldn't work out why; there hadn't been any reports of an incident here. Surely it would have been reported if the police had run across the excavators, and even if it hadn't, Cyrus' contacts would have picked it up. No, that couldn't have been it.

The wind gusted suddenly, filling Samuel's nostrils with the scent of rotting flesh. Fighting back a strong feeling of nausea, he looked across to see what the cause was. A truly horrible sight met his eyes.

A Pokémon carcass lay between the trees – a Ponyta, its legs bent at strange angles and its body riddled with bullet holes. The grass around it looked sticky with dried blood, and the unmoving body seemed oddly tiny without the flaming mane that burned as long as the Pokémon was alive. The neck appeared to be broken, and the head was a twisted caricature of pain. The creature had died in agony.

Samuel shuddered and turned away, trying to focus on the task at hand, but Li was still staring, shell-shocked, at the dead Pokémon. "Th-that's . . . h-horrible . . ." she stammered, looking decidedly green. Samuel wasn't feeling too great himself, which surprised him. Why was he so unnerved? He killed people all the time; Pokémon too, if he needed to.

"Yep," he said tersely, "but there's nothing we can do for it now. But at least we don't need any more proof that the Avos are inhuman bastards." Nodding absently, Li tore her eyes away from the body and began distractedly poking around the ground.

"These guys have certainly covered their tracks," she noted after a minute or so. It was true. If they'd been digging, it had been covered up again before they'd left. Finding where the Avos had been digging would require more than simple observation, then.

Frowning, Samuel began pacing around the small clearing with heavy steps, listening carefully to the sounds his feet made. After circling the area four times, he finally returned to one point, right next to where the corner of a worn grey block of stone poked through the grass. Kneeling down, he grasped a large clump of grass in his hand and tugged at it, while Li watched, puzzled.

"What are you doing?" she asked, tilting her head to one side in confusion. Samuel just grunted and tried another tuft of grass. This time, he felt it give a little, without breaking. Satisfied, he pulled a small trowel from his belt and sank it into the earth. It only went a couple of centimetres down before stopping at a hard surface. He used the trowel as a lever to scoop a large chunk of dirt out, and was rewarded with a glimpse of silver that rang hollowly when he tapped the trowel on it.

"That's what I'm doing," he said, sitting back on his haunches and grinning smugly up at Li.

"All right then, Mr Know-It-All. No need to get all superior," she grumbled as she crouched down to help him. Together, they scraped the rest of the earth away with ease, revealing a square metal plate about a metre and a half each way.

Using his trowel as a lever again, Samuel slid it under the corner of the plate and pushed down. There was a lot more resistance this time, but he managed to lift the plate enough to get his hands underneath it. Brushing aside Li's half-hearted attempts to help, he lifted the plate out of the way easily and tossed it to one side, revealing a perfectly square hole below. "Hmm," he said critically, peering down. It seemed to go down a long way, and there was no apparent way to climb down.

"How are we supposed to – " Li began, but Samuel held up a hand to silence her.

"I've got it covered," he said brusquely, pulling a length of rope from the small pack he was carrying on his back. He looped it around a nearby tree and fastened it firmly with an abseiling clip, tossing the other end down the hole. Without stopping to affix himself to the other end, he lowered himself into the hole, feet first. "Follow me down when I reach the bottom and make sure it's all right."

"But I don't think I can – "

"No buts."

His descent was rapid and professional, carefully going hand over hand and using his feet to prop himself against the walls of the shaft. After dropping for a couple of metres without hitting the bottom, he paused and looked up. Li's anxious face was silhouetted against the sunlight.

"You okay down there?" she asked worriedly.

"Of course I'm okay! Why wouldn't I be? I do this sort of thing all the time!" he fumed. Li giggled.

"Are you showing off?" she asked cheekily.

"Wha-? What are you saying? Just because I'm down here and you're up there, doesn't mean you can do that! We're supposed to be investigating here, not playing around!" He was really starting to get pissed off at this woman. She was going to be the death of him. No matter what Cyrus said, he would refuse to work with her again.

"I think –" she began, but Samuel never got to find out what she thought. With a sharp cry, her face disappeared from the aperture above him as if pulled away suddenly.

"What the f-" His expletive was cut off by the sudden appearance of what seemed to be someone's head at the hole above. It wasn't Li. The newcomer's face was obscured by . . . an emerald green cloak. "Bastards," he muttered. It was those Avos freaks again. Swearing, he began hauling himself back up the rope, intending to sock the green-cloaked weirdo in the face when he reached the top. The figure laughed.

"Do you really think you can make it up in time?" it asked. It was a man's voice, deep and strong.

"Eh?" Samuel paused. "In time for what?" He had the sense that the man above him was smiling, and suddenly had the strange feeling that he should be moving a lot faster than he was. His suspicions were confirmed when the cultist pulled out a large, wicked knife and began sawing away at the rope that was tying Samuel to the tree outside. Samuel's eyes widened. The rope was specially made, not designed to break easily, but the knife was cutting through like it was made of wool. Desperately, he pulled himself upward, hoping to somehow make it to the top before it was too late. It wasn't that far, only a metre or so, surely. But even so-

Snap. The rope gave way just as Samuel's fingers were stretching towards the lip of the hole. Unable to believe what was happening, Samuel fell helplessly down the shaft, with not a sound escaping his lips. His body bounced off the sides like a ragdoll, limp and helpless, again and again until he hit the bottom.

***​

"Ca-Carly?" Jerry stammered in disbelief, still not turning around. Haley sized up the person standing in front of them – or in Jerry's case, behind. She looked to be about Jerry's age, but she was taller than he was, and slim. Her shiny blonde hair was twisted elegantly into a knot at the back of her head, underneath a soft pink hat with a small peak at the front. Her cashmere jacket was also dyed a shocking pink, with gold buttons winking in the sunlight, and her knee-length skirt also followed the colour scheme. Her high heels – which must have made traversing the boardwalks hard – were a deep black, however. All in all, it was quite a bizarre sight.

"Who else?" she said smugly. "I thought I saw you getting off the boat at the quay, so I followed you here."

"What would you have done if it hadn't been me?" Jerry muttered. Frowning, Carly strode across to where he was still pointedly staring in the opposite direction and hit him around the head with a small – pink, unsurprisingly – handbag that she was carrying. "Ow!" he cried out, turning around sulkily. "What did you do that for?"

"You have some explaining to do, Jeremiah! Where the hell have you been for the past four years? Why did you just disappear like that? I was . . . I was worried about you." She went a little pink, but quickly regained her composure."Everybody was worried about you! You can't just up and leave like that! What the hell got into you?" Jerry flinched with each sentence as if they were physical blows, enduring the ear-bashing through what seemed to be sheer force of will.

"I . . . I . . ." He shook his head. "To be entirely honest, there's no explanation for it. Nothing I can talk about, anyway." Carly's eyes narrowed suspiciously.

"I see. I'll have to drag it out of you later, then." She turned to Tyson, Haley and Matthew, the latter of which was still staring off into the middle distance. "And who are these adorable little things?" Haley opened her mouth to object to being called an 'adorable little thing', but Tyson put a hand on her arm, and she stopped. She glanced at him, and he mouthed[FONT=&quot], [/FONT]Just don't say anything yet[FONT=&quot]. [/FONT]She nodded reluctantly.

"Er, these are my . . . my . . ." Jerry was distractedly searching for the right words to use. "My students! Yes, that's it. I'm working for the Pokémon League now, and these three are just starting on the Pokémon Journey Program. You'll have heard of the Program, I'm sure?" he asked hopefully. Carly smiled wryly, sending a shiver down Haley's spine. Something about that woman . . .

"Of course I have," she said sweetly. "I'm funding it."
 
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Funnily enough, I'm going to watch the NY stage production of Phantom of the Opera in a few days.

Anyway, yes, a decidedly short chapter where not much happened save for a dead Ponyta and a Galactic operative in a hole, but at least you got your writing muse back! C: Not much in the way of super-mega-plot-shaking coolness happened this chapter, but it did seem to me that the entire thing - especially the part of the chapter with the kids - seemed a little... rushed. Like you sort of sped through things without handing out enough time for readers to collect thoughts. I guess that's justifiable, though.
 

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Funnily enough, I'm going to watch the NY stage production of Phantom of the Opera in a few days.
You're lucky. Y_Y

Anyway, yes, a decidedly short chapter where not much happened save for a dead Ponyta and a Galactic operative in a hole, but at least you got your writing muse back! C: Not much in the way of super-mega-plot-shaking coolness happened this chapter, but it did seem to me that the entire thing - especially the part of the chapter with the kids - seemed a little... rushed. Like you sort of sped through things without handing out enough time for readers to collect thoughts. I guess that's justifiable, though.
Yeah, it was a little rushed, I suppose. This is, however, as you said, a way to kick-start the story again. Because now, you see, I have the story and the characters back in my head, which is great, because the next chapter, hopefully, will be where we get back into the action. :3 Thanks for continuing to read~!
 

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Bleh, vB hates italics. This happens all the time, and I'm always so tired after finishing a chapter . . .

ty.
 

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Actually, it's time I got back to reviewing Shattered. I didn't realise that you had posted a chapter back in October. :/

As far as I can see, your skills at writing mundane details(filler) that go unnoticed but are integral to the character development and plot development of the story have improved. I'm liking Tyson's internal conflict and the way you write it. It makes your writing feel more personal and cheery.

Now to the supposed mistakes section.
Logic Alert!
The grass around it looked sticky with dried blood,
I've seen dried blood, trust me. Dried blood isn't sticky, nor does it look sticky if it's on a smooth surface. It dries up kind of like hard clay. It's a dark red color, and I don't really see it as sticky. Fresh blood is sticky however.
 

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Hmm, right. Maybe half-dried blood or something similar. Seeing as you seem to be an expert, how long does it take for blood to dry? o_O

Hehe, my writing seems cheery? I must be doing something wrong. :3
 

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Chapter Ten - Rawr

Wahey, it's February. @_@

Not much else to say about this, other than that I've probably forgotten everything that happened from chapters 1-8. Haha.

Hmm, fic needs moar conflict. How do we fix that? We insert an abomination, something that defiles the very ground it works on by its mere existence and its lack of adherence to the laws of science. Hehe.

Anyway: Part of the Misheard Whisper Mass Fic Update, February 28th 2010.

Chapter Ten
Rawr
June 16, 2000

"Funding it?" Tyson burst out, ignoring his own advice to keep silent. "What do you mean you're funding the Program?" Carly smiled and tilted her chin up superiorly.

"My family is providing a large percentage of the funding for your Program," she said, apparently believing that this was a suitable explanation. Jerry elaborated for her.

"Carly's family, the Gardners, is one of the oldest and wealthiest in the Pastoria area, and her father has a deep interest in the education of Sinnoh's youth. Now I think about it, it makes sense for him to be funding it."

"Of course, I had an influence on his decision," Carly said, sounding somewhat self-satisfied.

"Hold on," said Matthew, suddenly seeming interested in the conversation. "You're Carly Gardner?"

"Yes, I am," she said, slightly surprised. "I'm afraid I don't know your face, though." Matthew smiled then for the first time, sending a shiver down Tyson's spine.

"I don't expect you to," he said, before launching himself at her.

***​

The first thing Samuel noticed was the horrible taste in his mouth. His tongue was dry and heavy, and it felt like someone had rubbed it with sandpaper, but he could still taste the dust and blood. He must have bitten his tongue, he decided. As for the dry, pungent dusty taste that filled his mouth . . .

"Ah!" He sat up with great alacrity, suddenly remembering what had happened. The ruins, and the dead Ponyta, and the Avos cultists, and Li . . .

Li!

"Damn it!" he snapped, pulling himself to his feet and looking around. There wasn't too much to see. Actually, there wasn't anything to see at all. Fumbling around in his backpack, Samuel located a handheld torch and clicked it on, thankful that he had had the foresight to bring just about anything he could possibly need.

He was standing, it seemed, in a tunnel of some sort. The walls and ceiling were old, cracked brick, chipped and worn with age, and the floor was packed dirt. Above him was the shaft down which he had fallen. Although he shone the torch up it, he still couldn't make out the top. He supposed that the cultists had returned the slab of stone after they had dropped him down the shaft. He wasn't getting out that way, that was for sure. The square hole in the ceiling through which he had fallen was out of his reach, as the passage had a remarkably high ceiling – nearly three metres.

"Well, that's buggered that, then," he mumbled, picking a direction at random and stepping out. As he lifted his foot, however, he heard a rustling noise at his feet. Frowning, he shone the torch down. What he saw confused him greatly.

A pile of leaves, about a foot deep and about the diameter of the hole. He supposed he'd been too busy worrying about where he was before to notice it, but it was certainly there, evidently to cushion his landing. Scraping some of the leaves to one side, he noticed that the earth beneath the leaves was freshly turned, forming a soft mound on the ground. Who could have set it up? Surely not the Avos, as they would have no need for it – nobody was cutting their ropes, after all.

"Weird," he muttered, before starting off again. This time, however, he pulled a handgun from his backpack, loaded it, and attached a silencer. Whoever else was down here, he wasn't sure whose side they were on. They had saved him, but for what reason?

Torch in one hand, gun in the other, Samuel moved off down the tunnel, treading quietly and slowly.

***​

Jerry watched in astonishment as Matthew flew towards Carly with inhuman speed. Carly squealed and fell over backwards, inadvertently dodging the boy's outstretched fist. Quickly, Jerry threw himself at Matthew, pinning his arms behind his back.

"What the hell are you doing?" he shouted, but Matthew seemed to have gone beyond hearing. Fighting like a wild beast, he attempted to tear himself free of Jerry's clutches, grasping at his captor's arms with wickedly sharp claws while simultaneously attempting to sink his fangs into Jerry's shoulder.

Wait a minute . . . claws? Fangs?
Jerry's mind spun.

"What are you?" he shouted. With a guttural snarl, Matthew yanked himself from Jerry's arms and hurled himself at Carly once again. Jerry swore – he was too far from Carly to do anything himself. Moving quickly, he tore a Poké Ball at random from his belt and flung it desperately. A loud crack accompanied by a flash of red light signified the appearance of his Hariyama. The enormous Pokémon materialised between Carly and Matthew, its gigantic hands set in a fighting stance.

Matthew snarled and backed off. Jerry moved to stand next to Hariyama, one hand on its huge arm.

"Tyson, Haley," he said, his voice terse. "Get behind Hariyama. Now." Silently, they complied. For the first time, he got a good look at the new Matthew.

It seemed that he had gotten larger, but that wasn't the extent of the bizarre transformation. His arms and legs had sprouted thick, dark grey and black hair, and his fingers had grown out into wicked, three-inch claws. His face had become slightly elongated and vaguely canine, with great fangs that nonetheless looked quite out-of-place. His ears were triangular and furry, and his hair had grown out into a shaggy black mane. Burning like crimson fire, his eyes glared at Jerry and Hariyama, full of hate.

Matthew – or whatever this thing was – growled, slow and deep, as he prowled back and forth, his back hunched over.

"What are you?" Jerry asked again, horrified. This thing wasn't human. Every fibre of his being screamed at him to run, to hide, to get as far away from it as he possibly could. Glancing across at Hariyama, Jerry saw that it was trembling slightly, evidently under the same sort of pressure. He knew instinctively that the only thing preventing it from breaking rank and fleeing was its years of training with him, and he felt a flood of fondness for his old friend.

"Adorable, isn't he?" said a familiar voice from off to his right.

"You!" Jerry spat, glaring across at the green-cloaked figure. "I should have known that this was your doing! How could you do this to Matthew? For that matter, what have you done to him?"

Elina chuckled. "He's not Matthew anymore, so you should stop calling him that. No, I know who you work for, Jerry, and I knew you'd run into some individuals on Avos' Wanted list. So, because I wasn't always going to be here to intervene, we 'borrowed' Matthew last night and worked our magic on him."

"You mean he was going to go into crazy mode as soon as someone on your Wanted list appeared?" Haley asked, peeking under Hariyama's burly arm.

"Pretty much, yes."

"You still haven't explained what you did to him!" Jerry challenged her.

"Well, basically, we merged his DNA with that of a Pokémon. A Mightyena, to be precise. Excellent Pokémon, Mightyena. Vicious, strong and savage, yet loyal to a fault. Don't ask me too much about the science involved, because that's not my field. I'm a field agent, if you will."

"That's inhumane!"

"Correct."

"I thought you didn't even like Pokémon?"

"We don't. We do, however, retain DNA samples for scientific reasons. The results of these fusions are not actually Pokémon, just humans with the best parts of certain Pokémon." Jerry laughed, slightly nervously.

"That's your logic?" he asked incredulously. "That's how you explain all this away? That's crap! None of your logic made any sense from the beginning. You want to save all Pokémon from human slavery by slaughtering them? That's no better than the current situation! It's worse, in fact!"

"I'm not going to argue ethics with a Trainer. Suffice it to say that it's better to be free and dead than alive and in slavery. I don't have time for this, though." She gestured to Matthew – or what had once been Matthew. "Get the girl."

"Why do you want Carly, anyway?" Jerry demanded. Elina didn't answer. Matthew sprang forward, charging with sudden agility at Hariyama, claws outstretched.

"Grab him, Hariyama! Just try not to hurt him!" Jerry ordered. Hariyama stepped forward, one powerful foot slamming down into the ground in defiance of its beastly opponent, throwing up a slight haze of dust as the earth shook. It took Matthew's charge head on, stretching out its hands to catch him. Matthew leapt into the air, landing on Hariyama's head and clinging on tightly, slashing and battering away at the giant Pokémon. Bellowing in pain, Hariyama stumbled backwards as Carly, Tyson and Haley hastily moved out of its way.

Rumbling angrily, Hariyama reached up and grasped Matthew's body, tossing him down onto the ground. Matthew landed on his shoulder, but rolled and flipped, coming around to stand on his feet once again, snarling viciously at Hariyama.

"If you refuse to hurt your little friend, you're never going to win, you know!" Elina taunted. Jerry scowled and gritted his teeth, forcing himself to ignore her as Matthew leapt forward once again, this time trying to avoid confronting Hariyama by going around it – a path that led him straight towards Jerry.

Gritting his teeth, Jerry settled into a fighting crouch, a vague remnant of kickboxing classes in elementary school. "Don't make me hit you, Matthew!" he warned, but Matthew just kept coming, eyes aflame with anger and hatred. Steeling himself, Jerry drew back his fist and sent it flying into Matthew's solar plexus as he came within range.

Matthew was knocked back, but didn't really seem to be affected by the blow. Jerry frowned. "That didn't feel like a normal human body," he said darkly. It felt almost . . . artificial.

"That's because it's not. Other than the obvious transformation, of course. You see, the gene splicing doesn't always go so well. In this case, several of the boy's internal organs gave out, and we had to replace whole parts of his body with cybernetics," Elina explained smugly.

"So now he's not only half Pokémon, he's also a cyborg?" Jerry asked in disbelief. "This is starting to sound like science fiction."

"I assure you it's no fiction, Jerry. Now, I suggest you hand over the girl or else."

"Or else what?" Jerry challenged.

"Or else it's going to get nasty."

"Oh, it's going to get nasty, alright," Jerry said with a wry grin, plucking the remaining two Poké Balls from his belt and thumbing the release switches. Two more Pokémon appeared beside Hariyama: a pink blob of a Ditto and a small, fierce-looking man with a long, pointy nose and a leaf growing out of his head – a Nuzleaf. "Just let me get this straight. You are not getting Carly, so don't even bother to try." He glared straight at Elina while his Pokémon warily eyed the Matthew-Mightyena, which was now waiting impatiently for further orders. Elina chuckled.

"Brave words, indeed. Well, we'll see if they have any weight to them next time." She turned towards the trees. "Come, 73. We're outnumbered." Matthew complied obediently, snapping his jaws at Jerry as he did so. Jerry watched him go silently. As soon as he was sure that they were gone, he dropped to the ground and buried his head in his hands.

"What am I going to do? I'm an awful mentor, absolutely terrible! What am I going to do, guys?" he asked, his eyes desperately appealing to Carly, Tyson and Haley. "What am I going to tell Matthew's parents?"
 
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