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Yeah, I agree with Orange Flaffy that maybe it could work with two first person POVs. That way, we can see the different thought processes of both of them and you'll have a lot of depth to both of them. ^^
As for the other part: I think that's okay if your main character go all wild with describing the first time he knows how to use his electric toys, for instance. I know I would be really excited too if I tried something new. ;) However, I don't think it sounds bad if you have your character explain how a few things work to other people in the story. In fact, I'm all for characters explaining how something works in a lecture hall! XD In all seriousness though, I think it could still work so that we the readers can also feel the other people's excitement when the main character is explaining the technonlogy. For instance, let's say we have a magic show scene. After the magician does a trick, the audience claps and maybe the readers will think the same, since I believe part of being a writer is trying to make us the readers convey feelings to either a character, scene, line, etc.
As for the other part: I think that's okay if your main character go all wild with describing the first time he knows how to use his electric toys, for instance. I know I would be really excited too if I tried something new. ;) However, I don't think it sounds bad if you have your character explain how a few things work to other people in the story. In fact, I'm all for characters explaining how something works in a lecture hall! XD In all seriousness though, I think it could still work so that we the readers can also feel the other people's excitement when the main character is explaining the technonlogy. For instance, let's say we have a magic show scene. After the magician does a trick, the audience claps and maybe the readers will think the same, since I believe part of being a writer is trying to make us the readers convey feelings to either a character, scene, line, etc.