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[Alex_Among_Foxes]

😮

Yeah, as I've said before, (I think) I don't watch anime. In fact, the only anime I've ever watched was called 'Kotoura-San'.
That was probably 10 years or so ago.

okay :D

Well, for chapter 5: (these are direct copy-paste's from your story dialog for ease of finding them. the * indicates the typo word)

Spoiler:

moko & the others *smiles
should be smile

pera, moko, brownie & tatta *looks at her
should be look

For chapter 6:

Spoiler:

brownie puts her paw on *rina back
should be rina's

pera & tatta *jumps up onto the desk...
should be jump

pera: *thankyou, milkshake
should be thank you

tatta: *thankyou
should be thank you

*tatta: thanks! ^^
should be pera

*he takes the oran berry
should be she

rina: *thankyou ... takes it
should be thank you

accella: *thankyou
should be thank you

And finally for chapter 7:

Spoiler:

brownie: ahh... *His eyes mist up
should be Her

brownie, row, luvena, accella, moko, pera & tatta *wipes their eyes
should be wipe

jumps off the walls and *<da:thumb id="566145560"/> comes to moko, brownie & the others
something broke here

just then... *brownie's stomach *growled a bit
should be growls + should be accella (according to the next few lines)

moko: ahh, come on*, you two, you *eat just a little while ago
unnessessary comma + should be ate

rina & moko *wakes up
should be wake

brownie: hey, gale & houdini'*s back
should be are/'re

i want to see my big brother again*, though so... i will get on
should move the comma to 'though'

she's determined but a bit scared too... she's a little afraid of serviper & *weezing
weezing???

gale, pera & row take off for one island*'s treasure island*
treasure island???

 

[popplio25]

Yeah, as I've said before, (I think) I don't watch anime. In fact, the only anime I've ever watched was called 'Kotoura-San'.
That was probably 10 years or so ago.

i see... i never seen that anime 😯

Well, for chapter 5: (these are direct copy-paste's from your story dialog for ease of finding them. the * indicates the typo word)

Spoiler:

moko & the others *smiles
should be smile

pera, moko, brownie & tatta *looks at her
should be look

For chapter 6:

Spoiler:

brownie puts her paw on *rina back
should be rina's

pera & tatta *jumps up onto the desk...
should be jump

pera: *thankyou, milkshake
should be thank you

tatta: *thankyou
should be thank you

*tatta: thanks! ^^
should be pera

*he takes the oran berry
should be she

rina: *thankyou ... takes it
should be thank you

accella: *thankyou
should be thank you

And finally for chapter 7:

Spoiler:

brownie: ahh... *His eyes mist up
should be Her

brownie, row, luvena, accella, moko, pera & tatta *wipes their eyes
should be wipe

jumps off the walls and *<da:thumb id="566145560"/> comes to moko, brownie & the others
something broke here

just then... *brownie's stomach *growled a bit
should be growls + should be accella (according to the next few lines)

moko: ahh, come on*, you two, you *eat just a little while ago
unnessessary comma + should be ate

rina & moko *wakes up
should be wake

brownie: hey, gale & houdini'*s back
should be are/'re

i want to see my big brother again*, though so... i will get on
should move the comma to 'though'

she's determined but a bit scared too... she's a little afraid of serviper & *weezing
weezing???

gale, pera & row take off for one island*'s treasure island*
treasure island???

oh my... quite a few typos on my part there... i'll fix them sometime 😯

and the ''something broke'' , they were emoticons...

yep, a weezing is in that part of the story :3

the treasure island is somewhat based on this - https://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Treasure_Beach


at the line ''just then... brownie's stomach growled a bit'', brownie's stomach growled first and then accella's stomach growled... so that line is correct :3 *except for the typo part, i guess :> *

and pera just took the berry and ate it... she didn't say anything....

so it really is tatta saying thankyou :>

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

i see... i never seen that anime 😯

It was pretty good, but a little sad.

oh my... quite a few typos on my part there... i'll fix them sometime 😯

Only if you feel like it. And it's mostly just small things anyway. 👍

and the ''something broke'' , they were emoticons...

I was pretty sure it was, I just wanted you to know it wasn't working correctly.

yep, a weezing is in that part of the story :3

That wasn't so much a typo, more of a 'how could Rina know about a Pokemon that she hasn't seen in the story yet?' sorta thing.

the treasure island is somewhat based on this - https://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Treasure_Beach

I don't remember if this was mentioned in the story before, but if it wasn't, it's the same thing as with the Weezing. How would they know, if they haven't been there yet?

at the line ''just then... brownie's stomach growled a bit'', brownie's stomach growled first and then accella's stomach growled... so that line is correct :3 *except for the typo part, i guess :> *

Then it's worded oddly, cause when Moko asks the rest of the group if they're still hungry, Brownie says: "brownie: no, i'm good, thanks" as if her stomach didn't just growl.

and pera just took the berry and ate it... she didn't say anything....

so it really is tatta saying thankyou :>

Direct copy-paste:

"moko: here, pera.. a oran berry

moko: you too, tatta

tatta: thanks! ^^

he takes the oran berry 'eating emote'

tatta: thanks 'smile emote' 'eating emote' "

Tatta eats and gives thanks twice?

 

[popplio25]

It was pretty good, but a little sad.

i see :>

Only if you feel like it. And it's mostly just small things anyway. 👍

:3

I was pretty sure it was, I just wanted you to know it wasn't working correctly.

yeah, i found out that the emoticon's stopped working... but i forget what they were 😅

That wasn't so much a typo, more of a 'how could Rina know about a Pokemon that she hasn't seen in the story yet?' sorta thing.

i think she can tell that he's a little scary...

I don't remember if this was mentioned in the story before, but if it wasn't, it's the same thing as with the Weezing. How would they know, if they haven't been there yet?

i hadn't edited anything from that point.... the character listing...

Then it's worded oddly, cause when Moko asks the rest of the group if they're still hungry, Brownie says: "brownie: no, i'm good, thanks" as if her stomach didn't just growl.

i think i was kinda new at writing/editing the story, sorta...

and i guess it is worded weird, kinda.... 😅

Direct copy-paste:

"moko: here, pera.. a oran berry

moko: you too, tatta

tatta: thanks! ^^

he takes the oran berry 'eating emote'

tatta: thanks 'smile emote' 'eating emote' "

Tatta eats and gives thanks twice?

i guess she does 😅

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

yeah, i found out that the emoticon's stopped working... but i forget what they were 😅

You can always just replace it with something else later anyway. 👍

i think she can tell that he's a little scary...

But how would she know he was scary if she's never met or even seen him before?

i hadn't edited anything from that point.... the character listing...

I'm not quite sure what you mean here...

i think i was kinda new at writing/editing the story, sorta...

and i guess it is worded weird, kinda.... 😅

Nothing wrong with that. If it's something you feel like reworking, great, if you don't feel like it, no big deal. I just thought is was worth letting you know about it.

i guess she does 😅

Hahaha! Fair enough! 😆

 

[popplio25]

You can always just replace it with something else later anyway. 👍

:3

But how would she know he was scary if she's never met or even seen him before?

good point.... 😅

I'm not quite sure what you mean here...

umm.... i'm not sure either anymore...
never mind on this part 😅

Nothing wrong with that. If it's something you feel like reworking, great, if you don't feel like it, no big deal. I just thought is was worth letting you know about it.

:3
i do need to remove my zorua character from one chapter... cause i didn't own her yet.... and i still don't yet... aki the deerling and weimi the skitty, too... don't own them, yet...

Hahaha! Fair enough! 😆

🤗




also... i'm continuing kanto list 2 today :D

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

good point.... 😅

👍

umm.... i'm not sure either anymore...
never mind on this part 😅

You got it. 👍

:3
i do need to remove my zorua character from one chapter... cause i didn't own her yet.... and i still don't yet... aki the deerling, too... don't own her, yet...

Oh? Who do they belong to if not you?

also... i'm continuing kanto list 2 today :D

Awesome!

 

[popplio25]

👍

:3

You got it. 👍

:3

Oh? Who do they belong to if not you?

well... they technically will belong to me... in the future... so they're technically still wild pokemon as of right now or eggs/non-existant as of right now....

so they don't belong to anyone.... so i'm gonna remove them... cause i don't own them yet...
plus, it was kinda a pmd type thingy... cause i think i was inspired by this, way back then :> - https://www.deviantart.com/ev-zero/gallery/58231950/eeveelution-squad?page=33 *i had cameos in it - https://www.deviantart.com/ev-zero/art/ES-Special-Chapter-12A-Page-3-838167422 / https://www.deviantart.com/ev-zero/art/ES-Special-Chapter-12A-Page-39-857019824

Awesome!

🤗

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

well... they technically will belong to me... in the future... so they're technically still wild pokemon as of right now or eggs/non-existant as of right now....

so they don't belong to anyone.... so i'm gonna remove them... cause i don't own them yet...
plus, it was kinda a pmd type thingy... cause i think i was inspired by this, way back then :> - https://www.deviantart.com/ev-zero/gallery/58231950/eeveelution-squad?page=33 *i had cameos in it - https://www.deviantart.com/ev-zero/art/ES-Special-Chapter-12A-Page-3-838167422 / https://www.deviantart.com/ev-zero/art/ES-Special-Chapter-12A-Page-39-857019824

Ah, gotcha. I thought you meant that those weren't oc's of yours originally.

 

[popplio25]

Ah, gotcha. I thought you meant that those weren't oc's of yours originally.

yeah... :3
morisa the zorua, weimi the skitty and aki the deerling 'will' be mine.... in the future.... :D so i need to edit the parts of the story where they are, sometime.... 😯



and that eevee, with the brown hair and fluff, in the ES: Special Chapter 12A -Page 39 link , in the 2nd panel, is me, before i became a mew :D

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

yeah... :3
morisa the zorua, weimi the skitty and aki the deerling 'will' be mine.... in the future.... :D so i need to edit the parts of the story where they are, sometime.... 😯

I think I understand. They're not yours yet because the part of the story where you get them isn't finished yet, is that right?

and that eevee, with the brown hair and fluff, in the ES: Special Chapter 12A -Page 39 link , in the 2nd panel, is me, before i became a mew :D

That's really neat how you got your oc in that comic! How did that happen anyway?

 

[popplio25]

I think I understand. They're not yours yet because the part of the story where you get them isn't finished yet, is that right?

no, i mean.... at the time of writing the story, i had every other pokemon in the story.... because in real life, i own them in the games...
except for morisa, weimi and aki.... i'll be catching them in game, in the future when i can get other copies of whatever game...

That's really neat how you got your oc in that comic! How did that happen anyway?

🤗

well... i can't seem to find it right now... but there was this cameo thing that they did, where people could ask to have their ocs of sonas be put in the comic at some point :3

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

no, i mean.... at the time of writing the story, i had every other pokemon in the story.... because in real life, i own them in the games...
except for morisa, weimi and aki.... i'll be catching them in game, in the future when i can get other copies of whatever game...

That makes perfect sense! I hope you can get them soon then!

🤗

well... i can't seem to find it right now... but there was this cameo thing that they did, where people could ask to have their ocs of sonas be put in the comic at some point :3

That's still really cool that one of your oc's made it into a comic like that!

 

[popplio25]

That makes perfect sense! I hope you can get them soon then!

🤗

i don't know ''when '' i'll be getting those copies, yet, though 😯

That's still really cool that one of your oc's made it into a comic like that!

yeah, it was :D

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

i don't know ''when '' i'll be getting those copies, yet, though 😯

You'll get 'em eventually. 👍

 

[popplio25]

You'll get 'em eventually. 👍

yeah :3 still gonna remove them from the story, though 😯

 

[popplio25]

You'll get 'em eventually. 👍

i don't have any one with aromathepy yet... but i do have a hattena, named ''mi'' with life dew... that'll work nicely :> - https://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Life_Dew_(move)
in tsfn Epilogue ch 4

 

[popplio25]

yeah :3 still gonna remove them from the story, though 😯

i think i've finished all the lists, finishing with kanto list 2 -

Spoiler:

now to go through my heartgold game to check other areas, whenever :3 either tomorrow or when i finish digimon survive...

 

[Alex_Among_Foxes]

i think i've finished all the lists, finishing with kanto list 2 -

Spoiler:

now to go through my heartgold game to check other areas, whenever :3 either tomorrow or when i finish digimon survive...

Great! You're almost done now, just a little more to go. 👍

 

[popplio25]

Great! You're almost done now, just a little more to go. 👍

yeah! 🤗

i just added the rest of the in-game trades to their respective list and towns/citys, as well :3 - https://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/In-game_trade#Pok.C3.A9mon_HeartGold_and_SoulSilver


i think i'll actually start when i finish my 2nd playthrough of pokemon scarlet :D